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Ok, I've read it through again. I agree with Keppit, she's much better as an Afya, and much more believable. You've done well to go back and explain things, and I really don't have anything to complain about anymore. smile

I do agree with Indu that the Afyas would probably be delighted by her skill. Realistically, I kind of picture other farming jivvins from around the village coming to her for help whenever they have problems with their crops. I'd expect that.

The one warning I will give you is that I still get a very strong 'mary-sue' vibe from her. I wouldn't expect you to change her at this point, but I just think you should know that this could likely be how many people view her. If you're ok with that, then great! Just be forewarned. Anyway, I have confidence that through RP the rougher aspects of her character and personality will continue to develop.

So... just wait for Moo's final word!

Sorry if I came across as harsh in my PM, Brolis smile I've been quite busy lately, and I feel guilty enough about neglecting my shop without being reminded of it.

I've read Serenity over, and I can find no glaring issues. I'm willing to accept her odd style of dress and hairstyles as her having found mention of them in some history book, and created the clothing on her own. However, I want to be sure that you understand that most other Jivvins, because of this style, will likely think her odd and eccentric. She might be a perfectly nice individual, but her sense of style will still win her more than a few strange looks and biting words, so just keep that in mind in playing her.

Otherwise, I think she's fine.

Approved!