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UkyoKuonji2004 Vice Captain
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 Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:02 pm
Core sighed and stood up, "I'm gone to get out of these clothes. I'll be in there," He said and walked into the bathroom, closing the door behind him as he went.
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:05 pm
Ryo passed by the town, suddenly he smelled something familier ,"is it..?" he said to himself and walked toward the inn.
Ryo opened the door without knocking. He walked into the room. "Long time no see," he said, looking at Utau
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:08 pm
((What? I don't understand what just happened))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:08 pm
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UkyoKuonji2004 Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:08 pm
((the darker blue is my bro ^^" ))
utau shivered. she knew this voice.
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:09 pm
(You're using incomplete sentences. Any way we can limit that?)
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UkyoKuonji2004 Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:10 pm
((Yeah, i think you need to completely rewrite that post with correct grammar. That would be appreciated and get us unstuck))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:10 pm
(( edited : sorry i forgot to write his name ^^"
is it better? ^^" ))
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UkyoKuonji2004 Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:13 pm
(It's like you typed in the last of your sentence and didn't bother put in the beginning. Is there some way you can explain how he got in there? Even if he just magically appeared there, at least it's something)
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:14 pm
((Slightly. A better post would be something like:
Ryo opened the door without knocking. He walked into the room. "Long time no see," he said, looking at Utau))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:16 pm
(( sure ^^ , utau and ryo grew up togheter , he always cared for her cus she healed him and took care of him when they were young he isnt nice AT ALL o-o" and he passed by the town and smelled utau
hope it helps :3 and sorry for the troubles :3 ))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:18 pm
((Well, it would be better to say that in your post. Give him some sort of intro. And again, correct grammar would be greatly appreciated.))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:18 pm
One Piece Fanatic ((Slightly. A better post would be something like: Ryo opened the door without knocking. He walked into the room. "Long time no see," he said, looking at Utau)) (( okie did :3 thanks for helping x3 ))
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:23 pm
Core heard something outside the bathroom almost seconds after he put his clothes on. He opened the door quickly and saw that a stranger had barged into the room.
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UkyoKuonji2004 Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:25 pm
"Who are you?" Chiasa asked, standing up.
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