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Friendly Conversationalist
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 Posted: Sun Mar 07, 2010 7:24 pm
Lance Fulgurant Inazuma Dorobo Pic:  Name: Hayabusa Clan (its kind of messed up because most of this stuff i came up with is from the top of my head so i'll try to fix it so it can make more sense) Description: This Clan was founded in Kumogakure when two refugees left Konoha. One refugee was a male of the Uchiha clan while the other was a female of the Hyuga. The two married each other in which it gave they're offspring a combination of there's Kekkai Genkai as a result the Takagan was created. Strengths: -Can see long distances -Fast moving oppenents appear to be moving at normal speed Weaknesses: -Cannot see through objects -Even the littlest flash can leave them momentarily blind when using the Takagan Ability: Takagan (Falcon Eyes) - Iris turn yellow and vision is heightened to be able to see far distances, fast moving objects appear slower,The user can see 7 miles away and their eyesight is acute especially at dawn and dusk (The slightest movement can be seen) Bloodline/Clan Jutsus: I'll say 4 miles, which is just over half of what the byakugan can see, and for the movement tracking I need you be more specific, like would you be able to track movement to the same degree as the two tomoe sharingan, three tomoe, what? ok i made it equal to a 3 tomoe and i changed to to 4 miles
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Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 1:31 pm
Lance Fulgurant Laytolia: sorry I forgot about this, you need to create a progression rate for the vecotrs, in other words explain how you get longer vectors and more vectors, and how many do you start with also for the Vector's strength I think that 50x might be a little much how about we say like 10x and just be aware that if I see anything that seems god-moddish, or if I hear any complaints about such problems there will be consequences. I'm not trying to scare you I just have seen people abuse bloodlines/ clans too often but yeah, just change those things and post the final version
And if I have the change the strength of the vectors I'll make it at least 20-25x. The main strength of the vectors is that they are supposed to be strong
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 3:39 pm
Inazuma Dorobo Pic: Name: Hayabusa Clan (its kind of messed up because most of this stuff i came up with is from the top of my head so i'll try to fix it so it can make more sense) Description: This Clan was founded in Kumogakure when two refugees left Konoha. One refugee was a male of the Uchiha clan while the other was a female of the Hyuga. The two married each other in which it gave they're offspring a combination of there's Kekkai Genkai as a result the Takagan was created. Strengths: -Can see long distances -Fast moving oppenents appear to be moving at normal speed Weaknesses: -Cannot see through objects -Even the littlest flash can leave them momentarily blind when using the Takagan Ability: Takagan (Falcon Eyes) - Iris turn yellow and vision is heightened to be able to see far distances, fast moving objects appear slower,The user can see 4 miles away and their eyesight is acute especially at dawn and dusk (equal to a 3 tomoe sharingan) Bloodline/Clan Jutsus: so is it good now?
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 12:16 am
(Waiting to be checked... ) >W<
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:17 pm
Laytolia Lance Fulgurant Laytolia: sorry I forgot about this, you need to create a progression rate for the vecotrs, in other words explain how you get longer vectors and more vectors, and how many do you start with also for the Vector's strength I think that 50x might be a little much how about we say like 10x and just be aware that if I see anything that seems god-moddish, or if I hear any complaints about such problems there will be consequences. I'm not trying to scare you I just have seen people abuse bloodlines/ clans too often but yeah, just change those things and post the final version
And if I have the change the strength of the vectors I'll make it at least 20-25x. The main strength of the vectors is that they are supposed to be strongYes I realize that you had the starting specs, but you need to come up with some sort of system for getting longer and more vectors, if you want that to be a possibility. As for the strength issue, my biggest concern is that I don't want people with the bloodline to simply go around and say "I crush you with my arms, because they're that freakin strong!" or something along those lines. When you think about it 10x your body-weight is still going to allow the average owner of this kekkai genkai to pick up things that way 1000 + pounds, that's an awful lot considering that pretty much no one in the rp should be able to pick up that kind of weight on their own. If you think about it 10x is already pretty darn strong, so please just make it 10x
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:20 pm
Inazuma Dorobo Inazuma Dorobo Pic: Name: Hayabusa Clan (its kind of messed up because most of this stuff i came up with is from the top of my head so i'll try to fix it so it can make more sense) Description: This Clan was founded in Kumogakure when two refugees left Konoha. One refugee was a male of the Uchiha clan while the other was a female of the Hyuga. The two married each other in which it gave they're offspring a combination of there's Kekkai Genkai as a result the Takagan was created. Strengths: -Can see long distances -Fast moving oppenents appear to be moving at normal speed Weaknesses: -Cannot see through objects -Even the littlest flash can leave them momentarily blind when using the Takagan Ability: Takagan (Falcon Eyes) - Iris turn yellow and vision is heightened to be able to see far distances, fast moving objects appear slower,The user can see 4 miles away and their eyesight is acute especially at dawn and dusk (equal to a 3 tomoe sharingan) Bloodline/Clan Jutsus: so is it good now? hmmm, I'll allow it to be able to track movement to the same degree as the two tomoe, if you want it to be able to have even greater abilities you can make another stage or something. also you need to come up with a way for people to unlock the bloodline. just as the sharingan can only be activated for the first time in a life threatening situation, the takagan needs some kind of trigger for the first time, if you simply want it to be a life threatening situation that's fine, or if you want some other trigger that's fine as well.
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:27 pm
BLacKeMoSAdneSS Pic: Clan SymbolDoujutsu: ChijoukeiName: KyuuketsukiDescription: This clan was created out of a small number of ninjas who really didn't have much skills, and usually had trouble finding work or even making it past the Chunnin exams. This meant that they would remain a gennin forever, but since they did not want to harm their land's reputation in anyway, they left to join the the clan where anybody was welcome. But soon, the failure-ninja weren't the only ones making their way to the clan. Rogues began to join in as well, making the clan full of wanted criminals and the like. This greatly frightened many of the neighboring lands, and they began to siege attacks on the poor clan of wash-outs. But one of the strongest rogues began a training program. A program that would be called the Vampire Program, or Kyuuketsuki, because it involved taking a pill made from the purified enzyme of the strong rogue's sister, who had a strange power which resided in her eyes. Soon, all of the clan members had the same eyes, a bright yellow with the image of the black sky and full moon in the middle, like a cat's. Soon, the clan came to take on the name of the program that made it a very formidable force. Soon, the wash-outs that entered became stronger, and soon reached Jounin level much faster than the average. The only problem with the clan, is that the power is difficult to control, and can eat away at the holder quickly.
Rules:
1) Your chakra color must either be black/silver/ or a golden yellow-ish color. It takes after the Chijoukei's colors as well. (Don't worry, your chakra color will actually change when you receive the Chijoukei, so you may start off with any color you wish.)
2) You cannot have/apply/or somehow obtain any control over a demon, as it will be cast-out by Chijoukei, or your body will reject the enzyme and you will die. (Be forewarned, I would like to not kill any clan members)
Strengths:
1) Because all of the clan members have literally the same enzyme running through them from one original source, they are all linked telepathically. In short, their eyes can take on the ability of the rinnegan, and they all can see the same thing if they chose. 2) Because there are so many different types of ninja available, there are many ways to pair them up into teams, so the teams can match in skill-level and in jutsu. (Meaning: Water, Wind, and Earth may go together, but not Water and Fire since these two elements contradict each other.) Weaknesses:
1) The Chijoukei (Which means blood sight) can cause a clan member to actually lose control if they are not able to maintain complete dominance over the enzyme's power. They could turn homicidal, suicidal, depressed, extremely fixated or obsessed, or the Chijoukei could take over their entire body and leave the user in comatose. 2) Because all of the users are linked, that means that they can see everything that they can. However, that means that if something were to happen to any of the other users, like their eye is cut out or burned, all of the other users can feel the pain that the user is feeling but on a highly decreased level. It can still be a nuisance in the heat of battle. 3) Usually, because the Chijoukei is a doujutsu and is usually used for genjutsu and ninjutsu attacks, the Kyuuketsuki clan pretty much lacks greatly in taijutsu anything. Any member who has great taijutsu skills had very good knowledge of the art before hand, and rarely ever uses the Chijoukei. 4) Tying in with number three, the Chijoukei has very bad perception. You can't really pick up on flying objects until a little bit later, or you're watching your opponent throw the object at you, and light doesn't catch it at all. Small, thin wires are literally invisible while using the doujutsu (which can be turned on and off like Sharingan). Ability:
Clan Link: The ability to see what other members who are using the Chijoukei also see. However, you have to be blood linked, other wise it doesn't work. All squads are blood-linked, and one member from every team is blood-linked with all of the other teams as to avoid confusion. This member is usually very good at organizing, and has the ability to dodge, hide, and defend; not fight. That way, they can organize who's seeing what and where, and not have to worry about getting hurt. Bloodline/Clan Jutsus: 1) Chijoukei: Moe Ruyouna Chi No En Jutsu~ Blood Sight: Flaming Blood Circle Jutsu
This jutsu involves using Clan link, so only the four-man plantoons can really use it. The four members stand in the direction of the four directions: north, south, east, and west. From there, they spread their chakra around themselves, connecting and intertwining them with complex chakra codes that are nearly impossible to break. The reason why it's called Flaming Blood Circle is because the color of the lines and chakra codes forming the circle are blood red, and once completed, they burst into a huge dome of flames. If any of the targets try to escape, the other members help control the flames on that side to pierce their members. Because the chakra codes are controlled by different members, but they go all around the entire circle, every single member needs to keep control of what is happening in their teammates direction so that they can use their code to help obliterate the enemy. (Note: Takes considerable amount of chakra, takes about five minutes to recover, and takes a shinobi who is good at organizing and keeping track of things.) 2) Katon: Niji no Tatsu no Gijutsu~ Fire Style: Rainbow Dragon Jutsu~
Okay, the dragon isn't really rainbow. But it's easier to say than multi-colored. Anyway, this jutsu is a dragon created from chakra generated fire, which comes from flames. A match, a flaming letter bomb (which is unstable), or anything type of fire and chakra is enough to create one of these. But again, only Chijoukei can use it. They use their unique eye-technique to help them mold the flame into the form of a miniature dragon, pouring all of their chakra inside. Since the members of the Kyuuketsuki clan's chakra is silver, the flames interact with it, giving it an iridescent sheen. That's why it's like a rainbow. This fire jutsu is just like any other fire jutsu, it consumes almost anything in its path. (Requires a low amount of chakra, a flame, and the Chijoukei)3) Chijoukei: Burakkuchieri^ no Hana no Sakkaku~ Blood Sight: Black Cherry Blossom Illusion
Again, requires Chijoukei. This is a genjutsu that gives the target the illusion of being in a forest of cherry blossom trees. But the fragile pink blossoms die and become like black blades that cut and slice through the target. It can either knock the opponent out, or make the target go into a mental breakdown right then and there. However, this jutsu comes at a huge price. You have to be touching the target and have them look into your eyes in order to use the jutsu, and you can only use this jutsu using a considerable amount of chakra. Meaning, you're going to be pretty weak after you use it, although it may not show.
This is just one jutsu that is taught to every single member of the clan. It is so simple a wash-out can do it!
Mind Barrier Technique:
Using chakra and the mind, the user is able to create a force-field like shield in front of themselves that blocks most weapon attacks. However, if the attack is ninjutsu, then it would most likely pass through. Kunai barrages can penetrate this shield unless the user has been able to successfully use the Mind Barrier for almost a year. alright sorry for the wait, first things first... what exactly does the doujutsu do? I get that you can see through the eyes of others with Chijoukei, but it seems like that's not it, maybe I mis-read something but I don't think I fully understand what the concept for this bloodline is.
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 6:15 pm
Chiroku Clan’s Anigan  Yellow eyes with narrow iris Background: Anigan is an eye blood line trait passed down though the blood of Ikari Chiroku, the first to possess Anigan. Anigan allows the possessor to gain abilities and traits of animals in addition to a small increase of the five senses. This general increase in senses can he heightened through training, without using an animal's abilities. The Chiroku clan is most famous for its exceptional covert operators, spies ect. Any one who has Chiroku blood running through their veins has the potential to unlock Anigan. To awaken Anigan one must experience intense emotional stress or desire or obtain special training. Rules/Advantages/Disadvantages - Can only access the power of one animal at a time until you reach the final stage. - When using an animal trait/ability you gain all good and bad things related to it. Ex. It you take the speed of a cheetah; you can run fast, but only for short periods of time, just like a cheetah. - Uses chakra the entire time Anigan is active. You can train to lessen the drain, but can’t eliminate it. - Enhances senses and or physical traits to help in battle. - In order to call upon an animal’s traits or abilities one must lay eyes upon said animal, while Anigan is active. - No hand signs required. - Direct hits from raiton based attacks will temporarily(2 posts) disrupt physical transformation. Heightened senses are not effected by this. Kekkei Genkai Stage 1 When stage one of Anigan is active the possessor can call upon a single natural ability of an animal. Examples of Abilities: Sight, hearing, speed, agility. Base level chakra Stage 2 When stage two is achieved the possessor may gain physical traits of an animal. If the user chooses they can just call upon a ability, in addition to, but it must be the same animal’s. If the user wanted the claws of a fox, they could also have that hearing of a fox. Examples of Traits: claws, teeth, scales, tails. Genin level chakra Stage 3 When Stage three is achieved the possessor can change completely into an animal. Similar to a transformation jutsu. However, they become the animal; have all the traits/ abilities of said animal as well as instincts. When an animal chakra is completely hidden. The main use of this stage is to hide. Working well to the advantage of spies. Chounin level chakra Stage 4 When the final stage is achieved the possessor can mix abilities and traits of animals. Depending on skill/rank the number of animal is between 2-6. When used this allows the user to mix animals, including becoming mixed animals. A user could gain the eyes of a hawk, claws of a bear and shell of a turtle. And so on in almost innumerable combinations to fit the situation. In addition they cold become a mixed animal. That is in stead of gaining traits and abilities that enhance the body, they could create a patchwork animal as well. This isn’t as advantageous, in most cases. Jounin/Kage level chakra
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 7:09 pm
Livewire: so basically it just allows you to shapeshift, yes? Well I like the idea and it looks like this is a pretty good bloodline, but I do have a few issues,
1. you need to come up with a basic chakra cost for the different kinds of shifts
2. I think that for the final stage it should be a max of maybe 6 different animals
3. Maybe raiton jutsus should be able to disrupt the ability to shift, as in maybe if you get hit directly by a raiton based technique you won't be able to shift for maybe two posts but the stage 1 ability to simply enhance senses would still be available
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 9:55 pm
Basically. Though it's more versatile, at least in my opinion.
Anyway as far as basic chakra costs. I don't mind setting them but I am not sure on the system. Just throwing out random numbers that sound good without something to base it on wouldn't do any good.
It's fine with me that the final stage maxes at 6 animals.
I'd be fine with ration based attacks disrupting the ability temporarily.
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 11:10 pm
Lance Fulgurant alright sorry for the wait, first things first... what exactly does the doujutsu do? I get that you can see through the eyes of others with Chijoukei, but it seems like that's not it, maybe I mis-read something but I don't think I fully understand what the concept for this bloodline is. Yes, you are correct, it's only a link like the Rinnegan. The only power it really possesses in the ability to see through the eyes of those who also possess it.
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Posted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 7:28 am
will some one please help me with mine, its on page 3 or 4
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Posted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 7:41 am
Alpha: sorry I'll get right to that, I guess it got lost amongst the others
Livewire: just determine whether it should cost the same level of chakra as a genin level jutsu or a a jounin or even a kage, obviously it should have a higher and higher chakra cost, but no you don't need actual numbers, just relate it to other jutsus
Blackemosadness: alright then, I suppose that's alright, just a few questions/concerns
1. is there some kind of maximum distance or could you potentially see what someone on the other side of the world is seeing as long as they have this bloodline as well
2. you need to decide the rank for each of the jutsus
3. for the mind barrier you say " if the attack is ninjutsu, then it would most likely pass through", does this mean that only really weak jutsus such as academy level jutsus can be blocked by it or what?
but yeah it doesn't look bad or anything it just needs more clarification and fleshing out
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Posted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 10:19 am
Alright I updated the information. Is it okay now?
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Posted: Sun Mar 14, 2010 4:43 pm
Alpha_Misa-of_the_wolfs Pic:  Name:Confessor Description: The Confessor clan was started by Koizumi's great great great grandmother meaning it had been in the family for generations, but they would keep until they had no other choice, The power of this clan was used to help get confessions out of people,hence the name confessor, how this would work is that the confessor would touch the neck, her pupils would then turn black, then both of the person eyes would turn black at that time, the person is under the confessors spell, while under the spell he can't lie, the amount of time the affect lasts depends on the confessor his or herself, if the confessor skilled it can last for as long as 3 whole days, if not a couple of minutes and hour at most. For the power of this clan to work she/he must have complete eye contact that means that both of his or her eyes must be looking at both of the confessed person's eyes to work. This clan only have genjustus. Strengths:Genjustu,hand to hand combat(taijustu) Weaknesses: Because of the fact that the confessor needs to have complete eye contact that leaves the confessor complete open for surprise attacks, and ambush, ninjustu Ability: able to tell if one is lieing Bloodline/Clan Jutsus: Name: tamashī no me Translation:Eye of the soul Type: Genjustu Element(s): None Effect: as soon as the user gets eye contact his/her eye turns grey he looks into your soul and brings your fear to life, Other: this is rank D Name: tamashī no kurōningu Translation: Soul Clone Type: Genjustu Element(s):Water Effect:The user will manipulate the water around his/her opponent as soon as the opponent see the water, it becomes a clone that knows everything and can do everything the opponent can do Other: this is rank A Name: tamashī no sōsa Translation: Soul manipulation Type: Genjustu Element(s):None Effect: The user touches the opponent and connects his/her chakra to the opponents soul to control them for a period of time, if the connection and the opponent were to break prematurely the opponent will be a bit dazed. When a confessor is controlling the person, the confessor cannot move, and if the confessor is killed then nothing happens to the person under the effect of the genjutsu. Other: This is rank A Name: tamashī no rīdā Translation: Soul Searching Type: Genjustu Element(s):None Effect: The user touches the opponent and connects his/her shakra to the opponents soul and searches their soul for the truth this takes lots of concentration so is only needed if the person it is going be used on is about to kill him/herself Other: This is rank C Name: tamashī no fukkatsu Translation: Soul resurrection Type: Genjustu Element(s):None Effect:The user draws symbols on a flat surface then calls out the name of the person he or she wants to resurrect, then he or she uses that to find out what is need (does not actually bring people back to life it just allows the user of the jutsu to converse with the soul of another to gain answers from it)Other: This is rank S Alright I edited some things, the edits are in red, you can decide if it's good, but I'm tired of trying to fix the Soul manipulation jutsu so that it's what you want without braking the rules
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