After a week or two of nothing, Pidgie has finally resumed doing something!
Updates:
- Christina has a new personality. - Updated the form to include hairstyle, markings, height, fashion...etc. - Provided tons of links to outfit ideas.
Let the critiques begin! (Again) 8D!
Posted: Thu Jan 10, 2013 7:32 pm
Another updaaaaate! <3
While I liked Christina's concept and was actively seeking critiques on her, I couldn't help but feel that I wasn't totally enamored with both her and her guardian. She wasn't exactly what I was looking for, and to be honest, I had begun to hate Alistair Hendrix's face and poor guardian concept. -Face palms for herself- I have poor taste in men. -shot-
I've decided to revert back to my original idea, which was a male garnet dust. However, instead of him being the scholarly, shy type I had previously wanted, I've given him a new personality and a fresh face! Reggie's concept will be so much more fun to work with, even if I did like Christina's. I've made a thread for her in my own personal guild for safe keeping. She'll probably pop up again after Reggie has his fun! <3
As for the new guardian, Alistair will be ditched for Garrick Brambleclove! He's a surly, uncooperative middle aged teacher with a rough sense of humor, which I feel will be much more fun and easier for me to play. (I love playing characters that curse and are sarcastic! Don't judge me! >3) Plus, he's more likely to get along with Reggie, who will be rather playful and sarcastic himself.
I can't wait to finish this thread with my new quest and open it up to all of you again! I look forward to your feedback and critiques! 'Till that time comes... -Hangs a sign upon the thread-
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Posted: Fri Jan 11, 2013 9:58 pm
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Renovation over! Time for critiques! 8D Lay 'em on me, duuuudes! >3
Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2013 6:21 am
since Garrick is low maintenance and Reggie a brat, I'd like to see examples or a general overview of how they interact with each other? And of how Reggie would interact with the other four kids.
I'm a little concerned about the sheer volume of people living with him. Instead of signing up to play 2, you'd be 12. Of course, it's a personal misgiving, so if you think you can do it effectively, go for it xD
Overall, I like Garrick a lot. :3
I might have missed this, but how/where does Reggie get his garnet jewelry? Garnet can get pretty pricey and the Brambleclove family doesn't seem the type to spend their hard earned extra money on jewelry rather than put it back into the land.
Reggie's color-changing trait... in his personality, it says Reggie likes to be in the sun. Wouldn't all of his garnets just turn green within a relatively short time? I would suggest making this noon-permanent; the garnets could change back to red when out of the sun. For his abrasive power, I'm wondering if it might be better to have the gems in his palms instead of the back of his hand? I tried to imagine him sanding something with the back of his hand and it just looked awkwardly funny xD;;
Other than that, you've got a good personality going on, though I'm a little concerned about his activeness coupled with his super long hair. Matted rats nest everyday D8
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2013 11:04 am
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since Garrick is low maintenance and Reggie a brat, I'd like to see examples or a general overview of how they interact with each other? And of how Reggie would interact with the other four kids.
I'm a little concerned about the sheer volume of people living with him. Instead of signing up to play 2, you'd be 12. Of course, it's a personal misgiving, so if you think you can do it effectively, go for it xD
Overall, I like Garrick a lot. :3
I might have missed this, but how/where does Reggie get his garnet jewelry? Garnet can get pretty pricey and the Brambleclove family doesn't seem the type to spend their hard earned extra money on jewelry rather than put it back into the land.
Reggie's color-changing trait... in his personality, it says Reggie likes to be in the sun. Wouldn't all of his garnets just turn green within a relatively short time? I would suggest making this noon-permanent; the garnets could change back to red when out of the sun. For his abrasive power, I'm wondering if it might be better to have the gems in his palms instead of the back of his hand? I tried to imagine him sanding something with the back of his hand and it just looked awkwardly funny xD;;
Other than that, you've got a good personality going on, though I'm a little concerned about his activeness coupled with his super long hair. Matted rats nest everyday D8
I plan on writing a solo or two to demonstrate the family dynamic! <3
The uncle, aunt and cousins (Roger, Dolly, Oswald, Willie and Beatrix) all live on a separate plot of land, but they come over from time to time, so they'll be played less than others. Reggie will interact with Garrick, Johnathan, Natalie Rose and Piper for the most part. Maisie is staying with her maternal grandmother right now and only comes home on holidays or weekends when she has free time, so she won't be present all the time either. The pets will be present though, which will be fun. XD
I'm glad you like him, too! He's going to be fun!
I might change that to red stone jewelry, but Garrick makes a good amount while working as a tutor. Another idea is that the jewelry belonged to Daisy and Reggie was given them as a "welcoming" present. :3
- Pyrope (Red. Some varieties are very dark, almost black, while others can take tones of purple. Some chromium-rich pyropes are thermochromic, becoming green when heated)
Only some of them will be chromium rich Pyropes, so those will be the ones to change color. He also had Almandine garnets which don't change color when heated. Thus, only a handful of his skin stones will turn green. I may have them change back to red, but I'm playing with the idea that the gems actually fall off his skin over time as well, like molting for a snake, but that may not work. I dunno. :/
Shifting the abrasive power to his palms sounds like a good idea! But instead of huge gems on his palms he can have smaller, flatter gems so he can still use his hands. XD
That's the fun part! Long, crazy hair can make things more fun to RP. >w>
Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2013 4:27 am
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I would love to see Reggie's personality and the way he reacts and socializes with other people (may it be friends or enemies). I just think you should add more about what his fears are/what makes him happy and how he would react to certain situations too (: The traits seem fine but that's still up for changing! Though I'm certain the happy and healthy trait wont be approved because it's quite overpowered for sure especially if there is no drawback to that skill.
I like Garrick! he's very interesting, I guess I should say it's just easier to play one guardian and one dust too for obvious reasons. I'd prefer just mostly him but I suppose that's up to you! XD But yeah I do appreciate his family and all of his history, I think they both would make a nice dynamic. But I'd also would kind of like to see a bit more of how Reggie and Garrick would be on a normal day since they're kind of opposite!
Mm that's all I can think of for now (sorry where i am it's so early in the morning, sob) but yeah I think it is looking good so far ! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Feb 07, 2013 8:48 pm
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Updates:
- Removed "Happy and Healthy" trait and added "Molting Gems" trait - Added more to personality to reflect critique
I really want to write some solos and journal entries to show the relationship between Garrick and Reggie, but I'm really flooded by college and I can't seem to write anything right now without dying of the tired. Plus, I want to keep some plots secret for when I get Reggie, so I'm stuck. I have some disconnected stuff written, but it isn't much. Am I required to do this, or could I skip it and leave the solo plots for when he's part of the shop? I so busy, I so tired. I dunno what to do. :<
Posted: Tue Mar 05, 2013 1:27 pm
-Boops- >w>
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Posted: Fri Jun 28, 2013 2:23 pm
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Posted: Tue Nov 19, 2013 11:37 pm
Critiques for Reggie? |3
*I re-wrote his personality like... Two minutes ago, and it's almost 3 AM. If it's sloppy, I'll fix it tomorrow.
