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 Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 7:29 pm
That was insanely good. I loved the first paragraph and how you made everything seem to slow down. I thought that Seaphron was going to kill "Kraid" but it actually failed and that took me off by surprise. Which is good. The rest was written terrifically, as well. I really liked how you presented the characters, especially Maul and Tatsuman. It was epic. I'd definitely say that it's better than my own writing.
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:15 pm
Thanks a lot, that is a big compliment, and you only think your writing is inferior because you wrote it, as I find mine inferior to yours.
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:29 pm
Yes! FINALLY! ~goes to read~
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:35 pm
That really was a great chapter. Nice work Sauvie it's what we have been waiting for.
Best line ever! Quote: seemingly to show that nothing was damaged except for the ax, and probably Seaphron's ego.
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:36 pm
Thanks Seaphron, glad you liked it, and yes that is a good line... mrgreen
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:48 pm
That was a great chapter. You inspired me to write another chapter of my small reader population story.
Later, not now >>
But that really was a great chapter. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:52 pm
Thanks Aku, glad I inspired somebody to do somthing that dosnet involve the words speed or run... or revenge.
Man now I am going to have to top this one... great I am in the groove so I am a writing again.
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 12:45 pm
-Smoke capsulses explode, as the dense blanket clears out a shadowy image takes form-
Excellent Chapter Sauvie!
-It is none other than the magnificent Zen Rider-
I know I don't post about your story, EVER, but thats because I only read it from time to time, but this chapter warrants some attention.
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 12:50 pm
Zen Rider -Smoke capsulses explode, as the dense blanket clears out a shadowy image takes form- Excellent Chapter Sauvie! -It is none other than the magnificent Zen Rider- I know I don't post about your story, EVER, but thats because I only read it from time to time, but this chapter warrants some attention. Oh no the magnificent Zen Rider... Get Him! scream Thanks, glad you liked the chapter, and I would have another if I didnt hurt my arm so typing is slow. You commented on my last two chapters... over a 2 month span sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 1:12 pm
Get ready for another comment ina bout a good 2-3 months from now wink
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 1:12 pm
Zen Rider Get ready for another comment ina bout a good 2-3 months from now wink ouch, that was harsh, I have gotten back into the story so ou will too xd
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 1:23 pm
hm... I like the Story Sauvie but I'm completely at a loss in certain points because it doesn't make much sense at times xd I'm lost in a labyrinth of Grammar =(
And also, did I just get like... Abandoned? Teleport Seaphron out and I'm still laying around on the ground somewhere o_O
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Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.]
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 1:42 pm
Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.] hm... I like the Story Sauvie but I'm completely at a loss in certain points because it doesn't make much sense at times xd I'm lost in a labyrinth of Grammar =(
And also, did I just get like... Abandoned? Teleport Seaphron out and I'm still laying around on the ground somewhere o_O I know, I am new at this, and Grammar is a pain, and as for your question no you werent Chapter 8 . In a last ditch effort to gain some time he threw the two daggers he had at the already damaged eye of Kraid causing blood to gush from his eye socket. While Kraid was blinded by two daggers in his eye, Seaphron took the time to drape Draken over his shoulder and he brought him to safety right next to the others, Wait you read this!?... thanks
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 1:59 pm
Sauvie Wait you read this!?... thanks
on the ground. with the others. It's still on the ground. xd
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Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.]
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 2:05 pm
Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.] Sauvie Wait you read this!?... thanks
on the ground. with the others. It's still on the ground. xd
Yeah, but it's not on the ground near the homicidal maniac... but then there is Trenn confused ... man either way
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