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I agree with Brina, Arrikanez. It would be nice if you would complete the storylines that you start.

Also, I highly suggest using magic and fantastic element ONLY if they are making a point of some kind. NOT if they are there just for random coolness value.

Finally, drama and angst in RP are good. Too much drama and angst, however, starts getting ridiculous. It's something like crying WOLF too many times - people stop believing you.

Now, Sire was originally DRAWN to be a djinn based fa'e. His appearance should be proof for that. If you do not like it then you should sit down and think VERY HARD about what other story he could be, that still relates to his teen quest plot. There is a lot of legends and mythology related to djins and fire creatures on the web (GOOGLE!). Why not use them, as opposed to make up stuff that has nothing to do with fire, djinns, like vampires?

My main suggestion would be to go and read up on the creature you decided to base Sire off now. This will give you a lot of material to write about. It will also give the story of Sire some coherance. And please, keep to the mythology. It will give your stories a stable base to build upon.

Also, you can't delete the teen quest. Sire completed it, he grew up. It's a done deal.

Okey, and to everybody else who's listening: PLEASE stay away from vampires. A fa'e is alive. It can't be a vampire. Neither can it be an incarnated vampire, b/c they are dammned. That's kinda the point of vampires. And if a Fa'e is EVER embraced, it becomes a vampire and stops beign a Fa'e. Not to mention that the vampire that embraces it willbe royally ******** up for a bit.

EDIT: Oh, forgot. Another suggestion would be to limit the amount of NPC that you introduce in your story lines. Fa'e should interact primarily with other Fa'e, not with an entire army of character nobody but you knows anything about.

EDIT2: Maaaaan, it looks like we shoudl really, like, write a FAQ of Roleplaying suggestions for guardians that get stuck.

Oookay, Arri. You want blunt? Here goes.

For one: you deserve a Fa'e just as much as the rest of us. That's not to say you're especially deserving or undeserving. Really, while Fa'e are wonderful pets, they're not some sort of trophy you had to earn. They're a pet offered on Gaia, just like all the rest. So, yes. No one "deserves" a Fa'e, except perhaps with the exception of Prox, who won a Fa'e through a contest that was NOT easy to win. It's pretty much a matter of have, and have-nots. I don't doubt the fact that there are tons of people who could do Dil just as well as I can, if not better. But does that matter? Nope, 'cause he's mine.

Should you change Sire's story? No. Especially not for something as boring and cliché as vampires. Djinns are really, really interesting, if you ask me. They fit his appearance well, and it's not a mythos one sees all too often. Compare the number of Greek Fa'e (I love 'em all, BTW, XD) to the number of Arabic Fa'e. Sire's pretty much the only one, huh? Makes him a lot more interesting. The closest anyone gets is Aadil, who just has an Arabic name.

Your RP skills need work, though. You're a good writer, and sometimes, a lot of fun to write with. I had a blast doing that uncle saving RP, and you did a good job organizing and running it. However, every time - EVERY TIME - I see Sire RPed, he's doing one of the following:

1) Angsting.
2) Commiting suicide.
3) Fainting because he's seriously wounded.
4) Kissing some random guy.

It gets old, it gets repetitive, and it gets ridiculous. I see your actions in RP as self-glorifying, as if you're trying to steal all the attention for Sire to fulfill something you yourself crave. Drama is good! It's a lot of fun to write. But when all a character does is drama, drama, drama, it creates this wall between them and other RPers. There are times I will not bring Aadil into the thread simply because Sire is there. There are other times that I will bring him into the thread BECAUSE Sire is there, just to have Dil point out how silly a situation is.

You also need to work on making Sire a more believable character. Look at Dil's comments on Sire in his opinion post. They're obviously exaggerated to match with the character, but there are also some very valid points in there. You tend to jump the gun much too quickly with the character - he falls in and out of relationships like nobody's business. And sometimes this is all right, depending on the character. However, Sire - as far as I can tell - has not been developed in a manner to make this seem like part of his character. For instance, Sire fell in love witih Dil, after they had spoken twice, give or take. Seriously. How does that make sense? Not only is Aadil probably the biggest a*****e in the Fa'e, but his reaction towards Sire should've CLEARLY been a turn off. The reason Nyoka likes him is because he is not an a** around her - I mean, yes, in a way he is, but he's not a mean a**. Dil was giving Sire deathlooks, and he was all, "OMG DIL!"

That makes absolutely no sense. No person in their right mind would fall in love with an a*****e after having only met them twice.

And you trying to be a glory hog during MY teen quest was not cool. Not. Cool. Obviously, I had a sequence of events I was following. Dil was SUPPOSED to be executed. You offering up Sire's life, without proper development I might add, was ridiculous. Even Nyoka - who by that time was in love with Aadil, and he with her, for the most part - didn't do that. That's jumping the gun. That's really, really, REALLY jumping the gun. And the fact that you were trying to take the attention away from Dil to yourself during his own quest was just insane. You need to be sensitive to the fact that somtimes other characters deserve attention too, ESPECIALLY if it's their quest, man. That's a characters time to shine; don't butt in. Play your part, and then back off. And the way you justified it was even worse. "Every RP has curve balls" or something along those lines. Yes, if you're doing random HQ RP, that's FINE. But the quest was obviously being planned out by me, and you had no right to go and try to disrupt events.

And what was amazing was the fact that, not even two days after Sire had offered to DIE for Aadil, he seemed to have moved on to Anen. What the hell? That's crazy. I mean, talk about rebounding. Jumping the gun again.

Stop making Sire so damn perfect. Is there anything Sire can't do? Guitar, sketching, fighting - you name it, he's got it down pat. Dil can't do jack s**t. He's good with his knife, but he's got this kick a** spear and he ends up completely confused by it. Dil suffers from the physical flaw of not being very strong, but he makes up for it in speed and raw energy. I've yet to see any flaw in Sire. A perfect example of this is Sire "letting" Dil win that fight they had. Come on. That's ridiculous. Yes, we were talking on AIM at the moment, but we both agreed that Sire lost. So why make Sire look like a martyr and go "Well, I let you lost so you could look good in front of Nyoka." That just TOTALLY sucks out the fun of it and makes my character look like a complete wuss. Sire losing was not a bad thing, 'cause he put up one hell of a fight. Dil won 'cause he played dirty, really. And it wouldn't be out of character for Dil to say, "Yeah, wel, I let you win!" out of spite when it clearly was not the case, had he lost, but Sire doing it was just... random. And, again, self-glorifying. You need to be more aware of the characters Sire is RPing with and focus less on your own once in a while.

For a loooonnng period of time, I was very angry, because Sire ended up practically cloning Dil's personality, and a lot of people agree with me on this account. However, I've noticed recently that he's no longer a Dil-clone, so kudos on that. Please keep it up, one Dil is more than enough.

Arri, you've got a whole shitload of potential. However, the problems you do have can be devestating to a RP. I know you can fix 'em up, though. Trust me, I wouldn't offer critique if I didn't think you weren't capable of improving.

At the moment, I am more than slightly drugged up on cold meds. If I think of anything else, I'll add it. I'm sorry this seems harsh, but you asked for it.

I'd like to "ditto" what DFA has said. I don't really know what else to say - as I have my-fa'e-being-dramatic "issues" as well. So. Yeah. Can't throw stones xD

I must say that I do think you're a good writer, though. Had to add that.

Actually, I liked the djinn concept too. It just seemed too similar to something I'd already seen done. Mouse had a very good idea, and I got off-track with the whole Juridian B.S. And that was only because I made up Kihlar in my mind, and had to have somewhere to put him. Using Sire for this purpose was a poor idea on my part.

Thank you for your kind support, Drac. :: Hugs :: Your words are a bit of a wakeup call. Thank you.

:: Snickers a bit :: As much as that idea is wonderful, and IS a good idea Rik, I can't just delete a part of Sire's life thus far. I've already screwed everything for the Youth quest as it is - but I can't go back. I have to work around my mistakes and try to correct my errors. It's like a challange. And since I love Sire more than I probably should - It's going to be one I embrace with open arms.

1) Once again, that's me wanting to be part of the storyline, and physically inserting myself in it. I've been playing drama for so long that I really don't know HOW to do anything else. When I DO do anything else, Sire and myself are either given passing glances, or ignored entirely. Not saying I don't deserve it - just saying I... I dunno... Maybe I do deserve that, for being such a "cry-wolf" in the first place.

2) This is because much of my storylines I base on dreams I have, and RPs I do with myself in my room. I realize it sounds crazy - but I play both characters, out loud, doing things. I realize also that I should write it down - but I've had bad experiences where people will ask me where I came up with that, I'll tell them, then they'll laugh at me. If there's one thing I've had MORE than enough of, it's being teased. I apologize.

Oh Mouse... I'm so sorry. I never meant for it to sound like that. But it did, and you can't erase the past. Silly goose... I was JEALOUS of you. Jealousy tends to make people do dumb things - i.e. start this thread. You're a wonderful person, and I wouldn't DREAM of doing anything to upset you - which it looks like I have. I'm so sorry. I don't know how I can make it up to you. I'll try... dammit I'll try.