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 Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 7:31 pm
Hey Svener. Kastor's story is really getting good. I read 7, and 8 a little while ago. I thought the Dominic and Anemone stuff was good but the chapter at the hospital is great.
Spoiler: I really thought Renton was gonna lose his arm there. I was trying to figure out how the story would go after that. Tell your brother that whole chapter is priceless stuff. Talk about suspense. End spoiler
Grade A stuff.
As far as critism goes.... dude needs a proof read for grammar and missing letters. I really couldn't complain about anything else though.
Very happy. And I can't wait to see how Konner ties in later. xd
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Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 7:35 pm
Can you tell I've been spacing for a while. I just saw the post about you being Kaster-recent. wondered about that. cool
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Posted: Wed Oct 18, 2006 3:56 pm
Lol, yeah, I was just a little confused, but its all good, really nice compliment. I do proof read my stories, but my mind just fills in the spots. I went back and read bits and pieces of my earliers chapters, and noticed alot of pathetic gramar mistakes, and misspellings. I'm hoping at one point to get myself a beta reader, but still, thanks for the compliment. It helps to know that your doing something right. And also knowing what you're doing wrong.
At the moment, chapter eleven might be coming out tonight. It deppends whether I'm going to be too tired to correctly proof read it or not, but we'll see.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 4:13 pm
I forgot to mention that chapter eleven IS out. Hope you guys enjoy it.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 10:54 pm
*thumbs up*
"Good luck with that next chapter!" He says, as he watches his brother peck away at the keys
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 11:11 pm
Goodness, you're going to torment me forever...
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Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 10:52 pm
Wow, I haven't updated this in a while. Chapter twelve and thirteen are out, and fourteen will hopefully be out by tomorrow.
Thanks to all of those who are reading my story.
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Posted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 10:34 pm
Geez, just in case some one cares. It just so happens that Chapter 14 is out!!! Wooo Wooo, jump for joy, because I'm happy about it : D. Well, have fun.
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Posted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 10:39 pm
svener Geez, just in case some one cares. It just so happens that Chapter 14 is out!!! Wooo Wooo, jump for joy, because I'm happy about it : D. Well, have fun. I do ^^ (I'll read it later cause i havn't sweatdrop ) You keep postin them and there gunna be read
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Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2006 8:22 pm
This story is awsome, i finally finish chapters 1-14 and can't wait for more
~SPOILERS~
It's so sad how konner dies, i'll miss him. He was one of my favorite characters crying .
I also found it scary when Eureka gets taken over by the new LFO and almost kills renton by stabing it's blade right through the 808's(is it 808?) cockpit and it barly missed renton!!
~End SPOILERS~
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Posted: Fri Dec 01, 2006 4:42 pm
Woot, Thanks Renton, you've lifted my spirits! Chapter fifteen is out, and it should have come out a long time ago. I had finished it, I just never got around to proof reading it and then submitting it. I blame the Wii, that console with Zelda: twilight princess is just to hard to resist.
Oh, yes, I do believe it is the 808, the orange LFO. I just barely learned that it wasn't the 606.
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Posted: Fri Dec 01, 2006 4:55 pm
You know I can tell you alot about the shows but one thing I can't keep straight for the life of me is which one is the 808 and which is the 606.. or is it the 909.. yeah no wait... okay the 505 is the.... fudge.
Great story Svener. Loving every minute of it.
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Posted: Fri Dec 01, 2006 6:12 pm
Tolly You know I can tell you alot about the shows but one thing I can't keep straight for the life of me is which one is the 808 and which is the 606.. or is it the 909.. yeah no wait... okay the 505 is the.... fudge. Great story Svener. Loving every minute of it. All I can remember is that the 909 is pink so it's hollands, always getting the 808 and 606 confused. it hurts my brain stressed
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Posted: Fri Dec 01, 2006 9:08 pm
Yeah, I just looked it up... apparently I wasn't wrong, the 606 is the orange one, and the 808 is the blue one. This is great news, I may rejoice.
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Posted: Fri Dec 01, 2006 10:26 pm
svener Yeah, I just looked it up... apparently I wasn't wrong, the 606 is the orange one, and the 808 is the blue one. This is great news, I may rejoice. If I can remember that then i'll be fine. I LOVED CHAPTER 15!!!!! it's SO good, I want more!!! crying but there not done yet. If only it could be published. xd
Gekko-State Green Color
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