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 Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2018 9:19 am
Lookin' good! My only suggestion is that your "conjurations" be altered to manipulation or something similar. Conjuration is its own School of magic, so it'd be a little confusing. Once you've done that, though, she's accepted, so feel free to put her up in your thread and post in the Pairings :3
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Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2018 1:55 pm
Weeamoo Hooo boy! Homeboi is tall for twelve! I like him, though. There are just a few things I have to mention:
Aura Crest: This sounds a lot like a spell rather than Ability. I'd suggest rewording it a little so it does not. Just calling is a ward is fine, and Knights do not have access to mana. If you're up for it tiring him out that way, just say it drains his stamina or something of the like. Extended use would make him tired or somethin'.
Blackout: I'm just curious about what "other magical means" could break the trance.
From your backstory, it sounds like he could have been in Carmillion's or Eldrin's military. I'm curious if you've decided or if you're keeping that open for meow in case it'd be good "bonding" purposes for a Mage. This has nothing to do with your acceptance just my interest.
ANYWAY! Once that's been settled, lemme know, and I'll look over your profile again. Aura ward has been altered as requested as has blackout where I just gave a few examples, that was me just leaving it open for there being ways to break him from the trance so its not an OP move or anything. As for these characters if they need a knight then sure!
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Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2018 4:41 pm
Weeamoo Lookin' good! My only suggestion is that your "conjurations" be altered to manipulation or something similar. Conjuration is its own School of magic, so it'd be a little confusing. Once you've done that, though, she's accepted, so feel free to put her up in your thread and post in the Pairings :3 Thanks, it's all fixed now smile
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Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2018 11:10 pm
Username: Kurisuchin Saiyuki
Name: Victoria Schneider
Nickname: Vicky (only Natalie calls her by that name so far)
Race: Aassimar
Ethnicity: British - Japanese
Gender: female
Orientation: Bisexual
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Affinity: Fire
Age: 18 (in human years)
Birthday: June 20
Height: 5’
Weapon: Broadsword (similar to the one owned by her FC, Stella Vermillion)
Mage: N/A yet, but OPEN for contracts
Natural Abilities:
❖ Crescent Cut (B) - slashes a maximum of eight enemies with a wide arc, the range being 25 meters. Victims hit by this skill will receive injuries that can cause severe bleeding. With normal potions and healing abilities, the injuries can be recovered after at least a week. The intensity of the attack can be dwindled down with armaments that increase defense as well as protection wards by mages. Targets can also evade when they move away from the radius before the attack reaches them.
❖ Fortitude (C) - Increases defense for herself for 6 RP posts; while it can help with her endurance against physical attacks, if the opponent’s attack is severe, she will still not be spared from potential injuries.
❖ Quadruple Stab (C+) - Hits a single target 4 times with her sword, but can be deflected or dodged by the other person. When hit, however, there is a chance that the person's movements will be slowed down unnaturally, which can’t be warded off with normal potions and antidotes but can still be cured with magus abilities. (Will use a 8-dice roll to determine the chance; if the number is 6 - 8, then it’s successful).
Magus Abilities:
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Unison Abilities:
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Relationships:
❖ Thomas Schneider - Father (Alive, 40 years old in human years)
❖ Marika Kobayashi-Schneider - Mother (Alive, 36 years old in human years)
❖ Natalie Schneider - Sister (Alive, 21 years old in human years)
Strengths:
✔ Adept swordsmanship
✔ Excellent agility and defense
✔ Huge appetite
Weaknesses:
✘ Her temper
✘ Her mouth has no filter at all
✘ Quite a troublemaker, going by instinct rather than her head
Likes:
✔ Food, and lots of it
✔ Sparring
✔ Expeditions with her sister
✔ Writing (in her journal, so far)
Dislikes:
✘ Cockroaches
✘ Memories of her mother missing from the expedition
✘ Anyone messing with her sister
✘ Boredom
Personality:
❖ Victoria is a bit too unrefined compared to Natalie, being the troublemaker of the two. If anything, she is the one not afraid to speak what’s on her mind, even when the words are obscene as hell. But she does care for sister since she’s the closest member of the family since the day their mother went missing.
History:
❖ The Schneider family was a middle-class clan in Eldrin, the parents brought together by arranged marriage. Victoria was born 3 years after Natalie, and she inherited her swordsmanship skills (and most of the obscene curses and commentaries) from her father. Like Marika, Thomas was also a knight, except that he was feared of by his adversaries due to his power that matched well to his temper. He had a few Mage contracts in the past, but the closest one was his friend, Caelan, a fire mage who was irritated with his abrasive behavior at first but eventually saw his determination. Sadly, Caelan was murdered during the Witch Invasion arc, and he was distraught by the death. It took some time for him to move on before the arranged marriage ensued, taking place during “The Moment”.
❖ Both Natalie and Victoria were homeschooled, though because she was a troublemaker, Victoria was often scolded, and she would have no choice but to get through the boring lectures and even finish the homework before she would have the chance to spar, a way to spend time with her father. Her grades were lower than Natalie’s, but enough to pass nonetheless, as it was part of the condition, or else she would be grounded for life.
❖ Although reluctantly, Victoria had to help around with the household chores aside from her physical training. It was when the mother decided to travel on her own, while the rest of the family were asleep, that she became upset at the departure. As time passed on, she became upset, impatient at absence of updates; it all went out on her 18th birthday with her wish to see the mother again. She ended up letting it all out at the garden of the house, some of the tree branches falling down due to her rage. Natalie had to calm her down before things went back to normal.
❖ Victoria eventually decided to tag along with her sister when Natalie planned to explore to the outside world in search of questions for the missing mother, knowing that just sitting still and waiting would lead to no results at all. They both made a vow that they wouldn’t return home unless they would see their mother again.
Outfits:
❖ Knight Outfit
❖ Casual Outfit 1
❖ Casual Outfit 2
❖ Casual Outfit 3
❖ Summer Vacation
❖ Swimsuit
❖ Winter Garment
Items:
❖ sword belt and scabbard (for her sword)
❖ satchel for her belongings (during expeditions)
❖ a journal (where she can write her thoughts down)
Other:
❖ Because she also has to help in earning money for herself, Victoria is currently searching for a part-time job as well under Natalie’s advice. However, her chances are low because of her demeanor, especially towards other people.
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Ring of Fire - Krewella
❖ Battle Theme: Knights and Lords
❖ Emotional Theme: Loneliness
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 12:26 pm
shinzo_husky Weeamoo Hooo boy! Homeboi is tall for twelve! I like him, though. There are just a few things I have to mention:
Aura Crest: This sounds a lot like a spell rather than Ability. I'd suggest rewording it a little so it does not. Just calling is a ward is fine, and Knights do not have access to mana. If you're up for it tiring him out that way, just say it drains his stamina or something of the like. Extended use would make him tired or somethin'.
Blackout: I'm just curious about what "other magical means" could break the trance.
From your backstory, it sounds like he could have been in Carmillion's or Eldrin's military. I'm curious if you've decided or if you're keeping that open for meow in case it'd be good "bonding" purposes for a Mage. This has nothing to do with your acceptance just my interest.
ANYWAY! Once that's been settled, lemme know, and I'll look over your profile again. Aura ward has been altered as requested as has blackout where I just gave a few examples, that was me just leaving it open for there being ways to break him from the trance so its not an OP move or anything. As for these characters if they need a knight then sure! Looks good! Feel free to create your thread and begin posting!
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 5:21 pm
The cap apparently lost track of profiles. I don't see anything wrong with you profile... just remember that we are in modern times in the guild's story as of recently. Your character can be viking-based since they're from Terra, just remember that when you're posting. Approved.
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 5:57 pm
Thanks for the submission! I was trying to confirm some things with the VC, BUT! I only see one thing I want to mention:
Quadruple Stab: I like where you've been going with the status effect stuff, but crippling seems like an intense one. I would either suggest a change or lower the probability of it happening.
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 6:04 pm
Changed from cripple to slow down, reduced the chances a bit with the dice roll.
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 6:05 pm
Kurisuchin Saiyuki Changed from cripple to slow down, reduced the chances a bit with the dice roll. You're all set, then! Accepted!
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2018 6:32 pm
Rengato The cap apparently lost track of profiles. I don't see anything wrong with you profile... just remember that we are in modern times in the guild's story as of recently. Your character can be viking-based since they're from Terra, just remember that when you're posting. Approved.
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2018 8:53 pm
Username: Kurisuchin Saiyuki
Name: Akairo Daisuke
Nickname: Aka
Race: Human
Ethnicity: Japanese
Gender: Male
Orientation: Homosexual
Alignment: Neutral Good
Affinity: Spirit
Age: 18
Birthday: August 27
Height: 5’ 9”
Weapons: Magical Guitar, crafted out of hardwood(catalyst for his magic, also great for incapacitating monsters partially just in case)
Magic: Transmutation / Divination
❖ Healing Hymn (B-) - Akairo sings a melodious song from the gods, healing himself and the people within a 30-meter radius. While it may help with the recovery of minor wounds and injuries, when someone’s pain is severe, the healing will just be partial, stopping the bleeding and rejuvenating the internal organs by a moderate fraction. Also, the healing will just be physical and it will not cure any status ailment. Cooldown lasts for 4 RP posts.
❖ Serene Symphony (C+) - Calms the mind and lifts the person’s mood with a song, granting the target the motivation to keep going. Can only affect a single target, and grants the target a moderate boost to their stamina, the buff lasting for 5 RP posts. Cooldown lasts for 3 RP posts.
❖ Fortuitous Melody (B-) - this song helps in granting up to five people (not including himself) a boost in strength, lasting for 5 RP posts. Must be within a 30-meter radius. Cool down lasts for 4 RP posts.
❖ Notes of Nostrum (C+) - Cures the poison of a single target instantly, except when the venom is from from a hazardous source (e.g. when a creature’s venom causes certain death within a short time); When curing the venom from such source, the intensity will just be dwindled down by a fraction. Cooldown lasts for 3 RP posts.
Relationships:
❖ Atsushi Daisuke (Deceased, 57 years old}
❖ Ayaka Daisuke - Mother (Deceased, 49 years old)
❖ Mamoru Daisuke - Brother (Alive, 23)
❖ Saaya Daisuke - Sister (Alive, 16)
Strengths:
✔ Musical recognition
✔ An expert composer
✔ Diligent in his abilities and skills
✔ Great at entertaining people through music
Weaknesses:
✘ Being a bit too hard on himself
✘ A bit too sacrificial (especially towards other people)
✘ Low tolerance towards mistakes
✘ Abilities demonstrating sound nullification will hinder his abilities in a long run
Likes:
✔ meat buns and dumplings
✔ his siblings (as a family, of course)
✔ music and dancing as his entertainment
✔ the family business
Dislikes:
✘ spicy food in general
✘ cross-dressing
✘ being compared to other musicians
✘ demotivation and sound nullification hindering his abilities
Personality:
❖ Despite being 18 years old and being an average human, Akairo is known to be a hard-working man, and also kind enough to help other people. However, he is known to be a perfectionist, willing to give his all so that he could get the desired results. The detrimental cost is mostly at his mental health, with him being easily frustrated whenever he makes a mistake. However, he is known to be faithful to the people he cared so much, especially his siblings.
History:
❖ The Daisuke family is a clan of wandering entertainers talented in music, being the middle child among the three kids, the older being Mamoru and the youngest being Saaya. Throughout their lives, they have been traveling from one place to another, using a caravan as a makeshift adobe so that they could wind down and relax after performing for the crowd. However, the harsh training began when Akairo was five, practicing day and night in order to improve his skills since the children will be the next to take care of the family business. If he failed at his training, he would be coerced to eat spicy food, which was what he hates so much, as an unorthodox punishment. Though not that severe, it was his drive to escape that he became a perfectionist.
❖ The children are not without education to the outside world, however, thanks to the tutors that they had encountered throughout their escapades. Plus, there were books that they can read in order to learn more about something, more so when they chanced upon libraries that exist near places that they could settle down. In fact, Akairo chose to learn also the art of hunting, cooking and baking pastries so that the entire family would have something to eat with whatever ingredients that they could scour or purchase with the earnings that they have, which are usually huge especially with the additional tips. The cooking was mostly from the mother’s influence.
❖ Unfortunately, the parents died of a terminal illness when Akairo was 17, thus Mamoru became the breadwinner of the family and the redhead had to take care of Saaya as well. They all contributed to sustain for themselves to continue on with the legacy. As for now, the three kids are currently saving up to own a residence someday, possibly within Carmillon since it was nearest to their Japanese heritage.
Outfits:
(Note: his outfits actually vary from time to time depending on the setting of the performance, will show some of the notable ones here)
❖ Minstrel Outfit 1
❖ Minstrel Outfit 2
❖ Performance Outfit 1
❖ Performance Outfit 2
❖ Performance Outfit 3
❖ Performance Outfit 4
❖ Casual Outfit 1
❖ Casual Outfit 2
❖ Casual Outfit 3
❖ Summer Vacation
❖ Swimming Trunks
❖ Winter Garment 1
❖ Winter Garment 2
Items:
❖ a teddy bear plushie (a past b-day gift from his mother; he still sleeps with it up to this day)
❖ a belt containing his satchel for his belongings and scabbard for his hunting dagger (especially during expeditions)
❖ hunting dagger (only when scouring for food during expeditions)
Other:
❖ he has a clef tattoo on his upper arm, and a ruby stud piercing on his left ear.
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Here’s to the Bard - A Bard’s Tale
❖ Battle Theme: Jimmy the Bard Boss Battle Theme (from South Park: The Stick of Truth)
❖ Emotional Theme: Singing Through the Storm
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2018 8:22 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2018 8:42 pm
No, no. You're accepted, but change divination to abjuration. That's more accurate. Otherwise, you're good I guess.
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2018 8:45 pm
Ended up editing the minor stuff as soon as I put him in my character roster list, but thanks anyway. owo''
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Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2018 1:53 pm
You're all good brosky. What are his opinions about the new Terrans that have come to Earth in that last three months, btw? Just curious.
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