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 Posted: Wed Dec 23, 2009 10:03 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 01, 2010 6:09 pm
Still looking for marking and/or crits.
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Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 5:12 am
Hi! Does she dance any other forms than ballet? For a senshi of dance, it strikes me as rather narrow of her to practice ballet exclusively. Right now she seems like a senshi of ballet, rather than a senshi of dance. If she's a senshi of dance, I would think that even if she isn't good at every style, she should at least have some experience with other forms and to see some discussion of them in her profile. What does she love about dance? It sounds like she likes the performing best. Does she prefer (in her free time) to follow a routine someone else has choreographed, or make it up as she goes along? If you haven't, I'd recommend looking at Wikipedia's dance article for ideas on how to extend her beyond being a senshi of ballet into a senshi of dance.
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 12:58 am
Thank you for the crit, McFroglegs. ^^
Ah yesh, I do see what you mean. Alex has done other forms of dance (jazz, a bit of hip hop, and tap), though she prefers lyrical dance. Contempory tends to confuse her, and classical ballet gets boring after a while. Shall mention that.
Its the preforming, really. She'll make up her own dances, simply by how the music sounds. It ends up being a hodgepodge of steps, but sometimes she strikes gold with them, and comes out with something that is very good.
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:15 am
Updated Jan 03, 2010:
- Added to the "Dance" hobby so she's more of a senshi of dance, and not just one of ballet
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:27 am
OMG! I love the idea. Sailor Apollo is the sailor of arts, and when I was thinking of moves, I almost made a move called,"Death Dance!" My only thing, is the asteroid of Athor is named after the egyption goddess of lots of things. Wow, Sailor Apollo has met her match(: [Apollo is the roman gods of the arts, and sometimes the sun, but due to the large amount of Sailor Suns, I just went with the arts.]
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 5:45 pm
Thanks! Yeah, but you'd be surprised how little gods of dance there are (and a celestial body that goes with them). I'm still looking though, for something that works better.
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 5:53 pm
MWHAHA! Terpsichore is a classical Greek goddess and Muse of dance and chorus. 81 Terpsichore is an asteroid. It could work... though that's a really long name...
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 6:22 pm
When I did the senshi of dance, I originally went with Terpischore. xD Easiest name I ever found.
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 7:03 pm
Terpischore seems like a good name. Good relevance too. ^^ Sweetness. -will change that-
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 11:37 pm
Update Jan 04, 2010:
- Name changed to Terpischore (though I'll mostly call her Terpsi for short)
- Opening up for marks
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Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 1:30 pm
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Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 5:24 pm
OK SO. For the love of Endymion, you neeeeeeeed to increase your text size. I cannot read that text wall at size, what is that, nine? I hate having to increase the zoom on my monitor because it distorts evvvvverything, so maybe bring it up to 11? I would personally put it back to 12, since your goal is to have people read this, right? 1. Fuku bodice does have to be white, I know you've edited it since but just clarifying it. Virgo is a Zodiac; their rules for fuku are crazy different, plus they've only two stages. 2. Attacks. Are these avoidable? I seriously think they should be; how hard is it for someone to leap away from someone or kick them? How long are you defining 20 or 30 seconds? Additionally, you should clarify "dances with them". Do you mean, grabs their hands and dance as in waltz, or dance as in what? This will be important for people to understand how to respond to your attack. Quote: Attack #2: Name - Dance Until Morn What it does - Sailor Terpsichore circles her hands around each other above her head, signaling for her enemies to being to dance. She dances in between, and around them (or just around the one if there is only one enemy), getting them to dance with her and mimic her steps. This attack lasts for at most 5 minutes. This attack confuses and moderately to heavily damages her opponents. If there are few opponents, it does more damage. It there are a lot of them (5 or more) it does less damage. Okay, so, why are her enemies dancing in the first place? Is there control of their bodies going on here? Because if so, especially since there's an element of damage, control, and length of time, this seems way OP. You need to drop one element, seriously.
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Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 6:44 pm
Attacks are not allowed to be rip-offs from other anime sources. Your Eternal stage attack is exactly what Princess Tutu does to every enemy, every episode. It will not be allowed.
Also, attacks 1A and 1B need to be much more similar - 1B is a powerup, not a brand new attack.
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Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 7:33 pm
@romatic wishes: Sorry the font size is too small.
1. I wasn't, and really still am not, sure the rules on that. ^^;;
2. 20 to 30 seconds is just what it is... 20 to 30 seconds.
Will rework her attacks.
@kalindara: That was not what I was going for. Hell I didn't even THINK of Princess Tutu while created her attacks. I'm going off what /I/ would do if the only things I had at my disposal were a pair of dance shoes and my technique in dance.
But, I will rework the whole thing since it won't be allowed.
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