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Round 1 -- Group 2 -- Alder VS Hinata :: JUDGED :: Goto Page: [] [<] 1 2

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Who do you think will win?
Alder
25%
 25%  [ 1 ]
Hinata
75%
 75%  [ 3 ]
Total Votes : 4


Israf3l

PostPosted: Wed Jul 15, 2009 9:00 am


Final Word: Hinata


This was a very tough match to judge for me (note the .25 point difference between the two), because both of you are almost equal both in terms of role-playing, and plain power as a Shinigami. After some deliberation, I chose Hinata not because I felt she won the battle, but because I saw her as having a better understanding of the mechanics of role-playing.

Suggestions:
Alder- The only thing I would suggest is take another look at how you put in details, maybe slim down on a few. Besides this, you are a perfectly able Shinigami.

Hinata- Get more offensive. There is a large chance Alder could have won that battle, you need to work more on keeping your opponent on his or her toes. Get your skill in battle on the same level as your skill with writing, and you will be a formidable one indeed.

Good job to both of you, this is quite a good fight. Best I have seen so far.
PostPosted: Thu Jul 16, 2009 3:44 pm


Winner: Hinata.

Both of you are phenomenal RPers.

Alder - be careful with your grammar. Some of your periods need to be commas, some commas need to be periods, and I suggest you start using semi-colons for your more complex sentences. You have a tendency to be verbose sometimes, but that petered out near the end of the match, so the last few posts were easier to read and more enjoyable.

Hinata - you can be comma happy at times too, so watch out for that. I like how you break up separate ideas into paragraphs like in novels - it makes for much easier reading. Be careful with constant defense though as it has a tendency to make it seem like you lack creativity.

juxvi3t


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 16, 2009 5:26 pm


~ Judges' Decision ~


Winner: Hinata!!!
 
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