Crowfoot
This quest still needs quite alot of work, no offense.
She just emmits that "I'M PERFECT." Seriously. She's a super model that's nice, gives to charity, isn't anorexic? She has a children's series?
And maybe you could make the history a bit more descriptive? HOW was she spotted by the Agency, how did she get her dogs? Why did her boss give them to her? Did she go to college? What about when she was a child? Why did her parents divorce? Stuff like that.
And a bit more on the serum..
The doctors there aren't exactly the nicest, so if she kept talking about her dogs, they would pretty much choose like, a cat or something. Just to piss her off. So you have to find a new reason. I'm here to help, if you want. I haven't been here long, but you can AIM PhysicCrow. <3
Oh, and how she got to the Island. Why was she out on her yacht? How did it crash?
None of this is personal, just trying to help. <333
She just emmits that "I'M PERFECT." Seriously. She's a super model that's nice, gives to charity, isn't anorexic? She has a children's series?
And maybe you could make the history a bit more descriptive? HOW was she spotted by the Agency, how did she get her dogs? Why did her boss give them to her? Did she go to college? What about when she was a child? Why did her parents divorce? Stuff like that.
And a bit more on the serum..
The doctors there aren't exactly the nicest, so if she kept talking about her dogs, they would pretty much choose like, a cat or something. Just to piss her off. So you have to find a new reason. I'm here to help, if you want. I haven't been here long, but you can AIM PhysicCrow. <3
Oh, and how she got to the Island. Why was she out on her yacht? How did it crash?
None of this is personal, just trying to help. <333
Thanks!! And i dont take anything of this personal. I asked for help and input so if its given i wont take anything personal inless someone comes ini going "YOU SUCK!!! Thats crap and you shouldnt try you N00B!!!" Then i would take it personal and get mad. But i dont think anyone would do that here. So im not worried. And thanks again. When i get around to it again i will work all that out and fix it all. I'm just not that motivated to right now i have had a really REALLY bad day...But thanks that helped a lot. ^__^
