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 Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 2:08 am
Updated powers and names.
Also, Ebony, it says you posted on the main forum, but when I look at the thread I don't see your post .__. glitch or did you actually post?
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:14 pm
No, I posted something, but it didn't make sense cause I was sleepy so I deleted it. And now....I can't really remember what it was I posted, lol. Sorry hon.
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:15 pm
Oh... xD Well okay then~ I was really confused, staring at it the whole night like "....Why aren't you showing up? ;___;"
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Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 4:44 pm
Okay, I do have something to say this time and I'm not sleepy. Hooray! *ahem* Yeah, so I'm thinking, and this is just my personal opinion, that your best fel essence is your Twilight Dust. The fact that your Raevan will have such short periods of time to feed is very interesting, of course I think Mouse has already mentioned this.
Also, if you are seriously considering your bat soul, they sort of sound like a perfect match to me. But that's just because I often think of bats when I think of night. Though you don't have to worry so much about the soul and essence matching really, sometimes conflict is good too.
Lastly, you mentioned that the essence was invisible until brought into the dark. I would think that this could give your would-be Raevan an invisibility power possibly. Of course, it wouldn't be able to use it in the dark which opens up all kinds of avenues during roleplay.
Hope I helped somehow hon. Keep working, you've got some good ideas building!
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Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 5:37 pm
That is an awesome idea that I didn't think of at all! Thank you very much! <3
I think its concept is the best so far, but I was sad I couldn't think of much of anything for it as far as its effects on the Raevan went, but that's a good one indeed. I was thinking that the bat matched more with the Gargoyle Stone, I think I'll just remove the Sun and Moon Shards xD I can't think of anything decent that hasn't already been touched on/taken by that one Raevan that doesn't have an owner yet, with the Lava Ice Rock.
Aside from that, I also reaaalllyyyyy like the Life Bringing Sludge o__o that'd make whatever Raevan comes out of it reaaallyyyy popular with the plant bases Raevans (lolVyn) but I can't think of a lovely mix for it (whether matching or conflicting) that I'd be absolutely happy with, so I'll probably just give that up once this is done, see if people can figure stuff out for it >w<
-goes to add up invisibility powers- <3~
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Posted: Fri Apr 18, 2008 5:32 pm
I only read a few of the posts here, so if I am repeating another's advice, please forgive me. I shall begin with the essences.
Twilight dust: It sounds nice, but I think must mention how similar it sounds to Rivener's essence, the nocturne rock, which I think is basically a chunk of the night sky. The colors also remind me of Natsuki's fragments o'rainbow, like I believe Mouse had mentioned, and the self-indulging ink essence belonged to Shushida. I think if you could tweak it somehow (I can't really suggest any ways at the moment. I'm a little slow right now :'P) it would be interesting to see how your Raevan would react with Rivener. :'D
Life bringing sludge: I think I like this one the most! It feeds plants but hurts others. Kind of sounds like an Eiry-Gage love child or something. If you didn't know, Eiry eats the death of plants and Gage kind of..kills them. Hahaha. The power that is associated with this essence though somewhat concerns me. Like it sounded a little painful to burn someone. Perhaps you meant a light burn and I am overexaggerating? @__@ When I see the word "burn" I think like...third degree screaming-to-the-heavens burn. Awww well. Moving on. The toxin immunity seemed interesting as well!
Gargoyle stone: Forgive me for my honesty but my god. When I first read this description, it made my skin CRAWL. gonk I'm not reallllly sure if I like it as a fel essence. All I can say is, I don't personally think it's the best here. It needs a stronger magical aspect. Plus I think Ac.wings is questing for a Gargoyle soul...so..yes.
Now onto souls! <3
I LOVE the bat soul idea. It sounds unique plus...that bat is SO cute * w * I want it. Awwww well. I already have my soul in progress so, yeah. Good luck getting the bat soul. After the bat soul, I prefer the hyena since the characteristics seem similar, like how they are both social animals. And my third choice would be the python. >83 Bwahahhahaa. Reptilians~
Other comments:
I think it's amusing that you chose the name Callisto. I had considered that name before for a seahorse-inverted flame Raevan, but dropped the idea. Good to see someone else finds it a lovely name. :3 I would also like to mention how impressed I am with your writing abilities...and the fact that you and I both started on neopets. LAWLZ. :B
Lastly, Good luck on your quest and once I develop my Raevan and owner, it would be my pleasure to have a roleplay with your Anita. :'D
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Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 5:46 pm
Thanks very much, Kaurii :3 Let me go down the list in the same fashion you did.
Essences
The similarities Mouse mentioned were towards the Sun and Moon Shards, which are now defunct and out of the picture because they were so similar to the Fragments of Rainbow. I'm not seeing the similarities with the Self-Indulging Ink, however, and you're the first person to tell me that the Twilight Dust is a bit too much like Rivener's, which I'll keep in mind and try to tweak with it a bit, though I'm not sure how ;o;
I rather like the Life Bringing Sludge, as well! And yes, I did mean burns as in slight, just like a painful "ow this plate's hot" sort of burn, not scalding. That may change as it gets older, but certainly not while it's a Frei! I thought the toxin immunity would be fun >w<
For the Gargoyle Stone, I am sads ;__; it made your skin crawl? It's that bad? Gyaahhh... not sure what you mean by giving it a stronger magical aspect, if you have any advice on that, it'd be great, but it's not particularly the one I'm after anymore, anyway, so it's not necessary.
Souls
The bat soul, even if I end up going with the flatsale, will probably be the one that wins out. I'm so attached to it right now, and then next in line for me, too, is either the Hyena or the Wild Dog. I'd love to see some one use the Albino Burmese, though, that'd be so cool ;w; <3~
Comments
AHHHHH really!? :'DDD Yay, Nazipets starters o_9 -high5-
Yaaaayyyy I have to go see who your owner is D: I'd love to roleplay with you, too <3
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Posted: Sun Apr 27, 2008 12:28 am
Added a little to the Gargoyle Stone. Not sure if that makes it more "magical" though.
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:17 am
I really like the Twillight Dust, though just slightly similar to Rivener. Perhaps because of that, they might be real good friends? =D
The bat soul that is going with it, I think that's cute X3 Real compatible as bats are often seen right before the sun goes down. Unique combination X3
Life Bringing Sludge, not a big fan of. Reminds me alot of Gage though it's just the opposite. The powers of it might make interaction abit too hard? Since people will most likely avoid them instead of being friends.
I'm sorry if it doesn't help much sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:11 am
I have some suggestions for you to think about when you decide to go into more detail for your Raevan:
Would the Raevan be a vegetarian, since it is a fruit bat? Would it be have awesome sense of hearing, but not so great vision? Maybe your Raevan could wear glasses? That would be so cute! X3
Would it sleep during that day? Bats are really noisy, would your Raevan talk all the time or take too long explaining things?
I know they seem kinda nitpicky, but a few simple traits could possibly change her daily habits and how your concept interacts with other.
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Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 1:16 am
Fweedle I really like the Twillight Dust, though just slightly similar to Rivener. Perhaps because of that, they might be real good friends? =D
The bat soul that is going with it, I think that's cute X3 Real compatible as bats are often seen right before the sun goes down. Unique combination X3
Life Bringing Sludge, not a big fan of. Reminds me alot of Gage though it's just the opposite. The powers of it might make interaction abit too hard? Since people will most likely avoid them instead of being friends.
I'm sorry if it doesn't help much sweatdrop That's an interesting though. Slight similarities do seem to attract Raevans to one another, don't they? Though depending on mine's personality, I can also see Rivener hating him intensely, so we'll see xD Agreed with Life Bringing Sludge, that one ended up a bit forced and, as Kaurii had put it, seemed like "Gage and Eiry's love child". I think that was the perfect way to put it. Unless I can figure out a way go improve on it, the Essence is currently in limbo, and the Gargoyle Stone and Sun and Moon Shards are defunct entirely. It did help, don't worry, goof :3 I do believe he would be a vegetarian, or rather, whatever a fruititarian is? I'd imagine, until solid foods are accessible, he might drink from juice boxes >w< Glasses I'm not sure of, though if done correctly it could be quite cute indeed o_9 I would imagine his eye sight wasn't the best, though, but I'm pretty sure fruit bats (some anyway) aren't entirely nocturnal? Hearing, I would have to say YES. Sensitive hearing would probably make quite a lot of sense. I think the sleeping pattern would be greatly affected by the essence, considering not all fruit bats are entirely nocturnal (I will have to check on this specific breed, however), but if he had the Twilight Dust Essence, for example, then his sleeping pattern would be greatly skewed. I would imagine that Raevan sleeping during the day, but others perhaps not. I have to research and see just how noisey this type of breed is, but taking a long time to explain things sounds very cute >w< though if it was with the Mirage of Fear then loudness would be expounded upon. Not nitpicky at all, these are excellent personality points to ponder over that I hadn't delved into yet :] thank you both very much.
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Posted: Wed Jun 18, 2008 4:15 pm
Towards the new essences, I prefer the mirage of fear. o w o;;
It sounds so eerie but so cool at the same time, plus I think the combination of such a friendly sound bat with something so terrifying as this essence would make something wonderful! It'd scare everyone off with its appearance or presence but really, it'd be yearning for someone to love. XD;; Cheesy, I know.
The psychic web does remind me of my previous concept, but it is so much better! The memory part is very good to incorporate, though it may be intruding on Nue's field of dreamwork? ...I am unsure. But don't give up on it! It's such a good concept~~ heart
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Posted: Wed Jun 18, 2008 4:23 pm
Have to admit Nue hasn't had much with the way of activity so Psychic web probably fair game? It depends on what happens with the Raevan. Hopefully the owner would come back? *shrugs* I still adore the Twilight Dust. It is similar to the Nocturn rock but its more like based on night and the moon while this is based upon more of the sun going down or up. Bats are adorable. <3
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Posted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 4:04 pm
Essences: I seriously LOVE your mirage of fear. The description pulled me into it instantly. *shows her horror junky ways* I really have nothing bad to say about this particular essence. Very entertaining~
My second favorite would be the twilight dust. It seems like it has a very solid story as well. It also stands out among the others too. My only problem would be that it came from the sky. This reminds me of Riv's essence which is a fragment of the sky. But I'm sure you have already heard this before.
Souls: I would love to see the combo of your mirage of fear and bat soul. I believe that it would be a very adorable creation. A very terrifying raevan with a heart of gold.
Another combo I would like to see would be the twilight dust and foxglove. Both components seem very elegant and gorgeous. It wold make quite and enchanting raevan.
Post Note: Argh, it seems less like I am critiquing and more like I am fangirling. xD;; I have to say though, nothing seems to be horribly intruding on other concepts. Everything is very nicely put together. *applauds*
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Posted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 1:46 am
I'm just going to comment on the fel essence ideas since I don't really mind what souls you use. The fruit bat might be interesting too, so yeah... o3o;;
I'm just more picky with fel essence concepts I guess.
one thing you need to remember about fel essences are... CONTRADICTION!!!! The fel essence itself is a contradiction, it contradicts what regular things does. (ice that never melts, light that has no light source, fire that never extinguish to name a few) Although there are exceptions where weird things that doesn't have a huge contradiction may become a fel essence too. (A piece of the night sky, cloud of despair) but to me, things that really pop are fel essences that contradicts itself.
Your fel essences are all pretty unique, but they lack the contradiction that makes them shine. Personally I think Twilight Dust is pretty weak. They are just shimmering dusts that fell from the sky. Though they may mean something because they fell at that very moment, but ultimately they are just shimmering dusts. Nothing special about that.
*blows smoke from gun and reloads it*
Psychic Web is very interesting though, manifesting our complicated mind into a web. It has the potential to shine, but your concept is not very solid yet. Especially the description part. Descriptions are very important to explain your fel essence. I am especially confused by the last 2 sentences in your description... @_@;; You have to make your descriptions clearer!! Think of it like things people explain in encyclopedias, or science textbooks, make it sound factual!! Short, sweet and right on the spot!!
And lastly, Mirage of fear. I think out of all the fel essences, this one might work the best. One thing that I fear is that it may be a little too close to Tangible Dream. Both the smokey and the vision factor. But since Nue might be NPCed soon, I wouldn't mind another similar fel essence appearing to replace it. As long as you don't mind of course. Again with the description though, perhaps you could make it more factual instead of like... concentrated to one person. Everyone has different fears, so perhaps they might see different things from the fel essence? You could describe it in a more general point of view instead of the first person POV. I especially like the last sentence though, so you might wanna keep that : P
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