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 Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 6:03 am
@ Shojo - Thanks for the list of songs.
@ Shio & Prince - Oh great....The goblins are here. Should I be worried?
@ Oka_chan - Nice to see you again.
@ Scion - I've been readin Bad Apple and let me just say this first, I'm a jerk and extremely blunt. So don't take my words to roughly.
You're not bad at writing, but it's a little broken and hard to understand at times. Your spelling and grammar are fine, but your sentence structure can sometimes leave something to be desired. You don't exactly develop your own character and rely on multiple characters to define the story. In private role plays often times it's best to figure out how to work with one or two characters. That and in my own mind, first person is not the best for role playing. A novel possibly, but in role plays it can be...difficult to follow.
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 6:48 am
Youch...blunt much Jack?
Haha, no worries, we still love you.
Y ^ u ^ Y
I guess I can agree with some of what Jack is saying.
I don't normally favor first person, unless I'm writing a novel.
But it's interesting if nothing else.
Personally I think your writing is awesome.
I don't really see how it's broken at all?
Care to explain my Jackling darkling?
[/giggles]
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IQ the Undead Toxin Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:02 am
 Oh dear me. It seems we've gotten into a literature discussion already. It's been some time since I've seen those two get thrown into such a tangent. I'm glad I joined this little insane asylum when I did. Eheh. Just don't let the debate get too heated. [/winks]
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:07 am
 Oh dear, Shio's not very good at giving critis..zm...um...however that's spelled. But she really likes Bad Apple, it seems like a very fun RP. Though she thinks Jack and Radio will have better opinions then her.
Oh! Tea-chan! Joh-eun achim ! eotteoseyo?
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:23 am
Example Commander Dhoune had be stand about three paces behind her, along with a group of about seven others as the boarding party came on board.  See, broken. Confusing, and completely strange. If it wasn't for the context around the sentence I would be going WTF?, actually even with the context I still had to re-read that paragraph to understand. I'm not saying that Scion can't write, it's just that I think he needs to pay more attention. Plus I don't think it would hurt for him to pick up a dictionary and expand his vocabulary.
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:27 am
 (Yay for Icons)
Okay, okay. So I can see the slip ups, and yes I can agree that maybe a little more attention wouldn't hurt. However I don't know if I'd exactly call that broken. We all make mistakes like that, then again many of us write very similarly. Do you think it's 'cause of the course?
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:30 am
Sho-chan!!! [/glomptacklehugsnuggles] Bogo sip-eoss eoyo! Beugeos-eun jeongmal olaenman ine ! Dangsin goyang-i neun eottae ?
I would give my own opinion, but I have yet to read it. Eheh. Perhaps I'll read this Bad Apple sometime. Then I can join in on such discussions. If there's any other RPs you think I should read, let me know please?
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:32 am
Yes. We're all back to using icons. Woopdie-freak-tastic-doo.
And you're changing the subject. What did I prove my point so well you have no retort?
Yes, it's probably because of the fact that you taught that course on gaia and we all took it. We have a tendency to write extremely similar. Remember thos ******** idiots who kept convicting us of being the same person?
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:37 am
Nado nega bogo sip-eoss-eo ! Geunyeoneun yeojeonhi joh-ayo, tanlyeog eul dahaejugoiss-eo. Eotteohge dangsin-ui gang-aji neun eottae? [/cuddles]
Oh, Tea-chan should look at the promise of privacy forum in the guild. Yokoso o velvet room is really good. Oh and so is Guilty Hate. Those two are Shio-chan's favorites! A Strange Need To Breathe is an old one that we've read, it's back up.
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:41 am
Just because of the fact I think it's ironic. Jack you may want to pay more attention to your typing. You made a few mistakes in that last post. That and also try to remember, this is a PG13 forum. I don't mind a few cuss words now and then, but keep it down. Kay sweetie?
Oh, god. I remember that! Those people were so ridiculous. Why on earth would we give seperate names, get on at different times, and play in the same RP? I still get so annoyed when people think I'm lying to them. JUST because I write extremely similarily to my friends.
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:47 am
Geuneun geobug-i lo geeuleun , gwaenchanh-eul geoyeyo. Naneun dalpaeng-i ga geuleul deo hwalseonghwadoeeo do maengse ! [/pets Shio's hair.]
I'll have to give it a look. And I remember ASTNTB, it was really fun actually. So I'll deffinately have to read that. Perhaps we should start up one of our old RPs in the guild. We could even do one of the group ones we made a long time ago if we wanted. [/laughs]
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:50 am
Oh you smartass. Radio I swear, you love doing that to me don't you. I never said I didn't make mistakes, especially when I'm dead tired from working a double shift at the bar two days in a row. So STFU. Oh and yeah, I remember PG13, I'll try to sensor myself now.
'Cause they were &*%^ing stupid. It's GAIA what do you expect? Smart people?
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:54 am
HOLY COW EATING A BUTTERFLY!!! Why'd you take that many hours? And how many people did you murder? I mean seve-cereal-ously!
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:56 am
Eolmana gwiyeowo ! Nan jeongmal geuleul nohchil geulaeseo ippeun-i anhseubnida. [/purrs]
Shio-chan has to go now, bye-bee! Jack and Radio-chan, please don't kill eachother.
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:58 am
Even if I knew what the hell you just said, I don't think I'd admit to it. I'm saving up for some time off. Chinese new-year with Nee-san and all.
Well on that note, I think Sho-chan's got the bright idea. I'm gonna go crash for my day off. After I post as Muuyo quickly.
Take it easy ya'll.
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