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Hi Zaia! Sorry for the delay! I am still the one working on this quest with you, not Indu, so please quote me when changes have been made until a new trial stamp is given.

ON THE POWERED SIDE ---

A big issue here is still the uniform. A swashbuckler theme simply does not fit with the Spartan/Roman theme that comes with Mars. I know that the uniform has been this way since the start when I first gave it the trial stamp, but we are being asked to crack down on uniforms before they get approved and go to the artist. A swashbuckler uniform does not exactly fit with the existing planetary design schemes, except maybe Venus in a sort of Captain Hook-esque fashion. However, if you change the planet to Venus you would also need to change the abilities and the color scheme. You will have to decide if the uniform is more important than the planet, abilities and color scheme.

As for the abilities, they are now non-specific enough to pass, but could have a slightly closer tie to the Mars power theme of judgement. The powers have the theme of guilt, but tying that in to judgement (think of using it as a buzzword to include in the power descriptions during you rewrite) would make the link between ability and planet clearer.

When you have made changes, quote me and I will take another look!

For the outfit, please just make a note for the character's top, bottoms, gloves, belt, shoes, shoulders and accessories that they are CC.

For the abilities they are fine as powers for a Knight, but can be confused as a play on Earth's themes of honor and virtue, Jupiter's theme of conflict, and Pluto's theme of the past. The powers here have a theme of guilt, which is close to judgment but can be attributed to other things, and is more of an emotional response to judgment rather than judgment itself. Having the power description at least mention judgment may help specify it as clearly Mars, for instance:

"What they see is completely subjective, cycling through what that person considers mistakes they have made or things they naturally feel guilty about or feel they may be judged for" or even "To activate his power the rapier must be drawn and must be brandished and pointed at the intended victim so that they may face judgment."

The request here is just a simple semantics thing to specify it as a Mars ability, not to change the overall theme or usage of the powers themselves.

Please quote me when you have looked over this review and made your changes.

ON THE POWERED SIDE ---

Hey Zaia! The uniform is CC and looks fine with the new theme.

There are some questions on powers but they look like a really strong start. I am confused in the Squire ability:

What is meant by this? I enjoy the idea that they feel isolated as time feel slowly, but this sentence is confusing and throws me.

The duration/effect for the abilities feel too long. Thirty seconds feeling like five minutes is quite a difference! I think that feeling time is passing twice or thrice as slowly (so 30 seconds feels like either 60 or 90 seconds) would be more appropriate.

Please explain if they just perceive time as slower or if their reflexes and movement are also slowed down (this may be too powerful if it were the case!).

For the Knight power, just be more detailed about the effects. Instead of saying "time slows even further" specify just how much further it slows.

Looks fine to me~
Wait for a GM stamp!