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 Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 8:26 am
Silver Skull Nice start. I'm liking all of the characters up to now, except that Masamune guy he's a jerk. wink I know isnt he wink , I am gonna start typing now
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:50 pm
I'm a medical expert? whee
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:51 pm
G.E.N.O. I'm a medical expert? whee yeah thank a coin toss for that
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:53 pm
I'd rather be an inventor/weapons designer, but okay... domokun
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:54 pm
G.E.N.O. I'd rather be an inventor/weapons designer, but okay... domokun it was either that or a scapegoat I allready have a weapon creator. So what do you think about the prologue?
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:55 pm
Sauvie G.E.N.O. I'd rather be an inventor/weapons designer, but okay... domokun it was either that or a scapegoat I allready have a weapon creator. So what do you think about the prologue? iz eet meeh?
Just kidding, I don't care what I am.
If I am in it at all.
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:56 pm
Lifeless-Fox Sauvie G.E.N.O. I'd rather be an inventor/weapons designer, but okay... domokun it was either that or a scapegoat I allready have a weapon creator. So what do you think about the prologue? iz eet meeh?
Just kidding, I don't care what I am.
If I am in it at all. your in it
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:56 pm
Sauvie Lifeless-Fox Sauvie G.E.N.O. I'd rather be an inventor/weapons designer, but okay... domokun it was either that or a scapegoat I allready have a weapon creator. So what do you think about the prologue? iz eet meeh?
Just kidding, I don't care what I am.
If I am in it at all. your in it Sehwheat.
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 11:39 am
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 11:43 am
Not bad, I liked it quite a bit especially how you introduced Skitty that was clever. Grammer is still an issue but it is quite a bit better than it was before hand. Nice work Sauvie, and keep up the good work. Will all of your chapters be about this size?
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 11:45 am
lol That chapter was pretty funny.
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 11:49 am
Seaphron Not bad, I liked it quite a bit especially how you introduced Skitty that was clever. Grammer is still an issue but it is quite a bit better than it was before hand. Nice work Sauvie, and keep up the good work. Will all of your chapters be about this size? thanks I am pretty sick today so my friendship with Grammar is even a bit worse today and I am trying to improve it, the chapters will most likely around this size so they dont end up confusing me or the readers because I tend to put my genuine confusion into writing and make it harder to read. I am desperate for a title though I doubt people care right now but I suck at titles and I will think more of my story when I have a title. I tend to warm up to Grammar the sooner I get into a story so It should progressivly get better
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 11:53 am
Lavableman lol That chapter was pretty funny. Thanks do you have a preference on any funny lines?, Just curious because I can add more of a prefered style
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 12:03 pm
Sauvie thanks I am pretty sick today so my friendship with Grammar is even a bit worse today and I am trying to improve it, the chapters will most likely around this size so they don't end up confusing me or the readers because I tend to put my genuine confusion into writing and make it harder to read. I am desperate for a title though well that sucks that you argh I doubt people care right now but I suck at titles and I will think more of my story when I have a title. I tend to warm up to Grammar the sooner I get into a story so It should progressively get better Ah that sucks that you are sick. I am glad that your grammar does improve in time I can already see so in this chapter from the prologue. I didn't think it was confusing but that's just me just a heads up. As for a title I have been thinking (uhoh) and I have come up with a couple titles I don't know if they will fit later on but I like them. The Cult that We Are, Heroes of a Family, and Story of a Cult. Like I said don't know if they fit with you but I like them. I will come up with something again later, if you don't like them.
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 12:07 pm
Nice Ideas Seaphron I dont think that those would work with the relative story planned though I am currently thinking of titles but as I said before all I have so far are really bad puns
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