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 Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 11:10 pm
-You still have Surface Shatter, so I'm waiting for you to get rid of that.
-Glass Step would count as a Support, not a Passive. You have to put for the actually effort to make that second jump, after all. ^^ I understand passives can be a bit confusing, but you're on the right track.
-Just to help fill things out a bit more, you should put somewhere in your Strengths/Weakness whether or not you're good with magic, and whether or not you have good magic defense. As well, include energy and defense. This normally isn't necessary, but since you only have two in each, I figured it would help you out if you filled some more things in ^^
-After those three things, all you'd need is a sample post, as previously mentioned ^^
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Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 9:01 am
Eisenfaust88 Earthling Template Name: Evan
Birthdate: March 19, 1988
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 150
Body Type: Slender, with a bit of muscle
Skin type: Fair
Eye Color: Green
Hair Color: Brown
Hair Style: Shoulder-length, Usually tied back during a fight
Unusual Markings: None
Clothing: Black tank top, slightly baggy pants, leather belt, combat boots, small necklace w/ the kanji for dragon, black fingerless gloves, large black cloak, red sword scabbard (back mounted)]
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Guardian
Quotes: "Freedom in motion. Freedom is motion."
"You know, everyone knows that I'll never hit a lady. But then again... you're no lady."
""
Good/Evil/Other: Good
Element: Non-Elemental
Weapon: b*****d Sword (Heaven's Will)
Job Class: Warrior
Stats: Attack Strength: 8Attack Speed: 7Magic Strength: 2 Magic Defense: 1Guard Strength: 6Evasive Reflexes: 6 Outright Speed: 6Constitutional Endurance: 6Energy: 3
Attack Abilities:
Ki Shot- An energy ball that can be fired at high speed towards a target, detonating with explosive force.
Rapid Ki Shot- Firing multiple Ki Shots in rapid succession. Will drain power if used for a prolonged amount of time.
Buster Cannon- Concentrates energy into both of his hands then combines them to form a single beam of concentrated energy. The longer the beam is sustained, the greater the energy drain.
???- ???(Super Form)
???- ???(Super Form)
???- ???(Super Form)
Support Abilities:
Ki Focus- Concentrates and restores energy. MUST BE STANDING STILL AND CANNOT LOSE FOCUS.
Ki Transfer- Can transfer some energy to another person to help restore some of their MP.
Ki Rush- Uses energy to boost him in a specific direction for a short time, such as jumping higher or dashing.
Passive Abilities:
Razor Edge- Edge of Heaven's Will is unusually sharp, even for a magical blade.
Warrior's Sense- Eden's energy grants him the ability to "feel" a person's energy (mana, ki, MP, etc.); another benefit is that it helps him "feel" where an opponent is in case he cannot see them.
Limit Breaks:
Final Blast- Puts all of his remaining energy into one massive energy blast, dealing severe damage to one target, but depleting ki reserves leaving the body tired as well as making it harder to regain Ki.
Drive Form(s):
Super Form- ???
Strengths: Melee battle, speed, agility, defense, tactics
Weaknesses: Magic (offense, defense, and how much he can cast), women (takes great effort of will to hit a woman, and then only if she is blatantly trying to kill him, will also drop his guard for a second for any pretty girl who flirts a little)
Personality: Evan is the kind of person who will give his all for anything he feels strongly about. Perhaps a bit too stubborn at times, he is nonetheless resilient and can be depended on to keep his promises. His strong protective sense will often drive him to new heights, and his showmanship will have him going beyond his limits in style. His weakness for the ladies has gotten him into trouble a time or two, but he has a heart of gold and strong morals. He is slow to anger and quick to cool, but once he goes off, flee to the next city if you're the one who did it, otherwise be prepared to lose a limb or two.
Likes: Food, computers, games (especially Duel Monsters), good friends, a good sparring session once in a while.
Dislikes: Liars, Cowards, Being rudely interrupted when he's busy on an important project.
Fears: Being used.
Family: Mother, Father, hasn't spoken with them in months, presumed lost to the Heartless.
Bio: Evan hasn't had the easiest life, but he's tried to make do with what he has. At a young age, he was discovered to have an IQ of 144. Because of this, the teachers at his school treated him better than the other students in order to "nurture" his intelligence. Not the best move in the world, as the other kids didn't like his "Special Treatment" and decided to make his life as hard as possible. On the bright side, he did get a good education. On the not-so-bright side, he grew up without any friends. Things started turning around though once he hit college. He started making tons of friends, so all that waiting and hoping paid off. He started working during college and sometime during that, he met a girl. After talking with her for a while, he hit it off with her and the two started dating. It was awesome! He had friends and he had a girl! All his hard work and perseverance paid off big time...well...until nine months later. One day he got an email in his inbox that changed his world forever. And it wasn't one of those e-mails that had the virus in it; he had a Mac. It was the shortest, yet most heartbreaking e-mail in his life. With 3 short sentences, she broke his heart into pieces. Turned out that she had been using him all along so she could get what she wanted from him and leave him empty. That was the breaking point, as he slumped into a 3 month depression that would have made you wonder if he was an honest Nobody. It took a gal pal of his to finally open him up as she dragged him to an anime convention that was in town. It wasn't so bad. There were tons of fangirls there squeeing over his wicked-awesome coat that his gal pal made for him; especially one fangirl in particular. That girl ran up to him and asked him to sign her book. He thought "What the Heck..." and signed the fangirls book, tossing in a forum username in the process. She soon turned red and ran off squeeing to her friends. He shrugged and continued on to enjoy the rest of the convention. A few days later, he saw a message in his forum inbox. She refreshed his memory and said her name was Bobbi. She wanted to know if he could hang out. He said yes, and the two became fast friends. Little did he know that Bobbi was developing a crush on Evan. The dunce finally figured it out when she slipped on an IM conversation that she liked him. A few days later, he asked her out. She said yes, and they have been inseparable ever since. Two months into the relationship he handed her a silver heart-shaped ring and asked her if she would be his girl for the rest of his life. She said yes of course.
A few months later and Evan heard some bad news...well bad for him, good for Bobbi's family. They had to move to some city that was far away because of a work promotion. They had phones so it wasn't so bad, and of course the internet would serve as a link for them as well. Before they parted, Bobbi gave him a necklace with the kanji of dragon on it. Evan accepted the necklace and made an oath on it: that as soon as he was done with college, he would leave home and see her once again. Evan then presented her with a silver heart-shaped necklace shaped just like her ring and placed it around her neck. The two parted with a tender kiss and he watched as she drove off into the sunset...
Three months after that day, he finally graduated college. He had saved up and had bought, and of course customized, a black motorcycle for his trip to Seaport City. He put on the coat that originally drew them together, got on his bike, and rode away from home. He was tearing down the interstate when there was a massive explosion behind him. He skidded to a stop and saw that his home city was engulfed in Black Fire. It wasn't long before the shadows extended from there and started swallowing up everything. He sped off trying to outrun the Darkness, but even that was futile as he was soon swallowed up by it...
Summon: Eden
Summon Appearance: Eden
Summon Personality: Majestic, motherly, patient, understanding, truly cares deeply for life in general, but her summoner in particular I notice you've been working on this, and it seems to have been completed? However, I think I do see one problem. The passive ability 'Hunter's Sense' doesn't really fit your job, your element (or lack thereof), or your summon, so it doesn't make any sense for you to have it. I've never played a game where warriors were known for their increased senses; that always belonged to the Rangers/Hunters. Your summon, Eden, doesn't really fit the profile of something that would give that (such as an animal [Fenrir] or said Hunter/Ranger). And energy doesn't really... make sense to me. Maybe I'm wrong, and Amy (our Temp-HA mod while James is out) can correct me if I am, but the potency of your senses doesn't really have anything to do with energy. If you can make the ability make sense, go for it, but it couldn't really be due to those three things (unless, of course, Amy corrects me on the last one). If you were, say, an avid hunter in real life, I could understand, but we both know you're not xD You don't HAVE to have two passives either, and even if you want two passives, you could come up with one later that fits and we'll add it and say you unlocked it. Otherwise, I think everything looks good to go, Trunks Evan. Amy, what do you think?
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Posted: Fri Feb 05, 2010 10:27 am
Well, one thing I noticed is that, stat wise, he has low energy. Because most of his attacks are based on this, I would assume you'd run out of energy rather quickly. Something to keep in mind during fights. That really only pertains to his abilities, though, and not his ability to keep fighting. Like, endurance wise, he could keep going, but energy wise, he'd run out faster than most would.
I agree with Kyle on 'Hunter's Sense'. It doesn't really fit. The only part about it that does make sense is the energy increasing part. Eden could give a bit of a 'boost' to your energy, however, that wouldn't be a passive ability, I think. Also, it could be easily abused. XD Evan's lack of energy in his stats makes him more realistic, and not uber powerful to fight; if Eden gave that boost to him whenever he needed it, it would make the stats pretty useless when it comes to balancing things out.
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Posted: Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:57 pm
Alright, so that's two no's on 'Hunter's Senses'. Get rid of that, and it'll be good to go ^^
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 1:29 pm
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 7:00 pm
Looking at Warrior's Sense, I'm reminded of the DBZ power-sensing abilities. I'm not saying that's wrong or anything, but there is something you should be aware of.
The way you've worded it, you would be able to pick up on people with high Energy stat. Now, Rio has an extremely high Energy stat (8, to be precise)- so she'd show up pretty damn clear on your 'radar', so to speak. Cory has a relatively high one (7), but not quite as high. So he wouldn't show up as much as Rio.
However, going by the obvious DBZ reference, Cory has a higher 'power level' than Rio.
I'm just clarifying, but- are you sensing Energy level or Power level? I know your skill says energy, but considering that semi-clashes with the DBZ-origins, I felt the need to make sure. >>;;
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 7:40 pm
Bobbi: "Evan! What does the scouter say about her(Rio's) energy level?!"
Evan: "It's over 9000!!!!111!1!11!"
*makes sure to post this in the Bloopers thread*
On a side note, I'm pretty sure there are laws against this sorta thing? What were they called again? Copyrights? Yeah, I think that's what they were called. Does the word lawsuit mean anything to you? Or originality? Creativity? D: All the above?
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 12:48 am
I have completed The update on my profile long ago. I am still waiting on approval.
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phoenixianCrystallist Crew
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 7:36 pm
What he's trying to get at is he can sense how much MP a person has. It doesn't matter how much MP someone has as a whole, everyone "feels" pretty much the same, however when they're draining their MP he can sense how "empty" the "glass" is getting. For example, say someone has 100 MP, and they get down to their last 25. Well, then they're at 25% MP level. However, if someone has lower MP, say 50, and they're down to 25 MP, that's 50% MP level, so they'd be showing up stronger than the person with 25/100 MP because they're half full instead of a quarter full.
Did that make sense?
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 7:53 pm
That sounds...unneccessarily complicated sad Especially cause...how would he really KNOW??? That would be like a pm every time someone posts an attack "So, how much mp you at now?" cause everyone is getting stronger at the rp goes on, so using a spell at one point would drop it some, but at a later point, it'd technically drop it a bit less...or is my logic kinda skewed there?
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AldrickZearse Vice Captain
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phoenixianCrystallist Crew
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:44 pm
It's not that complicated. How many of us will post when we're running low on MP?
"Her mana was running low"
"He felt drained of magic"
"It was becoming more and more difficult to cast spells"
I believe many of us have used these and similar phrases a time or... *counts the number of major fights we've been in, then adds 2 in case she missed some* eleven. n_n
Besides, that was just an example, it's not really that mathematical. We do enough math at work, we don't need to bring it to the guild... >.<;
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 12:52 am
Kind of like being able to see Sora's blue Magic Power bar at the bottom of the screen?
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 3:20 am
Starlit Struggle What Goes Here?Name: Caelius Duffy
Nickname/Alias: "Cel" (like Kel) !
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Appearance: {Do not fill in this blank, only those underneath it. If you have a picture, you may use it as well.}
Height: 5'4"
Weight: 185
Body Type: Pudgy
Skin type: Pale
Eye Color: Dark Green
Hair Color: Orange
Hair Style: Lazily trailing hair which occasionally cover those parts that make up the unique features of his head, including the eyes, ears, and some of the cheekbone. Strands here and there rebel against this style, catching themselves to stand in any direction they can and fluff awkwardly.
Clothing: Light clothing in general, this includes a blue shirt that stretches across his stomach, somewhat exaggerating his rotundity. On the shirt is a logo that displays a torrent of water proudly, the ink splashed on as if to make the rest of the cloth carry a part of the ocean wherever it went.
An unremarkable pair of black trousers cover his lower-half.
His shoes are gray and white, made of a soft sort of fabric that wraps over the feet like a rag, held together with rubber soles that are marked with the earth.
Draped over his shoulders, both obscuring and contrasting with Caelius's shirt, is a ripped and torn, dull, gray cloak. It features not only a hood, but also an embroidery that could have suggested wealth and prestige, though brought to such ruin that it holds no value any longer. Over the front of the cloak is a small, frayed hole that feels as if it has been torn out forcefully, the threads left behind still reaching out for what is lost.
All over the back of the cloak lie patterns and symbols to represent different schools of magic.
On the left sleeve, above, is an intricate depiction of a spray of flame shooting forth until it hits the end where sleeve meets wrist, rolling away from the cuff and back to the edges.
Below this, on the underside, is a stitching of icicles shooting forward similarly to the flames, but instead of rolling from the cuff, they form a mist that dissipates quickly.
On the right sleeve, a storm of lightning brews over a turbulent ocean, crashing waves meeting forked thunder as if they should clash constantly.
Unusual Body Art/Parts: Nothing but a solitary tattoo on Caelius's forehead, concealed entirely by his hair.
Race: Human (Mage?)
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Milquetoast
Quotes: "You'd like me to put effort...?"
"No. I'm sorry... I can't, you ask too much."
""
Good/Evil: Neutral
Homeworld: Unnamed, a desert planet unfortunately watched over by a lazy player.
Main Weapon: A heavy mace, used by its owner to strike awkwardly, but accurately enough.
Additional Equipment:
An obsidian bracelet over his right arm, cracked slightly.
Job Class: Freelancer
Attack Abilities: {You can have less/more than three, if necessary}Name- Details
Name- Details
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Support Abilities: {You can have less/more than three, if necessary}Name- Details
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Passive Abilities: {YOU MAY ONLY HAVE TWO MAXIMUM}Rough Magic- Though the connection feels worn away, Caelius can still draw from his lessons. This allows him to, weakly, channel magic of any one of the four basic elements (fire, water, ice and lightning) into his weapon for each attack.
Exerting any more magical force would, unfortunately, cause the magic's manifested aura to spike out uncontrollably. This threatens not only his enemies, but also himself and any around him.
He cannot maintain this ability any longer than ten minutes at a time, and each time it is brought right to the limit, Caelius must rest or suffer disorientation and other effects for the rest of the battle.
Name- Details
Limit Breaks: {These are attacks that you can only use when your character is near defeat, as in his/her last few HP.} Caelius forces too much energy into his weapon, destroying it in the process but also leaving the shape manifested as pure magical essence (no element).
Strengths: Easy tasks, dodging responsibility, cooking
Weaknesses: Putting effort into something, passive behavior, meek attitude
Personality:
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Family:
Bio:
Sample Post:
Unfortunately, I have to leave this unfinished for now. Please don't mind this post, I'll try to have it done ASAP!
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 1:12 pm
Psalm Grasshopper Kind of like being able to see Sora's blue Magic Power bar at the bottom of the screen? Yup. n_n
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phoenixianCrystallist Crew
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 3:39 pm
Well, I'm cool with that, so long as he puts similar limits on it. For instance, more powerful foes/entities would show up as ??? (similar to FFTactics, though sadly few have played... if you ever went up against a plot-related boss, their HP and MP were grayed out with ???) or not show up at all/show up with as much as they want to reveal (masking their power ala DBZ), and if someone is moving too fast to see, then he couldn't exactly detect them (similar to DBZ).
If he puts that stuff in, I have no problem with it.
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