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 Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:36 am
Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine He looks okay to me. It appears that you did make all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of you. He is accepted. The only problem is that I can't add him to a dorm, one of the other mods will have to do that later YAY~ < 3 His character, not yours. I am not sure about yours
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:37 am
Ayame Sunshine Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine He looks okay to me. It appears that you did make all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of you. He is accepted. The only problem is that I can't add him to a dorm, one of the other mods will have to do that later YAY~ < 3 His character, not yours. I am not sure about yours - Facedesks - Yay for him? ; ~ ; What do I have to fix :U
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:38 am
Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine He looks okay to me. It appears that you did make all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of you. He is accepted. The only problem is that I can't add him to a dorm, one of the other mods will have to do that later YAY~ < 3 His character, not yours. I am not sure about yours - Facedesks - Yay for him? ; ~ ; What do I have to fix :U I don't know, im going to have a different mod take a look at it. I only accepted Damien's because he made all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of him.
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:39 am
Ayame Sunshine Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine Teacup Kittens Ayame Sunshine He looks okay to me. It appears that you did make all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of you. He is accepted. The only problem is that I can't add him to a dorm, one of the other mods will have to do that later YAY~ < 3 His character, not yours. I am not sure about yours - Facedesks - Yay for him? ; ~ ; What do I have to fix :U I don't know, im going to have a different mod take a look at it. I only accepted Damien's because he made all of the necessary changes that Berry asked of him. I see, I see - nod nod - Ima go play with Mary. 8D My little angel. > 3 <
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:21 am
I'm sorry about this even though a crew member has accepted your character, but there are some changes that I want you to make and some other things that I want you to explain to me. There are some things that contradict each other. You said in his personality section: "He likes to torture people for the fun of it." Not to mention you even mentioned torture in his likes. Then for his flaws you said: "His second flaw is that he can feel some feeling for those hurt or injured which makes his power lessen." I'm pretty sure that torturing people will hurt him too if that's the case. Why would he do something like that if it also hurts him too? Is he some kind of uber masochist? If that's the case, I guess that can also count as a flaw. And I still think you need to change the flaws. I know berry said that that the incline to torture people can be a flaw, but when you think about it, he'll never use it because the other RPers will get upset if your character starts torturing their character. In fact, there are some other characters out there that like to torture people but some of them don't even have it listed as a flaw. Just say he's a sadist if he enjoys torturing people. "Sadist" is a valid flaw in Rosentale. Yes, weaknesses can be flaws, but we'll only count one weakness as a flaw. The rest has to be personality based flaws. His weakness to light. It doesn't kill him but weakens him. So what? He's weakened. It won't affect his interaction with other characters unless you say that when he is weakened, he gets grouchy and it makes it difficult for people to even talk to him. But be careful when you have a character that won't socialize since most characters will not approach another first usually, especially if they're already hanging out with friends. Check Character Flaws - Doing it right if you still can't think of any ideas.
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:29 am
He can't have complete control of ice. There has to be some limitations. I know he's supposed to be some kind of ice god, but that's just way to overpowered. Why is a god hanging out at Rosentale anyways? Rosentale will accept him either way, but you need to think about the character and their pride and think: "Will he attend this private high school?" I mean, it looks like he's coming here willingly since the bio doesn't tell us why he's here or if he's forced to be here. Ice and wind are not the same thing. And summoning things is just way to vague. What does he summon? Cake? You need to be more specific. And remember, short tempered people are people who get MAD EASILY. More than a normal person, okay? So I want to see that when you RP with him. Alright. Thanks! ^^
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:34 am
SweetHotChocoIate He can't have complete control of ice. There has to be some limitations. I know he's supposed to be some kind of ice god, but that's just way to overpowered. Why is a god hanging out at Rosentale anyways? Rosentale will accept him either way, but you need to think about the character and their pride and think: "Will he attend this private high school?" I mean, it looks like he's coming here willingly since the bio doesn't tell us why he's here or if he's forced to be here. Ice and wind are not the same thing. And summoning things is just way to vague. What does he summon? Cake? You need to be more specific. And remember, short tempered people are people who get MAD EASILY. More than a normal person, okay? So I want to see that when you RP with him. Alright. Thanks! ^^ Kk! I'll go fix him surprised
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:40 am
Teacup Kittens SweetHotChocoIate He can't have complete control of ice. There has to be some limitations. I know he's supposed to be some kind of ice god, but that's just way to overpowered. Why is a god hanging out at Rosentale anyways? Rosentale will accept him either way, but you need to think about the character and their pride and think: "Will he attend this private high school?" I mean, it looks like he's coming here willingly since the bio doesn't tell us why he's here or if he's forced to be here. Ice and wind are not the same thing. And summoning things is just way to vague. What does he summon? Cake? You need to be more specific. And remember, short tempered people are people who get MAD EASILY. More than a normal person, okay? So I want to see that when you RP with him. Alright. Thanks! ^^ Kk! I'll go fix him surprised I made him into a demi-god, somone who just found out he was a god. He will not be fully in controll of his powers. And I fixed it, he summons demons. And I changed it, hes not going to be short tempered, thats my other character. I wan't kuro to be rude yet calm.
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:49 am
Teacup Kittens Teacup Kittens SweetHotChocoIate He can't have complete control of ice. There has to be some limitations. I know he's supposed to be some kind of ice god, but that's just way to overpowered. Why is a god hanging out at Rosentale anyways? Rosentale will accept him either way, but you need to think about the character and their pride and think: "Will he attend this private high school?" I mean, it looks like he's coming here willingly since the bio doesn't tell us why he's here or if he's forced to be here. Ice and wind are not the same thing. And summoning things is just way to vague. What does he summon? Cake? You need to be more specific. And remember, short tempered people are people who get MAD EASILY. More than a normal person, okay? So I want to see that when you RP with him. Alright. Thanks! ^^ Kk! I'll go fix him surprised I made him into a demi-god, somone who just found out he was a god. He will not be fully in controll of his powers. And I fixed it, he summons demons. And I changed it, hes not going to be short tempered, thats my other character. I wan't kuro to be rude yet calm. If the demons he summons are powerful, there should be some limitations to when he can summon. Also, use that power wisely. Teachers will hate him (and he can possibly get some severe consequences) if he summons a demon at school or during class. It will startle the other students too. I guess the only appropriate place to summon would be at the Training Grounds. Thanks for making the changes. Kuro is accepted. He'll be staying in the malachite dorm.
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:51 am
SweetHotChocoIate I'm sorry about this even though a crew member has accepted your character, but there are some changes that I want you to make and some other things that I want you to explain to me. There are some things that contradict each other. You said in his personality section: "He likes to torture people for the fun of it." Not to mention you even mentioned torture in his likes. Then for his flaws you said: "His second flaw is that he can feel some feeling for those hurt or injured which makes his power lessen." I'm pretty sure that torturing people will hurt him too if that's the case. Why would he do something like that if it also hurts him too? Is he some kind of uber masochist? If that's the case, I guess that can also count as a flaw. And I still think you need to change the flaws. I know berry said that that the incline to torture people can be a flaw, but when you think about it, he'll never use it because the other RPers will get upset if your character starts torturing their character. In fact, there are some other characters out there that like to torture people but some of them don't even have it listed as a flaw. Just say he's a sadist if he enjoys torturing people. "Sadist" is a valid flaw in Rosentale. Yes, weaknesses can be flaws, but we'll only count one weakness as a flaw. The rest has to be personality based flaws. His weakness to light. It doesn't kill him but weakens him. So what? He's weakened. It won't affect his interaction with other characters unless you say that when he is weakened, he gets grouchy and it makes it difficult for people to even talk to him. But be careful when you have a character that won't socialize since most characters will not approach another first usually, especially if they're already hanging out with friends. Check Character Flaws - Doing it right if you still can't think of any ideas. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yes when he is in the light he becomes Grouchy and people care barly talk to him when he is in that kind of mood. He will still talk but it wont be like when he is complete darkness. Their he talks better and with more authority then if he was in the light. I changed one of his flaws to Sadist and took out the part where he feels emotion for those he hurts. I replaced that with sadist.
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:56 am
Lord Damien1 SweetHotChocoIate I'm sorry about this even though a crew member has accepted your character, but there are some changes that I want you to make and some other things that I want you to explain to me. There are some things that contradict each other. You said in his personality section: "He likes to torture people for the fun of it." Not to mention you even mentioned torture in his likes. Then for his flaws you said: "His second flaw is that he can feel some feeling for those hurt or injured which makes his power lessen." I'm pretty sure that torturing people will hurt him too if that's the case. Why would he do something like that if it also hurts him too? Is he some kind of uber masochist? If that's the case, I guess that can also count as a flaw. And I still think you need to change the flaws. I know berry said that that the incline to torture people can be a flaw, but when you think about it, he'll never use it because the other RPers will get upset if your character starts torturing their character. In fact, there are some other characters out there that like to torture people but some of them don't even have it listed as a flaw. Just say he's a sadist if he enjoys torturing people. "Sadist" is a valid flaw in Rosentale. Yes, weaknesses can be flaws, but we'll only count one weakness as a flaw. The rest has to be personality based flaws. His weakness to light. It doesn't kill him but weakens him. So what? He's weakened. It won't affect his interaction with other characters unless you say that when he is weakened, he gets grouchy and it makes it difficult for people to even talk to him. But be careful when you have a character that won't socialize since most characters will not approach another first usually, especially if they're already hanging out with friends. Check Character Flaws - Doing it right if you still can't think of any ideas. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yes when he is in the light he becomes Grouchy and people care barly talk to him when he is in that kind of mood. He will still talk but it wont be like when he is complete darkness. Their he talks better and with more authority then if he was in the light. I changed one of his flaws to Sadist and took out the part where he feels emotion for those he hurts. I replaced that with sadist. You need one more flaw. Torturing people falls under sadism. If he's a sadist, then it's given that he likes torturing people. So you need to just merge the major flaw and sadism together. So just add one more valid flaw, and I'll give him a dorm.
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 12:02 pm
SweetHotChocoIate Lord Damien1 SweetHotChocoIate I'm sorry about this even though a crew member has accepted your character, but there are some changes that I want you to make and some other things that I want you to explain to me. There are some things that contradict each other. You said in his personality section: "He likes to torture people for the fun of it." Not to mention you even mentioned torture in his likes. Then for his flaws you said: "His second flaw is that he can feel some feeling for those hurt or injured which makes his power lessen." I'm pretty sure that torturing people will hurt him too if that's the case. Why would he do something like that if it also hurts him too? Is he some kind of uber masochist? If that's the case, I guess that can also count as a flaw. And I still think you need to change the flaws. I know berry said that that the incline to torture people can be a flaw, but when you think about it, he'll never use it because the other RPers will get upset if your character starts torturing their character. In fact, there are some other characters out there that like to torture people but some of them don't even have it listed as a flaw. Just say he's a sadist if he enjoys torturing people. "Sadist" is a valid flaw in Rosentale. Yes, weaknesses can be flaws, but we'll only count one weakness as a flaw. The rest has to be personality based flaws. His weakness to light. It doesn't kill him but weakens him. So what? He's weakened. It won't affect his interaction with other characters unless you say that when he is weakened, he gets grouchy and it makes it difficult for people to even talk to him. But be careful when you have a character that won't socialize since most characters will not approach another first usually, especially if they're already hanging out with friends. Check Character Flaws - Doing it right if you still can't think of any ideas. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yes when he is in the light he becomes Grouchy and people care barly talk to him when he is in that kind of mood. He will still talk but it wont be like when he is complete darkness. Their he talks better and with more authority then if he was in the light. I changed one of his flaws to Sadist and took out the part where he feels emotion for those he hurts. I replaced that with sadist. You need one more flaw. Torturing people falls under sadism. If he's a sadist, then it's given that he likes torturing people. So you need to just merge the major flaw and sadism together. So just add one more valid flaw, and I'll give him a dorm. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Alright I said he was Reclusive and likes to be alone. Yes although he is a Sadist and likes to inflict pain on others. He would rather be alone and way from others most of the time Is this good ?
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 12:04 pm
Lord Damien1 SweetHotChocoIate Lord Damien1 SweetHotChocoIate I'm sorry about this even though a crew member has accepted your character, but there are some changes that I want you to make and some other things that I want you to explain to me. There are some things that contradict each other. You said in his personality section: "He likes to torture people for the fun of it." Not to mention you even mentioned torture in his likes. Then for his flaws you said: "His second flaw is that he can feel some feeling for those hurt or injured which makes his power lessen." I'm pretty sure that torturing people will hurt him too if that's the case. Why would he do something like that if it also hurts him too? Is he some kind of uber masochist? If that's the case, I guess that can also count as a flaw. And I still think you need to change the flaws. I know berry said that that the incline to torture people can be a flaw, but when you think about it, he'll never use it because the other RPers will get upset if your character starts torturing their character. In fact, there are some other characters out there that like to torture people but some of them don't even have it listed as a flaw. Just say he's a sadist if he enjoys torturing people. "Sadist" is a valid flaw in Rosentale. Yes, weaknesses can be flaws, but we'll only count one weakness as a flaw. The rest has to be personality based flaws. His weakness to light. It doesn't kill him but weakens him. So what? He's weakened. It won't affect his interaction with other characters unless you say that when he is weakened, he gets grouchy and it makes it difficult for people to even talk to him. But be careful when you have a character that won't socialize since most characters will not approach another first usually, especially if they're already hanging out with friends. Check Character Flaws - Doing it right if you still can't think of any ideas. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yes when he is in the light he becomes Grouchy and people care barly talk to him when he is in that kind of mood. He will still talk but it wont be like when he is complete darkness. Their he talks better and with more authority then if he was in the light. I changed one of his flaws to Sadist and took out the part where he feels emotion for those he hurts. I replaced that with sadist. You need one more flaw. Torturing people falls under sadism. If he's a sadist, then it's given that he likes torturing people. So you need to just merge the major flaw and sadism together. So just add one more valid flaw, and I'll give him a dorm. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Alright I said he was Reclusive and likes to be alone. Yes although he is a Sadist and likes to inflict pain on others. He would rather be alone and way from others most of the time Is this good ? Nice job! He'll be staying in the Malachite Dorm!
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 12:25 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Zavia Firstra
Species: Witch
Age: Physically 17, Mentally ???
Gender: Female
Appearance description: Her dress does not have those curly things off the side with the fire.
Personality: She is very quiet, but inside her mind there is so many things going on, preventing her to even get it out of the way to think of a response. She hides it up by putting on her application, clearly stating that she is mute, however she does speak very rarely in a hushed tone. She isn't goth, as she might look. She usually likes hanging out in places where it seems to be abandoned, without anybody there. She is mostly described as anti-social by most people, yet she just really wants to make friends.
Bio: She was raised by very caring parents and she was very cheerful when she was younger, always smiling and being optimistic, but then one day she awoke in a hospital, next to her mother. She was told that her father came home late from the casino, drunk and angry. He was in an asylum. Her mother looked over to her and closed her eyes, but Zavia could only think to say that she's sorry. She said it over and over, that she's sorry until she heard a long beep. It was all her fault, she told herself. She could never trust anyone if this is how it would end up. She was so, so sorry, until her words faded into whispers, them mumbles, and she spoke no more.
Skills and Abilities: She's able to stop time, but only for one minute (her time) , and it takes away a lot of her energy, making her unable to think straight. She uses it very rarely because of this.
Character Flaws: She's a quick-thinking person who easily jumps to conclusions without considering all factors, making mistakes at every turn. She also has trouble admitting to herself that she is wrong, thus being very stubborn at times. Zavia is also very paranoid ever since the hospital visit, unable to go alone with somebody and thinking that everybody is out to get her. She is also very prone to skin problems such as acne and sunburns.
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
Status: Single
Likes:
- Spicy things
- Isolation
- Dreams
- Magic
Dislikes:
- Sweets
- Closed-in spaces
- People who talk too much
Extra Information: She is able to play the flute.
((I hope the image works!!))
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SweetHotChocoIate Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 12:38 pm
First there are a few changes I want you to make. Her ability to manipulate people's minds to believe her lies is not going to work. As much as possible, don't use abilities that will control what other people's characters think or do. That power can be easily abused and can cause some unhappy people. I'd rather not have to deal with it. Please pick something else. Her flaws won't work. Anti-social and rudeness can work as flaws. But not being athletic won't work. There are characters in the school who are not athletic and the don't even have it listed as a flaw. Not being able to dance also cannot be considered a flaw. The majority of the characters in the guild probably can't dance either. So you just need one more flaw. It's okay to have trouble at this area since a lot of other people have a hard time getting a character accepted due to flaws. So one of our crew members graciously made this thread for your convenience. Feel free to look at it if you need help with your last flaw: Character Flaws - Doing it right
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