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Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Fri May 04, 2007 2:43 pm


NovaKing
ack! kirbs where are all the quotation marks? Oh, and am I alowed to hand out some constructive criticism, or should I just read then sit quietly in the corner?


They use telepathy. Quotation marks aren't supposed to be used. Haven't you read the whole rest of it? O.o
PostPosted: Fri May 04, 2007 3:05 pm


I beg your pardon kirbs, but wouldn't an adult ask where their parents were first before hireing them as guides through the woods, I mean the? hmm, oh well ill continue on. Wait...why does everyone speak english? or is it that elves can understand everything?

NovaKing


NovaKing

PostPosted: Fri May 04, 2007 3:06 pm


Reese_Roper
NovaKing
ack! kirbs where are all the quotation marks? Oh, and am I alowed to hand out some constructive criticism, or should I just read then sit quietly in the corner?


They use telepathy. Quotation marks aren't supposed to be used. Haven't you read the whole rest of it? O.o



No, I haven't. why aren't quotation marks supposed to be used?[edit: i didn't register the "they" part the first time i read that]



ohhhh they're telepathic, ok.
PostPosted: Fri May 04, 2007 3:16 pm


Reese_Roper
NovaKing
ack! kirbs where are all the quotation marks? Oh, and am I alowed to hand out some constructive criticism, or should I just read then sit quietly in the corner?


They use telepathy. Quotation marks aren't supposed to be used. Haven't you read the whole rest of it? O.o


hey reese, why does everything seem so sureal. I mean, that bit with the mermaids seemed so simple. hmmmmm but then they are a different race so I guess any type of behavior is possible.


oh well, back to the story.

NovaKing


NovaKing

PostPosted: Fri May 04, 2007 3:57 pm


confused confused confused question confused confused confused question question confused confused question question


what just happened? why are they having a party now ???????????? How did the mer cheif know it was their birth day?????? why is he being so nice???? why are the kids so blissful?

iamsoconfuzzled. so what was that chapter about exactly? like if you had to give it a name what would it be?

also, Would you mind spacing those paragraphs?
PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 6:24 am


...

I was at work all night and have had little sleep.

I do not trust myself to answer.

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 9:37 am


Reese!!! HELP!!! MEEE!!!!!

gonk

I honestly don't know what to say at this point except,

NOVA!!! GO READ THE REST OF THE DAMN BOOK!!!!

*cough* okay...
PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 5:27 pm


Okay, I got more and more annoyed, both with you and with life in general, as I went on answering, so that may show as the text goes on. However, I did try to answer your questions as best I can. Kirbette, you can expand where you see fit.

Plain is your question, none edited.
Bold is my answer, censored.
Red is Kirby invading Reese's personal space. >.<






I beg your pardon kirbs, but wouldn't an adult ask where their parents were first before hireing them as guides through the woods, I mean the?

Mayhap they don’t care. Mayhap they didn’t think about it. Mayhap that isn’t important in this world. Mayhap it will be explained later. Mayhap it was already explained, but you don’t know because you haven’t read it all.

A) Why would they? Everyone in Ametris knows that kids explore more than adults. And why would their parents be out there? And why wouldn't the kids know the way if they got out there in the first place?

B) It's Kamile and Everan. They don't HAVE parents. And as you must have seen towards the end, Italis knows quite a lot about them, so why would he ask for parents that aren't there?


And what does "I mean the?" mean?


Yes, what DOES it mean?

Wait...why does everyone speak english? or is it that elves can understand everything?

WHAT DO YOU WANT HER TO DO, WRITE THE WHOLE FREAKING BOOK IN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE SHE MAKES UP HERSELF?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

But, as she’s mentioned before, if you’d bothered to read anything, she’s writing the book as if it’s translated from their language.


That's exactly right. They all speak one language: AMETRISAN. I translated it into English (NOT EASY!!!) and gave it to you guys. Swear words ("Eayo", "Oyae", and "AI") and terms like "saya" and "saiyo" aren't translated. I should note that Ametrisan is a phoenetic character language, with about 60 characters in the alphabet. 3nodding
hey reese, why does everything seem so surreal. I mean, that bit with the mermaids seemed so simple. hmmmmm but then they are a different race so I guess any type of behavior is possible.

Hmm, let me think. Mayhap ‘cause it’s a FANTASY NOVEL?!?!

Because they're humans with tails. They wouldn't act all different just because they're a different race, they've been under human influence since the humans tried to claim river and lake territory as their own before the war and there was a long, bloody fued. History.

Oh, PS: MerPEOPLE. Not mermaids. That's sexist and derogatory. ):<


what just happened? why are they having a party now ???????????? How did the mer cheif know it was their birth day?????? why is he being so nice???? why are the kids so blissful? iamsoconfuzzled. so what was that chapter about exactly?

If you don’t understand it, read it again, more slowly, and read ALL OF THE BOOK!

Dude, it's their birthday. Why WOULDN'T they be blissful and happy and nice? And if he knew it was their birthday, why would he be mean to them? I don't get it. The chapter was about THEIR WHOLE FREAKING LIVES OKAY.

like if you had to give it a name what would it be?

She did give it a name. Chapter Seven.

I was gonna name it "Water." Descriptive? VERY! o:

also, Would you mind spacing those paragraphs?

Mayhap she does. Mayhap she doesn’t have time to format it right now. You yourself have mentioned other things you are busy doing.


I found that spacing works, but if I do italics...too many characters.

I suppose 25000 is a far cry from their expected 5000. O.o

And I am a busy Kirby.

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 5:52 pm


heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart

xd

You know a lot more than I thought you did, Reese...

Actually, I DID make up a foreign language. >.< Ame-Sirteman. It's REALLLLLY cool.

You guys wanna see? o:
PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 5:55 pm


KirbyVictorious
heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart

xd

You know a lot more than I thought you did, Reese...

Actually, I DID make up a foreign language. >.< Ame-Sirteman. It's REALLLLLY cool.

You guys wanna see? o:


I know you did. 3nodding That's why I said "SHE MAKES UP HERSELF" instead of "SHE WOULD HAVE TO MAKE UP HERSELF."


Of course, I've only seen a bit of it. Don't really remember where. surprised

Reese_Roper


Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 5:58 pm


All that made me feel good. surprised

I think the cake helped, too.

I need to let everything out more often.

Not that I did that here, but...

I guess going the counselor would be okay, after all.

If I trusted anyone enough to be my counselor.

Which I don't.
PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 6:04 pm


I'll be your counselor! o:

I have good advice.

My favorite:

"uh, DUH...I'm ALWAYS right!"

Which I have said...over ten times in the last three years.

I WIN.

You have seen it. I had a little prayer for the dead in a topic a while back. Everyone thought it was depressing though. :/ which it was. Considering who was saying it and who was dead. sweatdrop

I'll put some up! I've been working really hard on it!

KirbyVictorious


Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 6:17 pm


Yay! surprised
PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 6:27 pm


Book/Writing Discussions.

*shoos everyone in that direction*

KirbyVictorious


Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2007 6:36 pm


Heehee. *Has read the Kirby invasions* xD
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