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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 5:08 pm
Thank you both so much for accepting my character! ^-^ And I'll be sure to keep those things in mind when I'm role-playing, xLieselotte~ I actually had the picture in color and then changed it. xD But I can definitely add the color back in. c:
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 5:16 pm
SHININGamuletxxheart Thank you both so much for accepting my character! ^-^ And I'll be sure to keep those things in mind when I'm role-playing, xLieselotte~ I actually had the picture in color and then changed it. xD But I can definitely add the color back in. c: You're fine. I was just making sure. I think there are some people that might want to know that detail, but it's just a minor detail so you don't have to if you don't want to. XD
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:16 am
Character Information: Student Name: Shirley Fae Alice
Species: Human-and-Witch Hybrid
Age: Seventeen
Gender: Female
Appearance description: Shirley adores dressing up, that being her favorite game to play as a child. Due to this, she generally dresses up in a variety of clothing. It's every girl's dream, to have enough cute clothing and not run out or wear them out too often. Her wardrobe is seemingly never ending, meaning that a person would believe that Shirley goes out clothes shopping all the time. She really doesn't, it's just that she knows how to wear her clothes right. The key is to mix-and-match them in all the right ways. One slip-up and it's a fashion disaster. The only reason as to why the blonde is so good at picking out clothes is because she's been doing that ever since she was little. Her parents would always dress her in frilly, adorable stuff, so there was no doubt that she was going to grow up constantly paying attention to fashion. Personality: Shirley is a very happy, peppy person, and she loves making new friends. She's not one to be gullible, but she does show a quick temper when people nag or are rude towards her. She's also not one to cry, and she tries to bring out the best in people. Most of the time, the blonde is rather flamboyant and tends to overdramatize situations for the sake of being the 'center of the stage'. Shirley is very much reckless, driving into situations and doing whatever she wants, to fulfill her theatrical appearance. She is overly proud of herself, of this flamboyant personality, and is the reason why she continues to act so rash and hastily. This ties into her not thinking before reacting to things and thus she is quite blunt towards people. Another reason why she really doesn't care much if she says something mean to someone is due to her being bullied in the past. Also, when she doesn't hear something she likes, say in an argument, then she'll constantly bicker with the other person until they say she's right. This could go on for a whole day if Shirley wanted! If she knows she's wrong, then she'll cover that up with spouting crude names at her arguer like "dummy" or "stupid". This displays the childish side of her.
Bio: Shirley lived in South Korea with her American father but Korean mother until she turned four. Her father had received a better job offer and moved into a larger house, where she was very happy. Her mother worked as a professional violinist, and she used to play for Shirley every night until she had fallen asleep. When Shirley's tenth birthday came along, her father and mother had a fight, however, and her father decided to move to America. Then and there, he left Shirley and her mother behind. Despite the hardship, she didn't allow this to get her down. For every time she was sad, she would play her piano, while her mom played on her violin. This created a perfect harmony, and no more did Shirley ever get sad again. When she finally became fourteen and had discovered her powers, she was amazed, really. Her mother explained to the girl that her father was human, but she was, for a fact, a witch. This made Shirley a Human-and Witch hybrid, which was frankly, looked down upon in many schools for the supernatural. This was because the humans were so ignorant of the other races, thinking that they were higher level beings, and which lead to the creation of the first monster schools. She attended about three different high schools like this and was often bullied by her peers because she wasn't a full breed. Her mother heard about her bullying and then quickly but thoroughly sought to find a magical abilities school that would actually accept her race, and Rosentale Academy seemed to fit that description well enough.
Skills and Abilities: - Wraith: Shirley becomes like a ghostly haze and can faze through walls which renders herself untouchable. This is extremely exhausting and she only uses it when escaping, hiding, or utilization as a good defense. - Shirley also uses amateur elemental and healing witch spells. For example, the only element she utilizes is fire and she can create it with a simple snap of her fingers. The fire is very tiny in size and it is really only useful for lighting a candle, or being used as one itself. As for her healing, Shirley can't heal people or animals, but she can certainly fix damages done to an inanimate object. Say that a vase tips over and breaks, Shirley can heal it so that its pieces reform back together and it looks just as it was before the vase had tipped over.
Character Flaws: These are laid out as her personality traits. She is theatrical, reckless, proud, childish, and blunt. Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual
Status: Single, so far. Likes: ♥ Cute, frilly, pink clothes and accessories ♥ making new friends ♥ Ice cream
Dislikes: ✖ getting extremely dirty or wet ✖ Overthinking things ✖ Bullies
Extra Information: She loves to play on the piano.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:32 am
Hallo! Okay, just a couple of things: You need to definitely give more details on her healing and elemental spells. Remember that we don't let anyone have control over all elements, or complete control over one element. It's just too overpowered. So be sure you specify some limitations she'll have to follow. Same for healing. We have a lot of healers so we're extra careful we don't get someone in who can heal anything and everything with no repercussions as it undermines the healers we already have, and their struggles. Even if the powers aren't fully developed, you need to list out limitations she'll be following as she improves in these areas. Also, just for future reference and characters, not knowing hand to hand combat doesn't count as a flaw. A lot of people at Rosen (and in real life) don't know how to do this. It's like saying it's a flaw that she doesn't know how to bungee jump or something. It's not a critical skill so not knowing it can't possibly be a flaw. For Shirley, it's not a big deal because she has plenty of other flaws. I just wanted to point it out so you weren't tempted to try to use it as a viable flaw in the future. =3 When you've fixed the issue with her abilities, let me know! You can just quote me here so I know to come back and check. ^^
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:43 am
Oka~ The deed is done. c:
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:47 am
Shirley Fae Sin Oka~ The deed is done. c: Okay, she's approved! She'll be staying in Emerald Dorm. Before you do anything else, please post a profile thread in Accepted Characters forum. Also, you will need to select a class schedule for her. Do both of these before you begin posting anywhere else. The school system thread is in this main forum and you should familiarize yourself with it so you are aware of what day it is in the RP at any given time. Today is Week 1, Friday---Third period. ^^ If you need anything or have any questions, feel free to ask. Welcome to Rosentale!
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:49 am
StrawberryZ0mbie Shirley Fae Sin Oka~ The deed is done. c: Okay, she's approved! She'll be staying in Emerald Dorm. Before you do anything else, please post a profile thread in Accepted Characters forum. Also, you will need to select a class schedule for her. Do both of these before you begin posting anywhere else. The school system thread is in this main forum and you should familiarize yourself with it so you are aware of what day it is in the RP at any given time. Today is Week 1, Friday---Third period. ^^ If you need anything or have any questions, feel free to ask. Welcome to Rosentale! All right, thanks a bunch! <3
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 3:17 pm
Character Information: Student Ninja form> Wolf form > Name:Mike
Species:Wolf-Deamon
Age:19
Gender:Male
Appearance description:my character has 3 gill shaped scars on both of his cheeks but mostly wears a mask over his mouth, a wolf with blue fur
Personality:Mike doesn't talk about his feelings so it is hard for him to make friends but he lightens up around people who fit how he would describe as a friend
Bio:Mikes clan all have the power to change into wolf-deamon's but other than that look normal but possess wolf-like traits like mikes fangs and tail and are trained ninjas, but his entire clan died in a war when he was a young teen. Living on his own in woods he decided to apply for rosentale academy
Skills and Abilities:able to make two physical clones of self, the clones cant be more than 10 feet away from the original. also able to transform in to his wolf-demon form, stuck in wolf form on nights of full moon, at half strength on nights of full moon, and has accute hearing
Character Flaws: Unpredictable - actions or reactions are completely unplanned Doesn't know how to express his feelings Proud - rather fail repeatedly than receive help from others
Sexual Orientation:Straight
Status:Single
Likes: - Food - Training - Having his head rubbed
Dislikes: - Having his tail pulled - Loud noises - People who like to show off - Having the spotlight
Extra Information: None
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 3:40 pm
Hello! There are still some changes that you have to make before he can be accepted. First, you might want to add a little more to his bio. Why did he come to Rosentale Academy in the first place? Why did he leave his clan just to attend the academy? I'm afraid your character is a bit overpowered for this type of RP. Rosentale Acdemy is a high school RP. Although I doubt he'll ever be in a situation where he will be nearly dying, I still think that the power doubling isn't really necessary since he's already pretty strong to begin with. Also, I think you should be a bit more specific about what he can exactly do as a ninja. I know ninjas have a broad range of abilities, but I think it'd be best if you limit those abilities so we can be fair to the the other RPers. What I mean when I say specific is that I need you to list out what is included in "taijutsu, genjutsu and ninjutsu" so we know what kind of abilities he's supposed to have. Also, the flaws you have listed except his easily getting angry part, are not flaws. They are limits to his power and are better off found in the skills and abilities section. What we mean by character flaws are flaws on their personality that follows them throughout the RP. And we can't accept your last flaw either since it's more like something that requires a situation to trigger. Most people would get angry or upset if people started talking trash about something they care about. So it's not really a flaw. It's just a normal reaction. Flaws are a bit tricky to come up with so you're free to look through Character Flaws - Doing it right for guidance if you need help with coming up with character flaws. Alright, so once you fix all those, quote me and I'll take another look. Thanks!
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:48 am
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:54 am
It's a little better but there are still some things that you need to fix. You need to add a little bit more detail about his clones. How far away can they be from him? For all we know, he could be hanging in the dorms while he has a clone impersonate him in class. Also, talking much falls under not being able to express his feelings so they're the same thing and not liking the spotlight is not a flaw, but more like a dislike of his. It's natural for some people not to like the spotlight. So you need two more flaws and you need to add that little detail about his clones. Once you have that done, quote me and I'll take another look. Also, feel free to use the resources that are provided in the Resources for better characters and coding subforum if you need help. ^^
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 1:11 am
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 1:19 am
Almost. You just need to work a little bit more on the flaws. Being overprotective of close friends: That can be considered a flaw if it means that he will be like an overbearing father towards his friends. If he feels like his friends are getting into something too dangerous, then that means he'll stop them and do everything he can to keep his friends from getting into whatever he feels is dangerous. Or if he doesn't like someone because they're a bad influence to his friends, he will practically drive his friends or that person away from each other. Now if it's just the need to protect his friends from danger, but won't do anything to change their judgement aside from attempt to talk them into running away, then it's not a flaw. That's normal. Yes it can get him into a lot of trouble if he takes things apart but that is not a flaw. It's something better off in his likes section. What we are looking for are flaws on the character's personality. At the very end of the link I gave you from the thread "Character Flaws - Doing it right," there is actually a character flaw list at the end of the thread that you can pick from if you bothered to look through it. So once you have two flaws put in for him, quote me and I'll take another look.
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