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 Posted: Fri Apr 12, 2013 11:28 pm
hey...your trying....that is good enough for me ^w^
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 7:25 pm
Minus 137 from post
RPer's Name: Lasuro
Character's Name: Lasuro Hozuki
Character's Rank: Genin
Wanted Bijuu: Hachibi; Gyuki, the Eight Tailed Demon Ushi-Oni
What are your plans for the Biju?
I know a lot about the 8tails from the anime and from reading about it. Rpc wise, To be able to protect my village, be stronger, and make my rpc a better ninja then he be without the bijuu. Also I feel this would improve my rp skills
What is a Jinchuriki's purpose?
The Jinchuriki’s purpose is to keep the bijuu sealed within them to keep the demon under control so the bijuu wont destroy anything basically.
RP Sample
1500 Words Minimum Please. Containing the Biju preferably.
[this is if me and gyuki was friends btw]
[Me:: Blue]
[Gyuki:: Indigo]
FlashBack; His father(Green), His brother( Orange),Cloud ninja (Dark Red)
As Lasuro walked around the outside are of Kirigakure, Cold wind blew towards the east as Lasuro wandered off on his little adventure to find another kids toy, the toy was a plush doll of the former Mizukage, the same person Lasuro looked up to since the day he came to the village at the age of 5 after being kept in a isolated area, being that he was in fact the host for the 8 tailed demon Hachibi, the demon Lasuro refers to as Gyuki, sunce that was in fact the eight tails real name. “ Are we really looking for a little doll” Gyuki asked. “Yea, why not Gyubi, I don’t want people in the village to dislike us anymore, i'm tired of it, as I told you before, it hurts you know, the way they look at me….I mean us” Lasuro answered. “Well I'm sorry bro, well lets get this toy, I mean it shouldn't be that hard should it, its just a toy”. “ Yea well I guess it shouldn't be, we just have to look for it, how bad could it be?”
[Flashback]
Into his flashback, Lasuro remembered that fateful night, the night his father had died, the night he lost he brother, and the same night that he found out he was Gyubu’s Host. The Rain was heavily pouring while there was a light fog and a thunder storm happening that same time. Lasuro witnessed something he would never in his life forget. The day his father died “Noo father don’t!!!” Younger Lasuro screamed holding the plush doll kunai that his father had given him for his fifth birthday. “Stay Back son this man is very dangerous, Hazuya Take your brother and get out of here” Lasuro dad Larogie commanded. “No we won't leave you dad!” Hazuya yelled back. “JUST GO! GET”. “Your kids just don’t listen do they”, the cloud ninja with the cloud shaped scar said. “You stay out of this”. The mysterious man, who wore hunter ninja Cloud village Attire without the Anbu mask but instead a mask that covers only your mouth and nose stood there waiting for a the fog to clear up enough before drawing his sword, emitting Raiton chakra into the blade the man said “Today I’m going to take your son to take that bijuu from him". “Nobody is going to lay a hand on him!” Lasuro’s Dad shouted while being unaffected by the heavy rain. “You cant stop me, your just to weak”. “Your right but I will fight still”. “If that’s what you wish to die then that’s how it will be”. Just then, as quick as lighting The mysterious man pierced the upper part of his blade into the heart of Lasuro’s Dad highly electrocuting him at the same time, and because the sword had Raiton element chakra emitted in to it, making it able to stab him and effect him.“NOOO!!” Both Lasuro and his brother screamed as they witnessed the death their father. Leaving the sword in his heart the Cloud ninja walked towards Lasuro drawing another sword this time a black steel one. “Are you ready to die kid, for the sake of the ninja world” The Cloud ninja asked. Fueled with anger as tears escaped his eyes, red chakra seemed to form around Lasuro while forming a single tail. Scared, Lasuro’s brother Hazuya ran through the wood seeing his brother that way. “I see you in your one tailed state, I guess this will be a problem” The Cloud ninja said. “AHHHHH!” Lasuro screamed charging forward with incredible speed moving too fast for the cloud ninja to keep up. “Dang”. As the Cloud ninja tried to dodge attacks, he ended up being backed up against a stone wall. Now corner he had nowhere to go. “DIEEE!” Lasuro screamed smashing his Bijuu chakra covered hand into the cloud ninja’s face. Spitting out blood, the cloud ninja decided to end his life himself instead of taking this beating by a kid. Managing to slice his throat, the cloud ninja died. Reverting back to normal Lasuro pasted out in the middle of the grass.
[Exit Flashback]
Putting the plush doll kunai in a pouch Lasuro continued on his mission to find the toy, leaving his childhood home hoping to one day return there. After a good thirty minutes of walking Lasuro came across a ninja practicing his Taijutsu skills that seemed to noticed Lasuro as a Kirigakure ninja by his head band. “Hey you, do you want to spar” The unknown ninja shouted at Lasuro ending his training. “Sigh, Fine but It will have to be quick, you see I have to find this toy” Lasuro said pausing from his mission to spar with this unknown ninja. Fighting a ninja that practiced in Taijutsu was simply boring for Lasuro, since the fact that Lasuro kept on Liquefying himself every time the ninja tried to land a hit. “Sigh, why don’t you just give up” Lasuro said asking the ninja. With no response the ninja kept on swinging ahead. Fine sense you don't want to listen. Lasuro then jumped back a few feet away from the mysterious unnamed ninja. Without the need of any hand signs Lasuro brought his hands up and straightly outwards from his chest making a gun shape with his hand. In his compresses an amount of water in their index finger, firing a drop with tremendous force and speed at the mysterious ninja. The mystery man tried to dodge the attack but ended up getting hit in his arm, between his right forearm and his muscle area. Now holding his right arm, where it was hit, the ninja screamed in agony.” there is more where that came from” Lasuro said. Lasuro noticed that the ninja was from Kumogakure. Finding out the ninja was from the village he hated most because of his past, Lasuro asked the ninja “who sent you here?, Answer me or I will kill you”. Still the ninja tried his hardest trying to attack Lasuro, since before each hit Lasuro would liquidize himself making him immune to the physical attacks. Getting annoyed Lasuro decided to use Water Release: Great Water Arm Technique increased the mass and the carbon and H2O to increase the size of his arm two time of what it already was. After the muscles of his arms became temporarily enlarged, and strengthened. Moisture was gathered from the whole body and compressed into the entire arm, like an instant pump-up the increase on his arm, Lasuro smashed the ninja in the ground face first by hitting him on the back of the head first, head first.
Very weak and tired, the mystery man had gotten back up very slowly “Just stay down “Lasuro said shaking his head from left to right. Getting tired Lasuro decided to just walk away. After walking back towards the village Lasuro noticed something in the tree next to the village gate. “What is that Gyuki?” “I don’t know kid go check it out”. As Lasuro got closer he noticed little rabbit feet of a doll. “That's It!” Lasuro Shouted. “Great” said Gyubi with a sarcastic tone. “Well let’s head back” Lasuro said walking back to the village to give the kid his doll back.
[[if accepted ill change my bio]][[ i hope this was good enough]]
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 7:53 pm
You have not met the minimum word requirement, as a result, I must deny your application.
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 7:59 pm
Some Witty Name You have not met the minimum word requirement, as a result, I must deny your application. Are you sure because when I use Microsoft word it counted 1690 something including everything seeing the word count was only 1500 I'm bout to check now
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:02 pm
I use a Word Count tool that I copy and paste all of the text from a person's post made. Also, just looking at it I can tell isn't 1500 words. So, yes, I'm sure it's under 1500.
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:04 pm
Some Witty Name I use a Word Count tool that I copy and paste all of the text from a person's post made. Also, just looking at it I can tell isn't 1500 words. So, yes, I'm sure it's under 1500. i guess after i edited i deleted quite too many words sweatdrop so how long do i have to wait to resubmit??
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:10 pm
We don't really have a time restraint for re-applying, to be honest.
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:12 pm
Some Witty Name We don't really have a time restraint for re-applying, to be honest. so i could just finish adding the 400 words because thats not hard to do
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:15 pm
You will have to fill out a new application, along with a new sample. Reason behind this is that just throwing in words will lower the quality of your current sample. As a result, it would more than likely be declined, for being completely scattered.
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:21 pm
Some Witty Name You will have to fill out a new application, along with a new sample. Reason behind this is that just throwing in words will lower the quality of your current sample. As a result, it would more than likely be declined, for being completely scattered. um i was just going to start from where i left off instead of starting from inside of the story bc that could mess up the errors i checked
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:28 pm
Even with the increased word count, I would still deny you. The post is extremely confusing, and there's multiple grammatical errors throughout it. Missing entire words even. You'd be best to start over.
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 8:32 pm
Some Witty Name Even with the increased word count, I would still deny you. The post is extremely confusing, and there's multiple grammatical errors throughout it. Missing entire words even. You'd be best to start over. ok
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 11:26 pm
RPer's Name: Lasuro
Character's Name: Lasuro Hozuki
Character's Rank: Genin
Wanted Bijuu: Hachibi; Gyuki, the Eight Tailed Demon Ushi-Oni
What are your plans for the Bijuu?
I know a lot about the 8tails from the anime and from reading about it. Rpc wise, to be able to protect my village, be stronger, and make my Rpc a better ninja then he be without the Bijuu. Also I feel this would improve my rp skills
what is a Jinchuriki's purpose?
The Jinchuriki’s purpose is to keep the Bijuu sealed within them to keep the demon under control so the Bijuu won’t destroy anything basically.
RP Sample:
1500 Words Minimum Please. Containing the Bijuu preferably.
RP Sample:
The hot sun was beating down upon the neck of Lasuro causing water to drip down his neck. While being in the training grounds as the sun peaked around the clouds, radiating the air with heat as a lone shinobi Lasuro was practicing his ninjutsu on multiple target dummies spread out before him. His hand reaching into the pouch on his side, while his fingers was looping into the holes the kunai’s provided at their base, drawing them out as he twirled them around. Lasuro’s eyes lingered for a moment, jumping from target to target until his hand closed on them halting the spinning. Seemingly without blinking, Lasuro dodged the metal projectiles swiftly making sure they didn’t touch him to where a faint chirping sound could be heard as he muttered two words. " Water Gun Technique" He muttered before mimicking a fire gun with his hand and firing a drop with tremendous force and speed similar to a shot, at each of the targets; each of the metals hitting home and imbedding themselves deep into the straw-like dummies half-way. “Working hard eh?” Gyuki thought watching him from inside of his head. Having finally mastering the technique as he walked over to the targets to examine the damage he has done. As he reached his hand out to touch the hole his water gun technique as made, a deep growling noise filled his head as if an animal was behind him. Spinning around quickly, the blade out in front of him in preparation but only to find nothing was there. Just now....I sworn I heard something He thought as he turned back around and moved to the next target. Examine three of the five dummies he goes on to examine the fourth one when he heard the growling noise again; only louder this time and a lot closer. “What the?” He turned around again, only to find nothing. Lasuro then sighed, running his hand through his black clearest hair; Lasuro took out a water bottle drinking it. His sensei told him the weather would be uncommonly hot, which it was, making him exhausted even more but he only tired to brushed it off. Perhaps he wasn't drinking enough water. Perhaps I'm going mad He thought as he brought the bottle to his moist lips once more.
“If that were the case then I would be running around mad” A deep voice rumbled, startling Lasuro making him spit out his water and cough, accidently swallowing some of it the wrong way. "W-what *cough cough* who said that?" He said, recovering from chocking on the water but still extremely startled. Looking around, for the third time, there was nothing around him. “Only the training dummies, the trees, the birds and the bees”.”And us, A little bit of advice, you shouldn't get so startled and be more alert. You would have been killed if you were ambushed and I would be resealed all over again. I'm fairly certain neither of us wants that” The voice said, making Lasuro take a deep breath to calm him down. Lasuro looked at the marking on his chest after taking off his sweaty shirt. Since he was a child, he's always had those markings on his chest since he can recall. He considered them a birthmark, but everyone else who has ever seen them looked at them differently. “Haven't you always wondered how you got these markings child?” Grumbled the voice as he heard, shifting in the back of his mind. Something massive, a life on its own. Suddenly, the environment around him swirled away into a vortex, only to be spat out into another room. The room was like the closet in the academy's abandoned side. Not exactly the supplies, but the walls looking run downed and the room semi dark. Water was at least an inch high on the surface of the floor, and before him was a massive cage with a seal on the lock. A huge silhouette was in the back of the cage, with a pair of glowing pink eyes lingering on the boy.
Frightened, and unsure of what was going on Lasuro backed up slowly, up against another wall and slide down until he was sitting in the swallow water as the massive shadow got closer, light piercing the darkness and revealing a huge creature that donned eight tails with four long horns on its head, similar to that of a sheep. The lower left part of its horns was permanently sliced off in a battle. It has a muscular upper-body structure, with a hunched back similar to an American bison, arms with spiked protrusions on the elbows, and hands with opposable thumbs like a human. It has no hind-legs; instead its lower half is made up of its tails which consist of eight tentacles that resemble the cephalopod arms of an octopus. It is also extremely massive, matching the Giant Squid in size. Lasuro’s eyes widen as he realized just who was talking to him; who he was looking at with such fear and rightfully so. The eight-Tailed Demon named Gyuki the Eight Tailed Demon Ushi-Oni. "Y-You" He stammered, not able to grasp any more words as he was simply stunned. All his life, he never knew. He wondered why the villagers looked at him the way they did. The voice in the back of his head that guided him throughout his life up till now but he just didn’t fully know it; he always had believed it was his conscious taking to him or telling him what to do. “And now you know little one...how long do you intend to stare at me like an idiot? Get up!” The Gyuki demanded, making the Lasuro jump straight up in the position of attention. Out of reflex and fear, as his father used say the same thing to drill some kind of discipline into his head. Relaxing slightly, he looked at Gyuki with a combination of awe and fear. "So this whole time...why did no one tell me anything!?!" He demanded, the demon looking at him ruefully. With a great huff that sent the boy into the wall, the demon laid down resting its head in his hands. “Simple. For our own safety as well as the village. They had to see what kind of person you were, and what kind of person you are becoming. For that reason, I have given you advice throughout your life” Gyuki stated firmly, his tails flicking around in unison. While most of his brothers and sisters were desperate to break free, being reckless through their action the Eight-tails thought it through. Sure, he would break free. For what? To be captured again and resealed? In possibly a pathetic excuse of a host who'll abuse his powers senselessly? No...Not for him. “And I brought you here since you’re of age to know what you are, a Jinchuriki’s. Which I strongly advise you keep that information to yourself” The demon was amused as Lasuro nodded his head, standing back up and rubbed the back of his head. "I see...so, what powers do we have?" He asked the Bijuu out of pure curiosity. Naturally, as he was very young and as the host he should know what he will be capable of. Suddenly, the room vanished as he was now outside once more, facing the five target dummies.
It took him a moment to realize what had transpired, wondering if he was daydreaming. However, the voice of reason had said otherwise. “You asked what powers I wield, actions speak louder than words. We wield the ability to Increased Stamina, Increased Strength, Thick Skin, Sumiton [Ink Release]”
The demon said, getting ready to educate the host. If this young man was to be his Jinchuriki’s, he'll make sure he becomes strong enough to be worthy of such title. Lasuro stood in front of one of the targets, prepared for the lesson he was about to be given from the demon. “One technique you'll be learning will be the Ink Creation technique, where Lasuro will be able to form ink in his mouth. The ink can be used for a variety of things, such as using his ink covered finger as a makeshift pencil or using the ink to blind an opponent. Gyuki ordered, the Jinchuriki’s nodded and got started right away. After several attempts, he finally managed to learn the Ink Creation technique. Panting slightly from never using a jounin ranked technique before, Lasuro took deep breaths to regulate his breathing.
"Jeez, you don't kid around" Gyuki said, knowing the answer already before Lasuro even spoke. The voice in his head fell silent, which in turn Lasuro tilted his head back and started relaxing. However peace was disturbed by a startling explosion several meters away from him, where a hole in the village's wall was formed. A band of rouges rushed in, laughing and causing panic in the streets as they began looting houses and messing around with the villagers. For some reason, this has been happening frequently in recent times. However, three bandits made their way to him. Each grinning to one another and laughing. “Oh great” Lasuro thought as he stood up, getting into a defensive position prepared to defend himself. “No help eh? Alright...” He thought, getting no response from the Bijuu as one of them suddenly left into the air, making the ~Tiger ~, and creating his Dragon. At first, Lasuro cursed his bad luck, briefly forgetting about the abilities he's gained. "S**t" He cursed as the dragon roared towards him. However, at that brief moment a voice exploded into his mind. “Don't just stand there!!!! Use Water Release: Wild Bubble Wave!!!” Gyuki shouted, stirring the young man to life. Jumping back while weaving the correct hand seals, Lasuro inhaled deeply before unleashing a stream of large volume of bubbles at the dragon and its castor; to which the stream erupted into a larger volume of bubbles as it tore through the dragon, its wind only empowering it as it collided into the rouge. Screams of agony was heard. The other two rouges though quickly acted, one disappearing as the other launched a stream of water at him. "Not this time" Lasuro said as he dashed to the side, with surprising speed being much faster than his peers his own rank. However, it didn't mean much when he got a sharp kick from the side into his gut, sending him rolling across the ground and coughing up blood. Damn that was a hard kick He thought as he covered his mouth, seeing the droplets of blood on his wrist. He moved to get up but then doubled over as he felt his rib cracked. The two rouges laughed evilly as they began approaching the young man. Struggling to stay up, because of dehydration Lasuro got tired very quickly. "Time to die" One of them said as they closed in, blade in hand ready to kill.
“No, not on my watch” The voice within Lasuro’s head spoke as suddenly a red chakra started leaking out around Lasuro’s body consuming him. A single tail leaked out from where the tailbone would be, forming and signifying the first stage. “Do not get used to it...the ONLY time I'll be helping you like this is during times where your life is in danger and you cannot help yourself any longer. You’re a LONG ways away before you’re even half the worth I consider to be a true Jinchuriki’s. Now, show me you’re not a complete waste of space and there's still some hope!!!” The demon bellowed as Lasuro stood up; bringing his hands to his mouth and let’s looses a monstrous gust of wind at the pair of rouges. One of them managed to cling for dear life, utilizing his chakra to manipulate earth and hold him down by plunging his hands and feet into the ground while the other one was hurled away, getting mixed in with the debris of trees, logs etc from the training grounds behind them turning the blast of wind to a gale of destruction and debris. The rouge looked behind him, gulping at the destruction that followed the wake of the wind technique before hearing a chirping sound; looking up in time to see that Lasuro had planted one foot into the ground and brought the other one around, catching the rouge underneath the chin with inhuman speed and strength sending him airborne. But without a moment wasted, the Jinchuriki’s pushed off his planted foot, rocketing himself into the air thrusting two fingers with a 10in blade of pure suiton chakra and 3in wide at his neck, shoving the blade into the rouge's throat. The initial impact crushed the man's windpipe. Landing on the ground safely the Jinchuriki’s stood there for a moment, listening. There was another thud, one of a lifeless corpse. Still brimming with demonic chakra Lasuro looked around for other rouges, though they seemed to be dealt with by the higher ranking shinobi in the village. As the tail and aura disappeared, the young shinobi felt drained and exhausted.
“You better straighten up and get stronger fast, or you won't be alive much longer. Get something to eat and rest, more training will be tomorrow” Gyuki spoke, Lasuro not being in the mood to argue back or so much else said "Alright". He sighed, getting up as water dripped from his body, Lasuro stood up straight and started to head over to the cafe. It was beginning to get late anyhow; some food would do him good before he retired for the night.
(sorry i was too tired to apply color to the people speaking, I really hope this was good enough sweatdrop , if not then its cool))
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Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 11:27 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 15, 2013 6:25 am
 Uchiha Roxas
Kages, can you please start building RP environments for your loose Bijuu to reside in. If you wish for an example please look in Konoha at Nature's Cradles. 6 of the 9 tailed beats shall roam free of a host and it is up to us Kage's to eventually RP them, if you wish to set conditions that's your choice and well that's it. Here are the standings so far for whom is free, sealed and where they are going...
Captured: Nine, Eight, Four
Free: One, Two, Three, Five, Six, Seven
Where?
Suna: One
Kumo: Six
Kiri: Sanbi, Nibi
Yuki: Five
Konoha: Seven
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