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 Posted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 2:59 am
I'm totally procrastinating on my term paper right now. XD
But Laan is approved by me also, as is the newest revamp of Cataclysm Mk. IX
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 4:15 pm
Reapplying for Cory's Level 6 limit to one that fits in with his summon better, and also one that seems a bit less complicated to calculate. Quote: [Level 6] Cataclysm Mk.X - Also known as "Zanmatou Endgame", Cataclysm Mk.X is Cory's most powerful attack. Rather than focusing the Cataclysmic energy into his weapon or a single part of his body, Cory uses it to increase the speed and range of his Burst Movement by fortifying his body against the high speeds. While it is his strongest technique it is less flashy than his other abilities, consisting of only a single high-speed attack. Cory bursts through a single target, striking once with the Revblade for a chance to cause Auto-KO. If Auto-KO fails, Zanmatou Endgame does twice as much damage as a normal attack. [Single Target] As well, Cataclysm Mk.VI's title, "Hakyoku Hoshi", is to be changed to "Hakyoku Boshi" so that it is more grammatically correct.
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 4:29 pm
Stop applying for revisions. D8< Just be happy, dammit! scream
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:07 pm
Applying for a revision of this ability because the previous version consisted of a lot of weird stat buffs, conditions, etc. In addition, no one was really sure to what extent the buff would be. This revision fits in line with Cory's summon, as well as simplifies it into a single attack rather than a Self Buff that buffs who knows how much for god knows how long.
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 10:03 pm
Starlit StruggleName:Jiraal Sazri
Nickname/Alias:The Wild Fang
Age:20
Gender:Male
Appearance:
Height:5'10"
Weight:140 lbs
Body Type:Lean with Slight Muscular definition
Skin type:Dark
Eye Color:Hazel
Hair Color:Black
Hair Style:Shoulder Length Dreadlocks
Clothing:He's clad in a Black sleeveless hooded jacket with a white short sleeved shirt underneath, tattered black denim jeans, and black leather steel to boots.
Unusual Body Art/Parts:His right shoulder is adorned with a tribal rune shaped similarly to wolf's head bestowed at birth to all from his families bloodline.
Race:Human
Theme Song(s):
Violence- Dope
Significant Trait: Selfish
Quotes:
"There is one person in this world I have to care about and that's me."
"The only difference between a monster and a man is choice.I've made mine, so what's yours?"
"What do I get from this?."
Good/Evil:Evil
Homeworld:Celios
Main Weapon:Kusari-Gama (A six foot length of chain with a sickle and a weight attached on opposite ends)
Additional Equipment: A Crystal fang woven into one of his dreadlocks and a dagger hidden in his right boot.
Job Class: Assassin/Thief
Attack Abilities:
Anti-Gravity-The ability to create and control small anti-gravitational fields, typically to create temporary wormholes and concussive blasts. This ability was almost exclusive to Jiraal's family on his home world.
Rift Blade- Jiraal opens a rift(Wormhole) in front of himself and one near his desired target then launches an end of his kusari-gama into the portal where it will exit through the portal near the target.Limited to line of sight within a fifty meter radius of Jiraal.
Rift Dash- Jiraal opens a portal in front of himself while in motion and opens a second portal at the desired location, essential teleporting himself. Limited to line of sight within a fifty meter radius of Jiraal.
Void Sphere- Jiraal creates a small softball sized sphere of anti-gravity and launches it at his intended target, detonates on impact. Five meter concussive blast radius, ninety meter range.
Void Blast- Jiraal releases a blast wave of anti-gravity from his hand or body.
Support Abilities:
Anti-Grav. Burst- Releases small burst of anti-gravity from his limbs to increase moving speed and melee combat strength.
Void Wall- Jiraal creates a wall of anti-gravity to deflect projectiles and incoming attacks. Two second duration.
Passive Abilities:
Rift Orientation-Jiraal has a high resistance to all types of physical or mental disorientation due to the extreme forces acting against the body during anti-gravity rift travel.
Limit Breaks:
Void Storm- Jiraal creates several large spheres of Anti-gravity and launches them at his target before surrounding his body in Anti-gravity and tackling his target releasing a blast of anti-gravity.
Strengths:Fast, Aggressive, Streetwise, and Determined
Weaknesses:Over-confident, Suspicious of others, Low physical strength, All rift abilities limited to line of sight, and lacks agility.
Personality:Never without a sense of humor, Jiraal believes that everyone exist solely for the benefit of another, that if you aren't using someone then someone is definitely using you, and if it doesn't benefit you than you don't need it. He has the utmost confidence in himself and no matter the odds, if he's taken the task he will finish it, however he isn't foolish, years working the streets have taught him the difference between a good deal and a scam. While he isn't opposed to taking advantage of the gullible, he strongly opposes fighting those unable to defend themselves, after all what good is it if it doesn't test his strength. Jiraal is in it for himself and no one else. Unknown to most he does want to have some one to trust.
Likes:All forms of money, fighting, power, and Caramel Apples.
Dislikes:Being Doubted, Losing, Taking orders, and optimists.
Fears: Being weak or powerless and Being forever alone.
Family:An older sister named Nisara her whereabouts are unknown. Presumed Deceased.
Bio:Jiraal was raised by his older sister Nisara for most of his life, he had no recollection of his parents and the stories his sister told him were just that; stories. Jiraal learned to pick pockets at five being taught by his sister who was seven years his senior, she also taught him how to use his inherited abilities to further increase his skills as a thief, it was their way of life until he was sixteen...She woke him up in the dead of the night holding a strange soft stone, as far as Jiraal could tell, she told him it had fallen from the sky and that something was wrong. She said she had to find out what it was and where it came from. "I'll come back for you when I find it." She told him and before he could even ask her what "it" was or how she would find it she rifted away.
convinced his sister had simply abandoned him, Jiraal continued on with his daily grind, eventually catching some attention from a few crime bosses and getting hired on as muscle or as an assassin. For three years he pushed his way up the underground hierarchy until those monsters showed up, creatures born of darkness, stealing the hearts of those around him as he struggled to fight them off.The shadowy beasts were endless...and so powerful, there was no way to stop them and so Jiraal fled as his home was consumed in darkness. Only a few months ago he found himself in Traverse Town surrounded by strange people, all refugees like himself, but to him it was the same type of battle field just with new players...
Sample Post:The silence was unnerving, it was obvious that most avoided these parts of the town, they were home to scores of the monsters that Jiraal has come to know as the Heartless. His eyes drifted over ever shadow carefully, he needed some practice or he would get soft during his stay here, and if he ever wanted to be part of the Conclave soft probably wouldn't cut it.
It didn't take long for the little monstrosities to surface, they longed to take his heart...He grinned as he launched forward, whipping the sickle blade of his kusari-gama down at one of the Shadows, it burst into black smoke as it was struck, with a sharp tug on the chain the sickle lashed out to the right splitting another Shadow into ethereal blackness, and another sharp tug, the blade snapped back to Jiraal's hand. He quickly spun around and catapulted the eight pound lead weight at the other end of the chain in between the beady yellow eyes of the remaining shadow.
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 1:32 pm
I'd like to exchange Alan's level 3 limit break for a stat up:
Pure Guts: Alan's relationship with pain is somewhat different than most peoples'. +1 to Constitutional Endurance.
Also, for flavor reasons, I'd like to change the name of my Magic Strength stat up:
Power Overwhelming: Magic flows freely through Alan's heart. He's achieved a level of raw power beyond the ken of most mages. +1 to Magic Strength.
Because 'Magic Strength Affinity' sounds boring.
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Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 1:28 am
Alan's changes approved.
Cory's change approved.
Veone: Your character seems pretty good, but the only thing that's off is his interest in the Conclave. Up until the actual time of the RP, no one has even heard of the Conclave unless they wanted you to hear about them, so they're pretty much unknown. They were going to announce their presence shortly.
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Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 1:33 am
^.^ Thanks, So i removed the tidbit about the Conclave, are there any other suggestions?
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 3:03 am
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Girls are like phones.
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Nickname/Alias: Katie
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Appearance: {Do not fill in this blank, only those underneath it. If you have a picture, you may use it as well.}
Height: 5'1
Weight: 103 Pounds
Body Type: Short
Skin type: White
Eye Color: Ocean Blue
Hair Color: Brunette
Hair Style: Straight with bangs that curve down towards her cheeks.
Accessories: Crown hat with ribbons on the end.
Clothing: White top and a black skull belt that holds up her pink miniskirt.
Unusual Body Art/Parts: A marking of a heart right onto her left cheek.
Race:
Theme Song(s):
Cant Back Down - Demi Lovato.
Break Away - Kelly Clarkson
Work of Art - Demi Lovato
Significant Trait: Nervous wreck
Quotes:"If at first you don't succeed, try again but don't ever stop trying.""How did my trust fall apart from you?""I will always protect the people I love no matter how bad the situation is.""Why did you bother to save me?""Keep the fire inside you burning, if it goes out, relight it."
Good/Evil: Good
Homeworld: ?
Main Weapon: Bow and arrow
Additional Equipment: Sword
Job Class: Archer
Attack Abilities: Rope shot- The bow shoots out an arrow with string attached into it. It raps around the enemy to trap them.Glowing blow- When she shoots an arrow with this skill, the bow will blow up onto the enemy, causing dust to sweep around to them and into there eyes so they cannot see for the time being.Dragon bang When this skill is used, the arrow being shot will stop right next to the enemy, let out a dragons body, and it will bite into the enemy.
Support Abilities:Healing- She can heal by holding the bow to her heart, deep into though of healing. Usually takes time unless needed heavily.Shield Her arrow can also form as a shield, but can only be struck 10 times at most before it is sent back to her bow.
Passive Abilities: .Name? - The light in her bow can ward off any weak dark magic. It will not work if its real strong dark magic.
Limit Breaks: {These are attacks that you can only use when your character is near defeat, as in his/her last few HP.} Arrow blow up- An arrow that she sends to blow up to the enemy, although, it also effects her. It reaches both sides and must not be used till she is almost finished. The blow will force her to faint.
Strengths: Katie always brings the people she loves before herself, and protects them no matter what happens. She tends to get stronger as her anger inside her burns. But also may drag her down since her thoughts overcome her and she cannot stop. She can sense how the person feels deep inside.
Weaknesses: She hates bugs as her biggest fear. If one touches her, she will go nuts and scream her lungs out till its off. When she is sick, she tends to not be able to move, being paralyzed from it. She also loses energy from it. If a friend turns on her, she will never stop crying, and hide into corners.
Personality: Katelyn is very caring and chooses another persons life before hers, for example strangers and friends. To her, without the people she loves in her life, there is no point to living life anymore. You can't have an apple without a seed after all. Not much can make her mad, unless you break that one spot in her heart that will force her to rage. She tends to be scary when she rages. But you are able to calm her down. She fears a lot of things, but will never tell. She is the type to hold things back and never say it unless in a bad situation. Fighting is one thing she hates, but must do. When she is close to killing someone, she tends to feel bad for the person and often runs off.
Flaws: Childish; Disturbed; Dubious; Envious; Erratic; Fierce; Fools Love; Gullible; Habit [When talking to someone that makes her feel nervous, she has a habit of stuttering her words out into gibberish]; Humorless; Idiotic; Ignorant; Immature; Impish; Klutz; Lazy; Liar; Nervous; Obsessive; Overprotective; Phobia [Fear of blood and all bugs that she tries to hide]; Sarcastic; Soft-hearted; Unlucky; Bigmouth.
Likes: Friends, animals
Dislikes: Bugs, haters, mean people
Fears: Bugs, violence, storms, blood
Family: Mom: Lost
Dad: Dead
Younger sister: Lost
Bio: Katelyn was born in a very small town, not many people knew of this town as barely anyone was born there. She loved her sister dearly. And would never let anything happen to her. Katelyn made a promise that no matter how bad the situation is, she would always be there for her sister. To make sure she never breaks this promise, she wrote the word "Always" on her arm. Her sister always seemed to look at the word she wrote after her parents got into fights, Katelyn trying to break it up. Her mom was a drunk, while her dad was a thief. Every night they would do all kind of bad things, that they'd have to move all the time so the cops couldn't catch them. Both the sisters were caught between two wrongs trying to do right.
Katelyn and her sister would constantly stay up all night, and cry together in each others arms, telling themselves everything would end up ok. But it was only a matter of time before this new promise had torn into pieces. They were quietly sitting upstairs, when all of a sudden, they heard the door slam, glass shattering, and both their parents yelling also with new voices. Katelyn, being the bigger sister, trying to protect the younger sister, walked downstairs to find out what was happening. When she got down, no body was there. The quiet had arose once again. She wandered towards the door way, she noticed a man in black standing there. "Who are you?" She shouted at the man. But once she blinked, and opened her up yet again, he was gone. Gasping, she ran back upstairs as fast as she could, and found out her sister was now also missing. Her promise had been destroyed, she could no longer protect her sister. Katelyn now trembling to her knees, took her phone out of her pocket and called 911. As she waiting for someone to pick up, she could hear nothing. When suddenly, she heard a deep voice breathing into the phone. "Calling 911? Hmp. I am able to block your phone from calling this number. Don't bother trying. Your family are long gone by now, what a shame." Screaming, she chucked the phone as far as she could. As soon as it hit the wall, it cracked into halves, the voice stopping. Katelyn breathing heavily, held onto the wall, tears of mirth sliding down her cheeks. "Julie...I miss you. I need you, don't you see? How can I live life without you?" After that had been said, she thought she had been hearing noises, or not? She had no idea what to become of this. For she had heard her sisters voice, it seeming to say "I miss you too, please don't leave me..." She began to feel very weak, and fell to the floor, fainting.
She now travels from place to place, hoping to find her long lost sister who she misses dearly. Katelyn knew living without her sister would be difficult, but she would just have to try. She went to school a lot, but everyone had seemed to bully her. She never really found a true friend. She fears everyday to be bullied, some even go as far as to lock her in lockers since all bullies know she's not very good in small areas. At times she tends to skip classes to get away from the biggest bullies, only leading to them stalking her in the halls. She cries day and night, hoping for someone to come by and make the light in her day shine. But can this possibly happen? Without her sister? No one seems to know.
Sample Post: One sweet day, Katelyn had spotted a small black shadow. It seemed to stalk her as she tried to walk away. She quickly climbed a tree, staring at her bow and arrow that had been passed down from her grandpa's generations. She quickly took hold of the arrow, bending it back on the bow and aimed for the shadow. Before her eyes, it was close to her face as it had jumped toward the branch she was on, claws reaching out for her heart. Gasping, she let go of the arrow as fast as she could and watched as it disappeared into nothing. "That was way too close." She thought as she sat her butt down onto the tree branch.╚════════════════════╝
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We love to be held, talked too,
but if you press the wrong button
you'll be disconnected!
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 5:32 pm
REMOVING the following abilities due to them being offensive magic (which is useless to Cory); Indomitable Ragnarok & Indomitable Ardor. Also removing Indomitable Arcanum, as Engine Rush serves as a more powerful (and less taxing) version of the attack. On that note, adding new abilities to Rev Tech: Quote: Attack Abilities Zanmatou Engine- Cory revs up the Revblade and dashes through a target for a chance to inflict Auto-KO or zero damage. Causes the Revblade to overheat, preventing revs for a turn.
Rev Raid- Cory revs the engine on his sword before launching it at an opponent. Can either resummon it or wait for it to return.
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:14 pm
Jiraal approved. Katie Bear: The format of your profile was inconsistent, so I went through and made it fit the template (such as descriptions not being bolded after categories, the entire thing being center-aligned, et cetera). Otherwise, I don't see much issue. Your grammar is a bit strange, but that can be worked on in the RP. As a precaution, could you give me a list of flaws that the character has? As a reference, go ahead and use this site: List of Potential Roleplay Character Flaws. EDIT: Actually, there are a few ability issues. For your Healing ability, it says it takes time unless it's heavily needed. So when in danger, it happens faster? Also, how does your Shield ability work? As for the Bio, was her world lost? Is she in Traverse Town? What happened to get her into the story? EDIT2: Also, I can't allow you in unless you read the rules, so be sure to do that.
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 3:17 pm
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Girls are like phones.
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I meant like, if in danger, it comes a tad bit faster. Not much because it takes up lots of energy.
Like, if she can picture a shield in her mind, her bow has the power to create a barrier like shield.
Her world was pretty much lost. It was one that not as much people have been too or seen. When she ran away, the world has disappeared into thin air. To get her into the story, she ran away from her lost world, into a world where heartless are filled of, journeying to find her siblings and see what the worlds were like.
Is there anything else you want me to change? I can change the entire story if you don't think it fits. I rushed that a tad bit before, but I'll try and get more deep into it if you'd really like. Also, I have read the rules before. It's just, I have a short term memory. When I read things, I don't always remember things. D; So, sorry if I ever screw anything up beforehand.
>3<
For the flaws, how many would you like me to give her? And where do you want me to add them? Couldn't figure this out. D< ╚════════════════════╝
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We love to be held, talked too,
but if you press the wrong button
you'll be disconnected!
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 9:13 pm
No, besides that, everything looks good ^^ If you can get more in depth, than certainly- I can't think of any instance where having too much story is a bad thing. As for the rules, try to go through them one more time, just to be sure. There are certain warnings in them that will tell you what needs to be done. As for your flaws, I don't need a specific number. Just go through the list and pick the ones that she, as a character, would have, and list them between the Personality and the Likes, using this code (that you can just copy and paste into the profile). [b][u]Flaws:[/u][/b] List Flaws here
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Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 1:00 pm
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Girls are like phones.
•. ❤`•.¸¸.•´´¯`••.¸¸.•´´¯`•´❤╔════════════════════╗ Okays, I think I will redo it then. It kinda seems pretty crappy right now. o3o
Lol sure, but just going to like glance over it a bit. Reading long things takes me forever. :c
Okeys, but I will get to that after I finish up the bio. When I'm done with that, I'll edit the flaws into this post so you can know when I'm done. :<
[b][u]Flaws:[/u][/b] Childish- Marked by or indicating a lack of maturity; puerile.
Disturbed- Showing some or a few signs or symptoms of mental or emotional illness. Confused, disordered, neurotic, troubled.
Dubious- Fraught with uncertainty or doubt. Undecided, doubtful, unsure.
Envious- Showing extreme cupidity; painfully desirous of another's advantages; covetous, jealous.
# Erratic- Deviating from the customary course in conduct or opinion; eccentric: erratic behavior. Eccentric, bizarre, outlandish, strange.
Marked by extreme intensity of emotions or convictions; inclined to react violently; fervid; "fierce loyalty"; "in a tearing rage"; "vehement dislike"; "violent passions".
Fools Love- A person who is always falling in love or believes they are in love, for the wrong person or even multiple people (usually one after another), and typically love at first sight. Star-crossed, ill-fated-love.
Gullible- Will believe any information given, regardless of how valid or truthful it is, easily deceived or duped.
Habit- A rather revolting personal habit. (List habit- picks nose, spits tobacco everywhere, drools profusely, bad body odor, etc.) - When talking to someone that makes her feel nervous, she has a habit of stuttering her words out into gibberish.
Humorless- The inability to find humor in things, and most certainly in themselves.
Idiotic- Marked by a lack of intelligence or care; foolish or careless.
Ignorant- Lacking knowledge or information as to a particular subject or fact. Showing or arising from a lack of education or knowledge.
Immature- Emotionally undeveloped; juvenile; childish.
Impish- Naughtily or annoyingly playful.
Klutz- Clumsy. Blunderer.
Lazy- Resistant to work or exertion; disposed to idleness.
Liar- Compulsively and purposefully tells false truths more often than not. A person who has lied or who lies repeatedly.
Nervous- Easily agitated or distressed; high-strung or jumpy.
Obsessive- An unhealthy and compulsive preoccupation with something or someone.
Overprotective- To protect too much; coddle.
Phobia- They have a severe form of fear when it comes to this one thing. (Dark, Spiders, Cats, tight spaces, etc. List specific phobia.- Fear of blood and all bugs that she tries to hide.
Sarcastic- A subtle form of mockery in which an intended meaning is conveyed obliquely.
Soft-hearted- Having softness or tenderness of heart that can lead them into trouble; susceptible of pity or other kindly affection. They cannot resist helping someone they see in trouble, suffering or in need, and often don't think of the repercussions or situation before doing so.
Unlucky- Marked by or causing misfortune; illfated. Destined for misfortune; doomed.
Bigmouth- A loudmouthed or gossipy person. ╚════════════════════╝
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We love to be held, talked too,
but if you press the wrong button
you'll be disconnected!
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Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 1:02 pm
Well, you only need to re-read the PLL rules, which should be on the first page under 'Rules'. I don't think they're that long- I hope you don't think I mean the giant thread for RP guidelines! xD
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