Hello : )
Please forgive my intrusion, but I've been reading through this battle and I have a few points to complain about.
I'm not picking on anyone and I'm not angry or flaming or anything, but if you're god-moding throughout this battle, you need to be told.
This will serve as some constructive criticism for both of you.
Let me start off by saying:
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Kasuki closed both of her eyes and suddenly disappeared, appearing behind the other captain. She slashed at the captains back and then quickly jumped away, hoping to avoid taking any damage early-on in this battle. She skidded to a halt a few feet away, causing sand to fly in every direction
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Ryuunosake managed to take a step forward as soon as he saw her leave his sight. She was still able to cut into his back, but not deep, causing a slash through the squad seven symbol emblazoned on his white vest. 'bold . . .' he thought as he began to turn around. The sand obscured his sight. ' . . . resourceful.'
Okay, so I've decided not to make direct quotes from your posts. I'll just make a general comment.
Careful Lavi, you can't predict what the outcome of your attacks on Ryuunosake will be. I saw a few posts where you wrote the outcome of your attack. That is for Sireez to decide.
As for you, Sireez. Your shikai is well thought out, but unfortunately it's causing a few problems. It's not really the Quiet the Mind ability, it could still be a very good ability, but in an RP where you have to play fair against everyone else, it has to have some limits. Like when you use your.. focus? To block out pain.. I mean.. come on, everyone feels pain. O_o Especially when you're all cut up. You could make the pain less intense.. Some people have a higher tolerance.. But everyone feels pain at some point. Unless you've damaged nerve cells. xD What I mean basically, is you have to find a happy medium between sensing attacks beforehand and not being fast enough to dodge them. Ugh.. that didn't sound right but i hope you get what I mean.
The thing about RP fighting is you have to have a balance. You can't continuously dodge your opponent's attacks and it is the same for the other person. I think when it comes to RP fighting, you have to think a lot about the situation, the outcomes and especially who you're fighting. I mean... Ryuunosake, you
are fighting the Head Captain..And I'm not saying that you have to lose, but think about it.. if you did win, it would be a tough battle. Another thing to think about is.. try to picture the situation clearly.. Could your character really dodge this certain attack effectively? If yes, then do it.. if no, then don't, but once again there has to be a balance.
It might be easier if i'd had more to work with.. but I hope this solves a bit.. Lavi, be careful not to predict the outcomes of your attacks and Sireez, don't be invincible. : )
Beware the God-moding disease!~
Edit: I think it might be a good idea to have a neutral party who is an experienced RPer to judge these battles and add some input if they really think one person should lose to the other. For example, my fighting skills in an RP format suck. XD So.. maybe I should lose to my opponent if he can write better than me.
If it were a judge, it would have to be based off of the contestant's ability to write fighting-style posts.
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