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The War of the Southern Star Series, Book One: Ametris Goto Page: [] [<<] [<] 1 2 3 ... 17 18 19 20 21 22 ... 27 28 29 30 [>] [>>] [»|]

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KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Sun Jul 29, 2007 9:52 pm


Meh. She's Kamile. Small children bounce. ^^

MD Finally figured out...about 1/8 of all the secrets.

Hah. Oh, man. (:
PostPosted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 10:59 am


That poor, naive little boy. crying

Small children get therapy. X_x

Voxxx


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 12:25 pm


...Therapy? I wasn't aware that Marli was a therapist.


Didja finish it, Voxxxxie? heart (added an x 'cause I love you.)
PostPosted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 5:09 am


Be home Sunday. Talk then. Leaving hotel now.

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 8:47 am


reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeese~ heart

I misses you.
PostPosted: Sun Aug 05, 2007 5:14 pm


I am here now! whee And I have a few things to say.

A. If you don't keep those last four lines of the intro thing, I'll have to kill you.

B. Sixteen was the freakiest, most morbid thing ever. O.O

C. I like your ellipses. They give it a cool effect.

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Sun Aug 05, 2007 7:28 pm


Reese, not only will I keep the last four lines, I'll look for the rest. :3

"Those deceased and those to come,
Chosen heroes, every one,
Consolidate for all to see,
Theirs is the side of victory.
Soldiers fall and earth will shake,
All those against us in fear will quake;
When stars of red soar 'cross the skies,
Light shall conquer; Darkness DIES!"

And then, the rest. Kamile says this bit, it's rather creepy.

Sixteen freaked me out. O.o

My...ellipses? Where? o.O
PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 8:30 am


Throughout the book.

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 3:52 pm


Oh.

But Reese, what about the creepy poem thing? crying
PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 3:56 pm


The creepy poem thing is... creeply aswame.

The only line that doesn't seem to flow which the rest is:

Quote:
All those against us in fear will quake;


neutral

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 5:28 pm


Yeah, I know. I think "against us" could be replaced by "opposed", which sounds kinda ringy. All those opposed. (:

>:3 creepy poems. ><
PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 6:07 pm


Yeah, that sounds better. :3

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Mon Aug 06, 2007 7:00 pm


So Reese, any ideas for chapter seventeen?
PostPosted: Wed Aug 08, 2007 7:17 pm


I think I shall keep my ideas to myself. Though if this were Earth, I could see some nice young men in their clean white coats coming to take Kamile away. xd

Reese_Roper


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Wed Aug 08, 2007 8:10 pm


Yeah....but they don't get many nutters in Ametris.

Stuff will happen. ><
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