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okay i fix it i hope its good now 3nodding
Thanks! It's better, but I'm still finding some problems with the bio though. So they didn't want her anymore? Why didn't they just dump her down a lake or throw her off a cliff? Why did the kidnappers pick Rosentale? Is Rosentale Academy really that horrible a place?
I did mention that shyness is a flaw that you want to avoid. Friendliness and shyness kind of contradict. And unless this school was all about swimming, I don't think your character has to worry about swimming in water so I can't count that as a flaw.
Fortunately one of the moderators made a more detail clarification of flaws. So you can check Character Flaws - Doing it right for reference. I hope it helps!
i fix it again ,i hope that will be fine... sweatdrop
I'm sorry but I don't think those will work. Shyness and friendliness clash with each other. She can't be running up and chatting with people if she's too shy. No magic ability is not considered a flaw but a lot of people like to add it in as extra information in the flaws section when they've met the at least three flaws criteria. There are a lot of characters that sleep a lot in the academy and they don't have it even listed as a flaw. It's just a normal habit. Not a flaw.
I'm think I'll list some possible flaws that might work for your character. That way, I hope I can give you some ideas.
- Naive: Way too trusting and doesn't understand the evils of the world. She is easily tricked and doesn't notice details easily.
- Childish/Immature: She is silly and acts like a child. She has trouble understanding things unless it's spelled out to her. It's annoying for some people to deal with a childish character.
- Idiotic: She's not very smart and will do silly things that just gets her and the people around her into trouble.
- Distracted: Can't stay on one subject and often goes off to random tangents which makes it impossible for her to get her work done.
- Always wishes to please others: This causes her to get taken advantage of all the time.
Hopefully the examples above work for your character and if not, I hope they gave you good ideas for flaws for her. ^^
Thank you for your hard work! And I'm sorry for being so picky!
okay i used those flaws :3 i hope its good now whee