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Luo is currently the only person allowed to judge Ushio apps. If he already approved you once though, you should be fine.

(Also, Luo told me that he has access to someone else's adapter now, somewhat.)

Rpc Name:
Ame Amura
Village:
Konohagakure
Rank:
D
Bloodline or Clan applied for:
Kumo
What you know about the clan/bl:
Nothing much to the clan, although I think it is more of a bloodline. The only known member was Kidomaru, and he was a tan human with four extra arms. He was capable of secreting a substance from his skin that is sticky and gold, however when chakra is applied, it hardens to the level of steel. Kidomaru also had an eye in themiddle of his forehead, but that was most likely due to his curse seal, rather than his clan.
Rp Sample:
Ame smiled as she knelt in the middle of a meadow. She was smiling fondly as she picked flowers, placing them in a basket she had made from her own thread. She smiled and shuddered slightly, trembling with happiness as she felt the slight resistance of the flower, then the sudden give. It was almost exactly like her monthly meals, except instead of human sacrifices, she was pulling on flowers. She had been picking flowers for quite some time, and she was beginning to tire. She looked up into the sky, then feeling a tug on her free hand her eyes shot to the woods, intently staring at one specific area. The sun was almost down, but she wasn't in her monastery, she couldn't release her true abilities, lest she invoke a mob from the village. Her coven's numbers weren't strong enough anymore, even though they made up a large portion of the village. Most were teenagers, and they weren't hardened like their fathers were. The mothers were members as well, but they were no where near powerful enough to combat the strong farmers. Ame could kill them all herself, but then her coven wouldn't like her anymore... would they?

" All righty then men! We're going to kill that spider today! " A man said, facing two other men. The man was fat, and slob to be honest. He was bald, fat, greasy, and wore tattered rags. He was the bartender of the village, and the wealthiest human within. The village was on hard times with the "disappearances", and his spirits made it all go away. " Oxvard, you'll go to the south and when you see my torch light up, you start charging. Miulnir, you on the other hand take that spear of yours to the eastern side and try to sneak up on the girl while she is dealing with us. " The man said, smiling and brandishing his meat cleaver. " B-b-but Gungnier, what if she really is a spider demon? " the man called Oxvard said, shuddering, his knees audibly clanking together. THis man was thin, yet strong. He was a weaver by trade, something that didn't require him to be very strong. The only reason he was strong is because as a boy he had split everyone's wood for their stoves. He had been a large strong man, up until he married his wife. She was a nice,quiet woman. But one day he made her cross, and the fear she instilled in him was only experienced by her parents, who hadn't even asked for a dowry. " Oh shut yer legs ya wuss! " The man known as Muilnir. " If you chicken out on us, then I'll haunt you for the rest of your life! " He said, sticking his tongue out and shaking his head back and forth, his tongue lolling back and forth as well. Miulnir laughed, no, he cackled while doing this, then grabbing his gut he stifled his laughter, lest the child hear him. " I'm going to my post now, don't want to be late for my own funeral. " He said, skipping away, as Oxvard stumbled away to his position.

Ame could feel the men walking, she however didn't know there was only three. She thought it was her coven, coming to throw her a surprise party, as she enjoyed those greatly. " Oh, they remembered that I claimed today to be my birthday last year! " She said, giggling with glee. She had enjoyed the last surprise party. They had thrown a glorious banquet in her honor last time. It was great, and she was allowed to stay up well into the next morning. She closed her eyes and bobbed with glee. Her pitch black hair bouncing off of her shoulders. She had never eaten outside of the monastery, so this was exciting.

Gungnier smiled and lit his torch as the sun had fully gone down. " Have at you demon! " He yelled, rushing at Ame. He held his cleaver up high, and ran toward her quickly, much faster than anyone thought he could. Oxvard came running from the forest on the southern side, but he seemed... off. His gait was ungainly, like he was wearing a full body suit that was weighing him down, and he seemed slightly smaller. His hatchet was raised in the air as he let out a yell that seemed more like he was a man of conviction, rather than a man who'd rather not be there.

Ame shriek slightly at the yells, and turned first to face Oxvard? and focused chakra in her mouth, and began to secrete a large amount of of her thread into her mouth. She let out a shriek of sorts as she launched a large amount of webbing in a flower like formation, turning quickly as it hit the man known as Oxvard and he went down with a shriek. She then turned and let out a shriek and secreted a large amount of of her thread all over her body. Then her chakra flowed out into the coat of thread, just in time.

Gungnier's cleaver came down and smashed onto Ame's shoulder, letting a wail of pain come from her, and tears stream down her cheeks. No blood was drawn, and in fact no wound was even created, not even a bruise. Gungnier stood there and looked at her, at the tears streaming down her face. " Why do you want to hurt me? " Ame said, tilting her head back to look directly up into the man's face, tears still streaming down her face, her tiny hands reaching up and wiping her tears away. Tiny little spikes were growing on her hands, but they had dropped to her sides before they were exceedingly noticeable. " Dun' cry girlie! " Gungnier said, falling to his knees and wrapping his arms around her. " I didn' mean to hurt you, it's just we can't ha... " The man said, blood spurting from his mouth as a tiny hand was seen protruding from his back, spikes all over the hand.

Ame smiled as she lifted the man on her arm and licked some of the blood from his back, her chin's scar moving slightly. " Too bad this man is already dead. I don't eat dead things. " She said, sighing. This man's blood was delicious, it was warm, but not exceedingly warm. It was about room temperature. It was good, but she would have better when she got back to her home. She had all of her coven eating sweet things, making their blood that much sweeter. She liked sweets.

There was a crack behind her as Miulnir let out a howl and attempted to stab her in the back of the neck. Yelling was the worst thing he could do. Ame turned quickly, she was already much faster than a grown man without training. She quickly and easily lifted the man currently on her arm and smashed him into Miulnir's lower torso, snapping his knees. Miulnir let out a howl of pain, and began to sob. He had expected to die, but not be broken before. " Please.... please just end me now! " He said through tears.

" Oh, no, you're going to be my food tonight. " Ame said, smiling as she took her arm out of Gungnier and grabbed the spear, piercing Gungnier's stomach, she lifted him easily, despite her frail frame, and threw him gracefully through the air. She then went and opened her mouth, smiling as she began to emit a stream of thread from her mouth, she let a glob of it hit his throat, and then picked him up, twirling him slowly so that he was encased completely in a cocoon. Once completed she smiled and secreted a bit from her wrist, tieing it into the cocoon. Biting off the bit still trailing from her mouth, she turned and began to drag the man away, his eyes still visible. She enjoyed looking into the eyes of her meals. For some reason none of them seemed too worried, they mostly seemed happy. Maybe this one would have a different expression. She walked over to the place where she had hit the first man, Oxvard. She found him sitting up, on a log, next to a camp fire. " Yo, Mistress! " The man said, raising a hand to her. The skin was rippled, and the face didn't move, however the bones below moved. Ame shifted slightly, and sighed. " Who are you? " She asked, she recognized the voice, but she wasn't too sure.

" Oh, so you don't believe I'm Oxvard the weaver? " He said laughing. " I guess I didn't fit the skin on quite right, I was rather strapped for time. " He said, smiling and reaching to the back of his head and pulling on a thread, the entire back coming undone and the skin falling. It was a member of the coven, a young man to be exact. He was supposed to become her next meal. "I was wondering if I could deliver one of these two as a possible replacement for me. " He said, clasping his hands together as if he was praying, in fact, he kinda was. " Here, I even have this. " The boy said, producing a sack that was dripping something crimson. Ame immediately grabbed the bag, she could smell it from all the way where she stood. She immediately sank her teeth into it, sucking on it deeply. Something was wrong though, this was chilled, too cold to belong to something that was living, or at least had been living in the past hour. " No... " She said, opening the sack and peering inside. " You... You b*****d..." She said, shuddering. She wasn't shuddering because the sack contained all of Oxvard's innards, but because she had sullied her gullet, she'd become a carrion spider. She loved it. She loved the cold blood, she had grown tired of the warm blood, no matter how sweet it was. " You... Bury that fat b*****d with nothing but your hands, before I kill you. " She said, her eyes emitting a deep red glow. " Yes my Mistress. " He said, instantly hopping up and bolting to the body of Gungnier.

Ame had relocated herself to a tree further into the forest, yet still where she could easily see the boy. " You're going to pay for your transgressions. " She said, hacking slightly as she created a small bow sized for her, but with enough resistance that it was equal to a war bow that a grown man would have trouble pulling back. She quickly emitted an arrow with a single strand from the arrow still in her mouth. She'd learned this from one of her little play days. She pulled it back and launched it, controlling it to go directly up into the air, and then dropping from the sky, driving straight through the boy's spinal column, absolute precision was what she achieved. Through every last one of the boy's vertebra, the arrow exited through his arse, and drove directly into the ground, the drill bit on the end making it twist slightly, covering the hole it made simply. Ame pulled the string, smiling as it left the hole. There would be no clue as to the boy's death except for the single strand of spider's thread.

Jutsu used in the app:
Spider Sticky Gold
Armor of Sticky Gold
Spider Cocoon
Spider War Bow: Terrible Split
Spider Web Area
Spiral Spider Web

Reason I didn't reference multiple arms is because due to her talent, she doesn't have the extra four arms.

Sorry about the wait. The new job has me working 18+ hours a day, 6 days a week.

A bit of grammatical criticism: your sample is very wordy. You say the words "she smiled" three or four times in the first few sentences alone.
Watch your grammar and punctuation.

Overall Verdict: Approved.


Approved. Very nice sample.

I'm allowed to give clans/bls to already created rpcs as long as they didn't have a clan/bl in the first place, right?

Rpc Name: Naiten Tsuchigumo
Village: Konohagakure
Rank: Genin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Tsuchigumo
What you know about the clan/bl: The Tsuchigumo clan is unable to use a wide variety of ninjutsu and genjutsu. Therefore, to make up for that weakness, they developed their own type of jutsu, which involves writing characters in the air rather than performing hand signs. Because this is a lot like the sealer class and requires a good deal of chakra control, members of the clan must have both the sealer class and the chakra control specialty.

Rp Sample:
Soft steps made their way carefully down the hall. The sharp black eyes of the stepper quickly scanned her surroundings, taking in the various still snakes that had first warned her that something was up during her routine scan of the office to check that no intruders were present. With the various images scattered around this building that Naiten had created with the Dragon Spying technique, the girl had seen these still snakes and knew that something was up. Granted, she hadn't seen the suspect directly. However, anyone who would dare touch the snakes, precious companions of Zin, was obviously an enemy. Even setting aside emotional anger, the snakes were a sort of security for this building so only those who were hostile would need to attack the snakes. [1/4] [6/40]

Of course, Naiten had notified Zin of her suspicions. She and he were, as usual, connected by the Kuza, the Bond, character. As a full-fledged jounin, Naiten could connect easily with Zin at the moment. He was several floors up in the hokage's office dealing with some diplomatic matters with some village or another. However, he was too busy at the moment to come himself. That was all good with the girl, she hoped to finish this intrusion before he needed to interrupt what he did. Zin, in her opinion, didn't need to worry himself with such a minor detail. He should know, of course, but his attention was much more deserving of larger, more important issues. [2/4] [6+8=14/40]

As Naiten walked, she would continue to cycle through the various Dragon Spying Techniques she had set up. Although, so that she wouldn't trip herself, the girl only activated the audio aspect; even then, there would be pauses between each one so she could listen in on her own surroundings. Finally, she heard voices from one of her pictures, unfamiliar voices. Quickly but not hastily, the girl wrote the characters for Kankyou Kuza and merged into the ground. She knew where the bold perpetrators were. With Kankyou Kuza, Naiten was capable of moving stealthily through the ground. Only those of a higher rank than her, which would include only the elite, or with a doujutsu, would be capable of seeing her. That suited her just fine, actually. If there was anyone skilled enough to see her while she travelled through the ground, she wouldn't be giving them a swift death in the first place. Instead, she would take the more time-consuming route and capture them alive so that they could be interrogated and/or tested upon. Zin would surely be pleased with such a decision. [3/4] [14=11=25/40]

As the jounin thought through her course of action and sent Zin a cursory report on where the trespassers were, she had approached the area she had heard the group talking in. They had been stuck at how to open the door that stood in their path, judging from their conversation. A good and reasonable dilemma considering the contents of what was stored in these depths. The first trespasser was caught easily enough. With Kankyou Kuza still activate, Naiten had pulled him into the ground, leaving only his head above the dirt that suited such a lowly being like him. The girl quickly resurfaced to the right (closer to the face than the back of the head) with the intent to deliver the merciless final blow: slice the man's head in two horizontally using the natural rip caused by the mouth as an easy starting point. She never delivered the final blow, though. Instead, she just barely managed to dodge her own final blow. A bright flash of torch light reflecting off of a blade warned her of the coming strike and the girl quickly blocked, using the weapon she had prepared to kill to block the blade instead. With her free hand, she wrote the Kankyou Kuza kanji once more and ducked back underneath the ground as soon as she could. [4/4] [25+10=35/40]

Naiten didn't spend much time underground and instead darted off and resurfaced at a safer location before the first shinobi that she had safely attacked was pulled out. Trying to ambush from below wouldn't work, No sarcasm was intended. Indeed, Naiten was smiling quite cheerfully. In fact, her smile looked quite innocent, like the smile any cute girl like her would wear after discovering something delightful. This was, as mentioned before, great. It turned out that at least one of the nuisances would be a great addition to Zin's collection. The fact that Nai had both trapped at least one person and had escaped the prepared attack meant that neither of the people she was facing were a higher rank than her, leaving only one option: doujutsu. Doujutsu users were always beneficial to study and collect considering their rarity. The location Naiten had chosen to resurface in further exemplified her determination to capture the doujutsu user. Since he was going to be an experiment in the end, there was no harm in showing where he would be staying. The woman had, in fact, surfaced on the other side of the door that the two or more enemy shinobi had been trying to get through. The door she planned on opening after thoroughly trapping it with seals. [35+13=48]

Overall Verdict: Approved.


Overall Verdict: Denied.
And this is why:
(*Note: I accept all responsibility for the words I am about to say and the subsequent reprimanding that may follow.)
I have rules that directly pertain to this situation. These rules apply to every single thread that I am a moderator of, which includes, but is not limited to:
-BL/Clan apps
-Custom Tai Styles
-Custom Clans/BLs
-RP Academy
-Rogue Village and Country

One such rule states as follows:
"By submitting a post or application in any of the aforementioned threads, applicants/RPers accept full liability for the contents of said post. Applicants will submit only completed work, and only after it has been deemed to be completed to the very best of their ability by said applicant."

Basically, this means that anyone who posts in these threads will post nothing but their best work. Which you have not done. By telling me that you haven't submitted your best work, you have disrespected my rules. As I have said multiple times before, incomplete work, or applications that are not completed to the best of your ability, will cause you to receive an automatic denial from me.

However, referring to the note at the end of your post, I completely disagree with you. As a person who has used a character of the Nara clan many times in multiple guilds, I have never once had any complaints. If you're having trouble creating a SAMPLE, not even an in-game post, then you certainly aren't going to be able to RP with that character in-game.

On top of that, since you seemed to have no prior knowledge of this fact, using any techniques other than the Shadow Neck Bind while using the Shadow Imitation technique causes Kage Mane to release the victim from its hold. In order to use the jutsu that you've used in the sample, you would have to use, release, reuse, rerelease, and reuse the Kage Mane techniqe.

Until I have confirmation that you have altered your application to contain your very best work, as well as proven that you can actually put this clan to good use, my verdict stands.

Rpc Name:
Raphael Saki
Village:
Sunagakure
Rank:
D
Bloodline or Clan applied for:
Nara
What you know about the clan/bl:
The clan is the only clan capable of using Kageton, or Shadow Release. Their shadows are capable of holding an opponent in place, or even grasping an opponent. The clan's weakness is that if there are no shadows, then they are incapable of using their own techniques.
Rp Sample:
" So I'm confused, we're just going to sit here until you run out of chakra? " The man said smiling as he just stood there staring at Raphael. " I thought that the Nara clan was supposed to have multiple techniques to use to defeat an opponent once you've got them immobilized. " The man said laughing. He wasn't in any shape to be laughing, he had several cuts, and he had used up quite a bit of chakra attempting to attack Raphael. He had gotten one good hit though.

" I don't exactly know which techniques would work, I come from the Saki family branch, we just use these techniques for fun. " Raphael said smiling and standing to his full height. " However, now that you mention it... " Raphael said as he brought his hands together to make a new array of hand signs " Shadow Neck Bind. " Raphael said smiling as his shadow tightened into a small line and a hand crept up the man's leg then his torso until it reached his neck. " Let's see just how much more power you've got left in you. " Raphael said smiling. The man could very well have quite a bit left, he seemed to have a natural affinity for fire. ' Maybe I did just get away with a scratch if this man is truly a fire master as he said he was. ' Raphael thought to himself as he tentatively looked at the char marks on his exposed chest. His shirt, jacket, and even the top right corner of his pants were completely burned away. He had second degree burns, and a sizable char mark on his chest. His right arm was in fairly bad shape, if he didn't treat it as soon as he could, he'd be in for a bit of trouble with infections and possible amputation.

" Oh? A challenge eh? " The man said smiling and focusing his chakra, which in essence was limitless. " I'll show you just how much power I have left! " He shouted, bursting his chakra from his body, slight burns appearing on his body. His face changed, if only for a second. It seemed he was in immense pain, more pain than anything Raphael had ever felt. Could this man be like Shinji? The Shadow neck bind technique slowly left the man's neck, although it kept him immobilized. " So again with the waiting game? " He said smiling, although his teeth were clenched and his eyes began to falter. He was in an amazing amount of pain.

" Oh, I just remembered something. " Raphael said smiling, drawing a ninja fist blade. He focused a large amount of his shadow chakra into the blade and sprinted forward sinking the blade into the man's shadow before he had a chance to respond to the shadow imitation being canceled. In the time he charged the man, he only had time to fall to his knees, blood coming from his clenched teeth. " I see that you've expended yourself nearly completely. " Raphael said smiling as he leaped away, breathing slightly hard. " As long as I've got you there, I'm going to have a bit of fun. " Raphael said taking out some ointment and rubbing it on his wounds. The ointment would heal him for the time being, and it would prevent pathogens from getting to his open wounds. " So, let's play a game. I'm going to use jutsu after jutsu, and we'll see what it does to you. Sound fun? " Raphael said laughing as he stood up and dusted himself off as he put the ointment away. Raphael brought his hands together and weaved several hand signs together.

" Tch, You can't hurt me any more than I already am. " The man said laughing, his body visibly straining against the jutsu. This jutsu wasn't capable of being broken through sheer willpower alone. He'd need a buddy to save himself, but that wasn't an option. This was a competition after all. Pity that Raphael had to show the other countries his ability. But it was better to have them know, than to be in the hospital. " Just get it over with, This is Konoha's chunin exam, you know by the state of this place that one of us isn't going to walk out of here alive. If you run out of chakra, I'll rip you limb from limb. " The man said, more blood coming from his mouth. He was obviously hurt, Raphael wondered if it was a shared trait. He'd have to ask Shinji about it once he returned to Sunagakure.

" Shadow Sewing. " Raphael said his shadow rising in tendrils and shooting at the Konaga. The tendrils shot through the man's body, blood coming out. " One down, I've got about five more to go. " Raphael said his smirk appearing, then nearly immediately being wiped from his face.

The man let out a short yell, gritting his teeth then beginning to laugh. " This the best you've got? I go through hell every day, you're not getting anywhere. " He said laughing gruffly, blood dripping out of his mouth now. " Next! " The man yelled, laughing heartily.

" I'm just going to end this here. " Raphael said as he weaved several more hand signs, kneeling for a clear shot. " Crescent Moon Blade. " Raphael said as his shadow formed into the shape of a crescent moon and launching at the man. The Blade collided directly with the man's waist line, cleaving his torso from the lower body that still remained held in place.

" Heh, I'm taking you with me! " The man said, still enough power left in his body to grab his lower half and throw himself at Raphael. He began to glow vibrant with chakra, he was entering the "Raging Spirit". " Go to hell! " The man Said laughing as he started to wrap his arms around Raphael.

" Shadow Armor! " Raphael said, making hand signs quickly his shadows wrapping around his body. Once the man's chakra had been exhausted and the life faded from his body Raphael stood, his shadows falling from his body, and some exposed portions of his body were horribly mangled, bones showing, skin hanging loosely, some bones were missing. " Heh, You were a fun opponent. " Raphael said, stumbling backward and falling to his knees. Raphael looked up into the stands and just before he lost consciousness and fell backward he saw two shinobi jump to his side, and retrieve him on a stretcher. " I won, right? That guy was a beast right up to the very end... I'm not so sure I got the good end of the bargain. " He said laughing.

Jutsu used:
Shadow Imitation
Shadow Neck Bind
Shadow Imitation Shuriken Technique
Shadow Sewing
Crescent Moon Blade