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 Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 3:40 am
*shrugs* You'd have to wait a week? Maybe less? Depends on if avedis and snuff work together on the style. How would you edit it though?
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:23 pm
{{Hope this isn't god-moddy}}
RPC Name:Ookami Batsu
Level: N/A
Main Style: N/A
Talent Description: His eyes can analyze a target so fast that time moves in slow motion, and can literally see peoples kai.
Talent Weakness: His eyes can't take the strain of analyzing so much in such a small amount of time. Has a 3 post limit; + 2 for every level he goes up. Example lvl1 3 post>lvl2 5 post. When this limit is passed he can still see, but in this order these things will happen: 1 post passed time limit would lead to servere migrain, 2 post passed can lead to temporary blindness, and 3 post passed could lead to unconciousness
How did the character get this talent?: As a little kid was always in a fast paced life. To enjoy the time that he could get to look around and enjoy himself; he developed a technique with his eyes that allowed him analyze a lot of things in little time, but over usage of this technique had caused him to use this technique without control. He wears pitch black sunglasses to allow himself to adjust to normal time, and live without hurting himself.
Sample:
He looked around the dojo to see a senior student practicing his techniques. Ookami walked over to him casually, and tapped him on the shoulders. The senior looked at him as if he was an annoying insect. Ookami had asked him for a short spar, but the senior said that he was an ant to him. In order to prove who was the ant Ookami punched him him the back, then removed his sunglasses. Everyything began to slow down to him now. He himself was even slowed down. The senior was making his way quickly to Ookami, and he had already seen fault in this mans technique. His footing was bad, and his balence was off. Ookami simply put his shades back on to let things pass to his brain regularly, but everything was moving slightly faster than normal to him for the moment. As the senior neared him he simply stepped to the side, and stuck his foot out. The senior tripped, and fell to the floor. " Well now. I feel better about myself how about you," he said gloatfully walking away.
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:49 pm
Fenrir Graveheart *shrugs* You'd have to wait a week? Maybe less? Depends on if avedis and snuff work together on the style. How would you edit it though? I'd have to see it to edit it. Though having an instrument in order to use it would be a no no. That's just to cumbersome and serves no real purpose. You can't use it to defend yourself if your opponent gets to close. And it would make fighting hand to hand difficult. I do have really basic idea for a sound based music style. You would be able to capture sound waves caused by clothes rustling, singing, clapping your hands, snapping your fingers, stomping your feet, shouting, weapons clanging together, etc. The sound waves from anything really. And then you could use those sound waves to defend yourself or attack. Or aid you in other ways like giving you really good hearing for a few posts. Things like that.
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:51 pm
sparx: Denied. This is already a general skill, and a very advanced one at that.
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:56 pm
Fenrir Graveheart Sparxx: Denied. This is already a general skill, and a very advanced one at that. Oh really... Well ok then no prob. ^w^ I thought I was god modding can you give a link please
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 7:08 pm
Hope no one minds me reposting this to keep it from getting lost sweatdrop . Kagetsukiko Alright, will change 3nodding . Hm, so giving her only 75% of the average energy amount isn't enough to make up for it sweatdrop ? Hm, give me a bit to think of a suitable weakness, then. If I can't think of anything better, I'll take up your suggestion but before that, I want to try at the least sweatdrop . Wait, so are you saying that I can't have any void skill above A-rank or are you just giving me a scale of how to rank the skills I make? I'm going to assume it's fine for the energy section to not have any drawbacks? Hm.... How about I do something like what I did in Axiom and up it to 75% only in situations where the opponent would be especially good at using the attack. Like, maybe, for skills from the major style that are a rank or more below the target's rank? Or is that a no go as well sweatdrop ? Lastly, I know this is slightly off-topic, but thank you very much for not just rejecting it right away as I was afraid that it would be sweatdrop . EDIT- Ah, Neko, I just realized I made a big mistake gonk ! In the general section, I wrote, "after mastering all of her styles at sage rank, she is able to take up a third extra style," thinking that there were only 5 levels, meaning that the last extra style will be the third extra style. Sorry, just realized that there were actually 10 levels, so that would mean 6 extra styles in total >_< ! I'm not sure whether or not you thought that "third" meant that Setsuna could only learn a max of three extra styles (which it doesn't) but in case you did, I wanted to point that mistake out so you can tell me whether or not it's still acceptable sweatdrop .
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2011 12:55 am
RPC Name: Tsukino17
Level: 1
Main Style: None
Talent Description: Tsukino has extensive knowledge over the human body and utilizes this in combat.She strikes the enemy in thier pressure points or even the slightest weak points on thier body to temporarily paralyze them or stun that part of thier body.She has to be very quick when doing this, which is why she takes advantage of her natrual agility and flexibility when doing so.
Talent Weakness: (( Not sure what kind of weakness this would have))
How did the character get this talent?: Through training with her father in martial arts and doing gymnastics for most of her life.She studied the human body for six years and applied this knowledge to her fighting style.
Sample:
Tsukino felt her hair fall to her face as the ponytail piece broke.This was the toughest enemy she had faced the whole time she had been at the academy.The young woman was skilled at using the staff and was quite the adversary.Tsukino felt like giving up would be the best thing but she couldnt lose in front of all these people.All her friends wanted her to win and thats what she was going to do.She slowly stood as she pushed her hair out of her face.It was time to show what she could do.
Tsukino quickly did a double back handspring before quickly kicking her legs towards the girl during the second flip.The girl held her staff in front of her to block the attack but slid foward from the force of the attack.Tsukino turned and looked into the eyes of her enemy.She wanted it to be known that she was going to kick some butt.She got into a fighting stance and held her hands outwards.
The other girl came towards her twirling the staff as she did.Tsukino stood her ground though.The girl swung the staff forward and Tsukino quickly leaned backwards to dodge it.But then the girl quickly slammed downwards. Tsukino held her hands in front of herself to block the attack and pushed the staff to the side before quickly leaning upwards until she was right in front of the girl's side.She began a quick series of jabs to her right side and struck the pressure points on the girl's right arm.Tsukino flipped backwards to see the arm now limp at the girl's side.Her enemy realized that she wouldnt be able to effectively wield her staff any more.Tsukino quickly ran towards the girl before flipping into the air.As she literally flipped over the girl,she struck the girl's shoulder before tripping her.
The girl was on the ground in a state of shock as the proctor of the match came over to them.He grabbed Tsukino's hand and raised it in the air declaring her the winner of the match.She bowed and listened to the crowd cheer.She saw the girl being carried away on a mat by the medics.She looked at her friends and smiled.She had made it through the first round.
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2011 1:20 am
tsukino: Denied. Being able to start out with being able to completely immobilize an enemy's limbs with just a single light hit wouldn't be very fair. Also there will be a martial art sub-style that does exactly this that will be added in the near-future anyways. Wait and have your character learn it when it comes out.
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Fist of the Bro Star Captain
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Fist of the Bro Star Captain
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2011 1:24 am
Sparxx Inferni Fenrir Graveheart Sparxx: Denied. This is already a general skill, and a very advanced one at that. Oh really... Well ok then no prob. ^w^ I thought I was god modding can you give a link please You really can't find General Skills in the Student Handbook? o_O
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2011 2:13 pm
RPC Name: Hirose Kemuri
Level: 1
Main Style: N/A
Talent Description: By taking off his hoody Hirose switches to a more serious and focused personality, increasing his level by 1.
Talent Weakness: When his hoody is on Hirose returns to being practically mute and unsociable. This is the burden he makes himself pay for the killings he's done.
How did the character get this talent?: To deal with the guilt of his assassinations Hirose started wearing a hoody to completely block out his identity. However, when the hoody is gone Hirose's true self is brought out and he switches into assassination mode once more.
Sample: Hirose was sent flying into the granite wall of the coliseum as his opponent, Fenrir, punched him into next week. The wolfish young man grew a fanged grin and stepped back, sure of his victory. After all nobody could still be conscious after a blow like that. His eyes widened then when Hirose steadily pushed himself upright again. A layer of visible blood-red Ki leaked over his body. Fenrir took his fighting stance again, ready for anything. Hirose's hands shook as he gripped the bottom of his hoody, and with one tug he pulled clothing off of him, finally revealing to everyone what he really looked like. Fenrir was shocked, but then grinned a little wider. "Heh, someone needs a haircut." He moved forward to strike at Hirose again but this time the silent man caught the fist easily in one hand. "Now its your turn to shut up."
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Fist of the Bro Star Captain
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Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 6:46 am
So what happens if the "hoodie" is burned off or something <.<
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Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 6:58 am
Same thing I guess. But considering that I think it would be appropriate for this talent to have a time limit of sorts. Lets say...10 posts? After that he goes back to his normal level regardless of whether he's wearing the hoodie or not?
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Fist of the Bro Star Captain
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Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 7:08 am
So what exactly are the direct benefits of a level up? Increased stats and energy meter? Also what happens when or if he reaches level ten? Will he get his own special level 11?
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Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 7:25 am
Kagetsukiko Hope no one minds me reposting this to keep it from getting lost sweatdrop . Kagetsukiko Alright, will change 3nodding . Hm, so giving her only 75% of the average energy amount isn't enough to make up for it sweatdrop ? Hm, give me a bit to think of a suitable weakness, then. If I can't think of anything better, I'll take up your suggestion but before that, I want to try at the least sweatdrop . Wait, so are you saying that I can't have any void skill above A-rank or are you just giving me a scale of how to rank the skills I make? I'm going to assume it's fine for the energy section to not have any drawbacks? Hm.... How about I do something like what I did in Axiom and up it to 75% only in situations where the opponent would be especially good at using the attack. Like, maybe, for skills from the major style that are a rank or more below the target's rank? Or is that a no go as well sweatdrop ? Lastly, I know this is slightly off-topic, but thank you very much for not just rejecting it right away as I was afraid that it would be sweatdrop . EDIT- Ah, Neko, I just realized I made a big mistake gonk ! In the general section, I wrote, "after mastering all of her styles at sage rank, she is able to take up a third extra style," thinking that there were only 5 levels, meaning that the last extra style will be the third extra style. Sorry, just realized that there were actually 10 levels, so that would mean 6 extra styles in total >_< ! I'm not sure whether or not you thought that "third" meant that Setsuna could only learn a max of three extra styles (which it doesn't) but in case you did, I wanted to point that mistake out so you can tell me whether or not it's still acceptable sweatdrop . You seem to have worked hard on it because you posted more than anyone else. Also, I know you are a defensive fighter. So I want to try and make this work for you but have it be fair so no one complains. I doubt I will get that last part since people tend to complain about anything, but yeah, whatever XD Lol I think you can have void skills above A rank. I just think a general scale is in order. I think the stronger the attack, the more energy you'll have to put in to dismantling the attack. I'd say small attacks like e or d rank could cost 25% to dismantle, ranks for C and B would cost 50% and A rank and above would cost 75% Does that work? Also, I think six extra styles would be a bit much don't you? I think I could go with her learning 4 extra skills.
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Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 7:26 am
RPC Name: Hirose Kemuri
Level: 1
Main Style: N/A
Talent Description: By taking off his hoody Hirose switches to a more serious and focused personality, increasing his level by 1.
Talent Weakness: When his hoody is on Hirose returns to being practically mute and unsociable. This is the burden he makes himself pay for the killings he's done.
How did the character get this talent?: To deal with the guilt of his assassinations Hirose started wearing a hoody to completely block out his identity. However, when the hoody is gone Hirose's true self is brought out and he switches into assassination mode once more.
Sample: Hirose was sent flying into the granite wall of the coliseum as his opponent, Fenrir, punched him into next week. The wolfish young man grew a fanged grin and stepped back, sure of his victory. After all nobody could still be conscious after a blow like that. His eyes widened then when Hirose steadily pushed himself upright again. A layer of visible blood-red Ki leaked over his body. Fenrir took his fighting stance again, ready for anything. Hirose's hands shook as he gripped the bottom of his hoody, and with one tug he pulled clothing off of him, finally revealing to everyone what he really looked like. Fenrir was shocked, but then grinned a little wider. "Heh, someone needs a haircut." He moved forward to strike at Hirose again but this time the silent man caught the fist easily in one hand. "Now its your turn to shut up."
I'd say it's acceptable. However, since there is no Level 11, once you reach level 10 you are screwed. :3
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