Comments and Critiques: I actually really like this Fakemon, but my only issue is the mythology just seems a little... Jurassic Park-y with the eggs. Or perhaps the better comparison is with Mass Effect's Rachni. It's also worth noting that the vast majority of the fakemon is borrowed from the source game, Draken Gard(or however it's spelled.), and the sheer ammount of it makes it lose a lot of points. Not to mention, it's unique move is just waaaaay too over powered. With any type advantage and/or item or ability buff, it could very easily turn into an insta-kill move.
Comments and Critiques: I find it odd that the origin states that when it finally evolved into Enigrake, that "this evolution would not be it's last" even though Enigrake is listed as it's final form. I also find the soul-splitting to be an odd, if interesting, concept. And there's also the issue of the size though. I mean, this thing is effing huge. I mean, it's supposed to be a piece of Giratina, but it's final form is almost ten times heavier than him. That's not only odd, but raises a number of questions, but that's a separate issue. Also, I find it even more odd that Arceus, the poke-God wouldn't notice Pokemon's equivalent of Satan putting something in the world, no matter how weak. And the connection to the legendary makes me need to take off a few points too. For anyone that gets a Giratina, this could get exceedingly awkward to deal with when, all of the ghoizards are pieces of its soul it gave up for whatever reason, and can be really jarring if it just doesn't make sense for however the person portrays their Giratina. It's origin in general is just kinda... out of place, I feel. Maybe if Ghoizard's origins were just a myth, and over the years the details just got so tangled that it's unclear if it ever really did involve Giratina, or if it even happened at all, then it might've scored higher. But, as it stands, I've gotta give it a relatively low score.
Comments and Critiques: So, firstly, the Voolt is frigging adorable, and secondly, it's evolutions remind me of Teriermon from digimon xD It's also interesting that it's got gender-specific moves and abilities. However, I find it very odd that only it's hidden ability changes as it evolves, and for that matter, that it only changes in it's final form. And, honestly, there's too many mouse pokemon in the the pokeverse as it is. Also, it's hidden ability in final form is kinda OP. Buffing damage, making attacks dual-typed, and making normal-type moves dragon-type is just way too much. If it was just one of those(maybe not the dual-type damage), it'd be a little more balanced, but as is, points redacted.
Comments and Critiques: As pretty as it is, I honestly don't feel there's anything particularly uniquely interesting with this pokemon. Just kinda seems like the standard-nine-tailed fox type. There's not too many things with an interesting spin, the typing of it's forms doesn't really make a lot of sense, as it would seem more appropriate for it to have a Dark-Typing instead of flying, and it's unique move is just kinda useless. Receiving double damage from all but four types, as well as healing your opponent, just kinda makes it worse than using Present. Also, it could have benefited from more in-depth lore. Moon magic isn't exactly a very interesting conception. Though you do get bonus points for giving a pokemon that can hover the ability to learn Fly.
Comments and Critiques: I don't really have much to pick at in this one, though the Flurry is ******** adorable. Also I love the fade-in-fade-out sprite.
Comments and Critiques: I dunno what, but I feel like I've seen this look somewhere before, though I don't remember the character. But that aside, I really don't like this pokemon that much. The idea is interesting, and there's certainly potential for it, it just kinda conflicts with my personal tastes.
Comments and Critiques: ...I must have this x.x But on a more serious note, like others have stated before, the typing leaves something to be desired. Psychic/Dark is a less-than-advantageous typing, and it would make a lot more sense for it to be a Ghost-type. But, that's not enough to really put me off that much.
Comments and Critiques: I can't really say too much about this, I just kinda like it. Kinda reminds me of a "North-Wind"-related creature or something. Though, I feel it could have benefited a little more from detail in the parts about it taking up traits from the pokemon who raise them, as well as an explanation as to why it can apparently fly. Dragon blood doesn't give you the ability to fly on it's own you know xD
Comments and Critiques: So, one issue I have with this one it's colors are a little... everywhere. They all just kinda clash together honestly. In addition, I find it very weird that it suddenly grows wings in it's final form, which don't seem to do anything. Not to mention, the origin story just has perhaps a little too many parallels with Mewtwo's creation, as others have mentioned. Also, the Dark Splicer I feel is a very important piece that's lacking needed information.
There's very little actually explaining why the flashiest Cicademy is chosen as the leader of a class. I get they like to show off treasures, but why is it the uniform and not the amount of trinkets collected? Also, I feel like Academantis would be better as a Bug/Fighting dual type simply because it would fit in with their behavior better.
Entry 7: Magikit/Grimarcane
Originality: 5/5 Detail: 5/5 Creativity: 5/5 Cohesiveness: 5/5 Overall Rating: 1/5 ---------------- Total: 21/25 Comments and Critique: This entry reminds me of a Fakemon I helped make awhile ago, so I'm highly uncomfortable with this one. I doubt the idea was stolen and molded, but still. I am biased on this one.
I...just don't like this one. Manmade, forced into creation by Team Rocket. Kind of cliche that Team Rocket would be behind the creation of a species after Mewtwo.
Hey you three~ Sorry to bother you but you must give reasons for your scorings in the comments and critiques section for ALL entries, even if it was a 5/5 all around perfect. Say what you liked about the entry so much that gave it a 5/5, but all entries need to have reasons why you rated them the way they did to know what was liked and what was not for future reference. If you could also take a look at the criteria of each section and base your scoring off of that please and thank you!
Comments and Critiques: I like this Fakemon, primarily because the Pokemon world could always use some more Dragon-types, especially since there aren’t that many out there that are purely Dragon. However, the mythos could be a bit more detailed and in-depth, and as Zero mentioned, something about the lore behind it seems a bit like Jurassic Park. Not that I really have anything against it! I certainly would’ve also liked more detail put into why Draginal has such a strong hate of other Dragon-types in general apart from a select few. There’s also a bit of a problem that I have in the sense that there aren’t any TMs listed that it can learn, which could be hindering for its movepool and potential to have more options than what is presented. Unless it isn’t supposed to learn any TM moves or whatever other reason for it, or unless the creator perhaps forgot to include them, the fact that it lacks any learnable TM moves is a fairly glaring problem to me, especially since there are TMs that just about every Pokemon in existence can learn. The fact that it's movepool is certainly not that varied to begin with just makes this even more of a hindrance as far as I'm concerned. I had to dock cohesiveness a little because of this, as well as the fact that its original attack, Fire Storm, does 250 base damage. I have no problems at all with powerful moves, but 250? Not even most unique attacks that legendaries have do that much damage without the added effects of items and super effectiveness, in this case Fire Storm could deal up to 500 damage with a x2 weakness, and 1000 with a x4. And if you pair up a x4 weakness with say… a 1.3 boost from an item that powers Fire-type moves, the maximum damage Fire Storm can deal would be a staggering 1300, enough to knock out even level 100 Pokemon in a single hit. Given, the only other move that canonically exists that deals 250 base damage is Explosion, and even then it comes at a repercussion of causing the user to faint while Fire Storm appears to have no known backlash or anything. While I do appreciate the creativity put into it, such as how the attack behaves differently depending on if it's night or day, my point still stands. The move is too overpowered in my opinion, perhaps 150 base damage would’ve been a bit more reasonable without making it so overwhelmingly powerful, or giving some sort of consequence for using it, like how Draco Meteor hits hard but comes at the cost of lowering the user's Special Attack by two stages. I also had to dock originality a bit because this is based off of another artist’s work instead of the creator’s, as Lucifer had mentioned previously. It’s understandable, of course, but it doesn’t leave much room for the Fakemon to be as original as it could have been. It had also been brought to my attention that this Fakemon pulls a lot of its material from the game Drakengard, even the aspect of it taking on a certain trait from its owner/trainer. It seems like most of this entry parallels with the character Mikhail, which causes it to greatly suffer both in originality and creativity. I would be able to accept it if only the image for reference was used, but the sheer amount of parallels between Draginal and the game itself are just too blatant to ignore altogether. There's a difference between borrowing from a certain source material and outright plagiarism. I won't give this entry a lower score than an 8 out of 25 because for one, dragons really strike a special chord with me and I've been hard-pressed to find anyone who doesn't like them. For two, this entry did have quite a bit of potential, but the fact that it rips so much from Drakengard just doesn't make me feel comfortable enough to give this one a higher rating. And also the fact that its lack of TM and Egg moves leave much to be desired along with its extremely overpowered custom move, this Pokemon just seems more like a legendary than anything else based on those alone.
Comments and Critiques: Quite an interesting backstory and Fakemon! I’ll admit that Enigrake seems like it can be more of a legendary-type Pokemon than anything, I mean it’s just HUGE. I’m pretty sure that how much it weighs can makes Groudon, which is canonically the heaviest Pokemon in existence (I think), look like its on a diet! I will agree that it might be fairly horrifying as far as the PokeVerse goes, but hey, I’d gladly accept darker, grittier themes being implemented into Pokemon anytime! Why Nintendo hasn’t gotten on adding such things to the actual Pokemon gameplay is beyond me, a more adult-oriented version of Pokemon would be a fairly welcome and refreshing change, don't you think? Now for the technical stuff. I really do love Ghoizard/Sprirake/Enigrake's design, and it's clear that the creator did the art and the spritework themselves, so kudos to them for that! The Ghost/Dragon typing is certainly fairly unique and effective, and really quite fitting for them due to their ties with Giratina. There's a lot of detail put into the lore behind them as well as their behavior and biology/physiology, and you can practically smell the creativity radiating off of this! Of course, the only problem I have is that Enigrake's weight is just ridiculous, it just wouldn't make sense to send out something that weighs as much as 7 tons against most opponents that are more or less much smaller in size and weight. I mean, Milotic is like 20 feet tall maximum and even then it doesn't weigh all that much, only about maybe 300 or so pounds, even though I'm sure there are some factors contributing to why that is, considering Nintendo's strange measurements and whatnot. Still, something like that doesn't really work too well in the PokeVerse I don't think, so I had to take a point off of cohesiveness here. Cohesiveness also took another hit primarily because of the way Ghoizard is set up. I mean, Night Shade isn't that bad of a move, but because it deals damage based on the Pokemon's level it just doesn't seem very practical for a Pokemon to learn it at such low levels. The fact that Ghoizard doesn't learn a new move until it gets to level 10 and it's stuck with only Leer and Night Shade until then just doesn't work well in the Pokemon Universe, not to mention in the guild it would be very difficult to train. I can understand that since they are the starting stage for this Fakemon, they're meant to be weak, but the way they're set up just makes them too weak as far as I'm concerned and not very practical to train until they reach level 15, which can take quite a bit of time in this guild. Originality also had to be docked a bit due to the close ties with Giratina, but it's something that I can get over for the most part because just about everything else in this entry is pretty solid as a whole. So apart from Ghoizard's rather faulty setup, Enigrake's ridiculous weight, and this line's ties being a bit too close to Giratina, I really like this entry as a whole and I do appreciate that the creator tried their best to make the whole idea behind this one their own.
Comments and Critiques: This Fakemon looks adorable, at least in its basic stage! I’m not sure if the art is original or if someone else’s work was used, but if it’s the latter then credit should be given to the original artist. Electric/Ice is certainly a unique typing too! I don’t think that I’ve ever seen that kind of combination before, even though I’m a bit surprised that it’s not Dragon-type because of how often it hangs around with them. A bit more detail could’ve been put into the backstory and origins, however. Convergence seems a bit overpowered as an ability in my opinion, considering that it ups the power of Ice and Electric moves, make Ice and Electric moves count as dual-typed attacks like Hawlucha's Flying Press, and makes Normal-type moves Dragon, which is a bit ridiculous in my opinion. It's just far too much as far as I'm concerned, and way too overpowered to really work as an actual ability. I could accept that it makes Normal-type moves into the Dragon-type, but anything more than that just makes it just plain overpowered. So I had to take a few points out of cohesiveness for that. I suppose it does balance out in the sense that only Terravoolt can have that hidden ability, but my point still stands. And I had to dock originality for it because, as mentioned before, there are already a lot of rodent-like Pokemon that exist in the PokeVerse as it stands. Otherwise, I still think that this is a fairly solid entry that could possibly work well with some changes to the flaws that were pointed out by myself and by some of the other judges.
Comments and Critiques: I really do like the look of this Fakemon, especially since I have a particular weakness for kitsunes and there aren’t that many Pokemon that exist based off of it (apart from Vulpix/Ninetales). But as with some of the other entries here, this Fakemon is based off of another artist’s work, which is fine in some respects, but it’s not really as creative as it could have potentially been. I also would’ve liked to see a bit more detail put into the origin of Nyxup and Nyxtor, especially since I’m interested about their relations to their technical ancestors of Vulpix and Ninetales. The name also seems a bit unfitting too, seeing as Nyx is the goddess of the night and Nyxup and Nyxtor are Fairy-type. I would’ve thought that they would be part Dark-type based on that, and there really aren’t a lot of Fairy/Dark types out there either. Its movepool seems a bit lacking as well, mostly in the TM/HM department because there are quite a few TMs out there that pretty much every Pokemon can learn. It’s signature move, Fortune’s Fool, certainly isn’t that bad, but it still leaves quite a bit to be desired. This entry did have potential, even though the whole rainbow-colored kitsune concept could just as easily be done by having a Vulpix/Ninetales recolored to be rainbow. But the fact that it suffers from a glaring lack of detail just doesn't really make this entry work for me. For one, how is Nyxtor Fairy and Flying? And why does it have Levitate as an ability when it doesn't even need it because it is Flying-type? Having Levitate as an ability for a Flying Pokemon is just redundant and overall useless, and even if Nyxtor is capable of hovering using levitation, its typing just doesn't fit well at all. Furthermore, I also can't get over the fact that Nyxup and Nyxtor are primarily herbivorous, and that Nyxtor is fine with eating meat if no other food source is available whereas Nyxup would rather starve than resort to carnivorous tendencies. Granted, canines are capable of eating fruits and veggies along with meat in their diets, and there's absolutely nothing wrong with feeding foods like apples and pears to your pet dog (provided you remove the core and seeds first). But canines are meant to be primarily carnivores, and Nyxup/Nyxtor's eating habits just don't tie in well at all with natural canine diets. Also, I cannot accept that their origin stories are only one sentence each. Unless the species' whole entire origin and description of their aspects is detailed in that one sentence, then I'm afraid I cannot accept it. Some people might like the simplicity of the origin story only being one sentence, but I am not one of those people. One sentence is not an origin story, that's just being completely lazy. And what's even more disappointing is that this entry was posted up in a previous Custom Pokemon Contest back in PHL2, and it's essentially just a copy/paste with the only difference being that the name was changed. I won't take off points for it being a copy/paste, but if anyone is going to copy/paste an already existing entry that they made before, at least try to incorporate new ideas or expand further on what was already established. The creator had more than enough time during the entry round to either make up a new idea or elaborate further on what they already had in a pre-existing entry, they had the opportunity to make up something more sensible and original and they just didn't take it. Even what is given on the origin story isn't all that creative either. Some might argue that the moon is magical, but a Pokemon Egg being exposed to moonlight doesn't necessarily result in an entirely new species being born. I could accept experimentation that revolved around the moon, I could accept a pre-existing Pokemon like the Vulpix/Ninetales line this Fakemon is based off of being reincarnated into a new species, but the origin story is just extremely lacking in detail and doesn't explain a lot to begin with. Also, how and why can it learn moves like Doom Desire and Light of Ruin, which are a strictly legendary move and pseudo-legendary move respectively? Unless it was given a BalmMushroom that allows it to learn them, no non-legendary Pokemon is capable of naturally learning moves that are restricted to legendaries only, much less pseudo-legendary moves that haven't even been released yet. In short, my final verdict for this entry is that this idea did have potential, even if the whole rainbow colored kitsune thing is mainly just an idea for recolors. However, the fact that this entry suffered tremendously from either lack of detail or too much information that either made no sense at all or just didn't have a viable explanation behind it just really didn't make the concept work very well at all. And the fact that this was a pre-existing entry that was just copy/pasted from a previous Custom Pokemon Contest just leaves so much to be desired, especially since the creator had sufficient time to improve on it and expand on what they already had established before. I would have considered giving this entry a lower score, but because it had been a potentially good idea that suffered severely from a great many hiccups as well as the fact that kitsunes are one of my favorite mythological-based creatures of all time, I'll leave this one with an 8 out of 25.
Comments and Critiques: Gaaaaah, if there was one entry I would definitely give a perfect score to, it’s this one. There’s absolutely nothing about this Fakemon that I don’t love, it’s original, it’s creative, it’s detailed, and the reference pics and spritework is adorable! I definitely love the phasing sprite for Flurry too, quite interesting! I also find the blend of sabertooth and snow leopard for Saberal’s design quite unique as well, certainly not something you see too much of in the Pokemon Universe! I mean, Raikou is technically a sabertooth crossed with… a tiger, maybe? Still, snow leopards are always adorable no matter what, and this entry is certainly no exception! Ice/Fire is definitely a very unique typing that I don't believe I've seen before in any of the generations of Pokemon I've played through, and fits in well with the given origin story and details of Flurry/Wispard/Saberal! I especially like the concept that this Fakemon is meant to be an exorcist of sorts, ridding the world of evil spirits and demonic forces that roam about and whatnot. And the resistances and immunities its typing grants does good with balancing out its weaknesses in a way, and the general idea just really works well in the PokeVerse! Of course, I can agree with some of the other judges that Wispard and Saberal having Wonder Guard as an ability is a bit of a stretch. Considering that Wonder Guard renders all attacks that aren't super effective against the Pokemon ineffective and Shedinja is the only Pokemon canonically that has this ability, and the weaknesses of this Fakemon work well enough to balance out this ability for the most part. To be honest, I'm a bit on the fence about this, though I feel that Wonder Guard suits well with this Fakemon considering the details and origin story given, somehow I feel that it might be a bit too overpowered to give it such an ability. Still, as iffy as that detail can be, it's not really enough to be that much of a turn off for me. Otherwise, I love essentially everything else about this Fakemon, and a 25 out of 25 is more or less well deserved! Excellent job done on this one!
Comments and Critiques: As mentioned before, the design of Cicademy and Academantis seems like it was borrowed from some sort of anime that I don’t believe I’m too familiar with. Still, originality is a bit lacking here, not only because of the design by also because of the typing. I personally don’t have anything against Bug-types, in all honesty, but they just aren't the sort of Pokemon that I would ever see myself using a lot of when it comes down to it. I do like the unique Bug/Dark typing on Academantis, though, so some bonus for that! I mean, I suppose I can understand some of the other judges' arguments that it would work better as a Bug/Fighting type, but I really do appreciate the use of a unique typing that has yet to be introduced into the Pokemon Universe. Their behaviors and tendency to collect shiny objects is quite interesting, and could be fun to implement for role-playing purposes! Again, I would’ve appreciated a bit more backstory and details, such as why they wear school uniforms of all things and how their fascination of shiny objects came to fruition. Apart from those hiccups, though, I really like the art and the rest of the details put into this one!
Comments and Critiques: Quite a cute and interesting Pokemon! As mentioned before, the Originality could use a bit more work, primarily due to the use of someone else’s art for the description of the species. At least credit is given where it was due, I’ll give it that! The movepool of Magikit and Grimarcane is quite varied and leaves a lot of options to choose from, but as mentioned before, Psychic/Ghost would’ve been a better typing for it as opposed to Psychic/Dark. Not saying that Psychic/Dark isn’t a unique type combination, considering that the only other Pokemon with that typing is Inkay/Malamar, but I agree that a Ghost typing would’ve given it more useful resistances as well as fit in better with the nature of its origin, which is why cohesiveness gets docked a little here. That aside, there’s a good bit of attention given to detail in this one as well as creativity, and the backstory is quite interesting as well even if it’s a bit on the cliché side of things! I’d certainly like to have one of these myself if possible!
Comments and Critiques: I really like the look of this one, especially since I personally have a strong weakness for canines and dragons! I do like the Dragon/Fairy typing here, especially since that is still a fairly new type combination in the Pokemon Universe and the only other Pokemon with that typing is Mega Altaria. I do like the spritework done here, and Lunarch and Lunine give off a very Eastern Dragon-ish vibe to them, it’s probably the whiskers. I like the detail put into the lore and biology/physiology, so the creativity here gets a perfect score from me even though I feel a bit more detail could’ve been added in. Lupup’s method of evolution also seems a bit off to me and might be somewhat impractical, but I’ll give it credit for being original! The movepool isn’t half-bad either, but it can be improved upon in my opinion. I also feel that a better hidden ability aside from Justified could’ve been chosen, but I don’t want to seem like I’m being too nitpicky here. Also, another caveat I have with this entry is that it implements Geomancy, a legendary move that only Xerneas is capable of learning, into its movepool. Again, as I said with Nyxup/Nyxtor, no non-legendary Pokemon is capable of naturally learning a move that is normally only restricted to legendaries. While it can be acceptable since this Fakemon only learns Geomancy at high levels and it fits well with the other details, I just can't get past that it's still a legendary-restricted move that the Fakemon should only be able to learn through BalmMushroom or any other viable method. Still, this certainly seems like a very interesting Pokemon that I would very much like to have, and I feel would be gladly welcomed into the guild!
Comments and Critiques: This is quite an interesting Fakemon, if I say so myself! I will have to admit that the lore behind it isn’t as original as it could be, considering that manmade Pokemon have been in existence since Mewtwo and Porygon, like Lucifer mentioned. I will give props for the unique Dark/Fairy dual-typing though! It’s quite an original combination, I feel, and would work pretty well in the PokeVerse given its resistances! However, I believe that a lot more variation could’ve been put into its evolved forms, and I find it rather odd that it gains wings in its final evolution even though they don’t seem to serve much purpose. I’m not certain if it would actually be capable of flying with them, but it seems a bit insulting to not allow Phackselle to learn Fly if it can utilize its wings for such a task. I’ll admit that the design is pretty colorful, but I feel that the flow of the colors doesn’t really work well here. I also feel that more detail could’ve been put into some areas like its behavior, and I feel that the reasons why its Pokedex entries are what they are should be tied into the lore somewhere, but that’s just me. Also, a bit more detail could be put into the Dark Splicer item, such as where or how it can be obtained, how to use it, etc. Regardless, this certainly isn't a bad entry by a long shot!
Comments and Critiques: This thing is way too close to a legendary for my liking, a pseudo-legendary at the least. The signature move, over twice as strong as existing legendary attacks with no drawbacks, is an example of this, along with it being ridiculously huge, and there isn't much beyond "it's a dragon" that I find very compelling. Originality - Like I said, it's another dragon. Not much new there, sorry. Some of the extra trivia / the way they change to their trainers boosted this to a 4 for me. Detail - The extra trivia and mythology added enough to justify a good score since most of the entry was rather bare bones, but lack of TMs/Egg moves lost a point here. More the TMs than egg moves, because I get the feeling these bros aren't mating with anyone but each other. Creativity - Good background etc., lost a point here because Fire Storm is broken Cohesiveness - This thing is too huge and powerful to make sense as a non-legendary, but other than that it fits into the pokemon world nicely and various aspects like its moveset are explained and make sense. I like the blurb about habitat (though I'm surprised it isn't focused around Sinnoh given that it practically worships Palkia, Dialga and Giratina)
Comments and Critiques: Originality - Though the second stage shares some similarities with Houndoom, the uniqueness of each stage (middle included) shines through. Edit- I realized that Misdrevous also feeds on negative energy, and given that these are both ghost types I felt I needed to take a point for that. Details - Plenty of content. Creativity - Creative backstory. Very dark, but well done, I really got the sense of its brutality. The custom attack is interesting as well. The evolution process for Spiriake is interesting, but much too complicated (three requirements), and having a dark type requirement has already been done, although this time that pokemon has a level requirement too. So technically that's four requirements. Cohesiveness - Very interesting storyline, but I don't really see these guys fitting into the pokemon world that well. In addition, Enigrake's size and weight is unrealistic (for example, Wailord is almost 48 feet long and still weighs less than 10% what this guys does. Spiriake weighs a bit much as well. The way Spiriake evolves seems out of character- I didn't get the feeling Spiriake or Enigrake enjoyed the company of others so why would their presence help it evolve? Overall Rating: Though the darkness of the line doesn't fit with traditional pokemon, I think it's done well and gives off a creepy vibe. I also like the designs for them, though the drawing for Spiriake I especially love. That being said, the overpowered-ness of the final evolution, while interesting as flavor text, is too off-putting for me to give a five here. I would normally take a point due to it learning shadow force, a legendary's signature move, but given Enigrake's origins with Giratina I can agree with the decision.
Comments and Critiques: Originality - Though this is yet another electric mouse pokemon, the addition of the ice typing + its interesting relation to dragon types bumped this up to a 4. Detail - Good detail in the bio. Creativity - I like the difference between males and females. Convergence is very interesting, but a bit much. It's like a powered down version of adaptability with a dragon form of normalize...and one more effect too. Either "Normal type moves to dragon-type damage" or "This pokemon's ice and electric attacks do both ice and electric type damage and 1.3x damage" would be more reasonable. Cohesiveness - Definitely seems like a real pokemon, I love it's relation to dragon-types. Why doesn't terravoolt have the ability rivalry? It seemed like that would be a good fit for the males. And why do female Terravoolts keep simple when they have become highly intelligent compared to when they were Voolts? Speed boost doesn't fit at all with Gigavoolt given how slow it's supposed to have become. Also, the weights don't make sense for sizes at all. Voolt is the same size as a pikachu, but weighs 1/10th what a Pikachu does. Gigavoolt is twice the size of a pikachu and yet weighs only 1/2 as much. For a heavily armored pokemon, (Terravoolt weighs under 20 yet is hard as steel?) compared to the super fast pikachu, that doesn't make sense at all. The movesets were all over the place too. Voolt learns much too many attacks and then suddenly cannot learn anymore, and it should not have access to that many high-power TMs, as a 1st stage pokemon, so they should have been split to add as it evolves. Gigavoolt learns too few attacks, same with Terravoolt. They just don't seem to fit together. Why does it learned stored power? Also, the number of egg moves it can learn seems a bit much. Most pokemon max out around 10 moves. Giving it freeze shock as a learned move given it is a legendary's signature move is a bit much. Overall Rating - Overall, I like it. Its place in the pokemon world is unique and interesting. Despite it being another electric mouse, it has character. However, the inconsistencies that I think I've mostly mentioned drive the score down a bit for me, but since this is more a gut reaction sort of thing, I can look past everything but the weight since that's just so unrealistic for everything except maybe the Voolt.
Comments and Critiques: Originality - This was a tough one to rate, given that its origin is straight from an existing pokemon. The use of Zorua's signature ability illusion really doesn't sit right with me, given that it's such an integral part of Zorua's character as a pokemon yet Nyxup only uses it to hide from other pokemon. Nyxtor's typing is lovely though, and fits quite nicely with the rainbow/nighttime vibe going on. I think perhaps expanding upon illusion and perhaps including Zorua in its origins or explaining why it can use illusion would go a long way. Details - Details were a bit basic. I do, however, love the sentence for Nyxup's origin. It evokes a dreamy feel, and there isn't really much more that needs to be said. Creativity - Nyxup/Nyxtor are fleshed out and though nothing in particular stands out the idea behind it is executed well. Its signature move is an interesting idea but overly complicated. Cohesiveness - It's a bit odd how Nyxup is unusually heavy yet Nyxtor is over three times as big yet very, very light. I'd understand if they were both lighter, given their ethereal feel, but Nyxup's weight messes with that. A lot of its moves don't really seem to fit to me...namely light of ruin and doom desire. That's two signature moves from other pokemon...though they fit really well with Nyxtor's background so I'm a bit torn. Since they fit with its character as a pokemon, I didn't take points off here, but they do affect the overall score for me. Overall Rating - This entry paints pictures in my head with minimal words. I particularly like the second sentence of Nyxup's flavor text and its origin. Though it doesn't stand out to me, it's a solid entry. As I stated, using legendary's signature moves doesn't sit well with me but Light of Ruin fits and since it belonged to a non-legendary and it's not overpowered I don't see a problem with it.
Comments and Critiques: First impression was that this was a well thought out, very interesting pokemon. I like the creative use of the bead necklace often found around kitsune necks (I think?). That bit about flurry eggs stuck out as a really interesting bit. The way they become male/female is so creative man oh man. Originality - Pretty original overall. By some mystical feat pokemon doesn't have a snow leopard or sabertooth pokemon yet (Raikou is electric type so not sure how much that counts) so full marks here. Detail - Great detail, not much else to say Creativity - Very creative overall Cohesiveness - The TM and tutor move lists seem a bit high, mainly for earlier stages. In addition, its normal learnset is huge, giving it an insane range of attacks that doesn't seem very balanced compared to most existing pokemon. Exorcism is an interesting concept, but too overpowered with the added chance to burn. Restoring HP is pretty strong, pairing that with a powerful move is already pushing it (giga drain and drain punch don't even come close, and dream eater requires a sleeping target). I very much appreciated the explanation/reasoning behind the weights and thought it was clever. Saberal's weight still seems very low to me, however, considering it is heavy enough to have a fully developed appetite that calls for mamoswine holy poopies that cat is scary. It seems like if it gets that hungry it should weigh a bit more- maybe half of what it would weigh if it wasn't half in the spirit world? The first pokemon I thought to compare it too was a Liepard, which is very nearly the same height and has almost the same weight, but Saberal are hulking feline creatures not possessing Liepard's lithe body. Lastly, though I think the evoltuion method is very original and a great idea, the amount of ghosts is in my opinion too high for Flurry to Wispard. Who the heck has fought 25 ghosts by level 15? Either lowering the number of ghosts or raising the level would make more sense, at least to me. So, 1 point lost for the moveset, 1 point lost for everything else, since a lot of them are more minor details thanks to the excellent amount of details/reasoning for this pokemon.
Comments and Critiques: Okay, so I freaking love this pokemon. Such a neat concept, I could immediately imagine these guys appearing in an episode of pokemon, and the whole idea flowed really well, from the songs they sing to the bits they collect. I love School Anthem, it fits so perfectly. Originality - I personally think that if this pokemon is based off some anime character or something, it is very original- after all, most pokemon are based off of concepts in one way or another, be it basic animals or people (Hitmonlee/Hitmonchan anyone?). I don't know if this is a direct copy of something or not, but it certainly hasn't been done before in pokemon. That being said, it's similarity to Cricketot/tune and Scyther is a bit too close for comfort so that lost a point. Detail - Mostly detailed well, though it's lacking in lore I took a point for that in creativity, so this gets a 5. Creativity - Like I said, lack of lore snags a point away here. Also like I said, I really feel like I can see this pokemon smack dab in the pokeverse, I feel its behavior was described very well. Also its custom ability is very original while still feeling like it belongs in the pokemon world. Cohesiveness - Fits in very well with pokemon world. The moveset from Cicademy to Academantis doesn't seem to quite mesh up. In addition, moves should be added so each of them have things they learn before/after evolution, generally matching what the other one learns (like most pokemon do). Aka Cicademy could learn Me First at 44 or something. The movesets don't have to be exactly alike. Also an important note to consider, should this guy really be learning rollout? Wouldn't that get their jacket's dirty and possibly result in lost swag? The biggest thing for me here though is that they learn way too many moves. It's hard to tell, since the moveset is split between the two pokemon, but it learns almost twice as many moves as most pokemon do. In addition the TM set is too long for Cicademy, a first stage pokemon. I agree Acadamantis could be part fighting, but dark seems to work just as well.
Comments and Critiques: Originality - Since there's been plenty of cat pokemon before, and we just got a psychic type cat this past gen, this one loses a bit in originality. Though it's origin makes a nice tie to Espurr (or should I say sad tie poor little guy) that doesn't change the similarities. Its impish / pranksterish nature is also very reminiscent of other pokemon. It's a common trait in cats and in pokemon- purrloin and zorua are close in design to this pokemon and similar in many ways (in fact, purrloin and espurr both have prankster as an ability just like Magikit) Detail - Great amount of detail and explanations for things. Creativity - This one hits on most of the major points of the creative category, but Harrowing Yowl is very similar to moves like snarl and glare. Cohesiveness - Magikit should not have such a large TM / move tutor set for a first stage pokemon. Grimarcane's tutor moveset borders on being too much. Dazzling Gleam stands out to me as not being a great fit, but I think it could be defended so I'll refrain from judging on that. Its signature move borders on overpowered in my opinion, between the high attack damage and chance of paralysis / flinch it seems a bit much (not to mention it's very overpowered in double battles since it doesn't affect your ally) The typing seems a bit off, I agree with others it seems more of a psychic/ghost, though I can somewhat see where psychic dark is coming from. It's evolution borders on being a bit much, with three requirements. Also, it's pack-like behavior, with alphas and everything, feels very off to me. Why are cats behaving this way? It seems like a coven would be more about equality or working together, especially since Grimarcane evolved specifically so it could protect its coven. It just seems unnecessarily brutish for such intelligent pokemon...are Grimarcane prone to jealousy and vanity? As a side note, if this is based off of wolf packs, alphas don't actually exist in the wild. The term came about from observing a group of captured wolves that didn't know each other and thus battled for dominance. In the wild, wolf packs are families, and the "alphas" are actually just the parents that the kids listen to because, well, they're the parents. Since the Magikit/Grimarcane seem to travel together as a familial unit, the "pack" structure seems off. I apologize if this wasn't the direction you were going but I hope explaining my thought process helps.
Comments and Critiques: Originality - I was going to say this is like another dog pokemon but it's...not? I agree with Darkie Ramirez that it gives off an eastern dragon vibe, which hasn't been done before. It's a bit reminiscent of Arcanine but that may just be the Lu'nine' and Lun'arch' bits messing with my head. Detail - Good amount, not really lacking anything here. Creativity - The lore and signature move was interesting and a neat take on the entry hazards (though I think it might've fit better with Meowkit or Flurry's lines, lol). Cohesiveness - I had a tough time deciding if I was okay with the fairy dragon typing, since it's a powerful combo. Since its whole lore was based around it developing harmony between its two clashing halves, and it starts off as the changeling pokemon (which is a pretty fae thing) the typing didn't feel arbitray so I can agree with the choice. It would have probably made more sense for Lupup to be dragon only (or maybe dragon/normal?) and then have it evolve into the fairy typing. Giving it geomancy, a signature move of a legendary pokemon with no real reason, is a bit of a stretch even if the move isn't overly powerful. The evolution method of Lupup seems a bit off. If it's supposed to evolve when it becomes strong enough to go out on its own, why would it be strong enough to take on a gym leader before that? The signature move dancing lights might be a bit overpowered? I'm honestly not sure, haven't had a chance to use status effects much in the games. Maybe have it wear out over time, like weather moves and reflect type things?
Comments and Critiques: Originality - Phacksa's origins were very similar to Mewtwo's. The dark splicer / breeding the pokemon added a bit of an original spin and the typing was new as well. The resulting design felt like it had very nearly been done before, although the wings of Phackselle were new and added a bit to this score. Detail - The overall detail was mostly good, but a lot of the information was repetitive from one evolution to the next. In addition, lack of egg moves seemed a bit odd considering it's heavy dependence on what laid its egg, Zorua and Sylveon. Creativity - The designs for Phacksa and Phackselle were nice. Its original move Dark matter is very similar to shadow ball. The way it reproduces is very interesting and creative. Cohesiveness - Phacksen is almost identical to Phacksa in appearance and temperament. The only difference seems to be its gotten a bit older. And for Phackselle, its wings seemed a bit out of the blue, though I thought the yin-yang idea with them was very interesting. It learns its signature move a much too early for such a powerful attack, mainly when it is a Phacksa. There's also a bizarrely large gap between the levels at which it learns moves from one evolution to the next. In addition, Phacksa and Phacksen (or at the very least Phacksa) should not have access to such a large TM pool at such an early stage. I agree the inclusion of Night Daze in its attacks, since it comes straight from zorua. Its pokedex entries come clear out of left field. Why is a zorua + sylveon eating people's souls? Does it have to do with the dark splicer? It's really weird how this pokemon seems to be a cute, neon fox that is family oriented...that also devours souls in its spare time. I generally associate that kinda stuff with ghost types. Also, all of their weights seem just a bit on the light side especially when comparing to Zorua and Sylveon. It's not glaring, but it's a bit weird.
Comments and Critiques: What's not to like about Draginal? The fact that it's theorized to have been the first bountiful Dragon-type is very interesting, because nothing like that has ever been said in the Pokemon universe. I also enjoy the trivia, and Fire Storm is very fitting if they're out to prove their strength. Sure, the lack of recoil is kind of a god-mod, but a lot of really powerful moves don't have any recoil either. I'm a bit iffy on no TMs, but maybe that ties in with a Draginal's desire to rely on very little outside help. If, of course, the reason they're such brutes is to show their power. Who knows? Maybe the creator intends to expand on this. He/She did say it is a newly discovered species. Well, rediscovered.
Comments and Critiques: As everything goes, it's a perfect entry. The lore is amazing, and everything fits with this species. However, I personally just don't like it all that much. It's nothing to worry about, of course. I just feel that being made from a legendary kind of makes it a legendary itself, and that's...unsettling in a way.
Comments and Critiques: Making an Electric/Ice dual type rodent is an interesting concept, and I love how they live with Dragon-types and practically evolve into a Dragon-type themselves. But, I feel Terravoolt would be better as an Electric/Dragon dual type instead of remaining as an Electric/Ice type. Then there's Terravoolt's custom ability, Convergence. I think it should have one effect or the other, not both. In fact, giving Terravoolt's lore, Convergence should be used solely to enhance it's Dragon-type moves.
Comments and Critiques: Oh, dear....I had to look beyond my love for the two pictures to judge this one. I will say, for sure, that Fortune's Fool is a very interesting move and lives up to it's name. And, being able to use it only once per battle is a nice touch. Also, a little elaboration on the lore of this pair would be great.
Comments and Critiques: This entry is rich in lore, detail, sense....But, I'd like it more if all three evolutions had a "snow phasing" state. I also think Exorcism is a twist on Curse, which doesn't seem very impressive to me on a personal level.
Comments and Critiques: The appearance of these two reminds me of a media character I've seen somewhere before, so I don't feel entirely comfortable giving Originality a perfect 5 out of 5. I also think the creator could have done a lot better making Academantis a Bug/Fighting dual type rather than a Bug/Dark combination.
Comments and Critiques: I'm a sucker for tear-jerking stories, and the creation of the first Magikit hit me right in the heart. Poor little Espurr. As amazing as this entry is, I feel the maker missed out on the chance for an awesome Psychic/Ghost creation. Also, it doesn't explain what the face and mouth on the hat of Grimarcane is for, or if that should be ignored entirely.
Comments and Critiques: This entry is awesome all around, but the encountering of the king's son seems a bit cliche and I can't get behind it all the way. It's touching, yes, but it's just a bit too expected, I guess is the best word.
Comments and Critiques: I have two real problems with this one. As I've seen in other votes, the Dark Splicer is one of them. What is it? What does it look like? How do you obtain one? And, why does it break after successful use? These are things I'd have liked to see in the entry, maybe in a trivia area. My other issue is it knowing Curse Body. That's an ability that makes more sense belonging to a Ghost-type Pokemon, not a Fairy/Dark dual type.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: Most of this entry doesn’t quite shout ‘original’ at me. It just looks a lot like just another dragon type pokemon, with the generic dragon look. Also, there is way too many parallels between this and the dragon from Drakengard. Even the part about taking on a trait from its human is taken from the game. This is really disappointing. Using a pre-existing image is one thing (and acceptable) but also taking from the source of the image to add to it is a totally different thing.
Detail: Unfortunately, I feel that this entry really suffered from a lack of detail in some areas. Such as, why do they hate all of the other dragon pokemon, but only regard giratina, dialga and palkia as worthy dragons? What about Rayquaza, who has come down to save the land from primal kyogre/primal groudon in the past? What about Reshiram, Zekrom, and Kyurem, the three that were once one pokemon? What is the reasoning for so much hate for all of these, but only the three legends of the Sinnoh regions are good with Draginal? It’s my understanding that the legends are all rather god-like, and though they are all in different regions, surely Arceus created them all at once to maintain the pokemon universe. Also, what about their home? And maybe how they are just now being rediscovered? I would have preferred much more detail in all this, though there were quite a few interesting tidbits added in, so good on you for that, at least. Again, it’s like you took Mikhail’s hatred of wyverns and just extended it to other dragons that aren’t those particular 3.
Creativity: There is a great lack of creativity. At first, I thought the traits being taken on according to their trainers was creative. Then I found out it was taken right from the game that the dragon comes from. It made me lose faith in the entry altogether. The current moveset is overpowered, and over all, it just makes Draginal feel more like a legendary pokemon than just some dragon type pokemon that’s been around a long time. The custom move has the same damage as Explosion without any repercussions, making it a very flawed move. I did like the creative idea of the move changing a bit with the time of day, but it’s still very much flawed and overpowered.
Cohesiveness: On this, the entry fell short in my opinion. Does it fit into the pokemon world? Yes. However, the entire moveset is overpowered. Also, I find it odd that it depends on brute strength attacks, and yet, the custom move seems to be a special attack out of the blue. Also, Crush Grip is the signature move of Regigigas – sure, it does seem to fit with Draginal, but there’s no explanation as to why Draginal would be able to learn this. I don’t get the feel from the entry that Draginals were ‘buddy-buddy’ with Regigigas. Also, how are they able to change to take on a trait from their trainer in the first place? I suppose it might be able to be due to Adaptability ability (that fits quite well), but what about the ones that don’t have that ability? I understand having a sense of mystery to the pokemon, but there are times when some of that mystery should be sacrificed to make it fit better, or to make more sense out of it.
Overall: Overall, I must admit that I do like dragons. Dragons are great, in and out of pokemon. Unfortunately, the lack of detail and the overpowered moveset, and the vague attitude towards other dragon types really made me not like this entry as is. In my honest opinion, this pokemon would seem to be a better legendary pokemon, but making a legendary fakemon is not acceptable or fair. I understand that everyone wants to make their fakemon special and stand out, and make them strong, but it just doesn’t work well like that. There has to be compromises for fairness and all. I also find it really disappointing how much of this was taken from Drakengard, when it couldn’t have been too hard to think up some more original ideas to add to it, to make it their own.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: This entry isn’t like any other fakemon I have ever seen. The only issue here I have with it is its connection to giratina. I think it would have really stood out as even more original if it wasn’t just some creature that had a piece of giratina’s soul. I really love the art, though I must say the last evolution doesn’t look too much different from the second evolution.
Detail: Wow, there’s a lot of detail here to swim through! One problem I have is the weights. How does something that is part ghost weigh so freakin much? @ 3@
Creativity: The creator got really creative with this entry. I really like the art, though like I mentioned before, there doesn’t seem to be that much of a difference between the last two stages. I also suppose you have to be creative to come up with such a long origin story. And such creepy pokemon.
Cohesiveness: This fakemon fits well into the pokemon world, though I do argue that being a piece of giratina’s soul onto a creature is just… I don’t know. It feels unacceptable to have a legendary so directly involved with this pokemon. It would have made more sense if it was just a myth, in my opinion. Also, like I mentioned before, the weight and size of the last two stages is absurd and should be rethought.
Overall: Overall, I do like this pokemon. I’ve already stated the things I do not like about this fakemon. Seriously though, the biggest issue I take with is how directly connected to a legendary it is. It pretty much is like saying it has giratina’s powers. It even takes on some traits later on of giratina. While that doesn’t bother me too much, the split soul part does. Maybe it’s because I’ve got a Giratina in wait for my character Rose, and maybe it’s because I just see Giratina more as a terribly misunderstood pokemon of Antimatter, but … I just don’t like that part of this entry.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: While the images are not the work of the creator, the overall idea of this pokemon and typing is rather original. However, this does suffer from being that electric rodent.
Detail: Some of the details seem lacking, but this entry at least has a good amount to read through. I still can’t get over why in the world would a dragon even accept this line’s company, with it being part ice type. It just seems strange to me. Like, I don’t think it would be common to see a fire type hanging out with water types. It feels more like the creator had three types in mind, but just couldn’t decide between the three. Also, the moveset needs some work; it’s kind of lacking in some areas.
Creativity: Though this is another electric rodent, this entry was rather creative. I see no correlation to other works, and when I looked at it, I didn’t think it would turn out electric ice. It’s a very interesting combo. However, I think the creator should have made them an electric dragon type somewhere along the line.
Cohesiveness: I can see this entry in the pokemon world. However, the ability speed boost does not make sense to keep going into the second stage, since it gets heavier and tougher. Also, like I mentioned before, it makes no sense that a dragon would let a type it is weak to just hang out with it, though it was nice to mention that they might be around them while fighting them. However, I don’t see that as a good enough reason for them to take on dragon traits without becoming dragon type themselves. The custom ability is just too much. Way too much going on! And I see that it’s trying to do the flying press thing, but there’s a reason it was a move and not an ability. It’s kinda op as an ability. The moveset needs more spacing out and more moves, especially weaker moves in the earlier levels.
Overall: I’m not that big of a fan of this fakemon, although it is cute. Most issues I have with it are already mentioned, but I applaud the creator for an interesting typing.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: Although the images are Corrine and Verius, two summon spirits from Tales of Symphonia, I do not see anything in particular taken from the game/anime and put into this fakemon entry, so that’s a plus. However, it is hard to judge the originality with such a lack of content to judge
Detail: This entry suffers a great amount due to the lack of detail. The longest parts are the descriptions of appearance, which are unnecessary because all of that detail is clear in the reference pictures. Moonlight is also not enough to just change an egg to be a different species. And there is a lack of detail on how or why Nyxtor becomes a fairy/flying type. There needs to be a lot more than just one sentence of origin for this fakemon – The other entries thusfar have given at least a paragraph if not more to give an origin or bio. The amount of detail in this entry is feeble and hardly stands up to the other entries. Creativity: Apologies, but there really is a lack of creativity here beyond using pics of a pre-existing creature from a game/anime. I have seen this same exact entry before – all that has been changed is the name. The name doesn’t even make sense – it should be a crime to use Nyx, the goddess of night, in the name of a pokemon that isn’t even a dark type. The creator could have at least tried to change more things up from the last time they submitted this into a contest. There had been plenty of time to do so.
Cohesiveness: As it stands, I cannot see this fakemon in the pokemon world. It all just seems like some fancy recolor of vulpix and ninetales to me, and there’s just not enough detail to hold this together. Also, it does not make any sense that a Nyxup would rather starve than eat meat, but then when it evolves it suddenly has a change of heart and will eat meat rather than starve. First off, starving rather than eating meat goes against the nature of foxes. While they do eat berries and other such things, they are suited to be carnivorous and eat meat. The custom move is just… overcomplicated and well… not that useful. Also, it makes no sense at all for Nyxtor to be part flying type – it has no wings, and while it can ‘hover’ supposedly with levitate, it still shouldn’t actually be able to fly anyone anywhere. Also, levitate is useless with this typing – levitate prevents ground type attacks from hitting, but ground type attacks do not hit flying types. Also, why would this pokemon learn Jirachi’s specialty move, Doom Desire, and why should it be able to learn Light of Ruin, an event exclusive move that has not even been released?
Overall: As cute as foxes and rainbows are together, I can’t actually like this entry at all. It’s lacking massively in much needed detail, and over all, it is very lack-luster. There are so many inconsistencies and faults in this entry that it leaves a lot to be desired.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: My goodness, there’s not much to say about this. This entry right down to the sprite is original and beautiful.
Detail: Like with Originality, there isn’t much to say on this! The entry is very detailed, and I found myself satisfied with what was offered in this entire entry.
Creativity: The typing is interesting and new further down the line. I’ve got nothing negative to say in this area. Great job, creator!
Cohesiveness: This entry belongs in the pokemon world. Why isn’t it in there yet?!? However, as near perfect this fakemon is, there are a few things that have been mentioned before. The weight of the last two stages could be a bit more. Also, the custom move – fire types cannot be burned, though I do understand the gist of it being more of a soul-burn. Wonder Guard seems a bit much for this pokemon. I think that everyone would just be picking this as the ability when they claim this fakemon, which would be a bit disappointing. However, everything else checks out! Great job, again, creator!
Overall: I absolutely looooooooove this entry! I’m quite sure it has everything to do with it being a snow leopard based pokemon, which is my most favorite animal! I really need to get one of these. The problem though, is that Rose, who I’d want to give it to, is terrified of ghosts! Maybe it’s cuteness will overcome that fear. XD Well done! I love it!
Comments and Critiques: Originality: While it does look like it is some kind of nod to some anime characters, this entry is very original looking, and I greatly appreciate that. I find it interesting that they have clothes on to disguise themselves from predators. It’s a very nice idea!
Detail: There’s a good amount of detail here, too. It was fun to read, as well! A little more detail wouldn’t hurt though, even though it is pretty good as it is.
Creativity: There seems to be a lot of creativity here, though I feel that there might be some borrowed themes from other media. This isn’t a bad thing, though, and makes it even more interesting. It makes me wonder what the creator had in mind when making this fakemon.
Cohesiveness: This fakemon seems to have a place in the pokemon world, but I have to wonder… how often would someone just discard their uniforms in a manner that these bugs would get to them? It also might just be me, but seeing clothes on a pokemon, especially a bug type, is weird, and makes them look more human than bug. I suppose it succeeds in that it is meant to trick predators, though. XD
Overall: As good as this entry is, sadly, I don’t really like bug types, and this doesn’t seem to stand out much to me. It would have been more interesting to see it be a bug/fighting type, since if the creator was going with some anime theme, that would make sense. I can just picture these things fighting over their loot. Anyways, this entry, though good, just isn’t for me.
Comments and Critiques: Originality: I really love the originality of this. I have never seen an entry like this at all, ever. Thank you very, very much for linking back to the artist and giving credit! However, you ended up using the same typing that the artist used, so I docked a point in this category, though it isn’t that big of a deal.
Detail: The detail is all great! The origin story is sad, but a good read! I’m not sure about the evo taking on some wolfish traits and the whole alpha deal seems odd to me, and I saw someone else mention that too. Also, are we to ignore the strange face on the Grimarcane’s hat?
Creativity: Ignoring that the creator has kept the typing that the artist used, this is a very creative entry. I don’t really have much to say about it.
Cohesiveness: This pokemon fits into the pokemon world. I’ve already mentioned some of the things, such as Grimarcane’s hat thing- what are we supposed to do about that? Ignore those eyes and the strange mouth thing at the tip? Why isn’t this a ghost/psychic type? I mean, ghost fits better according to the origin.
Overall: I personally adore this pokemon, but there are a few small things that make me a bit weary, but it’s not entirely the creator’s fault. Besides the typing, it’s really the image details that bother me, such as the hat on Grimarcane and the tip of the hats and tails. The latter aren’t really the creator’s fault though, and that aside, it’s a great entry. Good job!
Comments and Critiques: Originality: Although I’ve seen this entry before, It’s even better than I remembered it! It is quite original, and enjoyable to look at.
Detail: From the detail, it looks like a lot of thought was seriously put into this fakemon. I dock a point because I think they mixed up what should be tutored (heart scale) and what should be an egg move (big mushroom).
Creativity: Great job, creator! You’ve captivated me with the creativity!
Cohesiveness: This pokemon has a place in the pokemon world, and it really fits. Thought it doesn’t look like what people expect to see paired with ‘dragon’ there is a type of dragon with fur, and I’m quite sure there is an eastern creature that is described as a dragon that looks more like a dog. I do not understand the custom move, though. It sounds more like it should have been an ability.
Overall: I really do adore this entry. It’s cute, and even though I already have a fakemon in this guild with the same typing, I welcome this one with wide arms, and I want to hug it. It’s so fluffy and cute I’m gonna die! >w< I really hope to see this join our guild!
Comments and Critiques: Originality: I had to dock points because team rocket has made a pokemon before that ended in disaster. I feel like the back story could have been better if maybe there was a different reasoning for a dark/fairy type to exist.
Detail: There was an alright amount of detail. But we are missing details on the dark splicer. Is it an item we need to obtain for this pokemon? Or was it just a brief mention in it’s origin story?
Creativity: This isn’t an art contest, but I have to say that there isn’t a significant difference between the first two stages. And well… using the team rocket making a pokemon plot isn’t very creative, either. But it was a nice try, and I like the colors, just probably not together like that.
Cohesiveness: I would like to say this pokemon belongs in the pokemon universe, but it would need some work on an origin and maybe take out one evolution. Also, there’s no explanation for the wings on the final form, and they just don’t seem to belong. I really like the dark/fairy idea, though… but you do have some of the type effectiveness wrong – it would actually be completely resistant(x0 effectiveness) to dragon types still, due to the fairy typing. The same goes for psychic, but for it’s dark typing.
Overall: I really love how colorful this entry is, but that is also the downfall to some others about this entry. I would love to see the creator try this again with a different origin, or maybe some other things changed. I absolutely love the typing on this, and I think we definitely need this type of pokemon in the pokemon world.
Posted: Sun Apr 12, 2015 11:06 pm
Spectral's Scorecard PART ONE
I'm going to have to break up my post into two posts because I wrote so much I broke the character limit for a single post, whoops >w> bear with me guys.
Originality: It is hard to take a pure dragon type and make it original idea if you want it to be anything like a dragon. I get that, and this dragon has a quite a few unique characteristics certainly, but I'm struggling on rating the originality because it seems like it follows the stereotypical idea of a dragon a little too closely. Yes, this pokemon should include traits that most dragons have in common since it is, after all, a dragon, however you could have really made a more unique twist on the concept of a dragon to make it more original. This entry also borrows a lot from the game that it comes from, and while shaping this dragons traits to fit the pokemon world does take some creativity and isn’t a bad idea itself per se, you just really took a lot from the game and just didn’t expand on it enough to really make it your own, which just really makes this fakemon unoriginal. It’s fine if you borrow ideas from the game it comes from, but you could add onto it with your own ideas to save you some points in this category. You’ll still likely lose one point at least since the concept is borrowed from another series, but not nearly as many as you would now. I think that this pokemon just needs a lot of expansion, something to really make it your own and stand out in spite of these typical draconic features, like a unique history or story to it that is more than just Draginal being an ancient pokemon that’s been around since the beginning of time because it feels like this sort of history is the go-to story for dragons. In spite of this, there were some really unique ideas scattered throughout this entry! The genderless mating concept, the physical adaptation to match it’s trainer, the blood bond, and it’s custom move are all very unique concepts. It’s too bad that most of it is from the game it comes from, but you did twist it to shape the idea more to the pokemon world, so it’s at least original in that regard. The custom move however, is especially very original! Having the attack change depending on the time of day is a brilliant idea, I would have loved to see the effects of the move change as well. The way the move is set up currently, the time of day the move is used is really just an embellishment, I would think that an attack raining fire down from above would have a different effect on the target than if magma burst up from the earth below, but that’s more of a personal opinion so I didn’t mark you down for that. The more important thing here is that attack still has a unique feature, even if it isn’t applied to the effects of the move itself.
Detail: There are a lot of good ideas here, but you just don't elaborate enough on them. For instance, you mentioned that Draginal have slow blood circulation; why? What was their original home like? How did it sink? What caused the blizzard on it’s homeland? Was it just a strange Ice Age sort of deal or did something specifically happen to cause it? What makes them telepathic? I don't understand why being one of the first dragon types to roam the pokeverse explains why they hate most other dragons. Is it a superiority complex? Is it because they aren't used to most other dragon types maybe? Why do they see Giratina, Palkia, and Dialga as their deities and not any of the other dragon legendaries or even Arceus? I mean it is the god of all pokemon, and created those three legendaries, and yet if Arceus is in it's dragon type form then Draginal will dislike it for some reason. As I read through, I just find myself having a lot of questions, which is good because it means your entry is interesting, but bad because that means it's not as detailed as it could be. It seems like your lack of explanation is because this is a newly re-discovered species and not much is known about it, but the history still could have been explained for us to understand, and then there be a side note saying that scientists and researchers are still investigating this pokemon so the history is still lost to humans today.
Creativity: This dragon was very creative, the custom ability is unique and there were all sorts of interesting facts about this pokemon, from its behavior to the way in hunches when it walks and the uniqueness of every Draginal’s horns, to the trivia at the bottom. However, while there was certainly moments of creative ideas throughout, there was no expansion on these ideas, and some of the ideas were not your own. The creativity is sort of crippled by the lack of actual content to judge, because brief points about a unique feature of this pokemon gets me interested, like “Oooh cool how does that work?” But then there’s no elaboration, which would have helped with the creativity score. There is a difference between an idea, and a fully developed concept. You have ideas of what this pokemon should be, but it feels incomplete. This is generally what happens when you try take a character or creature from another game and cross it over to a new one, you have to really work to fully develop the character in terms of the pokemon world, and even try to draw away from it’s own game for the sake of being more creative and original. There can certainly be creative ideas, which is what you have here, but a fully developed concept is a better show of creativity, because it shows me that you can go more in depth with your idea and really let the creative juices flow.
Cohesiveness: You did a good job making a point of having most of the attacks have the “brute strength” theme you gave this pokemon, it matches this pokemon’s size and physicality. The level up learnset itself is rather few and far between however, and I have to say, learning Boomburst at level 28 and Horn Drill at 42, that’s really early for attacks that powerful, not to mention Crush Grip is the signature move of Regigigas, so if you’re going to give a legendary exclusive move to a pokemon you created, you really need to have a solid reason behind it, like being blood related to that legendary pokemon somehow. The custom attack also isn’t very balanced. Most attacks in the pokeverse that do 100 damage or more usually have some drawbacks to balance the massive power out, such as recoil damage, taking time to charge, needing to recharge for a turn after using it, or lowering stats by a few stages, but this one does 250 base damage in one hit with no side effects. The only other move that does 250 damage in the pokeverse is Explosion, and that KOs the user.... Even if it’s an attack learned at level 90, the level at which this move is learned does not make up for the massive imbalance. There is also the issue of this move being classified as a special attack when Draginal are supposed to rely more on physical attacks and brute strength, so where did the Draginal suddenly have the power and capability to produce this massive special attack power? It’s rather contradictive of the ideas you established and doesn’t make much sense... Custom attack aside, Draginal don’t quite seem to fit in with the pokemon world, it’s an oddball of sorts, but yet that seems to be the intention with Dragonal being a time lost ancient pokemon; I actually really like this a lot about your pokemon! This pokemon’s place in this world can certainly take that out of place route, and Draginal embraces it very well.
Overall: This pokemon has a lot of good ideas, but it seems like a very rough and incomplete concept that lost a few points from originality and creativity due to a lot of it’s ideas being borrowed from it’s game. The lack of detail and information really hurt you in the long run, because not only did it cost you points for the Detail category, but also hindered your Creativity score since there wasn’t enough to judge. I would have loved if this pokemon’s origins and history were more fleshed out so I could read and learn more about it. The Learnset also needs some work, and while your custom move is unique, it’s really unbalanced. I’m sad to give it such a low rating because this fakemon had so much potential, but there just wasn’t enough development to get a higher score from me. :c I’m sorry!
The design of this monster is certainly unique, I’ve never seen anything quite like it! Cool and nightmarishly disturbing all at once. Though Enigrake does appear to have a wing model similar to Giratina’s, it makes sense because it’s part of Giratina’s soul, but that brings me to a point that must be made; I’m having trouble with scoring the originality though because it’s origin, history, and behavior really borrows quite a lot from Giratina and the Distortion world. They both have the type combination of Ghost and Dragon, they are both aggressive and territorial, your pokemon is literally a piece of Giratina’s soul. I can tell you tried to develop this pokemon’s story where it “breaks away” from its ties to Giratina and explores the overworld on its own, but overall the originality really took a hit from the heavy influence this pokemon has from Giratina. :c
Detail:
There is no question that the origin is fully developed with tons of attention to detail. It was fun to read and very thorough, there was quite a quick jump from it’s evolution from Spiriake to Enigrake that could stand to be filled out, but other than that the history was very detailed. There were fun little tidbits on how Ghoizard and it’s evolutions acted and behaved, and even though you provided your artwork of this pokemon, you still described little features in it’s physical description. I would have liked to see a little more expansion on the specific behaviors of these pokemon however, there’s some information written down on the Enigrake kingdoms and culture, but it feels very brief with just a few facts here and there. The bulk of the detail went into the origin story, and while the origin story is good, you need to have more information about the pokemon specifically so that we have a clear idea of this pokemon, and so that if anyone ever used this pokemon in the guild, they would know how to RP it.
Creativity:
There is no question of Creativity here, this pokemon had a fully developed and imaginative history, it’s custom attack is unique in that no dark type attack absorbs health, so it’s a unique spin on a dark type move, night time evolution is fairly rare and evolution via night and a dark type being in the trainer’s party is unique, the design of the pokemon itself is extremely creative and it’s Kingdoms and culture are interesting, I simply don’t have anything negative to really say, it’s all just awesomely creative x3
Cohesiveness:
This pokemon works well story-wise in the pokemon world. There is an explanation for it’s existence and why it has disappeared for so long only to now reappear, it has historic significance that could be traced back to the games and canon legends and meshes well with the use of Giriatina and the distortion world. However I do have two critiques on the cohesiveness of this pokemon, being that Ghoizard, while understandably supposed to be weak given it’s history and description, it is a little too weak to work well in the pokemon world. With it’s only attack being Night Shade up until level fifteen due to having no TM learnable moves, no egg moves, and no tutor moves that it can learn, it will only do damage equal to it’s level until level 15, which unfortunately is close to nothing. While this concept makes sense given that Ghoizard is really small and weak and really only grew due to feeding on human corruption, in the Guild it would be EXTREMELY hard to train one of these pokemon, just spamming level 2 pokemon from NPC trainers so that it didn’t get KOed or switching it out in battle against a higher level pokemon to a better pokemon on your team to finish the job and split the EXP. Perhaps that’s just my opinion, I know it’s supposed to be weak and it should be given that it’s so small and frail, but the moveset should give the poor thing a fighting chance at least D: It’s a wonder it managed to evolve when the species was isolated from people and their negative emotions!
The other critique I have coincides with a critique Kogamo made on Enigrake’s size, it is just absolutely ridiculously heavy and large. I mean, this evolution line jumps from 10 inches and 0.02 pounds, to a massive 350 pound 4 foot dragon, to a 14 thousand pound and 14 foot goliath. This exponential growth concept makes sense for the origin story Enigrake since it fought toe to toe with Giratina and gorged on massive amounts of negative energy, but I think the species afterwards should be reduced massively in size, perhaps give Enigrake the 350 pounds that your Spirake currently has, and maybe like a 6 foot all around size, and make Spriake something relatively rationed between that and Ghoizard’s size perhaps? Other than those two things though, the Cohesiveness is really good!
Overall Rating:
Overall, this pokemon is very creative and interesting. It does borrow a lot of concepts from Giratina which hampered its originality, but I still really like this pokemon in spite of that. The only things that might need to be looked at if this pokemon were to place in the contest would be putting in more information about this pokemon on all the evolution’s behaviors, possibly adjusting Spirake’s moveset, and the relative sizes. All three forms are also lacking a Egg Move and Tutor section of their moveset, but I wasn’t sure if you did that on purpose or not. Technically pokemon don’t HAVE to have these so I didn’t dock you any points, I’m just pointing it out as a suggestion if maybe you wanted to add something like that later x3 Everything else is virtually perfect with lots of creativity and detail. Good Job!
A draconic electric ice mouse is certainly not something I’ve ever heard of before, an interesting concept for sure! Electric mice are very common in the pokemon world though, and even though this one has a closer genetic relationship to dragons, it still has that feel of another electric mouse, especially with Voolt. You did try to make it original though, I can tell and I appreciate that, the familiar electric mouse feel certainly diminishes with each evolution. I feel like Voolt is the cross between a Dedenee and a Kyurem, if that breeding pair was even remotely possible xD (It’s about as odd of a couple as a Skitty with a Wailord) but somehow you make it work. The type combination of electric and ice has never been used before, and the Voolt evolution line’s behavior, mannerisms, and design are very unique. It’s also interesting how male and females have slightly altered movesets. I like it a lot! I knocked it down a point because of the Electric mouse feel, but you caved yourself another point by really making it stand out with the ice and dragon combinations.
Detail:
This pokemon has a decent amount of detail put into it, with the information about Voolt’s speed, descriptions of the physical features of the whole evolution line, and the reasoning behind it’s draconic features, this fakemon has some solid evidense behind the reasoning for the oddities it possesses in manner and physical features. However, it feels like there’s still some lacking in this pokemon’s detail, for instance why it this evolution line’s brain so developed? How do Voolt move so fast? The movesets are also rather disjointed and incomplete. Voolt’s learnset feels really clumped together and then cut off at 32, where Gigavoolt continues the moveset from there but only learns five moves potentially by evolution, at level 30, 35, and 45, then is cut off again and continued with Terravoolt with a few more moves. It feels like you took the entire learn set, cut it off in sections, and divided them between the pokemon, which makes it look like this evolution line’s learnset is incomplete. Each moveset should really probably be filled out at the very least with all the past moves each pre evolution has been able to learn, especially since Voolt and Gigavoolt can level at any time.
Creativity:
You did a very nice job on creativity with this Fakemon. It has a lot of information about this Fakemon line’s interactions with many other pokemon. I like the idea that it takes over abandoned Sandshrew and Diglett holes for it’s home. It’s diet is certainly.... Interesting xD Gives the feel of a raccoon with the scavenging nature, and I feel like Voolts are walking garbage disposals the way you describe it’s eating habits. It’s Custom Ability is certainly interesting and creative, combining types for attacks kind of like Flying Press. I wish that there was some sort of backstory as to how this pokemon came to be and why it has such a strong desire to become a dragon, so that took away a point for creativity, but otherwise this pokemon is very fun and creative.
Cohesiveness:
I can certainly see this pokemon fitting well in the pokemon world, especially since it has a lot of ties to various canon pokemon such as it’s rivalry prey/predator relationship with flying types and how it likes to brawl with dragons, everything personality-wise is already described and raring to go with all the possible interactions. The main problem I have with it’s cohesiveness however is the ability. I’d like for a type match up chart to be made for the ice/electric attacks to make sure people were using the ability correctly, but also to judge it’s power, because this ability has the potential to become really overpowered. It’s movesets are also very disjointed and limited, and there is no explanation why this pokemon can learn freeze shock, which is a Legendary Exclusive move for Black Kyurem. I can see where the idea would come from, being that Kyurem is an ice dragon and the move has some electric influences, but there is no explanation for how Terravoolt can learn this move. If you’re going to put a legendary exclusive move in a fakemon’s moveset, in my opinion, you need to have a good reason for it, like maybe Voolt used to be just your average electric mouse and made a pact with Kyurem and the dragon gave Voolt some of it’s power, making it part ice type and have a likeness to dragons, and because of this bond Voolt can learn freeze shock. Obviously I would like something more detailed and hopefully more original but I just came up with that on the fly, my point is you gotta have at least something D:
Overall Rating:
Overall this pokemon needs a history and more detail to explain a lot of the unanswered questions the entry left. Cohesively the species meshes well in the pokemon world with it’s behavior, living space, and size, but the moveset and ability might need some serious work, so I gave it a 3/5. Not bad, but still lacking in a few areas.
The Originality got a lower ranking for a few reasons, one of which is that Nyxup and Nyxtor are, according to the origin, made from a Vulpix and resemble Vulpix and Ninetails a lot, just with rainbow coloration. This pokemon would be a lot better off in this category if it was just it’s own pokemon and had a history to go along with it, because when you tie a pokemon’s origin to another pokemon, it’s really hard to make your pokemon seem more original because you really needed to put enough of your own ideas on it to really make it stand out and apart as it’s own unique concept, but this fakemon line not only closely resembles the two Kitsunne pokemon it originated from, but it’s behavior and mannerisms are also strongly similar to Zoroark and Zoura, from the way they use their illusion ability, to the parent child relationship they have. However! The aura that Nyxtor projects from it’s paws to levitate was a very unique idea, I haven’t seen any pokemon do something like that. Your custom move Fortunes Fool was also very original and interesting, probably one of the most original custom moves out of this whole set of entries. I’m very impressed!
Detail: I couldn’t really give this category a higher rating than a 1, and I hate giving out such a low score but this entry is just severely lacking in detail. The description of the appearance is thorough, which is good, and I like that you went beyond just describing what we could already see in the pictures, like telling us what eye color they had and describing the aura around their paws, but most of the description seemed to center around describing the color patterns in the pictures provided and without that, the appearance section has little other information provided. I would have liked to know how these pokemon project aura through their paws, that would have been nice to add in the physical description. However, the entry as a whole could really stand to apply the same level of detail that was given to the physical description, and then some. The behavior and interactions between Nyxup and Nyxtor are so adorable, I love the bond they share, but everything else other than the behavior and physical description is pretty much explained only in one to two sentences which... Just isn’t enough to give a really clear picture of your pokemon. You could have done so much with the parent child bond these two have, even created a whole origin story about a mother Ninetales and her egg that wouldn’t hatch, or maybe it did into a Vulpix, and-- well I’m not going to impose my ideas on you, it’s your fakemon, but I just feel like there was a whole story that could have been put together for the Origin/Lore/History or what have you, instead of simply stating that a Vulpix egg was bathed in moonlight. Making a Fakemon is like starting with a clean slate, you are the only resource we have to learn more about this pokemon, so you need to think of your entry more like an empty Bulbapedia page, and fill in all the lore and details, explain why and how it works, acts, and attacks. I have a lot of unanswered questions the more I read through your entry because you simply state things as fact and give no reasons or explanation behind it, for instance the concept that this pokemon has telepathic abilities. If Nyxup or Nyxtor were both part psychic type this could be overlooked because a psychic type having telepathy is rather self explanatory, but Nyxup are Fairy and Nyxtor are Fairy and Flying, and there’s just no reasoning behind it. Why are these pokemon so fast? Why is the gender ratio so skewed towards female? There’s no breeding information here at all. Why don’t they live on mountains if it seems like an ideal place to live? Why is it that Nyxup would rather starve than eat meat, but it’s evolution can tolerate it if there’s no other option? Why are Nyxtor suddenly able to levitate and project aura from their feet to fly after evolving? It’s a cute pokemon, it really is, and I feel like there’s a lot of potential, but this entry just isn’t developed enough. It has lots of little pieces of information all put together but the flow is missing, you need to find a way to connect all the dots and really fill this entry out.
Creativity:
As mentioned before, Fortunes Fool is by far the most unique and creative original move in this contest, in my opinion. I’m not quite sure how it fits your pokemon, but it’s creative. The way that Nyxtor can move by levitation via the aura in it’s feet is also interesting and creative as well. However, while the entry has an origin, I wouldn’t really call it an origin story. This pokemon has little background or history to it, which hampers the creativity slightly due to lack of content to judge. The habitat and diet also seem rather bland and nondescript, so it doesn’t really stand out, but at least you included it in your entry. I just feel like you could have gotten a bit more creative with it’s diet, this is a fairy pokemon after all, so its diet could have been really fun and interesting like digging up special glowing mushrooms that it eats to give it its rainbow color, or... I don’t know, having some really eccentric taste for a type of nectar that only grows out of a large tube-like plant that’s only found in the lush forests where they live. Fairy lore has fun dietary facts like that, but this entry just kind of brushes it off as herbivores in general and doesn’t get specific, or at least give some kind of favorite food that it’s particularly fond of. Evolving through friendliness is also fairly common now I feel, I wish you could have been a little more unique with the method of evolution, but the entry is still fairly creative, so I gave it a 3. What really hurt this category for you was mainly was the lack of lore and the that the diet, type, and method of evolution just don’t really stand out.
Cohesiveness:
This pokemon I could see fitting in with the pokemon world as far as habitat goes, but what really would have nicely solidified this entry in cohesiveness would have been that lore again, it has no history in the pokemon world because you didn’t give it much of one, and the main interactions you described are only with it’s own kind, you vaguely mention that Nyxup is playful towards other pokemon and that Nyxca protect Nyxup against other predators but there’s no specifics, which leads back to the low score I gave on your detail. What hunts a Nyxup? This information would have helped your cohesiveness score a lot more. The other issues are that Nyxup’s moveset could use some work, it’s very limited, and it can barely learn a handful of TMs when most pokemon can learn at least 20, most times more than that.
Another issue is that Nyxca can learn Doom Desire, which is a legendary exclusive move for Jirachi. It knows this without explanation, and at level 35 no less. If you’re going to put a legendary exclusive move in your pokemon’s moveset, you need to have a good reason why that is. And you have not one, but two exclusive moves, Light of Ruin is strictly the signature move of the Eternal Flower Floette, and that’s only because it’s flower is powered by the Geosenge machine that gave that Floette Xerneas‘ immortality, plus the attack itself requires the use of the Eternal Flower, and there is no connection or explanation made for having this move other than maybe Nyxtor being a fairy type, but that’s simply not a good enough reason to give this Fakemon that sort of move. With a legendary exclusive attack and a psuedo legendary attack and no reasoning behind it, its just really not cohesive....
Fortune’s fool, while a very unique move, sacrifices a lot with potentially very little reward gain, but I suppose that is why the name of the move is Fortunes Fool x3 It’s a slight problem for cohesiveness but it could be overlooked. No risk, no reward and all that jazz, that’s more of a matter of personal preference.
On an entirely different note, I don’t know how breeding works with a Nyxca, but I would imagine if they bred naturally it would be really hard to procreate more of their species considering only 2% of all Nyxup and Nyxca are actually male. This pokemon would have gone extinct long ago if this were the case, but there’s no information on how breeding works or eggs happen anywhere in this entry so I don’t even know how they exist other than maybe more are created every time a Vulpix egg is bathed in moonlight, but there isn’t enough information here to really tell....
Normally I dock a point for a use of a legendary exclusive move if there is not a legitimate explanation for it, but there are two here, and that coupled with the lack of information on breeding and overall information on this entry’s place in the pokemon world leaves this category with 2/5 points for Cohesiveness.
Overall Rating:
Unfortunately, while I feel that this Fakemon has a lot of potential, not to mention it’s absolutely beautiful, the lack of Information, History, and the issues with Cohesiveness bring my overall score down to a 2/5, but I would strongly encourage you to revise your entry and try again in the next contest if you do not make the top four this time around, because I really do believe this fakemon has the potential to be really great, but as it is now I just don’t think it’s ready to be made into a Fakemon yet.
This fakemon is extremely original. There is no canon snow leopard pokemon in existence, and the combination of Ice and Fire types has not been used before. Normally I would call this out for being a contradictive type combination and dock a point off cohesiveness, but you do such a good job explaining why it works without being detrimental through the use of it’s ‘Spirit Fire’ that it just works. It’s history is unique and everything about this pokemon really stands out. Nice job!
Detail: This fakemon is thoroughly detailed, with long in-depth explanations of each featured mechanic and aspect of how this pokemon works. From the history and lore to the individual pokemon analysis, everything went above and beyond the minimum requirement. Those Flurry sprites are adorable, and I can’t decide which looks better, the shiny or the normal sprites. Alas this isn’t an art contest, so I can’t judge this on the art itself, but I like how you made the sprite of Flurry’s snow phasing animation! I can judge that, because it’s going above the minimum requirement. The learnset is nice and filled out, spread out evenly over several levels. There was a detailed description of each stage in the evolution, from the way it moved, acted, ate, it’s size, even it’s breeding information in spite of the fact that it doesn’t breed, you still explain why that is and how each evolution acts in the face of a relationship, which is nice to have as a point of reference. This category gets a 5/5 from me~
Creativity:
This pokemon has it’s background and lore set, with unique spins on things like it’s diet. It feels nice to read through specifics like how it’s favorite treats are Basculin and bowls of moomoo milk, because even on such a bland subject you made it interesting and even incorporated pokemon interactions through it by outlining how these pokemon hunt. The custom attack is very unique in that Ghost type attacks don’t really have a means of healing. I also like the way this attack fits the pokemon it was made for, I could totally see a Wispard or Saberal running around and using Exorcism on ghost type pokemon in accordance with it’s history and lore. The moveset is certainly unique because of the typing Saberal and Wispard have It’s method of evolution is also unique and ties right in to it’s story as well. Just all around creative and tied together. You really connected the dots and thoroughly explained everything there was to know about these pokemon, which I appreciate.
Cohesiveness:
This pokemon certainly has a fitting place in the pokemon world, described with great detail in it’s lore and continued in the descriptions for each pokemon individually. It already has ties to the pokemon that it hunts and eats, ties to shamanistic trainers, and yet it makes sense why they haven’t been around for so long as well the way you described it. The method of evolution makes perfect sense, as I said before in the creativity section, the attacks in it’s learnset are primarily a mixture of fire, ice, and ghost, which match it perfectly. I would agree with Starlight that the learnable TM list is quite a bit extensive, but I didn’t dock points for that because the TMs that it can learn make sense, and personally I don’t mind so much because there’s still a limit of four moves per pokemon, so even if the TM list was lengthy people still would only be able to pick and choose four moves out of all the possibilities. However, I do also agree with Starlight in that the weight of this pokemon seems off, even for a pokemon that’s partially in both the spiritual plane and the realm of the living. To be hungry enough to take down a whole Mammoswine for a meal just doesn’t match up with the lighter weight, both due to the need for a heavier body for power and the physical need for a pokemon who eats so much to be a lot heavier. I can see how this relation could be made though, keeping with the nature of Sabertooth Tigers taking down Mammoths, this being a sabertooth snow leopard taking down a Mammoswine. An adjustment on the weight however is certainly needed.
Starlight also brought up a very good point about your custom move as well, a power of 90 is quite a bit high for having so many added affects, considering that other health absorbing moves have a lower power or a limitation like a pokemon needing to be asleep in order for dream eater to work. Though I see where the effects of this move come from, maybe remove the chance of burn for all pokemon this is used against and just have it burn Ghost pokemon? That way it keeps with the idea of burning spirits with spiritual fire. I would also reduce the power to 80 at least, if not something more along the lines of 60-75.
There is also the matter of Wispard and Saberal’s hidden ability Wonder Guard. So far Shedinja is the only pokemon to have this ability, so giving this to Wispard and Saberal is about the equivalent of giving it a legendary exclusive move. However, while I dislike things like that, I have been known to accept them if there is a legitimate reason behind it, and this pokemon certainly has one. You explained that Wispard and Saberal’s wisps act like an extension of their host pokemon by doing things like protecting their pokemon from attacks. That would certainly connect to an ability like wonder guard, though I’m slightly wary of this. Wispard and Saberal do have four weaknesses, one of which does x4 damage, and all of those weaknesses are really common attack types. I’m struggling, because it is explained and it’s certainly workable, but I just feel like this still needs a point docked for this however, because I’m still not certain this ability is completely cohesive with the mechanics of the guild. It makes sense for the pokemon, and there are certainly lots of mechanics that would remove the effects of this ability like other abilities such as Mold Breaker, or moves like Soak that replace abilities, Ring target could also be placed on it... I don’t know. I suppose it just makes me uncomfortable. Maybe you could give it a few more weaknesses to balance this out?
Overall Rating:
Overall I give this pokemon a 4/5. Everything about this entry is wonderfully detailed and creative, it’s perfect in that regard, but the weight and the custom move should be altered, and I would caution you to be wary of that Wonder Guard ability and think about my suggestions please. c:
This pokemon is certainly original, even though it is a bug pokemon. While I agree that bug pokemon are common, there IS a reason for that, being that bugs make up most of the population of earth, therefore there are going to be a lot of bug pokemon in the pokeverse to reflect that, so making a bug pokemon is acceptable to me and not unoriginal because it feels like no one ever makes bug type fakemon.... Like ever.... Its kind of refreshing to be honest. I’m not the biggest fan of bug pokemon, but this entry is different and pretty cool. Besides, there is no such typing pair as Bug and Dark, and the only other mantis-like pokemon is Scyther, which this fakemon doesn’t bare any resemblance to in design, behavior, or social workings. It’s also very unique in that these pokemon are based off of school children, with their uniforms and cliques devolved into a more primal and animalistic description. The concept has not been done before in pokemon, and while the appearance is certainly very human like, there is a whole egg group for pokemon classified as “human-like”, so while we may not be used to human-esque pokemon other than Gardevoir, it’s not a crime to make a human like pokemon, even if they are apparently, according to some of the other comments on this fakemon entry, similar to some anime characters I have no clue about. The concept is framed around a school theme, which goes along with the characters that it looks like, school themes are I suppose pretty easy to do, but it still hasn’t been done yet in the pokemon world, which is kind of surprising. I would think there would have been a book pokemon or librarian pokemon by now, or an academy themed pokemon with school pride.... Still, this entry is fun and different in my eyes, so it stands out.
Detail:
I can tell there was a lot of thought put into this entry with very detailed descriptions of various aspects of these pokemon’s typical behavior and the way they look and act, not to mention you took the time describing the terminology commonly associated with this pokemon and the inner workings of the schools and social behavior. Though this pokemon doesn’t have an “origin story”, I still feel like I can envision it very clearly in its current life and activities. You certainly went above the minimum requirement, but there are still some holes in the entry, for instance I would like to know what makes Acadimantis suddenly such a loner when Cicademy hate being alone so much? Why is it that the flashiest Cicademy leads the class? Why not the Acadimantis? Do all Academantis really just drop everything and leave? It goes from a desperately social hoarder pokemon to a complete loner, and it just seems like there’s an odd gap there. The fact that Cicademy evolve at level 20 matches well with it’s bug type, since bugs tend to evolve very early level, and while normally I would say that Cicademy’s level up learnset needs more, another theme of but pokemon is not having a very extensive learnset in their earlier stages, so it makes sense.
Creativity:
I think that a little history behind this pokemon would have done some good, but honestly the way you describe these pokemon’s inner social workings sort of feels like it’s history in of itself. You do a wonderful job creating the way these pokemon function, I can really see them moving about their daily lives as if you had given me their history. I would still be interested to know how these pokemon and their culture came about originally, but this is still a very creative entry. The method of evolution keeps up with the theme of bug pokemon evolving at an early level, but I would have liked to see a more unique method of evolution for this pokemon other than simply leveling up, just to get more points on creativity. I feel like with how wonderfully creative the rest of this entry is, you could have done it and pulled it off with an aplomb. I also would have liked to have seen something more interesting with it’s diet that wasn’t so typical, leaves and sticks isn’t bad per say, but you could have still made this part of your entry a bit more interesting with some little known fact of a favorite treat these pokemon enjoy or maybe special meals they get to commemorate a new leader Cicademy perhaps, but this is a minor thing. I would have also liked to see a different or unique method of evolution other than pure leveling. While evolving at level 20 fits in with the early bug evolution concept that the games have established, with how unique Cicademy and Academantis are, I was sort of looking forward to something a little different. For instance, you could use the reason for its evolution to cross the bridge between Cicademy and Academantis’ vastly different personalities. In spite of this however there is no question that this entry has a lot of creative ideas, with the jacket wings and the school theme brought to a pokemon, which hasn’t been done before. The gathering of treasure, the love of flare, and the connection to songs are all very interesting and fun to read. The School Anthem ability is also very unique, and it fits with this pokemon well. Overall this entry was very creative, just needed a little more expansion, an origin story would also probably help this category along, but otherwise excellent job!
Cohesiveness:
Some of the moveset could stand to be adjusted, Bug bite is a bit too strong of a move to be gained at level 5, so is Night Slash and X-Scissor at levels 26 and 28. I’d suggest that you look at different bug pokemon’s learnsets if they can learn these moves leveling up and use that as a guideline for when to place what moves at what levels. Other than the moveset however, this fakemon fits very well in the pokemon world! The evolution makes sense for the species, the moveset matches the pokemon as well, and while I could see this pokemon also being a fighting / bug, I think the Dark / Bug fits it better. It matches the violent and somewhat shady attitude that Academantis has and they mysterious, lone wolf complex it behaves upon, I see that much more as dark type attributes than fighting type. Not to mention it mercilessly beats down anything in it’s path like some thug walking around at night. -shivers- I would not want to cross paths with one of these pokemon.
Overall Rating:
Overall I give this entry a 4/5, because while the moveset could use some slight adjustments and I would have liked to see you get more creative with things like it’s diet or method of evolution, these are pretty minor and doesn’t weigh too much bearing on my opinion of the fact that this is still just a really interesting and fun entry that was very well put together!
Oh my Arceus this entry is so super cute! I want to hug a Magikit and love it and call it Meowsy (no its okay I would think of a more fitting name but still). Unfortunately as far as originality goes, cat pokemon are pretty common, and Misdreavus and Mismagius sort of already have that trickster witch theme going on, however the type combination of dark and psychic is uncommon, having only been used by Malamar and Inkay, and it’s story is certainly unique. This fakemon, while it uses Espurr in it’s origin, stands apart from its past self with the culture you created amongst these pokemon and their covens, and it’s method of evolution is unique as well.
Detail:
This fakemon is beautifully detailed. You really do a lot to thoroughly explain every aspect of this pokemon, from it’s origin story to it’s gender differences, to their behavior with trainers, alone, and with covens in the wild. You also do very well on elaborating their diet and habitat, the moveset and abilities are very fitting to the pokemon itself, and you go to great lengths to descriibe every aspect of this pokemon. Just little things like how it’s the type of pokemon to steal some frosting off of a slice of cake, or elaborating on how a coven works, and the unique way Magickit will hunt. It really adds to the overall concept that you’ve already established and brings it above and beyond the minimum requirement.
Creativity:
There is no doubt that this entry is beyond creative. I love how Magikit’s hunt and communicate using those telepathic pulses. That’s a really neat concept! Every bit of information is interesting, and it’s origin story tugged at my heartstrings! You incorporated a lot of unique ideas with how this pokemon works, lives, and thrives, and its evolution method is unique. The custom move certainly fits this pokemon, I can see the ties to superstition with yowling black cats crossing your path and striking fear into your heart, but the move itself doesn’t really stand out. It’s a sound based screeching move, and I have to agree with Starlight here, it does feel similar to Snarl. However, the way this pokemon behaves and interacts with the world around it is very fun to read about and creative. I love everything about this fakemon that you wrote. The trickster nature does hit a few similarities to other pokemon, but I feel like it’s a fitting match for this entry, so I’m not too bothered by it. With so many pokemon out theres bound to be a few crossed ideas here and there, but the important thing is that in spite of some similarities to other pokemon, this entry still stands on its own as a very creative and fun fakemon.
Cohesiveness:
With all the mysterious and supernatural aspects imbedded in the pokemon franchise and how well you developed this entry, I feel that this fakemon fits very well into the pokemon world. You really created a whole socialization among it’s species and thought out the interactions it has with other pokemon for hunting, or with their trainers as well. Its method of evolution makes sense for the species, requiring Psychic and a higher level to evolve since Magikit aren’t supposed to be very well controlled over their powers, but Grimarcane are. The attacks that it can learn make sense, everything about this pokemon is explained well, so cohesively I think this entry does very well. The only comment I would make however is that I also agree with Starlight in that Harrowing Yowl is rather strong, and it’s strange that it doesn’t affect allies due to the nature of the move itself. I would be willing to accept a 110 base damage if the side effect didn’t have a 4/10 chance to cause flinching, and I probably could look past it if the move was just 4/10 chance of paralysis, but flinching is not curable and there are very few ways to actually prevent it. This is why most attacks that have a high flinch chance aren’t generally super strong, certainly not 110 damage.
Overall Rating:
Overall I love this entry. It’s very well made, with only a slight issue with Harrowing Yowl. Originality was low due to drawing on concepts that have already been done such as a forest witch pokemon and a cat, but the entry itself was very detailed, creative, and interesting, so it gets a 5/5 from me!
I also need to say this here because it has nothing to do with the scoring, but Hex! Why does this cute little witch not have Hex in it’s moveset?? ; A; its so perfect for this fakemon!
This entry is very original, from the lore to the design, to the type combination. Fairy / Dragon has only been used as a typing for Mega Altaria thus far, and while dragons are hard to make into an original concept, I love how this fakemon’s design feels more like a mixture between a dog and a Chinese dragon, and it’s story it really interesting and different. It really does have that sort of Chinese lore feel to it, which I feel hasn’t really been done as far as dragons go. The chosen biome of taiga is a good fit and not one commonly used, the custom move and the method of evolution for Lupup is unique as well. This entry certainly stands out. Good job!
Detail:
This entry is very imaginative and detailed, you did well to include a lot of detail in the physical description for the things we couldn’t see in the provided sprite images, such at their scales beneath and around the fur. I love the little snippets of extra information you provide to enhance the overall story you have already set in place, such as Lupup liking to put sticks in Combee nests and take them out to chew on them and the honey. I do wish you had given a little bit more explanation over a few things though, for instance, why is it that these pokemon are so dog like in appearance? If their mother was a dragon and father was a ambiguous fairy type pokemon, where did the canine influence come from? I also have to wonder why all of these pokemon hate humans at first, because it makes sense for the original Lupup, but dislike of humans isn’t hereditary. I would assume that all Lupup are just taught by their parents to dislike humans, but every Lupup’s parents leave them in another family of pokemon that aren’t Lunine or Lunarch. That abandonment isn’t really explained either, why would parent Lunarch or Lunine leave their children with other pokemon if they are such fiercely loyal and protective pokemon? I would think they would guard their children closely, not give them up to another pokemon family. I could sort of see that being a means of trying to teach their children about the world and getting them familiar with other lifestyles to get a good diversity amongst their own kind, but that’s an assumption, I don’t actually know why this is the way Lupup are treated by their parents. However, in spite of a few holes in the lore, this pokemon is still very detailed. The learnsets and abilities make sense for this pokemon, you elaborated on a lot of features such as its method of evolution, the emphatic link, diet, and its personality, so it still gets a 4/5 for me.
Creativity:
This entry has lots of creativity, the method of evolution for Lupup is unique, you really came up with different, interesting ideas for the way these fakemon act, eat, and it’s history was sad but creative and interesting. The learnset is crafted well, and the custom move is very unique and creative! It’s an interesting take on moves like spikes and stealth rock, floating fire that beckons pokemon switching into battle to burn themselves. A very interesting concept and I can see the connection between the move and fae lore for this pokemon. All around a great job on creativity!
Cohesiveness:
Cohesively I can see this pokemon fitting well in the world. It’s size is manageable and it’s learnset makes sense and is evenly spread out with nice placement of move power’s in ratio with a good level to learn it at, the only real thing I would point out is that Geomancy is a legendary exclusive move for Xerneas. I have to say though, it doesn’t feel as abrasive to me because it’s learned at such a high level, matches up with typing, and is a status enhancement move that takes a turn to charge rather than the typical massive damage inflicting move that legendaries will have, but it’s still a massive stat buff and there isn’t really an explanation as to why Lunine and Lunarch can learn it. However it’s method of evolution makes sense, they both have to do with bonding with their trainer which matches up to it’s lore and background, so it still gets a 4/5 from me.
Overall Rating:
Overall I think this is a very well rounded entry, a bit of holes in it’s history that would be nice to have filled, and there is the issue of Geomancy being in it’s moveset, but they aren’t glaring issues for me, because the entry itself is still very good in my eyes. 5/5, well done c:
I find this entry to be very interesting and original. The story of the lab and genetic scientists with rocket does seem very close to the mewtwo story, particularly when these fakemon rebel and destroy the lab they were created in, but other than that these pokemon take a combination of a Zoroark and Sylveon and become something entirely different and unique. Not to mention there isn’t a pokemon out yet who is obtained via breeding two pokemon that aren’t the same species as it other than Manaphy with a Ditto, but I don’t really feel like this pokemon falls under the same category since it utilizes a DNA splicer to combine two pokemon to make a new species entirely. Even Kyurem when combined with Reshiram or Zekrom was still Kyurem, but this is a brand new breed, and that is certainly unique. It’s type combination of Dark and Fairy is also original, and it makes sense given that it was combined with a dark type pokemon and a fairy type. Fox pokemon are fairly common, but you made this one your own by making a butterfly winged final evolution and really making the entry itself stand out. Good Job!
Detail:
I love how you added contest information to your custom move, that was something no one else did, and to be honest I should probably make that a requirement for future custom contests >w>;;; so thank you for that. However your custom move also implies that special attack and/or special defense, so which is it and what do we have to do to determine whether it os one or the other or both? You really explain how to obtain and evolve this pokemon using the dark splicer in the breeding/evolution section, though you should probably add how people would obtain this item! I would have really liked more of an explanation on this pokemon’s behaviors however, like how does it interact with other pokemon? You mention that Phacksen are seen as the alphas, but you also say that about Phackselle which doesn’t make very much sense... I would think only Phackselle would be seen as alphas. You also don’t really explain much about how their community works, and I’m also confused by how the bright patches on these pokemon’s fur are used for warmth and not the rest of it’s darker fur. In actuality darker colors absorb more heat than lighter colors, so this confuses me a bit. I also don’t quite understand how Phackselle suddenly get large wings... I can sort of see the relation, because fairies have wings, but this pokemon was a hybrid between a Zoroark and a Sylveon. I suppose Sylveon have wing like bows but, I just would really like some explanation of this evolution line’s physical development through each stage. Something I also don’t understand is that even though it’s half Zoroark and half Sylveon, you really give this pokemon a lot of ghostly themes, like cursed body for an ability, and in it’s pokedex entries you talk about how they eat spirits or guide lost souls or even actively hunt children’s souls down, but there’s no explanation why. What does this pokemon have anything to do with spirits? And why in the world do Phackselle EAT them?? For such a cute and fairly passive pokemon, it feels really sinister and aggressive. There is a lot of details that need to be added here, so I’m afraid I have to give this section a 2/5. :c
Creativity:
This entry is certainly creative, you developed a history for it and while it’s method of evolution isn’t totally original, it’s method of obtaining is with the breeding of Zoroark and Sylveon. There is a lack of content to judge for creativity however because you didn’t elaborate enough on how these pokemon act around others besides the fact that they are just passive aggressive towards pokemon in general, eat meat, and have something to do with luring the souls of children. It just needs more detail in order to more accurately judge the creativity of this entry. The custom attack also feels like a projectile version of Dark Pulse, but it’s moveset fits and I do love the unique design of this pokemon, so I’ll give it a 3/5 for a good effort on creativity.
Cohesiveness:
This section needs a bit of work, Cursed Body doesn’t make sense as an ability for this pokemon, bite is really strong to have as a starting move because its both 60 damage and has a high flinch chance. Most pokemon don’t learn bite until at least in the level 20’s. I also don’t quite understand why the learnset shifts to learn moves earlier as this pokemon evolves when the general trend is as a pokemon evolves it learns its moves at the same level as its pre-evolution or in later levels, but from Phacksen to Phackselle Moonblast goes from level 54 to be learned at level 43. This pokemon sort of has a place in the pokemon world, but it’s not entriely clear where these pokemon wound up after escaping or where they could potentially be with vague explanations of their habitat and social lives/interactions with its environment and other pokemon. The use of the dusk stone makes some sense given that it’s a dark type pokemon, but the dusk stone isn’t used in either Zoroark or Sylveon’s evolution method, and again, is more tired to ghost pokemon evolution rather than dark. It would make more sense to tie Phacksen’s evolution to Phackselle to the wings it obtains in its final stage, help connect the dots a bit. The attacks do suit the pokemon though and its other two abilities fit. I sort of struggled to score this category because these flaws are more personal opinion and none of them are really guild system breakingly bad, it’s more just that there’s a lack of content, so I’ll give it a 3/5.
Overall Rating:
Overall I like this entry and its ideas, I can tell you tried to be really different, creative, and outside the box, but the entry feels somewhat rushed and is missing a few components. I think this has the potential to be a great entry though, you had some really creative and unique ideas that I liked a lot, but there is a lack of content and detail that needs to be filled and a lot of explanation that’s needed, after that maybe one or two nitpicky things but otherwise this entry is very good, so I give it a 3/5 c:
Comments and Critiques: I gave originality a two because Draginal is another dragon type without anything new added on. Especially as a monotype, this entry really just feels like its Dragon McDragon. It's lore didn't feel very original, though I suppose it hasn't been done before? If anything it felt like a fossil pokemon that had just never been fossilized. Also since the art was borrowed, I can't really give any credit for the design, though it's pretty standard dragon-fare as is.
It was a bit lacking in detail and didn't have TM moves. The extra information was really great though, and very important for explaining why its moveset was the way it was.
There was lore, which was good, didn't really explain why it exists though. It's background could definitely use more detail, especially since this seems like such an ancient, primal pokemon, I feel like we only get a glimpse of things. Its custom attack was unique, really cool with the way it changes for day/night (though it would be nice for there to be an effect for that that went beyond aestetic). Given previous comments about some of Draginal's stuff being taken right from source material, I can't count those towards the entry.
It was good that you explained its moveset, but then when you turn around and actually look at it there are some really strong special moves that Draginal learns, as others have noted. Boomburst is too strong too early (in addition to being a special attack), Crush Grip is a legendary move that it learns for no real reason other than it fits Draginal's theme (although it isn't a too-overpowered move), and it's custom move is special too! That's just weird for such a brute force pokemon. Also, Fire Storm is too strong. Waaay way too strong.
I think this fakemon has a lot of potential that just hasn't been reached yet. It needs a lot more information to tie all of the different bits of info together and to make anything borrowed from another source truly your own.
Comments and Critiques: Super original! It does take a lot from Giratina, and there are pokemon that feed off of energy already. The main problem I have is that it grows into a being that seems to rival pokemon like Yveltal and Giratina itself. I liked the direction it went into from Ghoizard to Spiriake but felt the last evolution Enigrake was too close to existing pokemon.
Good level of detail!
I really liked the background and lore for this pokemon. I didn't really get a sense for how it would interact with other pokemon, but within their own species it was really fleshed out. The custom attack's added effect was interesting though the move itself wasn't very different from existing attacks like smog aside from that added effect.
Enigrake (and to a smaller extent Spiriake) are way too big and weigh an ungodly amount, especially for a ghost type.
It's really creepy and violent and cool :3 However, Enigrake's size and nature makes sense for the story, but not really as an actual pokemon. It's like how Yveltal is all "I will destroy the world when I wake up jk lol feed me another pokepuff human friend" and that just doesn't seem right to me.
Comments and Critiques: I gave originality a four because there's already a bunch of mouse pokemon, but the ideas and concepts behind it are really well done.
For the most part the level of detail is good, It's movesets could use some work, it doesn't really seem like one cohesive thing for all three stages. The way it learns an electric move + ice move at the same time is really, really neat! However, if you're going to do this you need to cut down on the other moves its learning, I feel like Voolt learns twice as many moves as it should.
No lore, but creative overall.
It's ability is a bit too powerful. I felt like there was a lot going on with their personalities (they're pranksters, they are single minded and simple yet very smart?, they like dragon pokemon for some reason?). Also, as others have mentioned, its weights don't really match abilities and are kind of unrealistic. Extra points for it learning electric/ice moves at the same time, it matches the theme / convergence really well!
I think this pokemon has a lot of potential but needs some serious polishing and streamlining to reach its full potential.
Comments and Critiques: This one is so cool~ Rainbow fox, rainbow fox~
It isn't too original though...since there are a lot of foxes already, and it's basically a Vulpix/Ninetales. There wasn't much detail though, which makes it hard to peg the originality down, and since a lot of the detail borrowed from other pokemon (Vulpix, Zorua) the originality took a hit. The cool rainbow stuff is new and the custom move is super original though.
Really lacking in detail. I wanted to add a point here for the thought that seemed to go into the level moves, but the lack of TMs hurt that.
Creativity was hard to judge given that there wasn't very much content. Aside from the custom move, and the rainbow aura thing, there wasn't enough there to truly judge the creativity. You did think of where it came from and where it lives in the pokemon world (if it was a bit vague/not detailed) so points for that!
It's custom move is cool but its effect is convoluted; I decided the creativeness canceled out the wackyness though. It seems to me like you were going for a "fortune's fool" vibe with the entire pokemon- expanding on that with behavior/lore would help this pokemon stand (or float) on its own four legs! Doom Desire and Light of Ruin are two legendary (well, one pseudo-legendary) exclusive moves without much of a reason for being there. I'd let Light of Ruin slide, since its a pesudo/not overpowered, but the fact that it was pretty specific to the Kalos storyline makes it out of place here. Not sure why Nyxtor can fly. Also it seems like it should be a dark type? Maybe replace its flying typing or change the levitate ability out since it's sort of repetitive? I have to agree also that the dietary changes from Nyxup to Nyxtor are weird, to say the least.
I absolutely love this pokemon and the concept behind it. Unfortunately, the lack of information forces me to bring my score down. I would love~ to see this pokemon developed more!
Comments and Critiques: It's another cat pokemon, and there's already a sabretooth tiger pokemon (Raikou) and a leopard pokemon (liepard). That being said, this pokemon is so bursting with originality that I can't justify anything less than a 5 here. Its soul hunting reminded me of Soul Eater!
Detail is fantastic. Very well thought-out and thoroughly explained.
I felt like everything that could be explained about this pokemon was. The way it evolves and its custom move were especially neat.
It's special move is maybe overpowered, since it heals the user and is pretty strong, but it's really creative and fits the pokemon really well! I'm not really sure why it burns though, is it because it uses its fiery wispy things? It also learns too many moves (and most of them strong) compared to most pokemon. I have to agree also that it probably should weigh a bit more, even if it's half out-of-this-world. I have a really, really hard time accepting the fire typing. I get that its "Spirit Fire" so it works with ice, but it just seems so intrinsically like a ghost type (especially since it lives partly in the non-physical plan). It makes use of fire, of course, but it just doesn't seem as vital to the core of its being as ice and ghost is. Spectral Fire by its very nature screams ghost or fairy to me, and though there is a brief explanation that was definitely thought out and creative, I just can't get behind it. Wonder guard is super strong , though I can see how it fits with the pokemon. It may not sit well with me, but it makes enough sense with the whole spirit stuff.
I really, really love this pokemon. Flurry's adorable, and its just so amazingly well thought out. Unfortunately I really can't get over the typing even with the explanations for it. However, I think it's something I can look past given I already took a point off for it in cohesiveness and that I really love the rest of this pokemon to bits <3
Comments and Critiques: This bug type is really similar to existing ones (like Star said, Kricketune and Scyther). Though this one made way better use of the whole singing/music thing than Kricketune
Good detail, explained everything pretty well.
Could use some lore, but I think the creativity that went into describing how they act, both Cicademy and Acadamantis, is strong and maybe doesn't need more than a brief sentence or two about origin. The ability is good too. I would've liked to see an evolution method that drew from how Cicademy collects things.
The movesets could use some work making them more cohesive between the two pokemon and cutting down the number of moves learned. Cicademy maybe learns too many TMs, and there are some moves learned a bit early that are kind of strong. The pokemon fits pretty well into the world, and the evolution makes sense for a bug type.
I'm not a big fan of bug types, but I think this pokemon was pretty cool and quirky and well done. It seemed to be lacking a little bit somehow, maybe in some further explanations / adding something extra to it via evolution or something.
Comments and Critiques: Not only is this another cat pokemon, but this is really similar to past cat pokemon. I know Espurr is part of its origin, but it doesn't really offer to much new stuff compared to what already exists in pokemon, from the witchy Mismagius/Misdrevous to other cat/prankster pokemon. A lot of thought went into this pokemon, and a lot of originality too, but it's just too similar to too many existing pokemon.
Detail was excellent, I really liked added bits like how they can hunt using psychic communications, among other things.
Creativity was excellent as well. Though there were a few things that echoed existing pokemon (like Harrowing Yowl) there was just so much more that went into this pokemon, and it all fits nicely.
I really don't feel like how the origin fits with the appearance and bio of this pokemon. It seems like maybe the Espurr shouldn't have died, but instead just been infused with darkness from the ritual (since it's not ghost type). I felt like a lot more could've been done with its special ability/move, since harrowing yowl didn't really seem to fit with this particular pokemon close enough for it to be its signature move...it didn't "scream" Grimarcane, hyuk hyuk hyuk. It's also a bit too strong with the added affect + base power. I think that there are a lot of interesting ideas in here, there's definitely some stuff that I like, but if I were to ignore how adorable the picture is (since it isn't original) I can't really say this would stand out to me too much. Also the hat-face isn't explaned and definitely needs explaining.
Soo cute! I'd never evolve Magikit >w< But since the artwork isn't original, I'll focus judging based on the content. I'm pretty fond of this entry, its well thought out and fun to read. It does suffer a bit from being really similar to existing kitty cats, and I have to admit I wouldn't like it quite as much if Magikit weren't so darned cute!
Comments and Critiques: Really original, pretty different from any other pokemon despite it having a dog-ish base.
There's a good amount of detail that explains what needs to be explained, though I agree somewhat with what Spectral said about the abandonment issue not being explained I can't justify a point drop on that alone.
This entry is really creative, it answered most if not all of the creative category questions. The signature move is interesting (though the description is a bit confusing)
There's a strong cohesiveness throughout: its typing, moves, and behavior match up with its lore and bio and it fits into the pokemon world. I agree with Sonic Lazar that the flying is a little odd, but given chinese dragons (which I'm assuming this is based off of) can fly for no apparent reason it's okay. Also there's Geomancy in there, a legendary exclusive move, but since it's really under powered in the guild and not that strong anyways it's not too bad.
Lupupisadorablegaaahhhh I suppose there are a couple tiny things that could be tweaked, but I don't feel it justifies (lol pun) a point drop in any single category. As Draco Malfoy once said in a Very Potter Musical, "You know who I think is the ugliest girl in school? That Hermione Granger! You know what I would give her on a scale of 1 to 10? 1 would be the ugliest and 10 pretty... I would give her an 8... 8.5... or a 9... not over a 9.8 'cos there is always room for improvement. Not everyone is perfect, like me. That's why I'm holding out for a 10. Because I'm worth it!" So, I decided to just take one point off from one category, because I believe it's not quite perfect.
Comments and Critiques: It's based on existing pokemon and has the same animal base as a lot of existing pokemon without really adding much aside from the colors and random wings at the end. Also, the scientist thing feels a bit mewtwo. But the gene splicing is new (I think) and the typing is new.
This pokemon could use more describing its behavior, I didn't get a feel at all for how this pokemon (and all its evolutions) behave. The individual evolutions could use a lot of fleshing out and didn't seem all that different from one another.
The creativity for what was here was good but, like I said, it really needs more details and fleshing out. The custom move is about so-so creative-wise.
This really needs more information on its behavior and why it is the way it is beyond its origin. Why does it grow wings? Why does it feel connected to souls? It doesn't really make sense how you got this pokemon from a Sylveon and Zorua. Where did the parts that don't match those pokemon at all come from? The dark splicer? Also the Phacksa has too many TMs and its moveset in general is a bit too strong for the levels its learning stuff at.
This entry seems like it needs more work and polishing. I think it has really great potential but like I said needs fleshing out.
The Judging Portion of the Custom Pokemon Contest is Over and the Results Are In!!!!
First, a big thank you to all those who participated; we received some wonderful and creative entries in March. This contest was a wonderful display of imagination! Thank you also to all those who voted even without an entry to help determine our top four! So without further adieu, congratulations to our top four entries!
In Fourth Place, we have the amazingly haunting and creepy Entry #2; Ghoizard, Spirake, and Enigrake, created by Indeciisiive Wolkova with a total of 230 points!
In Third Place, we have the adorable and mischievous Entry #7; Magikit and Grimarcane, created by Darkie Ramirez Werepyre with a sum of 234 points!
In Second Place, we have the majestic and awesome Entry #8; Lupup, Lunine, and Lunarch, created by StarlightSchism with a whopping 254 points!
and finally, in First Place, we have Entry #5, Flurry, Wispard, and Saberal, created by SpectralEternity with a grand total of 266 points! Oh my gosh... Thanks so much you guys!! ; w;
Attention top four! If you would all please communicate with me so that we can get your entries finalized to be put into the fakedex, that would be wonderful~ Please and thank you c:
