I think I cringed in this segment, to me it was that bad.
Angel stealing the show, well that would me he'd have to be,
Well a heel for one
Relevant for another
I think a better title for the promo would've been 'Angel airs his grievances'
An 'Instant' replay, is short, not a ******** long paragraph segment
Despite the fact I 'know' the song that you're using, probably would've been a good idea to I dunno, list it what it is, who it's by and a link to it..
Because I don't know if anyone else does it, but I tend to click the links and listen to the songs sometimes..
Helps me get in a mood, and in that wrestler's mindset in why they chose that song, etc..
Anyways...
"Angel makes his way slowly down the ramp as he is billed in. The new ring name had a bit of a sting to it, but he chose it himself as a way to motivate him and remind him that he was only here for one reason.."At no point have you mentioned 'a new ring name' so what are you talking about?
He slides the chair into the ring and jumps up onto the apron, wiping his feet off before he climbs into the ring,HOW?! Doesn't he have a hurt knee or some s**t like that, or ankle.. either way he's not jumping or hopping on to ANY apron..
He saw that he was not going to make it anywhere based on his name...because thanks to Chrono his name and legacy would forever be ruined.Pretty sure that's
your fault, not mine. Not sure why I'm being brought up in this because again this 'segment' has nothing to do with me period
Nor should any of your promos/segments will have anything to do with me.
So at this point I'm looking and I notice your actions are bolded, your promos aren't. Which is fine 'actions speak louder than words' and you want to be different, I get that..
But hey here's a thought, why not change the color of your words. If you change the font size to small then no one's going to notice your words which won't help you in the long run.
Try some color, just don't do that gay orange s**t or anything bright..
So as I continue reading this, I get to the ever annoying
'No one has what it takes to fly with the Angels' catchphrase
and throughout the promo you're talking about how you're irrelevant, and redundant..
So that makes me think... Why would anyone
want to fly with the Angels when you pretty much insult them and call them irrelevant..
"Interesting choice in words... Fly... Cause you know for being an 'Angel'...? You haven't done a whole lot of it.. In fact, recently I'd say your in quiet the slump."Couldn't have said it better myself actually...
Ever since 2008 when he was injured in EEW at the hands of Chrono, he had never truly recoveredOh hey, this match.. This 'unsanctioned match' that never finished and wasn't canon in any storyline whatsoever.
Well okay let's continue talking about it.. Yeah no. Moving on
and he tried desperately to make his way to the ropes, but with the brace it made it nearly impossible for Angel to move...he was a sitting duckSo what changed? Because he was jumping on to aprons, climbing into rings moments before hand..
And then the typical Disciple who magically gotten back with his manager that was fired, that was never shown rehired..
At this point I just stop reading because it was a no-sell fest...
Too much no selling
Too much inconsistencies with your 'injury'
Too much relying on other people's names to get you over, myself especially
Too much jumping back and forth between face/heel with your actions
Too much trying to add back stories into events that don't even relate to said backstory or current events.
You're a guy called 'Angel' who wears all white, has 'face' catchphrases, by all accounts has a face storyline.... but you act heel..
So either change your name, change your gimmick, change your appearance but do something that keeps you either face or heel, no in between.
Oh and get a new catchphrase
So yeah, that's about it..
