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Are we allowed to crit the student? I know you've had her as a character for a while but I don't know whether or not her student writeup also needs crit.

If not, please ignore the following: sweatdrop

First of all, I'd like to say how amused I am that her food tastes and hobbies (sans tennis) were the same as mine when I was in high school. Even her birthday is only a week after mine.

That part's not crit, though. That just needed saying because I also identify myself as a quiet person and I feel that your virtues and flaws portray how a quiet person views him/herself, not as they truly are. For starters, neither of her flaws are worded as flaws. Quiet as a flaw should not include its merit of being objective or a good listener; it should explain how it can ruin relationships (and believe me, it does). Confident (as a word) is not a flaw. If you intend Kallista to be over-confident, you should probably change the name of the flaw. Unfortunately, I don't really see either in your description of the flaw and the last sentence negates its quality as a flaw altogether. Also, Kind and Sweet look synonymous enough that they should probably be merged into a single virtue. I have some issues with how Quiet is treated as a virtue, but maybe it works.

Now to rebuild: while there are several quiet personality types out there, Kallista sounds most like Enneagram personality type 9*, which I highly suggest reading about to garner ideas of real flaws for your character. Non-confrontational, Slothful, Over-idealizing and Wanton spacing-out are stereotypical flaws of this personality type. Other virtues to consider could be Observant, Objective or Forgiving.

*Types 4 and 5 are the other withdrawn types, but a 4 sounds too self-absorbed and a 5 too prickly to fit how you've portrayed Kallista.

there, I changed the seashell ref pics that i have to black and white

I'm working on it; now I'm starting to get confused, you want me to do attack 2 as 1b and now you want me to come up with a actual name

Name attack 1b Seashell's Symphony. I think it should affect multiple opponents instead of just one? Like this:

Attack 1b: Seashell's Symphony
Sailor Leucothea summons a conch shell and blows into it; causing up to five opponents to hear the sounds of the sea in their ears, and be unable to focus for three minutes. This attack can be used three times a battle.

I think that works much better. <3

I think you're going to be told, the second you put this up for staff crit, that three minutes is WAY too long. Battles are supposed to take up quite short time frames, so most attacks with a time duration don't even take up a full minute.

-fixes again-

I'll fix that when I get my muse back, right now its gone <<:;