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xDD All right, then. Though personally, that's sooooo very weird.
I was looking at it from a purely roleplay point of view. That, and reading through the form, I find out all about this characters favourite foods and gemstones before I even find out what hair colour she has. Throws me off a little, and makes it all seem kind of silly.

Given that, did she even have a personality section? I still feel like I know nothing about the character, and similarly, I feel that it's less of a character and more filling in a listed requirement form.

... I can't believe favourite/least favourite food is a requirement.
Is this shop heavily based around food, or something? O.o

If things like gemstones and good preferences are critical to Sailor Moon roleplay, then who am I to argue? I just pointed it out because it never is in any roleplay I've encountered. ^___^ Mostly, I just followed the link in her signature asking for a critique and gave one based on my views.

Now for something that might actually be helpful to you:
About her pets, I believe you should keep both of them. If she doesn't have strong connections to other people it makes much more sense that your character would develop strong relationships with pets, and having more than one allows your character to have slightly more depth and appear more reclusive.

I am not going to crit about anything major at the moment, but I was reading this... and it has been bugging me.


If she died in childbirth, how did she die when Maxx was two? ^^;

Please stick to the official character form found here and move all of the added ethnicity/family information to another post. It makes it easier to read, as right now there's an overload of information. The artists need to be able to view not only your physical description of your character, but your character's flaws/virtues in order to draw them in an appropriate pose. After all, if you have someone who doesn't like other people drawn in a pose that's smiling and waving at someone, that'd be completely out of character right? ;3

Intellegent: How is she intellegent? Does she have an area of expertise that she knows anything and everything about? Get good grades? Goes above and beyond the assignment?

Sadistic: Does this only apply if you "tick her off?" How does she enjoy the mental pain of someone? If she's courteous, would she still spread rumors and lies to someone while pretending to be their friend only to hurt them? Why? Will she go out of her way to say, trip someone?

Manipulative: This is a really difficult flaw for characters to have, and isn't reccomended for players. How will you manipulate another character? Talk it out OOCly and plan ahead? How would she use someone else's trust to her advantage later if she doesn't trust people and is wary of them?

Possessive: Again, if she's wary and not trusting of people... How is she possessive of the 'acuaintances' of hers, if she pushes them away in the first place?

Characters with "facades" are really difficult to pull off, and are actually quite boring to play. If she's quiet and courteous, most likely most of her posts would be along the lines of "Maxx sits there quietly and listens, imagining Soandso's face when she discovers what was left in her locker."

What is Maxx's motive? What does she want? What inspires her to go out and interact with the other girls at Crystal? Why would she interact? Are other people her source of entertainment? To her, would television and movies be too predictable, so she goes out and watches people instead, stirring up drama here and there for her entertainment? I think if she purposefully messed with other people (breaking into their rooms to put dirt on their beds, scatter their books, leave things in their lockers, dump some crickets into their desks, etc etc) she would be a much more interesting and dynamic character. She seems too passive to me right now, and that may make it hard to RP her.

Also, what is her negaverse challenge? Would it be the default "The Darkness Will Prevail!" or something else? If you are stuck for weapon ideas, look at her hobbies. She could have a paper airplane shaped like an owl that eventually turns into a magically controlled owl-shaped/designed/etched shuriken. Or even an old, battered owl-kite that turns into metal that she can control to swoop down and slice her opponents with.

Another thing to think about is why is she joining the Negaverse? The Negaverse is a military organization. Does she think the senshi are weak because they're so close-knit? Or because they have no shame/sense of fashion?

Hope this helps -- keep at it! =D

With the hobbies missing and most of the flaws and virtues crossed out or marked for rewrite, I'm not sure what else I can crit? I think everyone else has covered it. Hit Maru and I up again once you've done the rewrites - not much pointing giving you more crit when you're not planning to keep what's there.