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 Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 2:29 pm
-o-Havik-o-
Would be a better description, she is a scrapper. A good one I might add mrgreen
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Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:44 pm
... That's what I put ninja
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 4:44 pm
Erm, sure? Although, my explanations aren't all that good. At least, not compared to other people's. Also, I can't be on a lot so it might be slow going sweatdrop .
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Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:10 pm
Well thats why I can try to do most the :Heavy llifting" and then when your able to fix all my horrendous grammar biggrin . Plus anything you don't get to I am sure someone else will tidy up so no one thinks were a bunch of nubs when they ready are jutsu.
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Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2011 5:44 am
Kagetsukiko Erm, sure? Although, my explanations aren't all that good. At least, not compared to other people's. Also, I can't be on a lot so it might be slow going sweatdrop .
HOWEVER, it is a HUGE help to me that others post them for me, which leaves me just needing to edit them. It's probably a laziness thing, but it just seems to work better for me this way.
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Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2011 11:33 am
I don't think you can call it a laziness thing Cobra. You do look over EVERYTHING and have your own Rp "life's" to keep up. This is just one of those example of how awesome the TUP VC Team working is becoming mrgreen
Also I have a coupe idea's I am going to run past you in a couple of days. I have the sample drawn up right. Just a little heads up. You wouldn't happen to have a TUP VC crew banner set up in a photobucket album you could link me would you? I use there edit thing alot and it would help me out if you happen to have one already saved. If not I will just put a request in Sorens thread.
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2011 7:59 pm
Okay, here's how I organized the review of your custom jutsu. I edited all of the grammatical errors and such but kept the basic idea the same. This edited version is placed in the quote box. Below each quote are some notes/questions referring to what the custom jutsu does. Oh, and one thing you should know is that I am very bad at trying to estimate the proper rank a jutsu should be. As a result, don't expect me to make any comments about whether or not a jutsu is too weak or too strong for its rank sweatdrop . Quote: Earth hold: The user will make eye contact with the enemy. Once this is done, the victim of the genjutsu well feel the earth start to wrap around their feet. If the enemy is charging forwards, they will be stopped dead in their tracks. After being trapped in the genjutsu for one post, the earth will shoot forth and grab the victim's wrists, stopping them from using their arms as well as legs. If this genjutsu is held for 5 posts without being broken, the earth will shoot forward and attach itself to the back of the victim's head. From there, it will then bend the victim's body backward in a very painful manner until they are forced to lay down on and stay laid down on the ground with all of their limbs held down by the earth. At this point in the genjutsu, the victim will start to slip away and become unconscious. If this genjutsu is held for an entire 6 posts, the victim will become unconscious and completely at the mercy of the genjutsu user. How does this genjutsu make the victim unconscious? I know that as a genjutsu it doesn't need to be tied down by logic, but there should be something related to knocking people unconscious. Maybe have the victim feel as if the rocks touching them were applying large amounts of continual, painful pressure after forcing them to the ground. We could then say that the immense pain causes them to block out. Quote: Secret Cave: This Genjutsu is different than most in that it creates the illusion of a cave on any landscape. Once a ninja gets to close to the entrance of this illusionary cave, they are trapped within the genjutsu. The victim will feel a strong urge to travel deeper into the cave. As they travel, it will gradually become darker until they can barely make out their hands. Once they have reached this point (2 posts), they will here a loud roar behind them, which will cause them to turn and see a beast (description is up to caster). At this point, the victim will have to battle the beast for 4 posts. If the victim is severely injured by the monster, they will fall unconscious. If the victim receives only a simple wound, then the genjutsu will break and the victim will be left panicked but visibly unharmed. However, despite there being no signs of injury, the portion of the victim's body that was thought to be injured in the genjutsu will continue to feel injured. If the victim either manages to evade the beast for four posts or kills the beast, the genjutsu will be broken. They will, however, still be left panicked and confused about what just happen. Okay, nothing wrong with this one specifically, but it caused me to wonder. How are we going to deal with these genjutsu injuries that affect the target even after the genjutsu finishes? Can they kai out of the feeling of being injured or do something similar? If not, then what can they do? Or does the illusionary injury stay until the end of the fight? Quote: Bottomless Pit: The caster will weave a set of hand signs and then slap his hand to the ground. If the enemy ninja sees this, they will be trapped in the genjutsu. Once the genjutsu has taken hold, the floor will fall from under the victim's feet. They will feel as if they were about to fall. Just before they do, a black, tar-like substance will shoot from the edges of the hole and grab the ninja trapped in this genjutsu, suspending them over a massive pit. The victim will become very frightened and have the urge to squirm inside the tar like substance. If they do squirm, they will wiggle free and fall into the pit. After falling into the pit, they will fall unconscious from the jutsu and be left defenseless. However if the victim finds a way to break the genjutsu before falling into the urge to squirm around, they will be come out unharmed in any way, mentally or physically. Hmm…. Maybe we should put a post limit to determine how long someone will be able to hold off the squirming sensation? Or is that putting in too much detail? Other than that, I can't find much of a problem with this mrgreen . Also, Cobra, if you call what you don't manage to do laziness, then I'm practically asleep in regards to doing stuff for this guild xp . Havik, what kind of idea are you thinking about confused ?
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Posted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 3:39 pm
Earth hold: Hmm, we could do the pressure thing it does make sense. I should have been more descriptive I men for it to just start happening. The genjutsu would start to put them to sleep after they were strapped down and if something wasn't done they would pass out.
Secret Cave: How about we say that injuries from the genjutsu if sustained are kept for five posts. However being hit by the monster does not break the genjutsu. So the victim can be hit multiple time and sustain multiple injures because of it.
Botomless pit: No that's a great idea that slipped past me, genjutsu are a tricky thing being as descriptive as possible is a good thing when it comes to them especially. Let say they can only stop from squiring for one post then three post of moving to much they drop. So after four posts if there still trapped they will get knocked out.
Also can ya do me a favor? The Kage and Jounin Genjutsu haven't been fixed grammar wise just yet. I got hit with a lot of things that needed doing ya think You can edit them for me while I move on to the other elements?
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 4:00 pm
Got it. Should I just edit your post or put up the revisions in a separate post?
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Posted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 4:45 pm
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 4:59 pm
Alright, posted up the kage stuff 3nodding . I'll deal with the jounin stuff later after I finish some other junk for other guilds and real life.
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Posted: Sun Feb 13, 2011 4:04 pm
Finished with the jounin jutsu 3nodding .
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 13, 2011 4:34 pm
I would be very far behind with out your help Kage. Thank you. heart
The next set of elemental Genjutsu will be posted in here with my edits by tomorrows end. So you can go over that once it is up.
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Posted: Sat Mar 12, 2011 10:02 am
Name of Jutsu:Fuuton: Kaze no tsuyoi hi (Windy Day)
Rank of Jutsu: E
Jutsu's Element:Fuuton
Description: after showing the required hand seals to the victim, an illusory wind picks up. Even tho the winds are weak if the affected does not realize it is a genjutsu, they will adjust any projectiles to match the wind, causing them to miss the target. Making it seem like the ninja is able to dodge the attacks without even moving.
Name of Jutsu: Fuuton: Akushū (Foul Stench)
Rank of Jutsu: E
Jutsu's Element:fuuton
Description: The user performs the seals and foul stench drifts into the area, as if someone just farted. No vocalization necessary.
Name of Jutsu: Fuuton: Sanran-fū (Scattering Winds)
Rank of Jutsu: A
Jutsu's Element:fuuton genjutsu
Description: After performing a long set of seals, the user must be heard saying the name of the jutsu. When they are heard, a very strong wind picks up, and the ninja has to brace themselves against it. In the second post, the affected sees their body turning into cherry-blossoms and blowing away. This is extremely emotionally traumatizing, and a little painful for them since they are slowly losing contact with their body. even if they realize it is genjutsu they cannot easily break it. While they are affected their bodies are unable to move, and open to attack. Extended exposure (4 posts) requires at least 2 posts in a medical care to recover from the shock
Rank of Jutsu: C
Jutsu's Element: Fuuton Genjutsu
Description: The genjutsu is cast when the caster says confidently that they will boost the ninja's speed, to make things more interesting. When caught in the jutsu, every time the opponent moves it feels like a wind is pushing them, making them believe they are moving extremely fast. This jutsu has two uses.
They will either be afraid to move, and feel that if they move they wont be able to keep control of themselves, or when they are moving they feel like they are so fast nobody could possibly keep up. When the caster is easily able to match their movements, the affected believes that even with a speed boost they are no match for the ninja.
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Mar 12, 2011 3:56 pm
Okay, rather than type up what the edits should be, I just went over and edited the jutsu directly. Hope you don't mind sweatdrop . -- Basic (E-rank) --
Fuuton: Kaze no tsuyoi hi (Windy Day): After showing the required hand seals to the victim, an illusory wind picks up. Even though the winds are weak, if the target does not realize it is a genjutsu, they will adjust any projectiles to match the wind, causing them to miss whatever they aim at. This, in turn, makes it seem like the ninja the target is aiming for is able to dodge the attacks without even moving.
Fuuton: Akushū (Foul Stench): The user performs the seals and a foul stench drifts into the area, as if someone just farted. No vocalization necessary. -- Chuunin (C-rank) --
Fuuton: Reinforcing Wind: The genjutsu is cast when the caster says confidently that they will boost the ninja's speed to make things more interesting. When caught in the jutsu, every time the opponent moves, it feels like a wind is pushing them. As a result, they believe that they are moving extremely fast. This jutsu has two main uses:
1) The target will be too afraid to move and feel that if they do move, they won't be able to keep control of themselves.
2) When they are moving the target will feel like they are so fast nobody could possibly keep up. However, in actuality, the caster is easily able to match their movements. As a result, the affected believes that even with a speed boost, they are no match for the ninja.-- Jounin (A-rank) --
Fuuton: Sanran-fū (Scattering Winds): After performing a long set of seals, the user must be heard saying the name of the jutsu. When they are heard, a very strong and very real wind picks up, causing people to brace themselves against it. In the second post, the affected sees their body turning into cherry-blossoms and blowing away. This is extremely emotionally traumatizing and a little painful for them since they are slowly losing contact with their body. Even if the target realizes it is genjutsu, they cannot easily break it. While they are affected, their bodies are unable to move and open to attack. Extended exposure (4 posts) requires at least 2 posts in medical care to recover from the shock.
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