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 Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 12:53 am
Thank you so much ^ ^ i'm happy someone enjoys my poetry, and yours is very very great.
I know I do get a bit Comma happy as you so hilariously put it xD (Imma use that now lmao)
haha I know, it does make for good poetry, how do you think great bands like KoRn&Otep were made? lmao Thank you again for reading!
Have you read my KoRn story? It explains a lot on where my poetry comes from^ ^
and I also posted some Concept art for it too in the KoRn Art Forum ^ ^
Check it out and leave a comment, dont be shy ^ ^ I crave constructive criticize! It's how I become a better writer and artist! Thank you sooo much for reading!!
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 10:43 pm
Ooo, yay!! More Jashin stuff!! . . . Tee hee! xd heart I will so check that out. Was the story about J.D. falling in love with a woman he could only see in his mirror?? Cause I read that, and it was B.A.
I hate it how people only say "I love your work, keep it up!" But they don't put any constructive criticism into it. So I always try to put stuff in. ^_^
Thanks for reading my stuff, too!! I have more poetry up, so you can check it out if you want. ^_^ And a blip I'm probably going to turn into a story ((War Lord's Pet Dragon)). . . Except I have problems finishing those. >_<
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 11:49 pm
Thank you, I'm putting that story on hold for now, because I've gotten out of my Writers block for this story: ~[KoRn at MY School?]~Thank you, I like getting comments at all, but I LOVE to get raw feedback on how I can improve my writing ^ ^ And really? I'll have to check it out!
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Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2009 5:08 pm
Poem
...Daddy...
Eyes black and beady,
Skin dark and seedy
Forcing me to be needy,
Stop being so ******** greedy.
Standing there outside my room
listening, waiting to catch a groan,
As my hands stop, feeling the impending doom.
Fear grips my heart, knowing your there.
Whispering a silent prayer,
But this feeling of despair does not fade.
And as your hand turns the knob,
I hear you declare,
That this violent affair will not be the last.
I get up, trying to run fast,
But I know from the past, that I shall not escape.
And as your hand grabs the duct tape,
I know that this is not rape.
I know deep down Inside,
a sick part of me, that is from you,
Wants to be,
the one only for you.
I struggle, denying you the pleasure of seeing me submit.
With your hand I feel you hit,
My side as I commit,
The highest act of treason.
And I'm given no reason,
as I permit, you to do it.
And I will never admit, that I quit.
As my screams fill the night,
And your eyes are shining bright.
Why must it be this way?
Why can't I just go away.
Remember when we used to laugh?
Never caring because we had no cash.
Always smiling, never rash.
As we gazed up at the shining sun,
All has changed as I hold the gun,
Against your head, as you beg the one,
That you dirtied and soiled just for fun.
...Maddy Taddy Addy, guess who's gonna Die?
Raddy, Caddy, Paddy, No lie, It's gonna be
...Daddy...
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Posted: Sat Jul 11, 2009 10:34 pm
Sick and twisted. . .I like this one a lot, too.
Friendly tip: If you have writer's block, or even if you feel your work is getting stale, try writing in a different format. I started doing that when I felt all my poetry sounded the same. Now I juggle three or four different writing styles. ^_^ I just thought of that when you mentioned your Writer's Block with KoRn At My School.
I would check that out, except I still have to finish Zee's SYOTOS, and I leave for Basic on Tuesday. stressed gonk xp Sorry!!!! If I remember, I'll check it when I get back!!! Promise!!!
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Posted: Tue Jul 14, 2009 9:48 am
ATTENTION:
This is --Korn-Iz-Jashin--
I have been hacked by these two users:
Macthisjack
and
Ashleymd
I know for a fact they hacked me, they pmed me from my new account (since i followed them around the town, making sure they were the ones who hacked me) and they taunted me about it.
Also, this is my new account, I shall be continuing my Poems on this account.
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Posted: Tue Jul 28, 2009 11:33 pm
PoemsIt's time to kick back, relax, let your mind be free
Time to ask those pus sy a** fu ckers just what they see!
Don't get in my face with your whiney as s complaints
It's not my fault that i'm not a mutha fuc kin saint!
I'm tired of hearin 'bout what you be 'stealin'
When i'm done with you, your mind'll be reelin!
All these whiney as s bit chez all up in my ear,
Tellin me all their sh it that I don't wanna hear!
The world today is so fu ckin sad,
It's time to grow up and get fu ckn MAD!
[chorus x2]
So are you mutha fu ckerz ready? For some real sh it,
Yo bit chy as s tears aint worth my time,
Try suffering for years and see all that's mine!
Are you sure your ******** in ready? For this real sh it!
don't fuc kin forget who you got it from,
Yo songs ain't the real sh it!
Bend over and get hit!
All the prophet's of the world ain't prepared for this,
all you sucker as s pus sy's with your mind impaired!
All yo as s can do is just stand and stare,
All you fuc kers out there take this warning and beware!
Time to bring back the soul,
Let your mind unfold,
Time to close your eyes and wait to be whole,
Open up your eyes and let your mind behold!
[chorus x2]
So are you mutha fuc kerz ready? For some real sh it,
Yo bit chy as s tears aint worth my time,
Try suffering for years and see all that's mine!
Are you sure your fuc kin ready? For this real sh it!
don't fuc kin forget who you got it from,
Yo songs ain't the real sh it!
Bend over and get hit!
((maybe i'll add more later but for now it's all I got ^ ^))
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Posted: Thu Sep 24, 2009 5:17 pm
Poem
Acid bath,
To fry my brain.
You won't escape my wrath,
My anger you cannot contain.
How could you?!
Betray me this way?
I thought you were my mother,
With you,
I'll never stay.
You question my trust for you,
Our bond.
And yet you tell all what I tell you,
And you wonder why I don't respond.
How could I ever trust someone who can't keep a secret?
How could I ever feel sorry for someone who feel's only regret?
My love for you can never go away,
But the hate I feel;In my brain it shall stay.
Remember that,
When your accusing me of blasphemy.
Why must we fight like this?
Am I now your enemy?
Screaming,
Teeming,
Shouting,
Pouting.
I'm sick of it all.
Make all this pain go away,
I hope that it'll all fall,
Away from me,
Away from my mind,
Far away,
So it will all unwind.
From the bristle in my soul.
Nothing in store for me,
Nothing but this cold.
I can't believe the lies you spin,
It makes me feel so sick deep down within.
I can't be to upset,
I do it too.
Sometimes I wish we'd never met.
When I was younger you made all the monsters go away,
But now you make all the voices come my way.
Your voice makes them scratch my skull;'till it's bleeding and sore.
You make me question my existence;What am I good for?
As I said before,
My love&respect for you will never fade,
Your presence just makes me feel so betrayed.
You promised to be there,
To never be scared.
And yet you beg me to make all the hate go away,
To never let you be compared.
Sometimes I sit and wonder:
"Does she even really care?"
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