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 Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 5:09 pm
-o-Havik-o- How is 90g for a meal, (Same as three raw pieces of bacon.) and a cap of fifteen sounds far to me. 90 sounds perfect.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 5:16 pm
xNew York Slavex Username: xNew York Slavex
RPC Name: Kohana Remy
RPC Rank: Genin
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Under Approval
Profession: Ninjutsu Specialist
Ninja Types:
• Chakra Control
• Tactical Ninja
Talent Description: Consumed by the Flames
Talent Sacrifice: Sacrifices Taijutsu and Weapon Styles completely to concentrate on her Elemental Ninjutsu and Genjutsu.
How it happened:
• Kohana was constantly picked on by her older brothers whom specialized in Taijutsu but were incapable of using Elemental Jutsu. She started to be tutored by her aunt to "weave" handsigns and became more adept to using Ninjutsu out of spite. Even if your bloodline is not approved yet, it still needs to be mentioned. This is mainly so I can ensure that you're not trying to remove bloodline weaknesses and such. In fact, it'd be better to be sure you have the bloodline before making a talent at all. Your talent description should include everything your RPC gains from the talent. As this one is written, your RPC with spontaneously combust and burn to death the instant you make your first post. I'm sure that is not your intention. The short description in your sacrifice does include what should be in description, but does not give me any of the information I need. Does this mean you're just dumping the melee abilities with no real benefit? Because that's what you'd get from this talent. Ignoring the fact you're on fire. Read a few of the earlier ones, particularly my own and Cobra's, though Havik's is also amusing, to get a better idea how to do it up.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 5:28 pm
TvIaMsOqTuHeYz Okay, I'll just turn it into a custom jutsu later. Okay, I thought that Electromagnets functioned differently, where as regular magnets have varying degrees of attraction/repulsion based on the distance, I thought Electro magnets just had a range, and once your within the range it suck/fires you away. Not really, I mean if I'm supposedly able to manipulate sand that far away to begin with, then naturally my sand should reach that far. No, electromagents function primarily on the imput of electricity. The more electricity, the more power the magnet has. That's why his doton techniques suffer, because there is always a tiny bit of Raiton chakra in every jutsu he uses. By destroy, I mean roughly what will happen if you place a magnet next to a mother board, it fries it. It doesn't necessarily break it into pieces, if it is huge, then Laxus would just find himself attached to it. But if it is within range, Laxus could easily break it down so that it would have to be given maintenance. I don't argue that often, do I? You have argued with me on every custom you have ever made. Or at least the ones I've judged. For all I know you might be right about electromagnets having a set range, but for the purposes of balance I'd rather it work the way I described. It'll still suck kunai and shuriken at you quite nicely from the full range, but won't drag stuff people are holding or armored warriors at you until they're right up close. You are able to manipulate sand at that distance because you extend magnetic chakra to that distance. This isn't your range of ability, this is a subconsciously created field of magnetism. If you want to expand it further than I said, you can make jutsu for it later. Alright... Ignoring the electromagnet bit, because it doesn't matter much so I don't care, if you want it to be because of your high raiton levels, say it's because you have an abnormally strong affinity for it or something. The way you described it implies that you simply ignored a limitation, meaning anyone could do it if they really felt like it. Better to say it's a physical abnormality. And I know why/how the implied destruction would work. I'm simply saying that it is not to be done, because that would be incredibly overpowered. You're already pushing for a talent that's main weakness could easily be seen as a strength if used properly, don't give it even more extra powers. Especially not ones you didn't list in the talent itself.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 6:07 pm
Hinote Tosatsu You didn't add the post counts I asked for... An added note for technology recreation, it should have an increased "Learning" count since you don't have anything teaching you how to make it. If you want the ability to learn a tech's weakness, the posts should be required to be focused entirely on studying the tech. Furthermore, the post count should be increased for each rank, since an S ranked tech will generally be much more complex than an E rank, and thus have it's weaknesses more well hidden. And since it matters to some people, you should also include that just because you might know the weakness does not mean you can exploit it. Please segment the important points of the talent out like Cobra did, just so they are easier to spot.
Username: Funky Inferni
RPC Name: Roatsu Keido
RPC Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: N/A
Profession: N/A
Ninja Types: Offensive and Tactical
Talent Description: Roatsu isn't much of a shinobi at all and prefers the use of machines over anything else. He constantly researches and creates new machines all the time. So, instead of traditional fighting styles, Roatsu can create an unlimited amount of custom technology. This technology, however, would require construction. The construction time is equivalent to a jutsu of the same rank as the technology.
Along with his abilities to create, he is able to recreate any technology that he is seen from simply seeing how it is used. When recreating the technology of someone else, it takes one additional post for technology up to C-Rank and two additional posts beyond that.
Also after seeing how a technology is used, then he can also determine any weaknesses it may have. It takes a different amount of time to determine the weakness for each rank of technology.
E = 2 posts
D = 3 posts
C = 4 posts
B = 5 posts
A = 6 posts
S = 7 posts
Each post must be completely dedicated to observing the technology at work in order understand it. Movement is allowed, but attacking is not during this time.
Talent Sacrifice: Roatsu does not have chakra. He cannot learn taijutsu, weapons techniques, ninjutsu, or anything else that normal shinobi can learn. The extent to what Roatsu can do is use types of weapons and technology that he creates. He also cannot have a Shinobi Profession.
How it happened: Roatsu was born without chakra whatsoever, but still could live without it. Being an extremely smart fellow, he took interest in science. Through years and years of dedication, he was able to construct technology and invent things that nobody had done before. He can effectively create anything that he can envision in his head and use it to its fullest extent. All he has to do is build it.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 8:25 pm
Username: -o-Havik-o-
RPC Name:Death "The Monkey Man" Spank
RPC Rank: Jounin
Talent Description: Vice of the Devil Meat!: Due to Death "The Monkey Man" Spank's unending, and unwavering love for Bacon (yes, with a capital B!) when he consumes the delicious meat he gains a +1 to his strength, speed, and clogged arteries. This buff will last for 5 posts per piece of Bacon, and 15 posts for a meal involving Bacon.
(The buff of this talent has a 15 post cap, no matter how much Bacon is consumed.)
Talent Sacrifice: The problem with this is when he goes more than ten posts with out eating any Bacon (again with the capital B!) he suffers withdraws, taking a -1 from all his speed, and strength. He also becomes cranky, and more irritable when he does not get his fix in time.
Bacon will cost 30g raw, 40g cooked, 90g in a meal from restaurants, or market places.
If Bacon is eaten once withdraws have stared then he does not gain his bonus, however, if he eats a large amount of the Bacon (ten pieces, or two meals.) once from a withdrawn state, for 3 posts he will be over joyed with the taste, he will be fueled with +2 strength, and speed, after that three posts for seven he will return to his normal +1
How it happened: Through out his life Death "The Monkey Man" Spank had many meals that involved Bacon... Okay, they all did, after having it once he could not help but have it with any meal he ever had. They joy from the Bacon always fueled him, making him feel more alive, and more powerful than he was before. Learning this he about himself he went even further, and many times kept Bacon on his person for those bad situations that ninjas tend to get themselves in.
The meat of all meats even tended to get Death "The Monkey Man" Spank into fights, mostly with animal activists, vegetarians, or vegans, because when they saw him eating his BLT, Bacon cheeseburger, Bacon jerky, fried Bacon, teryiaky Bacon, Bacon dipped in various things like honey mustard, BBQ sauce, chocolate, ranch, that sauce that one restaurant serves with chicken strips, steak sauce, or ice cream (Just some of his favorites dips.) Bacon wrapped hot dogs, Bacon wrapped asparagus, fully loaded potato with extra Bacon and sour cream, or any of his other Bacon based meals they would try to convert him to there ways, and the thought of no more Bacon enraged him cause him to slash out violently and scream "I WILL NEVER STOP EATING BACON!" (All caps that time!). This some times got him in trouble with his Kage, or restaurant owners, but for some reason those none meat eating bastards always piss him off.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 5:22 am
-o-Havik-o- Username: -o-Havik-o-
RPC Name:Death "The Monkey Man" Spank
RPC Rank: Jounin
Talent Description: Vice of the Devil Meat!: Due to Death "The Monkey Man" Spank's unending, and unwavering love for Bacon (yes, with a capital B!) when he consumes the delicious meat he gains a +1 to his strength, speed, and clogged arteries. This buff will last for 5 posts per piece of Bacon, and 15 posts for a meal involving Bacon.
(The buff of this talent has a 15 post cap, no matter how much Bacon is consumed.)
Talent Sacrifice: The problem with this is when he goes more than ten posts with out eating any Bacon (again with the capital B!) he suffers withdraws, taking a -1 from all his speed, and strength. He also becomes cranky, and more irritable when he does not get his fix in time.
Bacon will cost 30g raw, 40g cooked, 90g in a meal from restaurants, or market places.
If Bacon is eaten once withdraws have stared then he does not gain his bonus, however, if he eats a large amount of the Bacon (ten pieces, or two meals.) once from a withdrawn state, for 3 posts he will be over joyed with the taste, he will be fueled with +2 strength, and speed, after that three posts for seven he will return to his normal +1
How it happened: Through out his life Death "The Monkey Man" Spank had many meals that involved Bacon... Okay, they all did, after having it once he could not help but have it with any meal he ever had. They joy from the Bacon always fueled him, making him feel more alive, and more powerful than he was before. Learning this he about himself he went even further, and many times kept Bacon on his person for those bad situations that ninjas tend to get themselves in.
The meat of all meats even tended to get Death "The Monkey Man" Spank into fights, mostly with animal activists, vegetarians, or vegans, because when they saw him eating his BLT, Bacon cheeseburger, Bacon jerky, fried Bacon, teryiaky Bacon, Bacon dipped in various things like honey mustard, BBQ sauce, chocolate, ranch, that sauce that one restaurant serves with chicken strips, steak sauce, or ice cream (Just some of his favorites dips.) Bacon wrapped hot dogs, Bacon wrapped asparagus, fully loaded potato with extra Bacon and sour cream, or any of his other Bacon based meals they would try to convert him to there ways, and the thought of no more Bacon enraged him cause him to slash out violently and scream "I WILL NEVER STOP EATING BACON!" (All caps that time!). This some times got him in trouble with his Kage, or restaurant owners, but for some reason those none meat eating bastards always piss him off. I was inches from approving this just now, when I realized... It needs a cooldown. How long must he wait after the boost ends before boosting again? The withdrawal would still be in place of course, but when does bacon begin to boost him again?
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 5:33 am
Funky Inferni
Username: Funky Inferni
RPC Name: Roatsu Keido
RPC Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: N/A
Profession: N/A
Ninja Types: Offensive and Tactical
Talent Description: Roatsu isn't much of a shinobi at all and prefers the use of machines over anything else. He constantly researches and creates new machines all the time. So, instead of traditional fighting styles, Roatsu can create an unlimited amount of custom technology. This technology, however, would require construction. The construction time is equivalent to a jutsu of the same rank as the technology.
Along with his abilities to create, he is able to recreate any technology that he is seen from simply seeing how it is used. When recreating the technology of someone else, it takes one additional post for technology up to C-Rank and two additional posts beyond that.
Also after seeing how a technology is used, then he can also determine any weaknesses it may have. It takes a different amount of time to determine the weakness for each rank of technology.
E = 2 posts
D = 3 posts
C = 4 posts
B = 5 posts
A = 6 posts
S = 7 posts
Each post must be completely dedicated to observing the technology at work in order understand it. Movement is allowed, but attacking is not during this time.
Talent Sacrifice: Roatsu does not have chakra. He cannot learn taijutsu, weapons techniques, ninjutsu, or anything else that normal shinobi can learn. The extent to what Roatsu can do is use types of weapons and technology that he creates. He also cannot have a Shinobi Profession.
How it happened: Roatsu was born without chakra whatsoever, but still could live without it. Being an extremely smart fellow, he took interest in science. Through years and years of dedication, he was able to construct technology and invent things that nobody had done before. He can effectively create anything that he can envision in his head and use it to its fullest extent. All he has to do is build it.
I know some people like size nine, but if I make a format that has size ten, please don't decrease it. You may increase it, within reason, but don't make it smaller. Reason? Size ten looks cool, but I can't read size nine. Now, on to the talent. When I said to copy the learning system post counts for the talent, I was referring mainly to learning how to build it. Look at it as studying a blueprint that teaches you how to build something, then building it from that. The first time around, you're going to be constantly looking back to the blueprint for instruction until it's done. The next time, you probably still would, but in this world everyone is a supergenius, so the second time you wouldn't need the blueprints, and could build it perfectly from memory. So, since there is that gap, but it'd be a bad idea to let you make tech in a single post after learning how, I suggested the construction count. Probably about half the normal count for learning posts would be fine for that. When you say "it takes one additional post for technology up to C-Rank and two additional posts beyond that.", does this mean that E-C have a +1 penalty, while B-S have a +2?
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 10:41 am
Hinote Tosatsu -o-Havik-o- Username: -o-Havik-o-
RPC Name:Death "The Monkey Man" Spank
RPC Rank: Jounin
Talent Description: Vice of the Devil Meat!: Due to Death "The Monkey Man" Spank's unending, and unwavering love for Bacon (yes, with a capital B!) when he consumes the delicious meat he gains a +1 to his strength, speed, and clogged arteries. This buff will last for 5 posts per piece of Bacon, and 15 posts for a meal involving Bacon.
(The buff of this talent has a 15 post cap, no matter how much Bacon is consumed.)
Talent Sacrifice: The problem with this is when he goes more than ten posts with out eating any Bacon (again with the capital B!) he suffers withdraws, taking a -1 from all his speed, and strength. He also becomes cranky, and more irritable when he does not get his fix in time.
Bacon will cost 30g raw, 40g cooked, 90g in a meal from restaurants, or market places.
If Bacon is eaten once withdraws have stared then he does not gain his bonus, however, if he eats a large amount of the Bacon (ten pieces, or two meals.) once from a withdrawn state, for 3 posts he will be over joyed with the taste, he will be fueled with +2 strength, and speed, after that three posts for seven he will return to his normal +1
How it happened: Through out his life Death "The Monkey Man" Spank had many meals that involved Bacon... Okay, they all did, after having it once he could not help but have it with any meal he ever had. They joy from the Bacon always fueled him, making him feel more alive, and more powerful than he was before. Learning this he about himself he went even further, and many times kept Bacon on his person for those bad situations that ninjas tend to get themselves in.
The meat of all meats even tended to get Death "The Monkey Man" Spank into fights, mostly with animal activists, vegetarians, or vegans, because when they saw him eating his BLT, Bacon cheeseburger, Bacon jerky, fried Bacon, teryiaky Bacon, Bacon dipped in various things like honey mustard, BBQ sauce, chocolate, ranch, that sauce that one restaurant serves with chicken strips, steak sauce, or ice cream (Just some of his favorites dips.) Bacon wrapped hot dogs, Bacon wrapped asparagus, fully loaded potato with extra Bacon and sour cream, or any of his other Bacon based meals they would try to convert him to there ways, and the thought of no more Bacon enraged him cause him to slash out violently and scream "I WILL NEVER STOP EATING BACON!" (All caps that time!). This some times got him in trouble with his Kage, or restaurant owners, but for some reason those none meat eating bastards always piss him off. I was inches from approving this just now, when I realized... It needs a cooldown. How long must he wait after the boost ends before boosting again? The withdrawal would still be in place of course, but when does bacon begin to boost him again?
How about... "Once Death Spank goes into withdraws, there is a five posts cool down before he can gain the Bacon Buff. He is still able to stave of the effects of the withdraws, but will not gain the effects of his buff no matter the amount of Bacon eaten."
Hopefully, this will be the last edit I have to slip in there."
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:10 am
-o-Havik-o- Hmm, well... I didn't really think of that.
How about... "Once Death Spank goes into withdraws, there is a five posts cool down before he can gain the Bacon Buff. He is still able to stave of the effects of the withdraws, but will not gain the effects of his buff no matter the amount of Bacon eaten."
Hopefully, this will be the last edit I have to slip in there." Not what I meant. It needs a cooldown between the uses of the buff. You use up your max fifteen posts, how long does he need to wait before boosting again? It shouldn't be so quick to where you can reuse it in a short fight, but not so long to where it'd take forever to get it again either.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 12:05 pm
Hinote Tosatsu -o-Havik-o- Hmm, well... I didn't really think of that.
How about... "Once Death Spank goes into withdraws, there is a five posts cool down before he can gain the Bacon Buff. He is still able to stave of the effects of the withdraws, but will not gain the effects of his buff no matter the amount of Bacon eaten."
Hopefully, this will be the last edit I have to slip in there." Not what I meant. It needs a cooldown between the uses of the buff. You use up your max fifteen posts, how long does he need to wait before boosting again? It shouldn't be so quick to where you can reuse it in a short fight, but not so long to where it'd take forever to get it again either.
Simple enough.
Though, I am wondering something... Every time I eat Bacon should I activate the buff, or activate on will. While, for battle choosing makes more sense... I think I am leaning toward letting the post counts, and when I eat Bacon to decide it.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 1:29 pm
-o-Havik-o- Hinote Tosatsu -o-Havik-o- Hmm, well... I didn't really think of that.
How about... "Once Death Spank goes into withdraws, there is a five posts cool down before he can gain the Bacon Buff. He is still able to stave of the effects of the withdraws, but will not gain the effects of his buff no matter the amount of Bacon eaten."
Hopefully, this will be the last edit I have to slip in there." Not what I meant. It needs a cooldown between the uses of the buff. You use up your max fifteen posts, how long does he need to wait before boosting again? It shouldn't be so quick to where you can reuse it in a short fight, but not so long to where it'd take forever to get it again either.
Simple enough.
Though, I am wondering something... Every time I eat Bacon should I activate the buff, or activate on will. While, for battle choosing makes more sense... I think I am leaning toward letting the post counts, and when I eat Bacon to decide it.10 posts is acceptable. You might want to do it as a "For every five posts active, there is an X post cooldown.". Maybe three. That'd level out at nine posts for eating a meal/three pieces. For the second bit, you could make it that one piece gives you your fix, preventing withdrawal, but you need to eat two at once to activate the buff. (Or a meal, obviously.) That would let you choose more precisely when to use your buff, and be more realistic than it only working at opportune moments.
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 9:15 am
Normally I'm just frustrated because some of the time I don't see where you're coming from, but I'll attempt to just ask for more informaton in the future instead of trying to prove my point further. Okay, I kinda see your point on that bit. I'll change it to have a range of affect, But 6 inches away for maximum pull? That's about half what I'd be willing as the minimum. I'll edit it in later when I'm on my laptop. I was thinking that the extremities of the bloodline were the subconcious distance, lik how the Ichibi subconsciously can control an entire desert, I thought that my area of affect was passive. Okay, that's good to know that I was wrong on that. The magnetism is caused by the Raiton, tat's wy I put tat bit inthere. If eed be, I can change it to he is passivly extremely magnetic, but it would take away my -.5 rank to Doton. could I turn it into a jutsu? I don't tink it s that over powered, ad if need be, I'd put it into the taent, the only reason I didn't was because it seemed like it would be giving Laxus too many abilities.
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 6:03 pm
Username: Beatriz-chan
RPC Name: Shiro Hanazawa
RPC Rank: Genin
Bloodline: Trendrill
Profession: Medical Shinobi
Ninja Types: Chakra Control / Summon Specialist
Talent Description: Shiro is able to learn Medical and Bloodline Jutsu at a much faster pace. It takes -3 posts to learn them, becoming -4 if the technique is of two or more ranks below her. It does not work for techniques above her rank and does not stack with the bonuses from Teachers and Training Grounds.
Talent Sacrifice: Shiro is unable to learn Taijutsu aside from a Taijutsu/Weapon style created for her body and that involves the continuous usage of chakra or her Bloodline, or both (can learn only one). Her strength is reduced by one rank (does not count for threads' strength).
How it happened: Being one with the Trendrill Bloodline, Shiro has a quite different body. She can detach body parts at her will, but because she tested that recklessly there was a permanent damage to her muscles and the girl became unable to use her full strength. With that condition, Shiro found herself unable to practice and learn Taijutsu that was not suited for her body's condition. Yet the girl found herself still able to be as good as an ordinary shinobi by focusing on the areas not affected by her condition. That focus being on Medical and Bloodline Jutsu.
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Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 12:02 pm
TvIaMsOqTuHeYz Normally I'm just frustrated because some of the time I don't see where you're coming from, but I'll attempt to just ask for more informaton in the future instead of trying to prove my point further. Okay, I kinda see your point on that bit. I'll change it to have a range of affect, But 6 inches away for maximum pull? That's about half what I'd be willing as the minimum. I'll edit it in later when I'm on my laptop. I was thinking that the extremities of the bloodline were the subconcious distance, lik how the Ichibi subconsciously can control an entire desert, I thought that my area of affect was passive. Okay, that's good to know that I was wrong on that. The magnetism is caused by the Raiton, tat's wy I put tat bit inthere. If eed be, I can change it to he is passivly extremely magnetic, but it would take away my -.5 rank to Doton. could I turn it into a jutsu? I don't tink it s that over powered, ad if need be, I'd put it into the taent, the only reason I didn't was because it seemed like it would be giving Laxus too many abilities. Keep in mind that this is your WEAKNESS. It's not supposed to be a random power of the talent. If it is stupidly large, yes, it puts you in greater danger from incoming metal objects, but it also makes you a hazard to everyone else around you. I am not going to allow that. Use the values I gave. They are balanced out enough to be a weakness while not being a major bonus in various ways. Keep in mind also, that a kunai flying at you as if an A ranked ninja was pulling it towards you, is incredibly dangerous even at six inches instead of a foot or ten. Also remember that you are a GENIN. This is incredibly powerful for your rank. In fact, as a weakness I shouldn't allow it at all except for the fact that it's as dangerous as it is useful. My suggestion for the description won't change the talent itself at all. It just makes it make that much more sense. I simply want you to change it from saying he "Doesn't pay attention to the normal limits", to having his abnormally high Raiton affinity cause it. Recall again that this is already a tight squeeze as far as weaknesses go. You can't simply remove a weakness without replacing it. As for making a tech destruction jutsu, I'm going to say... No. Of course not. If it doesn't already exist within the bloodline, and considering it's not really a trait of the bloodline, it would simply be abusing the power of your, again, weakness. You can however include in the weaknesses that you are unable to use electricity based technology because your magnetic field disrupts them if they are within the final six inches. This, again, stops your weakness from becoming a strength by disrupting other people's tech. Your next post here should include the edited talent, as I am not going to bend on these points.
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Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 12:14 pm
Beatriz-chan Username: Beatriz-chan
RPC Name: Shiro Hanazawa
RPC Rank: Genin
Bloodline: Trendrill
Profession: Medical Shinobi
Ninja Types: Chakra Control / Summon Specialist
Talent Description: Shiro is able to learn Medical and Bloodline Jutsu at a much faster pace. It takes -3 posts to learn them, becoming -4 if the technique is of two or more ranks below her. It does not work for techniques above her rank and does not stack with the bonuses from Teachers and Training Grounds.
Talent Sacrifice: Shiro is unable to learn Taijutsu aside from a Taijutsu/Weapon style created for her body and that involves the continuous usage of chakra or her Bloodline, or both (can learn only one). Her strength is reduced by one rank (does not count for threads' strength).
How it happened: Being one with the Trendrill Bloodline, Shiro has a quite different body. She can detach body parts at her will, but because she tested that recklessly there was a permanent damage to her muscles and the girl became unable to use her full strength. With that condition, Shiro found herself unable to practice and learn Taijutsu that was not suited for her body's condition. Yet the girl found herself still able to be as good as an ordinary shinobi by focusing on the areas not affected by her condition. That focus being on Medical and Bloodline Jutsu. Your learning bonus should also not stack with the learning bonuses gained from Chakra Control and your profession. (Basically instead of specifying teachers and training grounds, say it can't stack at all.) With all of those things not stacking though, it'd be fine to allow the teacher bonus to still stack. For this weakness, I will require that you take Weaker Gen/Ninjutsu as your profession weakness. That way you aren't cheating the profession weaknesses. Now, rather than the way you have it designed, where you can still learn a style if it's based on your bloodline, or chakra usage, make it so that you can only learn taijutsu techniques made specifically for the bloodline. And they can't be personal customs either. Also, with your strength reduction, you should include speed as well. Your description states that her muscles were damaged. Speed relies on the muscles just as much as strength.
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