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 Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 4:52 pm
Thanks Les. I'm not sure what high school stereotype I was leaning her towards, but now that I think about it, she defintely does sort of conform to a "punk" ideal. XDDD
I'll be sure to work on that, emphasize that aspect of her life- I think I'll end up leaning her more towards the preppy punk look that's oh so popular right now. XD
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 5:09 pm
Alright, I'm not islander but here goes.
First I'm not sure the nonmorphic will fly with the staff. I think nonmorphic serums are reserved for animals that are human sized or above. (I think thats in the rules somewhere.)
She's younger than the typical islander, thats good.
This closet geek thing I'm not too sure about. At sixteen double lifes are tough to lead she might have a guilty geeky hobby but I doubt she has time to put alot of effort into it. Most of the activities you mention are not something to go and enjoy on her own. Especially for a person that is afraid of being alone.
You have to address why Moreau wants her on the island. What attracted some one's attention to make this girl, who has lots of potentially troublesome family and friends, important to feral labs.
Its a good start.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 5:14 pm
Well, for the closet geek thing... Honestly, I based it on myself. And most of my friends are like that as well- they're popular people, but you go to their house and it's all anime and manga books and other "geeky" things.
The nonmorphic thing... Yah, I know I need to change that. I'm not too familiar with how "anthros" typically look though, so any suggestions would be welcomed to an extreme degree, because it's been bothering me. ^^
And I just redid the "how she got to the island" in the first place today... so I'll take what you said and work and ponder on that. Thank you so much for the critique!
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 5:32 pm
Another thing I thought I'd toss out there is that you don't have to write out how each stage will be. It's completely up to the artist as to what each stage will look like, as well as the finished product. That is why they ask what you're ideal 100% is. It will never be 100% what you thought/wanted it to be.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:13 pm
Thanks Les. ^^ I'm going to take that section out, as it was bothering me. I just saw quite a few other people did it, and... I dunno. But now that I know it isn't required, I'd much rather let someone else be creative with it. XD
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:52 pm
*writes down notes frantically* Okay. So a checklist of this should read...
1. Switch appearances around- plain bits go first, then the not quite as unappealing parts.
2. Give reason to the sudden moodswings- possibilities include bipolar disorder added onto hormones (will explore others).
As for the island thing... that's the part I had the most difficulty with, and I would love it if you could help me work on it. ^^ I know it sounds rather weak... So yes, help would be appreciated. ^^
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Posted: Fri Sep 01, 2006 2:54 pm
I was thinking about this last night.
My friend attempted suicide a few months ago, and they sent her off to a "personality/confidence building" camp that's in the middle of nowhere Utah. Perhaps Elizabeth does threaten suicide in one of her fits of being over dramatic, and her parents speak to a psycologist about that threat. Said psycologist, working for Dr. Moreau, goes over her file, and finds that she seems to be a fit candidate for the island due to her age, phsyical condition, and the personality her parents described. The psychologist suggests the personality building camp, which happens to be on the island. After speaking at length with her parents, giving them several brochures and telephone numbers, they agree to let their daughter go. And boom, suddenly she's on the island.
What do you think?
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Posted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 3:21 pm
Eee, awesome. biggrin thank you. *goes to work on quest thready stuff*
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Posted: Sat Sep 16, 2006 5:44 pm
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Posted: Sat Sep 23, 2006 5:13 pm
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Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2006 4:54 pm
Mmm... Adding new quest idea soon. :3
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Posted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 9:38 am
Revamped quest. biggrin Yayyyyy. biggrin
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