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 Posted: Thu Apr 29, 2010 2:34 pm
((moving on, next part!))
“Watch your back, Aqua!” Mayhem called, easily dodging a flaming arrow. Aqua, a young, new recruit of 14, put up a wall of ice to defend him. His blue hair was tied back in a ponytail and his green eyes analyzed the field before him. A laser beam blasted through his ice-shield. More arrows shot towards Aqua, but Night stopped them with his telekinesis. Hey, I could’ve done that! You got in my way!” Aqua said. “Just shut up and focus.” Night snapped. For whatever reason, Aqua and Night had been at each other’s throats since they meet three days ago. “Aqua, Night, look out!” “Agh!” Night got caught in a laser sealed net. Aqua laughed. “Ha! What were you saying about focus?” Samantha, a flower mutant, pushed Aqua into the ground and helped Night out of the net. Mayhem was a little dazed, (seeing Samantha always made him dazed), but he called out, “Computer! End simulation!” The arrows and lasers stopped. He frowned at his teammates. “Briefing room. Now.” They all groaned, and trudged after their leader. Night and Aqua glared at each other. Samantha rolled her eyes. “Boys.” Her red hair was pulled back in a braid, and her elegant, green kimono and leggings matched her deep green eyes. She had been on the team since the start, and Mayhem still couldn’t help but stare. “They’ll get over it, Sam. I’m pretty sure. They just need time to…get used to each other.” The Joker was waiting for them at the door to the briefing room. He handled the control and repair of the training room. He was almost never found in it while the others were awake. He usually trained in private.
The others sat down and Mayhem stood at the head. Kevin sat down to his immediate right. Mayhem leaned on the table and looked angrily from one hero to the other. “What happened back there?!” He demanded. Aqua said, “Ah, my ice wall got blown up, Night got caught in a net, and Tree-lady pushed me.” Samantha said, ‘My name is Sam. My alter ego is Poison Seed. Not ‘Tree-lady’.” Aqua muttered. “Whatever.” Mayhem said, “No, Aqua, not whatever! This is what I’m talking about! We have had no progress in finding the other heroes yet, and the DiceMaster hasn’t shone his face for a while. But my own team is fighting amongst themselves!” Night said, “Well, if Aqua would focus on the battle, instead of showing off…” Aqua stood. “You got a problem with my fighting style?!” Night stood too. “Maybe I do!” Kevin said, keeping a steady tone, “Boys, please sit down. We need not judge each other.” Aqua turned on him. “What do you know? You’re not even one of us! You shouldn’t even be on the team!” Kevin looked hurt. Mayhem slammed his fist on the table. “ENOUGH!” Everyone sat down and grew silent. Kevin avoided all eye contact.
((I cut this scene in half cause it was three pages long.))
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Posted: Sat May 01, 2010 5:26 am
*is too lazy to read that much right now*
There. I posted. I'll read it later. I have major ADD for anything that isn;t yaoi right now....
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Posted: Sat May 01, 2010 5:40 pm
This is where you left off in the PM got any more? I crave this story Kissel. When you finsih we have to get this published. I will be writing a script to get this into a movie. I need you to be working on TekTeks for how characters look when they are civilians and when there heroes. We need to be on this! This is great material! heart blaugh xd heart
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Posted: Sat May 01, 2010 5:48 pm
I acutally typed more for you. I have more written, i'm gonna post more tommorrow. Wait till you meet the DiceMaster and find out what happens to you! XD.
And I actually plan on drawing them soon. U tektek Mayhem for me.
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Posted: Sat May 01, 2010 6:03 pm
Ok, next! Oh, and here is some of the stuff you didn't see, Chris.:
Mayhem stood and paced a bit. “All other villains we’ve dealt with were, after a fact, fairly easy to handle without using the whole team. Now, for the first time, we face a real threat, and everyone keeps fighting each other!” Mayhem turned and faced the others. “We need to be united, or we’ll never beat the DiceMaster!” The Joker said, “The DiceMaster is unlike any other villain we’ve faced. He does not see us as a threat. He will not reveal his plans to us carelessly, as so many villains do. He does not let his weakness be known. He toys with us, and, when he thinks we will do any real harm, he will kill us.” Night thought of his brother. Had the DiceMaster seen him as a threat? Is that why Dante and the other heroes were lost during that mission that seemed like years ago?
“Now, Aqua, listen. You need to be more respectful.” Mayhem said. ‘Respectful? Of a kid only a few years older than me, a tree hugger, and a non-mutant hero wannabe? No way!” Mayhem slammed his fist on the table again. “Aqua, Night has been on this team since it started. As have Joker and Samantha. Night is a hard worker, and he gets things done! He cares about the team, not personal glory. And Samantha uses the environment to defeat evil, so it’s only natural she should give back to it!” Aqua crossed his arms and said, “And what about ‘The Joker’, huh? Who chooses a villain name for an alter ego?” Aqua stood and pointed an accusatory finger at Kevin. “He shouldn’t even be on the team. I say he’s a spy. That’s how DiceMaster must be beating us!” There was a collective gasp around the room. No one said a word. Kevin stared directly at Aqua, neither denying nor agreeing with Aqua’s accusation. Mayhem said through clenched teeth, “Aqua, Kevin has been my right hand man since before I started the team. In fact, it was his idea. He might not be a mutant like most of us, but he’s absolutely brilliant, and he designed most of the HQ. Without him, we would have lost to the DiceMaster when he first showed himself. Kevin might not have mutant abilities, but he is an irreplaceable member of this team.” Aqua sat down again. No one said a word. Mayhem looked around at the others. Most were new recruits. He had so few of his original team left… “Does anyone else question Joker’s loyalty?” No response. Mayhem sat down. “Dismissed.” Everyone hurriedly left. Kevin stayed. Mayhem leaned forward on the table and buried his face in his hands. “Kevin, what am I going to do? Night hasn’t found anything with the Physic Locator and the new recruits…” Kevin said, “They are new recruits, sir. They need time. They’ll get used to the rest of the team, soon, I’m sure.” Mayhem lifted his head a bit and looked over at his long time friend. “I’m sorry about what Aqua said. I…” Kevin smiled a bit. “Sir, a lot of the new recruits have been thinking the same thing. Remember Night and Dante used to think that too. A lot of people wonder why I chose that name for my alter ego.” Mayhem nodded. He remembered when Kevin had announced his hero name. He hadn’t understood it either. As it turned out, Kevin had a rather sentimental reason for picking his name. Kevin had read the Batman comics all through his childhood; they had been his escape from reality, and his parents. The Joker had always been his favorite character.
“But, Kevin. You never get mad at anyone, how do you do that?!” Kevin laughed. “Years of practice and mediation, plus having a person like you for a friend!” “What’s that supposed to mean?” But Mayhem laughed too. Mayhem sighed and said, “What am I going to do about Aqua, Kevin? How can I teach them to work together?” Kevin considered. “They will learn in time, Chris. Right now, the best we can do is prepare them for the worst.” Just then, as if on cue, red lights flashed and the alarms sounded. Chris jumped up and morphed into his hero suit. “We gotta go.” He tapped the side of his helmet, activating the comm link as he ran to the ship. Kevin followed. “This is Mayhem calling all heroes! The DiceMaster has been spotted in the city! Battle positions!” Mayhem hurried and boarded the ship, followed by Kevin, Night, Aqua and Samantha. Kevin slid into the pilot’s seat. Night sat next to him as co pilot. Mayhem took his position in the command chair and the others took their respective stations. They left HQ and headed for the city.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 3:18 pm
*is on the edge of seat*
Write more!! scream I wanna know what happens next! blaugh
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 3:57 pm
xXShizuXx *is on the edge of seat* Write more!! scream I wanna know what happens next! blaugh heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart I'm so happy os many people feel so passionatly about this story. Makes me so happy crying crying crying ((< I am waiting for Carson to comment, and then I have more ^..^
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 5:40 pm
Oh, I was waiting on you to post more this is where you left off in the PM of the story. I am just like Shizu, I really love this story. Again, I need to start a script to turn this into a movie. We need to decide if we're going to be with Marvel or DC. I prefer Marvel but it's up to you. Also, have you finished the TekTek's of everyone I need to make a TekTek of Mayham for you still though.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 6:27 pm
I'm now getting into the stuff you didn't see yet, Carson. And whichever owns The Joker. ((i beieve that's Marvel. I could be wrong)). I made a lot of the tekteks, including some u haven't met yet. GO search Superz of gaia. make Mayhem and save him there too. Here's the part you haven't seen yet! :
Samantha gasped as they flew over the city. Mayhem looked out the veiwscreen and almost gasped himself. It looked like there had been a meteor shower over the city. Kevin and Night set the aircraft down out of the way. They ran to the city.
Mayhem jumped into one of the craters. The crater had a diameter of around eight feet. Mayhem picked up a red colored, metal shard from the center of the crater. He motioned for Kevin to come down. Kevin slide down the side of the crater and took the shard. He placed in his portable digital analyzer. “It’s a match to the other shards we’ve found so far; definitely from the DiceMaster.” Mayhem’s expression was grim. “Now we just have to find him.” Night looked around with his headset. “Sir, I’m getting a mass amount of explosives coming from the east side of the city.” Mayhem and Joker climbed out of the crater. “Night, Aqua, you’ll go around the back and try not to be noticed.” The two met eyes and glared for a moment, but finally said, a bit reluctantly. “Yes, sir.” They headed for the shadows. Mayhem turned to the Joker and Poison Seed. “Sam, Kevin, you try to surrounded him on the sides, make it so everyone’s out of the way, but the DiceMaster can’t escape.” “Yes sir.” They said. Kevin looked around. He caught sight of a computer store. “Sam, you take DiceMaster’s left. I’ve got a little surprise for him.” Sam nodded. Everyone knew better than to question Kevin’s insane ideas. Kevin stopped suddenly and turned to Mayhem. “What are you going to do, sir?” Mayhem said, without hesitation, “I’ll buy you guys some time.” He activated his jet wings and rocket toward the direction of the DiceMaster.
DiceMaster was standing on a floating die above several terrified bystanders. There was a huge crater, double the size of the others in the city, beneath him. Dice Master tilted his head back and laughed like a maniac. Mayhem hovered in front of him. “Hey, DiceMaster, leave these innocent people alone! It’s me you want!” DiceMaster smile was nearly splitting his face. He flicked some of his blonde hair out of his face, and ran his fingers along the brim of his red and black, dice patterned hat. “Well, well, well. The little hero captain comes out again. I wonder which little hero you’ll lose this time?” Mayhem growled. He was fighting to control his temper. If he lost it now, he would surely die. “Where are they, DiceMaster? What did you do to them?” DiceMaster laughed again. “Wouldn’t you like to know?” Mayhem yelled, “I’m not playing around here, DiceMaster! Where are they!?” DiceMaster took a red and yellow die out of thin air. The die was about the size of his fist. “Playing around? Hm, oh yes, what a marvelous idea! Let’s play catch!” DiceMaster threw the die. Mayhem dodged quickly, and the die exploded as soon as it hit the side walk. Several bystanders screamed. I have to get the civilians to safety.
Suddenly, Mayhem smelt the most beautiful rose in the world. He was fighting the urge to run towards the sent. The bystanders went that way, though. Mayhem realized what it was. It was Sam. She was getting the bystanders to safety!
“Never look away from your opponent, Mayhem!” DiceMaster laughed, while throwing another die, this one of the same size, but an ice blue. Mayhem didn’t dodge quickly enough. The die hit his leg, and froze it solid. The unbalanced weight brought him down. Mayhem crashed into the ground below the DiceMaster and rolled into the gigantic crater. Mayhem tried to morph out of his current form, thus healing him, but for whatever reason, he was unable to. DiceMaster floated downwards until he was only a few inches above Mayhem. He laughed. “Trying to morph back to health? Don’t waste your energy, little hero captain. That is no ordinary ice. It’s from the planet Nemon.” Mayhem’s eyes widened. No, no way, he can’t know about that, he can’t! How…DiceMaster laughed. “Yes, yes. I know about the origin of your powers! That ice will cancel out the crystal’s power, therefore making it impossible for you to transform!” DiceMaster titled his head back and laughed again. He knelt down and patted Mayhem’s cheek. “Well, look at the mess you’ve gotten yourself into, Mayhem. Unable to move, unable to morph…” DiceMaster pulled off mayhem’s comm link. “No!” DiceMaster laughed cruelly. “Unable to call for help, or warn your little friends.” Mayhem tried to move, but the DiceMaster was right. Mayhem was too injured to do more than squirm, and even that was painful.
DiceMaster rose again and looked around. “I know, of course of your futile plan to trap me. Your fiends or in for quite a surprise when they get here.” He tossed a few explosive dice around Mayhem. Mayhem realized they were on timers. He tossed a few more, and those formed a force field around Mayhem and the explosives. DiceMaster laughed. “Though, if they don’t get here soon, there may be nothing left to find.”
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Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 4:25 am
Wow, this Dice Master guy is intense!
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Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 2:29 pm
Oh, you find out aaaaaalllll about the DiceMaster soon. I beleive I've reached my climax in the story.
Oh, and you will soon begin to hate samantha. Just wait twisted
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Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 5:16 pm
I'd love to read the story, but I really don't want to read them b/c they're so clumped together. Could you edit the posts so each paragraph is one space apart from each other? That would help me read them faster and get back to you.
I'm warning you in advance, I'm a harsh critic and I'm a writer of my own stories. I criticize my own work until it's 'perfect', so don't take it personally. pirate
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Posted: Fri May 07, 2010 5:36 am
How about I print a full copy and give it to you next time we're at the CUE?
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Posted: Sun May 09, 2010 9:55 am
Ha. Kissel climaxed.XD
YAY DICEMASTER!!!
[[everyone else can die. HAH! Die! Get it? I made a pune!]]
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Posted: Mon May 10, 2010 3:25 am
Captain Kissel How about I print a full copy and give it to you next time we're at the CUE? that could work! biggrin then I can write on it and everything! mrgreen
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