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 Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 7:12 pm
you are right, and you are right. *nodnod*
But I thought the mythology would be interesting. sad It wasn't?
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2008 12:58 pm
It was! It was creative, too, how you made up your own myths instead of using others (which reminds me... Quote: “Karayani,” the priestess informed them, “created many wood nymphs and spirits of the rich earth, but had only two children of her own—children of the gods being a god created from the conjoined powers of two more powerful gods. She took the powers of Aikos and Aidli and made Helas and Aridella, the sun and the moon; to Aiden she gave her first nymph-daughter, and all were blessed. that was a little confusing too. Are Helas and Aridella her children? Maybe clarify this part a bit). I did like at the beginning of the shine scene, where you had descriptions and their thoughts mixed in with the dialogue. It sort of broke it up a bit, made the history lesson a bit easier to swallow (but then of course, take all this with a grain of salt. I hate history myself, so I'll admit I'm a bit biased)
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2008 4:19 pm
ah, yes. God-sex is incredibly confusing...good idea. *goes off to correct*
I love history. <3333 You've got a point though Reesey...I'll think about it, okay?
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2008 1:40 pm
Reese_Roper It was! It was creative, too, how you made up your own myths instead of using others (which reminds me... Quote: “Karayani,” the priestess informed them, “created many wood nymphs and spirits of the rich earth, but had only two children of her own—children of the gods being a god created from the conjoined powers of two more powerful gods. She took the powers of Aikos and Aidli and made Helas and Aridella, the sun and the moon; to Aiden she gave her first nymph-daughter, and all were blessed. that was a little confusing too. Are Helas and Aridella her children? Maybe clarify this part a bit). I did like at the beginning of the shine scene, where you had descriptions and their thoughts mixed in with the dialogue. It sort of broke it up a bit, made the history lesson a bit easier to swallow (but then of course, take all this with a grain of salt. I hate history myself, so I'll admit I'm a bit biased) (why would you hate history - it's just another story; only this story goes off into a bunch of tangents and no matter what you'll eventually realize that what you learned in your younger years of history, is actually a breif synopsis of a larger, more inaccurate, story.)
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2008 3:18 pm
thanks a ton, Nova. I thought that for once you were actually going to read Ametris.
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2008 4:12 pm
NovaKing Reese_Roper It was! It was creative, too, how you made up your own myths instead of using others (which reminds me... Quote: “Karayani,” the priestess informed them, “created many wood nymphs and spirits of the rich earth, but had only two children of her own—children of the gods being a god created from the conjoined powers of two more powerful gods. She took the powers of Aikos and Aidli and made Helas and Aridella, the sun and the moon; to Aiden she gave her first nymph-daughter, and all were blessed. that was a little confusing too. Are Helas and Aridella her children? Maybe clarify this part a bit). I did like at the beginning of the shine scene, where you had descriptions and their thoughts mixed in with the dialogue. It sort of broke it up a bit, made the history lesson a bit easier to swallow (but then of course, take all this with a grain of salt. I hate history myself, so I'll admit I'm a bit biased) (why would you hate history - it's just another story; only this story goes off into a bunch of tangents and no matter what you'll eventually realize that what you learned in your younger years of history, is actually a breif synopsis of a larger, more inaccurate, story.) I like books, but that doesn't mean I like all books. For instance, I can't stand romance or horror novels. Gag me and keep me up all night. History just isn't usual formatted in a way that keeps me interested. Give me historical fiction such as "The Ransom of Mercy Carter," though, and I might last. Kirby: And ruin his score? Never.
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2008 6:23 pm
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Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 2:31 pm
You shouldn't, because today I edited chapter one, and will post the corrections as soon as I'm done my P.E. homework.
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Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 5:07 pm
Cool, I did too. o:
Reesey chaaan, did you know that you are the only girl out of the 2 people who have finished Ametris completely?
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Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 6:16 pm
Lemme guess. The other person is the only boy? xd
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Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 7:16 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 1:53 pm
Okay, don't have much time, but a little run-through of chapter one.
-Everan seems way too happy in the first chapter as compared to the rest of the book. WAY too happy.
-In chapter one, they're wicked excited for Pilori being there, but then you changed to them being really not happy a few chapters later when they meet up with her.
Watch your inconsistancies.
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Posted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 2:13 pm
Fixed them both in the rewrite. ^^
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2008 5:31 pm
KirbyVictorious thanks a ton, Nova. I thought that for once you were actually going to read Ametris. Last time I ddid that you got really mad at me for not liking it, why would I read the rest of it?
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Posted: Mon Jan 21, 2008 6:37 pm
No I didn't. ou were being childish and thought you were right when I didn't think so.
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