I believe I finished my person on the previous page ;w;
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2018 4:33 pm
Username: Blades252 Name: Luke Flament Nickname: Beau Lenoir Race: Half Elf Ethnicity: European (French) Gender: Male Orientation: Bisexual Alignment: Neutral Good Affinity: Water Age: 24 Birthday: September 4th Height: 5'8 Weapon: A dagger enchanted by his Father. If the dagger inflicts a wound then the blood will not clot and his opponent will run the risk of bleeding out. Magic: Illusion ❖ Light Show: Using his mana Luke can create a brilliant light show during his performances. RANK F ❖ Disguise: Using the power of illusions Luke is able to change his own features such as his hair or eye color and even how his face looks slightly so that he can roam around undetected usually. It takes some level of focus for him to maintain this disguise and if someone manages shock him enough or something along those lines then the disguise can be broken. RANK D ❖ Doppelganger: Luke can create an illusion of himself to confuse whomever he's trying to confuse. The illusion does not disrupt the area around it, makes no sound such as footsteps and obviously cannot interact with anything without being dispelled. Luke can create more than one. RANK C+ ❖ Projection: His only real form of "combat" Luke can create projections of different events and creatures from dragons, war torn battle fields, and even a tornado. However once again if any of these are touched then you can walk right through it. RANK C+
Relationships: ❖ NPC Manager ❖ TBD
Strengths: ✔ Singing voice ✔ Sneaking ✔ Easygoing
Weaknesses: ✘ Irritable ✘ A bit prissy ✘ Slow running speed
Likes: ✔ Singing ✔ Sweets ✔ Fans ✔ Putting on a good show
Dislikes: ✘ Getting dirty ✘ Not getting any free time ✘ His manager ✘ Sore throats
Personality: ❖ When he's onn stage and meeting fans Luke has a boisterous and bold personality! He's high energy and rather flirtatious to his fans, keeping the act up and really going all in for them. However behind the scenes he's actually rather reserved and enjoys any quiet time he can get to himself. He loves cuddling in a couch and reading fan mail, no matter how awkward some of them might be. He's usually pretty upbeat and likes putting on a show for the people since he always loves the look of joy that people have when he has a great show. He can be a bit snarky if someone decides to try him and he's rather witty with his comebacks. Luke is very strong willed and is not one to be dissuaded easily when he has his mind set to something.
History: ❖ Born to a rather traditional family of mages in Carmillion, Luke always stood out from his family due to a disinterest he had in magic and becoming a mage like the rest of them. Instead he had a passion for singing and putting on ornate performances for other people. His family didn't support him in his dreams and tried hard to push him onto the path that they had carved for him but he did not give up. Luke continued on the path that he wanted and despite his family disowning him for this he continued moving forward and eventually he was discovered by a talent agency who scooped him up and gave him everything he needed to succeed. Eventually however Luke also learnt that he had to push himself very hard to make it in show business. Luke's manager started by giving him a completely new stage name to work under, one that put more emphasis on his unique heritage than anything else. On top of that he was forced to become someone completely different on stage and when meeting with fans, needing to learn how to be suave and flirt. Another thing his manager did was capitalize on his status as a mage and advertised him as a mage without a knight and many from all over wanted to become Luke's knight. However that was where Luke drew the line and flat out refused to contract someone he didn't actually trust. So now Luke or as everyone else knows him as, Beau has total strangers desiring to become his knight.
Outfits: ❖ The outfit in the above picture ❖ His disguise
Items: ❖ Cell phone ❖ His dagger
Other: ❖ Luke has perfect pitch which means his voice can hit nearly any note perfectly, the only exception being very high notes. ❖ The only elf like feature that Luke inherited from his Mothers side were his golden eyes.
Hi! One more character and I'm just wondering if I did this one OK sweatdrop
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2018 8:14 pm
Username: xGREENCATx Name: Cat Lux Nickname: Cat Race: Fae Ethnicity: Caucasian Gender: Female Orientation: Heterosexual Alignment: Lawful Good Affinity: Spirit Age: 44 Birthday: October 10th Height: 5'5 Weapon:Dagger Magic: ❖School: Divination ❖Spells: ❖Spirits Blessing: With a small prayer to the spirits, Cat accesses the ability to heal minor wounds. Rank C+ ❖Mothers Barrier: The ability to form a small shield with both her hands, blocking damage and shielding her and anyone behind her for a short duration. Rank C+
Relationships: ❖ Step Son- Bastion Lux ❖ Husband ❖ Son ❖ Son ❖ Daughter ❖ Daughter
Strengths: ✔ Very Protective ✔ Great persuader ✔ Great with using her spells
Weaknesses: ✘ Very protective of family ✘ Not combat oriented ✘ Always trying to do the right thing, no matter what
Likes: ✔ Her Family ✔ Helping others ✔ Her high class ✔ Justice
Dislikes: ✘ Criminals ✘ Liars ✘ Threats towards her family ✘ Blood
Personality: ❖ Cat Lux is known for her big heart. She always makes sure that her family comes before herself, and anybody else. She has always made sure that her family had the better things in life, marrying into a good family known for being great knights, only to better the future of her children to come. Even when she saw Bastion as a baby in the gutters, she couldn't help but to take him home and raise him as her own, giving him the best things in life. She would spare her life knowing it would save her children's.
History: ❖ Cat Lux grew up in a better than average household, known for their high class and wealth, and their powerful abilities as mages. Sadly, Cat was the youngest of her children, and was born as an accident since her mother and father had agreed that they weren't going to have anymore children, and trained her older siblings already. Because of this, Cat was given a different role in her family- the healers role. Her mother taught her a few spells that would be beneficial, and also raised her to be an elegant, classy girl so that she would marry into another wealthy family. Her mother's planned worked, and Cat met her husband, a man apart of the Lux family, and shortly their families arranged for a wedding.
Many years passed, and because of how well known the Lux's were, they were very close to the royal family. Cat performed her duty as a wife and gave birth to 4 beautiful children, and allowed her husband to train her boys to become knights, and Cat trained her daughters to become mages. A few years passed, and her mother, father, and two older siblings went to war, and sadly died. She became the successor of her family and attained the inheritance which she used to put her own children into a better school. Another few years passed and thats when her and her husband were walking home from a night out, only to hear a few cries coming from the sewers. Her husband told her not to go investigate, but Cat couldn't resist. She wouldn't allow a baby to be left alone. She quickly ran and found the baby, and brought him home where they both decided to adopt him, and raise him as their own, even though he was just a human and she was a Fae.
Outfits: ❖ In the picture
Items: ❖ Shoulder purse that holds her money, and dagger ❖Wedding ring
I feel like I have a big profile post every time I log in xD Alright, alright, alright. Let's get to it!
killer-wolf-kun
Accepted. You're gucci. :3
DaMetaEX
Just a couple things I can see with the edit. It's just rankings, and those are easy: ❖ Evocation was the replacement for the elemental school. I still think the minor in Conjuration is necessary. ❖ Static Charge: Less of an S as S is essentially a "gamebreaking" rank. The description sounds more like a C. ❖ Railgun: B ❖ Blade and Wall: I think C ❖ Electric Heal I think also would be more accurately ranked at C.
Blades252
Thanks for the submission! Looks good. Only a few things I wanna mention: ❖ Light Show: Mana! Use that mana! Mages don't have powers, that's for Knights xD lol ❖ Projection: Also C+
Once that's all set, you know the drill! Just a note: France didn't really exist to people with magic capabilities until just recently. I would suggest having him be from Carmillion as that is pseudo-french ^^;
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2018 10:08 pm
Weeamoo
I feel like I have a big profile post every time I log in xD Alright, alright, alright. Let's get to it!
killer-wolf-kun
Accepted. You're gucci. :3
DaMetaEX
Just a couple things I can see with the edit. It's just rankings, and those are easy: ❖ Evocation was the replacement for the elemental school. I still think the minor in Conjuration is necessary. ❖ Static Charge: Less of an S as S is essentially a "gamebreaking" rank. The description sounds more like a C. ❖ Railgun: B ❖ Blade and Wall: I think C ❖ Electric Heal I think also would be more accurately ranked at C.
Blades252
Thanks for the submission! Looks good. Only a few things I wanna mention: ❖ Light Show: Mana! Use that mana! Mages don't have powers, that's for Knights xD lol ❖ Projection: Also C+
Once that's all set, you know the drill! Just a note: France didn't really exist to people with magic capabilities until just recently. I would suggest having him be from Carmillion as that is pseudo-french ^^;
❖Static charge C - Uses stored bio electricity to charge the air around her. She has lots of practice. Great for charging dead batteries, or shocking someone who is touching her.
❖Railgun B - Generates a strong electromagnetic field that captures a metal object holding it a localized magnetic field. the field is strong enough to begin heating up the metal. the magnetic field shifts allowing the user to launch a projectile at extremely high velocities.
❖Iron Sand blade C - This skill manipulates ferrus metal like iron that is within sand or from pulverized iron. These tiny metal paticles act like a super abbrasive blade able to cut through most common metals like warm butter.
❖Iron Sandstorm B - This skill manipulates ferrous metal like iron that is within sand or from pulverized iron. These tiny metal particles act like a super abrasive sandstorm makes it difficult to walk through and can cut weaker materials like fabric to shreds.
❖Iron Sand wall C - This skill manipulates ferrous metal like iron that is within sand or from pulverized iron. These tiny metal particles act like a wall preventing attacks from going past it. it will absorb all kinetic impacts dealt to the wall due to the loose particles that form it.
❖Electric heal C - Over time injuries are healed by the steady electricity applied to the injury. Halves natural healing time and boosts healing effects. Only works on Self.
Relationships: ❖ Dr. J.R. Williston *Deceased*
Strengths: ✔ Brave ✔ Curious ✔ Quick Recharge (from eating) ✔ Sharp Eyes (can see at night and through light cover)
Weaknesses: ✘ Scared of Lightning (when not in serious mode) ✘ Gets angered easily ✘ Curious (its both a good and bad thing)
Likes: ✔ Candy ✔ Cooked Tyrano meat ✔ A good Story ✔ Discovering new things ✔ Spa day.
Dislikes: ✘ Hates her "father" ✘ People picking on her ✘ Rainy Days ✘ People fondling her
Personality: ❖ Usually very energetic, can get a bit moody at times, But always try to enjoy the day for what it is.
History: ❖ Niraya was "born" in a lab. Test tube baby would be more accurate. Dr. J.R.Williston had created her in hopes to growing a test subject able to be used as a mold for a clone army. All of them wielding powerful magic at will.
At the age of 10 She learned of this truth when she found a clone of herself. In her fear of what she was seeing she accidently kills the clone. The Dr. had punished her for what she had done but putting her through extremly dangerious training. at the age of 18 she had enough when she had an opening she fired a full power railgun shot through the protective window and into the Dr.'s head. He died that day and she ensured no one would continue his research. She burned it all down and killed every clone she could find.
She leaves the Lab the only place she had ever known. She stumbles into the next town where she is picked up by a guild that respected Kitsunes. They treat her injuries and bring her back to good health from her week of walking from the lab. The Guild teaches her about being a mercenary to help out with various requests that come in to the guild. for the next 3 years she worked for them and gained the nickname Railgun for her signature attack, but she wanted more in her life and went on a journey to find what she was missing in her life.
Outfits: ❖ Every day outfit.
❖ Combat gear (summoned through a magic spell minus the bow)
Items: ❖ small sack of iron coins ❖
Other: ❖ [any other information not covered by the stuff above]
Alright! Big profile post for me! I think I'm all caught up meow.
Rush And Crush
I realize he's not done, but I wanted to bring things up before you had finished. You can't bribe me with attractive refs! Hnng- my heart TwT Alright, just a couple suggestions: You can totally bribe me with attractive refs ❖ Flame Rune: Given that this isn't wholly focused on damage, I would say that its description would make it either Conjuration or Abjuration. If you'd be up for adding one of those to your profile, I would suggest Conjuration given some other slight description things in his spells. Otherwise, I like the rune, but I'd suggest it just do damage as the whole if you'd like him to remain strictly Evocation. ❖ Flame Armor: Same as Flame Rune, I'd suggest adding Conjuration or Abjuration to his School [my suggestion leaning once again toward Conjuration]. Also, I think the rank for this would either be somewhere between B or A. You can choose. ❖ True Form: SO this can be declined, or this can be re-worked [and the latter totally isn't 'cause of the bribe]. The issue with this is that it sounds too much like an Ability a Knight could have while appearing not very much like magic. BUT we can fix it xD As higher-leveled spells/Abilities will usually end up being discussed with us, I'm gunna shoot you a PM about this one. A lot of the primordial fire manipulation spells are gunna flow into this, so I'll mention those then.
Yes, so I'll PM you once I get through all this.
killer-wolf-kun
As usual, just lemme know when this is all set. This thread has been moving really quickly lately^^;
Blades252
Accepted! Feel free to create your thread if you haven't already and begin posting!
Savania Shadowspawn
I think Zurie will be well-appreciated, if it's not too much of a problem for you T^T [I'm sorry. These things are weird.]
Yes! Double-schooling allows for all sorts of magic-mixing fun!
Once that's all set, though, you look good-to-go. Feel free to create your profile thread and begin posting. If you're looking for a Knight, you can also always post in the Pairings thread!
DragonMistress07
Thanks for the submission! Just a few things I wanna mention: ❖ Divine Heal: If it heals wounds and infections, then I don't think there's needs to be a specification about fire. Additionally, are these all wounds/infections? Surface wounds? How much mana does this take? It's hard to rank things high like A and above. The spell requires a little more description before that. ❖ Holy Prayer: This is really vague as well as feels more along the lines of Transmutation as a school, and taking up a third school might be a little much. If you were to somehow keep it, I would also suggest either separating it into several different spells for each Affinity and going from there or beginning with an all-encompassing descriptor. ❖ Aquarion Shield: Is Abjuration. These are mostly just magic school-related issues. For more information on magecraft and the schools of magic, feel free to check out the Lore and World Book.
how do you rank the spells ? i have no idea what you are taking about , sorry
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You need a list of each spell she can do and it's rank. For an explanation on magic, check out the magic post in Character and Profile Information. For help on ranking, the ranking post in the same thread can help.
EDIT: Sorry, I hadn't realized the spells had been added. Unfortunately, the spells listed don't fall in line with her chosen Magic School. Ice manipulation could fall under Transmutation, but it needs more explanation. Does she create the ice? Is it only already present ice that she can manipulate? These sorts of details will not only help choose the appropriate school but also the appropriate rank. Her second spell needs these same sorts of details: how long does the stop last? Is it in a single area? Can she touch others to keep them immune from the effects? Once again, this is not a divination spell. Given that her Affinity is Water, she shouldn't be able to cast any fire-based spells. For more information on magic and affinities, please read the Lore and World Book. Once again, please put the profile in the coding we provided.
You can't begin RPing until your character has been accepted. Please refer to my post above to make the appropriate edits.
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2018 10:53 am
Blades252
Rodger! Is it all good?
Yup! Go ahead and put him in your thread! If he's actively looking for a Knight, then I would suggest posting in the Pairings thread, but you're free to begin posting with him :3
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Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2018 11:07 am
DragonMistress07
Edited it. Hope it's better.
Looking good! The list has SHORTENED! xD
❖ Divine Heal: I can say for certain would have a more accurate ranking as B. ❖ Holy Prayer: I think you may have missed my request on this one? → This is really vague as well as feels more along the lines of Transmutation as a school, and taking up a third school might be a little much. If you were to somehow keep it, I would also suggest either separating it into several different spells for each Affinity and going from there or beginning with an all-encompassing descriptor.
Additionally, please repost your profile once you've made these edits.
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2018 11:13 am
xGREENCATx
Thanks for the submission! I think I only see one thing with your profile, and it's rather small:
❖ Spirit's Blessing: Healing spells I've been OK-ing with either Conjuration or Divination schools [it's kind of this grey area]. While I would prefer Conjuration, your description makes me think Divination. That being said, I'd simply suggest adding this to your Schools of Magic.
Once you've done that, though, you're free to put her in your thread and begin posting! If she's actively seeking out a Knight, then I would also suggest making a post and taking a look in the Pairings thread!
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Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2018 12:04 pm
stardust73
Yeah, all you gotta do is just copy all of the profile that I sent to you, and post it here. Then she reads it over.
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2018 4:12 pm
Username: Stardust73 Name: Jade Lotus Nickname: Green Eyes / Novice Mage / Ice Queen / Sgt. Lotus Race: Human Ethnicity: Caucasian Gender: Female Orientation: Heterosexual Alignment: Lawful Good Affinity: Water / Spirit Age: 18 Birthday: April 1st Height: 5 ft 7 in Weapon: Old Tome: A special book that she uses for casting spells, as she must use her voice to cast spells. It also has a place where its blank pages were cut in for the cards she uses for Divination magic. / European Claymore Magic: Primary School: Evocation ❖ Bufu Sword - The user summons a 3 feet length sword made of a large ice shard to be used in physical combat, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C - Rank) (1 Post Duration) ❖ Mabufu Dual Swords - The user summons two swords of the same length to use offensively, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C+ - Rank) (1 Post Duration) ❖ Bufula Halbert - The user summons a 6 feet Halbert to use offensively against opponents, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C+ - Rank) (1 post Duration) ❖ Mabufula Battle axe - The user summons a heavy two bladed battle axe that can be used offensively. (B - Rank) (1 Post Duration)
Sub school: Divination ❖ Glacier Wall - A thick wall made of Ice Magic of 10 feet in height and 6 feet in length that can be used defensively against oncoming attacks. (B - Rank) (2 Posts Duration) ❖ Aeon Rain - A healing spell made up of Water Magic. The user sends a glowing ball of water magic in the air over a selected person's (self infliction possible) and uses the purifying waters to heal the wounds of a badly hurt target. (B - Rank) (2 posts duration) ❖ Diamond Dust - A powerful summoning spell, in which the user summons a large cloud to rain powerful and heavy shards of ice to rain down from the skies. (S - Rank) (2 posts duration)
Relationships: ❖ Her adopted parents ❖ Her contracted knights ❖ Her pet kitten Snowball
Strengths: ✔ Jade is known to be very loyal and caring of loved ones and friends that she would give her all for them. ✔ Jade's kindness and compassion for both friends and enemies is enough to show mercy when even against defeated opponents. ✔ Jade has gone through military training when she was first in highschool, and was good with weapons and martial arts.
Weaknesses: ✘ Jade's loved ones and friends are her top priority in general, making them be the very reason why she would fight in general. ✘ Jade's emotion driven state will literally take over if one were to complement her, as she is somewhat naive, being where if one were to give her a gift, her entire opinion of said person would change. ✘ Jade is still somewhat new to the entire merging with Earth and Yainder, making her inexperienced when dealing with the many races from other worlds other than humans.
Dislikes: ✘ fights amoungst friends ✘ dishonest people ✘ Bloodshed ✘ Heights ✘ Being Weak/Useless
Personality: ❖ Despite what others may think of military personel, Jade Lotus is one of the sweetest people that you can ever encounter. She's also determined, aspiring and discreet, but in a way, they're lesser traits and tainted by behaviors of being difficult as well. Her trusting nature though, this is what she's pretty much known for. People often count on this and her flexibility whenever they need cheering up. She is always willing to listen and help in any way that she can, she can be trusted to keep a secret and she always has your back – so to speak. She forgives easily, but she never forgets. Jade also is a spontaneous flirt, using her charm to get herself out of most if not a lot of situations.
History: ❖ Growing up in the orphanage, Jade Lotus virtually had not known the feeling of having parents or a family. Having no friends, family, or anyone to speak to, Jade was alone most of the time. She would have a friend and someone to talk to from time to time, but they wouldn't stay for long and would even lose interest in her. There was a time in her childhood where she would then be adopted by a family and would actually have a life that would change for the better. Instead, she would be sent to a school which had it's share of bullies and very sketchy kids. It was a hastle being kept under the radar, but she made it through into middle school, before moving to Japan because of her adopted father's job. There, times were very strange having to deal with a whole new culture, especially some ridicule as a foreigner, yet she felt no ill will to others at all the entire time. One boy was brave enough to defend her from other kids, who would tease her for speaking Japanese a funny way or not much in general. He was nice to her, and they were friends for longer than just a few weeks. Jade liked having a real friend and would cherish every moment, which was a boost in her confidence. It was after the last year of middle school, that the boy had to leave, which would mean that Jade would be left alone. At the time, she needed to gain confidence in herself, and so for highschool, she attended a military academy, where she would train and study vigorously every day, granting her the position of Sergent after graduation. It was soon, that she came across a strange magic blue book the day that the worlds began to collide with eachother, creating new lands to form. Since then, different species people would begin to coexist in the new world, which unknowingly made Jade a Mage up for contract.
Outfits: ❖ Casual clothes ❖ School uiform ❖ Mythril armor ❖ Formal attire ❖ Night wear
Items: ❖ her teddy bear that she had from the orphange ❖ a gold pocket watch
Other: ❖ She has a pet cat named Snowball
Themes: ❖ Main Theme: warrior - disturbed ❖ Battle Theme: rainbow in the dark- dio ❖ Emotional Theme: diamond girl - seals and croft
Thanks for the submission! As per Rule 11 of the Rules for Roleplaying, please don't PM Crew Members regarding your profile status unless. It won't make me want to go faster. Anyway! I have a few things I'd like to mention:
❖ Coding! Do you know how to use the BBCoding on GaiaOnline? We have a specific code that we use for the profiles here so they all look nice and proper. It's what changes font, makes pictures appear, that sort of thing. Most RPs and RP Guilds have these. You can usually pick them up real easy in the a grey box. Ours our available in the Profile Skeletons thread. Here, I'll even help you out [click the Spoiler]:
[color=color][b]Username:[/b][/color] Stardust73 [color=color][b]Name:[/b][/color] Jade Lotus [color=color][b]Nickname:[/b][/color] Green Eyes / Novice Mage / Ice Queen / Sgt. Lotus [color=color][b]Race:[/b][/color] Human [color=color][b]Ethnicity:[/b][/color] Caucasian [color=color][b]Gender:[/b][/color] Female [color=color][b]Orientation:[/b][/color] Heterosexual [color=color][b]Alignment:[/b][/color] Chaotic Law [color=color][b]Affinity:[/b][/color] Water / Spirit [color=color][b]Age:[/b][/color] 18 [color=color][b]Birthday:[/b][/color] April 1st [color=color][b]Height:[/b][/color] 5 ft 7 in [color=color][b]Weapon:[/b][/color] Old Tome: A special book that she uses for casting spells, as she must use her voice to cast spells. It also has a place where its blank pages were cut in for the cards she uses for Divination magic. / European Claymore [color=color][b]Magic:[/b][/color] Primary School: Evocation ❖ Bufu Sword - The user summons a 3 feet length sword made of a large ice shard to be used in physical combat, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C - Rank) (1 Post Duration) ❖ Mabufu Dual Swords - The user summons two swords of the same length to use offensively, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C+ - Rank) (1 Post Duration) ❖ Bufula Halbert - The user summons a 6 feet Halbert to use offensively against opponents, incorporating Ice damage to the foes. (C+ - Rank) (1 post Duration) ❖ Mabufula Battle axe - The user summons a heavy two bladed battle axe that can be used offensively. (B - Rank) (1 Post Duration)
Sub school: Divination ❖ Glacier Wall - A thick wall made of Ice Magic of 10 feet in height and 6 feet in length that can be used defensively against oncoming attacks. (B - Rank) (2 Posts Duration) ❖ Aeon Rain - A healing spell made up of Water Magic. The user sends a glowing ball of water magic in the air over a selected person's (self infliction possible) and uses the purifying waters to heal the wounds of a badly hurt target. (B - Rank) (2 posts duration) ❖ Diamond Dust - A powerful summoning spell, in which the user summons a large cloud to rain powerful and heavy shards of ice to rain down from the skies. (S - Rank) (2 posts duration)
[color=color][b]Relationships:[/b][/color] ❖ Her adopted parents ❖ Her contracted knights ❖ Her pet kitten Snowball
[color=color][b]Strengths:[/b][/color] ✔ Jade is known to be very loyal and caring of loved ones and friends that she would give her all for them. ✔ Jade's kindness and compassion for both friends and enemies is enough to show mercy when even against defeated opponents. ✔ Jade has gone through military training when she was first in highschool, and was good with weapons and martial arts.
[color=color][b]Weaknesses:[/b][/color] ✘ Jade's loved ones and friends are her top priority in general, making them be the very reason why she would fight in general. ✘ Jade's emotion driven state will literally take over if one were to complement her, as she is somewhat naive, being where if one were to give her a gift, her entire opinion of said person would change. ✘ Jade is still somewhat new to the entire merging with Earth and Yainder, making her inexperienced when dealing with the many races from other worlds other than humans.
[color=color][b]Dislikes:[/b][/color] ✘ fights amoungst friends ✘ dishonest people ✘ Bloodshed ✘ Heights ✘ Being Weak/Useless
[color=color][b]Personality:[/b][/color] ❖ Despite what others may think of military personel, Jade Lotus is one of the sweetest people that you can ever encounter. She's also determined, aspiring and discreet, but in a way, they're lesser traits and tainted by behaviors of being difficult as well. Her trusting nature though, this is what she's pretty much known for. People often count on this and her flexibility whenever they need cheering up. She is always willing to listen and help in any way that she can, she can be trusted to keep a secret and she always has your back – so to speak. She forgives easily, but she never forgets. Jade also is a spontaneous flirt, using her charm to get herself out of most if not a lot of situations.
[color=color][b]History:[/b][/color] ❖ Growing up in the orphanage, Jade Lotus virtually had not known the feeling of having parents or a family. Having no friends, family, or anyone to speak to, Jade was alone most of the time. She would have a friend and someone to talk to from time to time, but they wouldn't stay for long and would even lose interest in her. There was a time in her childhood where she would then be adopted by a family and would actually have a life that would change for the better. Instead, she would be sent to a school which had it's share of bullies and very sketchy kids. It was a hastle being kept under the radar, but she made it through into middle school, before moving to Japan because of her adopted father's job. There, times were very strange having to deal with a whole new culture, especially some ridicule as a foreigner, yet she felt no ill will to others at all the entire time. One boy was brave enough to defend her from other kids, who would tease her for speaking Japanese a funny way or not much in general. He was nice to her, and they were friends for longer than just a few weeks. Jade liked having a real friend and would cherish every moment, which was a boost in her confidence. It was after the last year of middle school, that the boy had to leave, which would mean that Jade would be left alone. At the time, she needed to gain confidence in herself, and so for highschool, she attended a military academy, where she would train and study vigorously every day, granting her the position of Sergent after graduation. It was soon, that she came across a strange magic blue book the day that the worlds began to collide with eachother, creating new lands to form. Since then, different species people would begin to coexist in the new world, which unknowingly made Jade a Mage up for contract.
[color=color][b]Outfits:[/b][/color] ❖ Casual clothes ❖ School uiform ❖ Mythril armor ❖ Formal attire ❖ Night wear
[color=color][b]Items:[/b][/color] ❖ her teddy bear that she had from the orphange ❖ a gold pocket watch
[color=color][b]Other:[/b][/color] ❖ ❖ She has a pet cat named Snowball
[color=color][b]Themes:[/b][/color] ❖ [b]Main Theme:[/b] warrior - disturbed ❖ [b]Battle Theme:[/b] rainbow in the dark- dio ❖ [b] Emotional Theme:[/b] diamond girl - seals and croft [/size]
This gray box above is your previously submitted profile in the proper coding! huzzah! Unfortunately, I can't make the following edits for you as being able to make a profile that can be accepted into the world is your responsibility~ ❖ Alignment: Sorry but Chaotic Law isn't a valid alignment. In fact, it's contradictory. Here are the available alignments: - Lawful Good - Lawful Neutral - Lawful Evil - Neutral Good - True Neutral - Neutral Evil - Chaotic Good - Chaotic Neutral - Chaotic Evil Please choose one of these options as your character's alignment. ❖ Magic: There are a few comments/edits/suggestions that I'd like to make for your spells, so I'm just going to list them as so: - Evocation: Given that all of your listed Evocation spells either summon/create weapons to be used, I think a good school to replace Evocation with would be Conjuration. Additionally, there are some ranking edits I'd like to suggest → Bufu Sword and Bufula Halbert: D | Mabufu Dual Swords and Mabufula Battle axe: C - Divination: Glacier Wall sounds more like Abjuration but could be done with Conjuration. Aeon Rain could either go Divination or Conjuration, Diamond Dust would be Evocation, I think. Long story short, I think she should Major in Conjuration and minor in Evocation. Ranking suggestions → Glacier Wall and Aeon Rain: C | Diamond Dust: ❖ Something to Keep in Mind: I realize that combat is one of her listed Strengths, but please do be aware that Knights are generally more optimal at combat than magi. Thus the requirement for the Mage-Knight system. ❖ Weaknesses/History: Earth and Terra have only been merged for a few months, and seeing how magic is not really a prevalent force on Earth quite yet, it isn't possible for there to be any magi from Earth. That being said, magic and magecraft takes months/years to learn, so if you'd like to have her be at her current skill level, I would suggest having her be from Terra rather than Earth.
Thanks so much! Can't wait to hear back! Please repost her here with the provided coding once you've made the suggested edits.
DaMetaEX
Last thing [promise]! Johto mentioned it to me, and I kinda missed it initially. That's my bad^^; It's a real easy fix, so once that's all set, you can put the new profile in your thread and should be all gucci *thumbsup*
❖ Railgun: Rather than this spell altering the gravitation of an object. While I'm a little loose on the Affinity required for this, I don't think it's Fire. I'd suggest rewording the spell to something about the positive and negative charges on the atoms of a metal object or the electromagnetism of a metal object.
Like I said, it's little, so once you've made that edit, you're free to update her thread and won't have to repost her or anything [just don't forget ;3]
Makako-ma
Hey there! Did you miss my reply to your profile submission? o.o If so, here are my suggestions:
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Thanks for the resubmit! Since it's been so long, I'm gunna be treating it like a new profile, if that's okay. There are a few things I'd like to mention/ask:
❖ Please put the profile in the coding we provide in Profile Skeletons. ❖ Mages accessing their mana gets rid of a characters supernatural properties that would fall under Knight Abilities. As such, Acquired Taste and Spell Conversion can both be turned into spells that she has to cast, but they shouldn't be things she can naturally do. ❖ Dreamscape: Dreams fall under another plane, therefore, I'd suggest refraining from stating that she enters the dreams of another. Planar travel does not fall under Enchantment or Abjuration. I would suggest having it as to where she either implants an image of themselves into the dream via enchantment or simply use enchantment to control a sleeping person. The extra step isn't necessary. I'd also suggest having a separate spell for the implanting of thoughts. Spells are linear and generally tend to do one thing, maybe two as a cause and effect kind of thing. This, however, sounds like two separate things, so I'd make two different spells. ❖ Mirror Travel: This, I think, falls under our new Magic School, Transmutation. If this is something you'd like to add to your profile, then great! If not, I'd suggest altering this one to adhere more to her current schools. ❖ Draining Mist Form: Also fits better in transmutation. ❖ Dark Bond: What sort of "something" to another's magic does this imply? Point Draw: Everything in this one is fine save for the pseudo-teleportation. That would fall more accurately under the new school Transmutation or even Conjuration. ❖ Draining Magic Barrier: Does too many things. If you'd like to make one spell for a barrier that does magic absorption and another that's able to imprison others, that would be my best suggestion. Strengths: By accessing her mana pools, she'd no longer be able to do the supernatural things of her race. Therefore, the succubus thing isn't really a viable option unless you'd instead like to make her a Knight. She, of course, doesn't lose any physical properties: horns, wings, etc... As far as seduction and suggestion goes, I'd suggestion getting rid of "Being exposed to her counts as being exposed to her magics, the longer she is around you the stronger her spells will be against you." <<< that Essence Leech is fine if she's targeted. ❖History: I just have some questions... So she's looking for someone that fits the description for which the detective asked? Also, if its inferring that there were any amount of Witches who were willing to be amiable with any sort of person, most all were rampaging magic bombs. They wouldn't involve anyone in their plot since their goal was to straight-up destroy the world. The effects of the Moment were an accident. A very happy, a very everyone survives accident but one all the same. It's also only been a few months, so if she was 112 just before, then unless her birthday rolled around in that time, it's likely she's the same age.
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