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 Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:05 pm
Can’t you see me falling here?
In front of your very eyes
Choking on the tears
Of the innocents that have lost their lives
Can’t you see your face?
Reflected off the damp pools of blood
On the very place
Where you murdered your first love?
Help me
I’m dieing here alone
Trapped in the confines of my mind
Wishing that some one would come and
Help me!
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:07 pm
Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:08 pm
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:11 pm
Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:16 pm
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol aha I know how you feel. I have 21 stories on fanfiction.net right now and it's like @_@ must keep all them UPDATED xD
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:19 pm
Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol aha I know how you feel. I have 21 stories on fanfiction.net right now and it's like @_@ must keep all them UPDATED xD I never work on more than two at a time. lol. That's the reason why.
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:20 pm
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki Can’t you see me falling here? In front of your very eyes Choking on the tears Of the innocents that have lost their lives Can’t you see your face? Reflected off the damp pools of blood On the very place Where you murdered your first love? Help me I’m dieing here alone Trapped in the confines of my mind Wishing that some one would come and Help me! That was really really good. I really like it. You good at this. smile xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol aha I know how you feel. I have 21 stories on fanfiction.net right now and it's like @_@ must keep all them UPDATED xD I never work on more than two at a time. lol. That's the reason why. I've finished most of them xd. Only like 4 are still going xD
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:51 pm
Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol aha I know how you feel. I have 21 stories on fanfiction.net right now and it's like @_@ must keep all them UPDATED xD I never work on more than two at a time. lol. That's the reason why. I've finished most of them xd. Only like 4 are still going xD HaHa, that's still too much work for me at one time.
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 6:24 pm
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx Fox Demoness Nizuki xD thank you. I don't write poems or anything often cause I don't think im good at it xD Well I think you great at it. 3nodding I don't write often either, but it's becuase I have to be hit my the muse or I just can't do it. lol aha I know how you feel. I have 21 stories on fanfiction.net right now and it's like @_@ must keep all them UPDATED xD I never work on more than two at a time. lol. That's the reason why. I've finished most of them xd. Only like 4 are still going xD HaHa, that's still too much work for me at one time. xD I manage, somehow
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 6:33 pm
Why OUR Planet is dying
They call
me insane
because I
try so hard
to prove that
it is OUR fault
that OUR world
is dying
it is us
who are
the murderers
true, we build
the machines
that harm the
precious air
but that is just it
we build the machines
we dig the
minerals from
the heart of Mother Earth
and for what
to burn them
and kill
the animals
who are as
much her children
as we are
this is OUR planet
And its up to
US
To right the wrong
we have done
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Posted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 12:09 pm
zoje972 Why OUR Planet is dyingThey call me insane because I try so hard to prove that it is OUR fault that OUR world is dying it is us who are the murderers true, we build the machines that harm the precious air but that is just it we build the machines we dig the minerals from the heart of Mother Earth and for what to burn them and kill the animals who are as much her children as we are this is OUR planet And its up to US To right the wrong we have done Wow. I really like it. It's so true, it is all our fault. Stupid people who don't know how to listen!
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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 5:57 am
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx You said you'd be there, I just have to look, You're always somewhere, In a strangers smile, In a close friends laughter, It's all around me now, I see it even after, It's still so hard, I can barely breath, You promised me, You'd never leave, Now you're gone, So what I'm alive, Without you to hold me, How long will I survive? Very good, I love how you kinda switched up the rhyming scheme. Great poem, keep writing.
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fallenangel_Asha Vice Captain
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fallenangel_Asha Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 6:01 am
Fox Demoness Nizuki Children of FireRelates to/Inspired by Hiei from Yu Yu Hakusho Wowzers, good job. Love the imagery in this one. Fire, burning, death...all my favorites. I love your rhythym and your pattern. keep it up.
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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 6:04 am
xXHis-Dark-GoddessXx I know we’ve got our problems,
But give a chance I’ll solve ‘em,
We'll make it through the day alright,
So we can enjoy our endless night,
You're my reason for breathing,
But baby I keep thinking you're leaving,
Just promise me you'll won't go,
Cause there's so much we don't know,
Like where we'll be in a hundred years,
Or if our happiness will be worth our tears,
Eternity is a long time to waste,
On a decision made with haste,
So I'll forgive just a little more,
After all what's a lover for? Very, very good poem. You really nailed it with this one. Little bit of a sidenote, this would actually make a pretty good song if you could lengthen it. Not sure why, but while I was reading all I could think was that it would make a good song - it just flows that well!
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fallenangel_Asha Vice Captain
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