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| New Poll! What are you doing here? :O |
| I'm one of the RPers. :3 |
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| I'm lurking, just to read what you guys are up to here... ;O |
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| I'm lurking, looking for the right time to join... ;D |
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| I wanted to choose option 2 just to make you guys nervous, but I am thwarted by this option. >:U |
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| ...I'm just voting for gold. ^_^;; |
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 Posted: Sat Aug 15, 2009 7:05 pm
"A Rheard!" Aster said as you passed over his head "But how?" He followed it as best as he could, then saw them land in the hot springs, the only time he's seen a Rheard is when Lloyd and his group came to the Elemental research laboratory.
(I hope that's better)
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Posted: Sat Aug 15, 2009 8:26 pm
(Merlin.. I gotta say.. and I know the others agree with me when I say this.. You need to post better then that.. Im not expecting you make your posts all pretty like I did, but I do expect you to use grammar in your posts... Let me point out your mistakes..
1. A reiard! needs to have " " Like, "A rheaird!"
2. Aster said as he passed over his head() needs a period at the end.
3. Another period at the end of the post.
4. You need to work to get your posts longer then that. I know I havent been doing the best myself, and I need to work harder too, but length and descriptions are part of the rp. If you cant put more into your post, your only boring everyone around you.
Trust me, if you work on it and get better, people will come to you to rp with you, instead of you having to join the rp and then find everyone. Either way, if you cant fix those four things, I have to ask you to leave. Please, please try to post with literacy.. )
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Posted: Sat Aug 15, 2009 8:49 pm
((I'd also like to give feedback on how you could have expanded, if that's all right. Quote: I know I havent been doing the best myself, and I need to work harder too, but length and descriptions are part of the rp. If you cant put more into your post, your only boring everyone around you. This I highly stress. At other times, it just doesn't paint a clear picture and only serves to confuse, possibly putting the others at a standstill because they can't see what you're trying to get at and thus are stumped on how to reply. Nobody can read your mind. Try to write every detail you picture in your mind. Your first post: Your character was first in the mountains, searching for Ratatosk. Why? What is going through his mind, and why would he think to look for Ratatosk in the mountains? How does he think it would change the world? Your second post: When he sees the Rheaird, would it really distract him that much from his original goal? Why would he want to follow it and leave behind his task? How did he follow them, on foot? What are the surroundings like as he goes on? If he did try to follow them on foot, it would take a while for him to reach the hot springs because Rheairds surely are faster. I'm fine with the way you RP in Freeform because...well, it's freeform and it's not supposed to be tethered to the usual rules. But out here, you need to put some more effort. By the way, Sheena, I'm not quite going to pick up where we left off yet. I'm going to wait it out for a while and see if more people join. ^^;; ))
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Posted: Sat Aug 15, 2009 10:18 pm
((I hope you don't mind, but instead of being a summon spirit, I want to be my own charecter if that's okay. Being a summon spirit is fun, but I think it will be funner (Or however you spell that word that doesn't exsist in the english language)))
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Posted: Sat Aug 15, 2009 10:22 pm
(My name is Lee. Like I said in the post above, I hope you don't mind if I change charechters! )
'Ever sense the two worlds joined together, we haven't had much buisness.' I thought as I looked around the hotsprings.
"Let's see here..." I placed my elbow on the front desk and placed my chin in the palm of my hand. "The last time we had guests... would have to be about 2 weeks ago." I slowly said.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:33 am
((It's "more fun" but I tend to use "funner" too because...it's funner. razz
Okay, I'll pick up a little. xd ))
After stepping off the Rheaird, Azriel also looked around eagerly, seeing the large stone pool in the distance past the wooden separators. She could hear the splash of the spring's waterfall perpetually pouring its hot water into the pool. She had seen this setting once or twice while high in the sky, but seeing it up close was a different experience.
"Well, that doesn't seem to be a problem right now. It looks like there isn't really anyone around," she replied with an amused smirk.
She peered through the window of the stone house nearby, seeing Lee looking bored at the front desk. "So, the changing rooms are in there, I presume?" she asked, rubbing her chin and pointing at the house with her other hand.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 9:56 am
Letting out a sigh, Lee thought it was about time to go out and check on the hot springs. As soon as she turned around, she found someone peering through the window.
'Maybe it's a customer! Or... a pervert...' Lee quickly walked to the door and walked outside to find two girls standing there.
"Hello, I'm Lee. If you are here to use our hotsprings today, please follow me." Lee said cheerfully giving them a smile.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 10:29 am
(im sorry, and I'll edit them)
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 3:16 pm
(Apoligies for the late post.)
Izzy had crawled away in a nearby opening. He was already exuasted. "Damn.. I made the same mistake again." He grinned. "Oh well.. I guess, as they say, over-confidence is the true enemy." He muttered. Looking around outside, Izzy sighed, and frown again. "Still, I need to find a way to rid myself of that big-breasted-female-nuisence." He remembered the strange shadow manipulation that was used on him. "What the hell was that? For that matter, who used it? It seems that Sheena is not my only threat here.."
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 5:38 pm
ŦĨ ćāĺĺ űƿōň ŧħėĕ...Ŧ ǂĨf ţĥēŕĕ ŕēăĺļŷ ĩś ā ĝŏďđĕśŝ, ŵħŷ ďīđ śĥē māķė ā ŵōŕĺđ ĺĩķė ťħĩś?ǂ It looks like I have a strong affinity for falling down holes...☆★★S H E E N A ★★☆ しいな藤林, ☆★★F U J I B A Y A S H I ★★☆ ....I am the summoner of Mana...... (Lets all do our best! Alright Mysterious, does that mean that Im playing the summons for now then? :3 )
Sheena nodded in agreement, the fresh crisp air just made her skin tingle. "I always love coming here." She said softly, stretching. The hotsprings always seemed to be working on and off. Problems would make it close for a bit, and be working again. Luckily, it was working, and there was even a person to help them. "Oh? Hello Lee." She said with a bow, smiling as the person seemed willing to help out. "That so? Well, by chance could you remember what the guest looked like?" Secretly, Sheena hoped Lloyd had been by. That would mean he was close. "Also, we would like a bath, with the salts and scrubs included." She said, holding out a small purple tag. It was a Mizuho exclusive card, which made the extra luxuries free with any bath. Almost made the bath free, but that would only happen if Sheena mentioned she was chief. She was a diplomat now, and got in exclusive things, especially with Regal, head of the Lezerano company as a close friend. There was literally no place Sheena couldnt get into. She paid, and waited for Lee to show them to the bath. "I cant wait!" She exclaimed cheerfully, happy for a good soak. She remembered when Zelos used to try and peek on her. Even Lloyd did once. Zelos must have talked him into it. ....The chief of Mizuho, and the friend of the heart...
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 7:51 pm
Inside the hotspring with Sheena, you could see a bamboo straw quickly, but quietly approach Sheena. It was too hard to see who it was because of the water, but you could hear a slight breathing coming from inside the tube...
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 7:54 pm
((Yes, that mean you get to play all the summons!))
Smiling, Lee took the purple tag.
"Alright. Come this way, I'll get your bath ready." Lee quickly took them to the changing rooms.
"Once you're done changing, I'll show you to your bath." Lee then began getting the bath ready for her two guests. She seemed familier. Thats when it hit her.
'She was with a big group. She was one of our last custumers.' Lee began to giggle. She began to rembered how there was a comotion about a peeping tom or something. Too bad, she knew what happened and felt bad for the spikey haired boy. The Chosen was the one peeping, not the spikey haired boy. Once the bath was ready, she quickly made her way to the changing room and waited for them to finish.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 8:12 pm
ŦĨ ćāĺĺ űƿōň ŧħėĕ...Ŧ ǂĨf ţĥēŕĕ ŕēăĺļŷ ĩś ā ĝŏďđĕśŝ, ŵħŷ ďīđ śĥē māķė ā ŵōŕĺđ ĺĩķė ťħĩś?ǂ It looks like I have a strong affinity for falling down holes...☆★★S H E E N A ★★☆ しいな藤林, ☆★★F U J I B A Y A S H I ★★☆ ....I am the summoner of Mana...... (Mkay. :3)
Sheena, having wrapped a towel around her and slipped into the pool, leaned back. She looked to Azriel with a smile. "Doesnt it feel great?" She asked, putting her hands behind her head as she relaxed, then she felt the water stir. Her eyes popped open and she looked around, only to see a simple bamboo straw sticking out of the water. But.. bamboo didnt grow in hot spring pools. It was moving too. That was odd. As the odd thing grew closer, Sheena heard the distinct breathing. Turning red, she realized it was someone under the water. She balled up a fist as it grew closer, and slammed it into the water where she saw the straw at. "Pervert!" ....The chief of Mizuho, and the friend of the heart...
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 8:15 pm
"Pevert!" Lee heard Sheena yell. Worried, she quickly ran out of the building and into the bath area.
"What happened?" Lee quickly asked looking around. Sheena's face was red, from either anger, embaressment, or both.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 8:21 pm
As Kruhk drew closer, it became a world record! The longest time he's ever been in a hot spring without being noticed, this could be his chance, until he felt a fist slam on his head. Loosing focus and his take of water, Kruhk jumps out of the spring, with only a towel covering his waist and his hands rubbing his huge bump on his head. "Ow!" As he jumped out of the water, he saw the girl that he was peeping on turning red. "Before you say anything and jump into conclusions, there is a possible reason why this happened... It was because you were my first love." Kruhk said as he went down on his knees like he was proposing to her.
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