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 Posted: Sat Feb 26, 2005 8:48 pm
Rhapsody, Last Rhapsody
follow me into the grave scene where one body lies,
a girl of intelligent and many friends,
but only inside will u see her true nature under the lies,
she tore her frail body to shreds,
she chopped away her hair,
put gashes into her skin,
and slipped into the darkness of the shadows.
rhapsody, last rhapsody,
showing only of her true nature she seeps into a devastating remainance as a hollow shell.
a rhapsody of tears streams from the lifeless eyes and she dreams her last bit of happiness of her life.
everything was a lie and she found that she could not live a lie anymore.
rhapsody, last rhapsody,
to live an act ur whole life gave her little happiness,
so reaching into her soul she tore her light away,
and as she did so she watched her first to last
happiness speed past her and,
her heart bloomed into a rose then withered away the next second turning black.
rhapsody, last rhapsody,
from her eyes came her last rhapsody of tears and
from her lips escapes her motionless words of only-
rhapsody, last rhapsody.
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Posted: Wed Mar 02, 2005 9:20 pm
Hey DJ, spin that disk,
change the beat,
knock me right off of my feet.
Controle the pace,
right up in my face
now we take the risk.
Hey DJ, stomp the ground,
tramatize me with the tune
apart now but together soon.
Whisper melodies in my ear,
all you say sounds pure and clear,
I just wanted to be found.
((Depressing, or happy? o_o Just wondering how everyone else see's it))
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:16 am
Tyl3r-Kun (note: last line contains somethign not pg... but there was really no other way to say it...) After BurnThe piercing light, Dismembered smile, Cursed eyes. Yet all the while, Enchating Me, With her sweet breath. I Need not see, That her Heart left. I Need not worry, She is my fears. I need not be scared, I see her tears. Yet she is cruel, This pain Is Great. I feel human, I feel the Hate. I feel the torment, The slashing of her eyes. I See her lonesome, I hear her crys. I Feel nothing, Though I once did. I'm About to explode, From all my emotions hid. I Am betrayed, For i gave trust. I Am destroyed, Robbed of this gentil lust. I Am But a fool, I Pawn in this sickening game. How can you hurt me so, And towards yourself feel no shame. Forget our cruel past, It means Not a thing. Not even a knife, Can match the pain you bring. So I am blinded now, By the Shade of hope i once knew, Now remind me once again, Why the ******** I Still love You... That was really good! Really, really extrordinarily good! heart
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:19 am
DemonicAnthony Ignorance By Anthony Comella (Me! ^-^) Confused by what I see Wondering"How can this be" Look around, begin to wonder Thinking up thoughts that make me ponder The meaning of people and why they exist, Why beings like people are ignorantly in bliss? They make fun of you, and when you attack All of a sudden they're fast to retract And blame it on you, why are they here! Why can?t the bastards just disappear! They think they are great and can do no wrong They flaunt it around and sing their pride filled song. They need to be shone who they are Not the brightest shining star. Death and Decay will bring them down Roots will tie them to the ground Then they will be forced to see What they really are to me... Nothing but ignorant fools. Wonderful *claps*
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:23 am
Sesshoru I'll post the intro to my novel that I'm currently working on. I think it should count for something. Sesshoru She stood alone in a crowd of people. Her radiance shone unlike any other living thing. She was the most beautiful thing in the world, with an innocence that no one person could match. Her hair flowed like a ribbon blowing in the wind, and her smile warmed the soul of those who gazed upon it. This was how I saw her. I worshipped the ground she walked on, and even the air she breathed. I was just another one of those people that thought nothing could go wrong. But just when you become a true believer in that theory, everything seems to go wrong. The day shone almost as beautifully as the sight in front of me. She wore a plain dress with matching earrings; nothing a girl would really be proud to show off, but in my eyes, her stunning features had no comparison. A pair of short black cat ears protruded from the side of her head and an elegant tail stuck out from under her dress. Light patches of purple fur on her face hid her constant blushing, and complimented her deep blue eyes. Not to mention the essentials that no cat-girl should be left without; a set of claws and a pair of fangs. She was not only a girl of grace and beauty, but of wit and intelligence, and her positive outlook on the world made her all that more beautiful. I really should get back into a consistent habit of writing... i like it. ... call me dense, but are you writing about animal-people? Or using a metaphore?
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:24 am
loginbin3000 Yet again... another brill poem @ emo ^^ Well ive decided to give it a go. The edge.Hair swaying, Sweat dripping, Legs failing, Arms spread. Approach the edge, Look down one everyone, And for once in your life, Take the leap of faith. Glide through the air. Soar like an eagle. Fly like an Angel. Fall like a brick. Rate? Please no stealing. rate... 9/10! It was fantastic!
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:31 am
Sim_Jay -sigh- here goesI used to feel i had everything all figured out Now i just dont know The way you look at me Isnt how it used to be You confuse me Why cant we just go back Go back to how things used to be When you still looked at me in that way When you still cared When i knew what was going on But now i just dont know And really i just dont care Not about anything Not anything but him. Because you just dont care anymore And he does He cares more than you And i do too I tell him things Things i never told you Because you would never listen as he does And you just dont know Well, it sounds like a song, not a poem. But it's good, don't get me wrong.
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:35 am
loginbin3000 The pain, the torture i just cant take the pain... the horror of you turning me down [im sick of] you [im sick of] your life [im sick of] your hunger [im sick of] your existance [How come...] Everything you say reflects upon my life [How come...] You step on my dreams and hopes and not live your own [How come...] You make me a failure, everything ive ever lived for [How come...] YOU POINT THE GUN AT ME Meh... crap Nice! It's like a lil' song full of hate!
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:39 am
hazel_dreamer Under My Stars The stars, they speak, but only to me, "what a naughty girl", they say to me about you; time to come home, sweetie. Like a snake I chose you above the lowly rest, my fat little mouse come to my nest. Voices are all around as I put you in the ground; I'm sorry, you see, but you were boring me. With your blood on my red, red lips I'll find someone new to pass the time, don't worry, my sweet, you'll never be alone because your mommy dearest is coming home. Good work, though maybe you could add more detail. It's a little hazy, but i like it.
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 11:40 am
loginbin3000 The Picture. It says 1000 words... Or does it? Does it say blurry and fuzzy Or does it say Perfection, quality Pictures are like fingerprints, Each one is unique. No two are the same. A Picture is like a brain Memories are preserved And not forgotten. This i really like! Good job!
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Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2005 4:01 am
erm...but my story is PG-13!!! Grrr....I almost made it... *sigh*
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Posted: Tue Mar 08, 2005 6:53 am
um... i've noticed that on a lot of forums there are people saying they wish they could write. Don't get me wrong, i'm not trying to gloat or nothing, but i run a class for people interested in learning creative writing or who want to improve their own. I'm not saying i'm good, i just have a lot of learning problems and developed a system that works. The first class had ten in it, 2 of them teachers, and this second class seems to have attracteed some more attention. Um, if you'd like to join, just pm me. It's a great way to improve or start. Plus it's a fun class.
Thanks for reading.
Sorry if you don't like the post, i really don't mean to offend.
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Posted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 11:28 pm
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Posted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 11:36 pm
How cute.
I might post my story here soon, once Im done. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 11:38 pm
Penguwin How cute.
I might post my story here soon, once Im done. 3nodding
Me too me too!
I'm such a writer... ^^;
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