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 Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 8:09 pm
Kage, Cory, Jel Jel ...( heart )
...I'll get to all of you guys tomorrow. Must sleep for now.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 8:28 pm
Alright guys! Screening time! mrgreen
@Kage: Yay! Profile approving time! XD
- So in response to your first question, no you do not need a picture though it would be prefered as it would make it easier for ppl to visualize your rpc.
- Nyan Cat! Most epic theme song EVER! But seriously, I got to get onto the serious stuff... XP
- For the Kyuubi, please link us to the application and approval posts for future references please.
- Tweak, sorry Kage, but you're gonna have to decide if you're gonna give up your A or S-rank mastary of a style before this profile is approved. Tweaks are finalized upon approval so yeah...please make a decision soon. As a friend, I say go for the A-rank cause you have another but as a mod, I say its up to you.
- Agility as a teritary attribute gives you no real boosts to copying and pasting the info doesn't really work (did you do that...? Sry, it looks like it is yet at the same time it doesn't). Anyhow, most tertiary attributes, if they don't provide a benefit, we expect some sort of explaination as to why your rpc has this trait. Like how agility works with Setsuna - probably cause she's small or something.
- Summoner speciality, I know you have yet to decide on a contract but you should still remove the brackets for now and put something down that looks legit like. "Summoning Contract - Signing Ritual" or something similar.
- Though not yet obtained, please place in a second element and when its achieved.
- Missions, once again, plese remove the words between the ""
- Fill in the second elemental slot with your choosen second element please. You can choose to strike it out till it's obtained or you can just leave it as it is but make a side note that its achieved at Chuunin (which I assume is when you get your second element)
- Also add in a slot for sealing techs please. Though we don't have any as of yet, will will and a seperate slot will be needed for it.
Other than that, looks great Kage. Good work! Love the Backstory btw.
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 8:51 pm
@Cory: Hi again.
- So for the height and weight section, we'll be needing both the metric and standard so right now we're missing ft. for hight and lbs for weight.
- If possible, it would be appriciated if you could put in a bit more for your character descriptions, personality and behavior. This stuff will give your rpc more depth and will give you more room to develop as you rp.
-Please insert a link to your bloodline along with links to the actual applicationa and approval posts for future referense
-Same for the mini blurb, try to put in as much info as you can as it'll give everyone a better understanding of your rpc.
-Since you don't have a tertiary attribute it's alright to just remove it. No point in having it since its unusuable.
- Please change your tools back to their original numbers. In TUP, everyone starts off with the same number of tools and to gain anymore it'll have to be attained through rp.
Thanks and good luck.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 9:10 pm
Hey Jel. I'm not in charge of profiles, but I noticed that your profile as a Mayu has some changes to be made, and I have a suggestion as well.
1. The Mayu bloodline cannot learn genjutsu or taijutsu, so you probably want to tweak away one of the two for more ninjutsu or another kenjutsu style. Keep in mind that the only kenjutsu styles you can learn would be styles that involve small weapons such as kuni, so your best bet would probably be to tweak toward ninjutsu.
2. Since you cannot learn genjutsu, go ahead and delete the genjutsu section from your profile.
3. You still have to train for all the Mayu bloodline techniques, except for Levitation and the telepathy skills.
4. If you described your outfit in the "Physical Characteristics" section, then go ahead and say in the "outfit" section that it is described in the section above.
5. If you have Great Chakra Reserves as tertiary, then you gain 1 chakra point per 10 that you have, so your chakra total should be 27 instead of 25.
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 9:11 pm
@Jelani: Hehe. You're in TUP! mrgreen Now prepare to face my wrath! Muhahaha! twisted lol just kidding. xp
-Though you might not have anything ready yet, we still require you to go to the 'Life of a Shinobi' thread and created a history thread for your rpc and then link it to the profile. Afterwards, you can take your time filling it out.
- Hm...Cobra might have a thing with you using "~'s" but I guess you can leave them in for now. If not, he'll probably require that you change them to square brackets.
- Be sure to link your bloodline application as soon as its finished so that we may have a reference. Thanks.
- Since you have Great Chakra Reserves as Teritary, you gain +1/10 so your total chakra should be 27, not 25.
- You also gain two free elemental jutsus.
- And since assassing won't be getting a second element, you can remove that extra element slot.
- Mayu members also can't have Genjutsu as stated by Deil in his post same for starting out with not bloodline techs.
- The more you can put in for the outfit description the better it'll bee for visualization purposes.
But yeah, great job. Really impressive seeing when you started on this. Really good. smile
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:08 pm
Deil Grist
The Mayu bloodline cannot learn genjutsu or taijutsu, so you probably want to tweak away one of the two for more ninjutsu or another kenjutsu style. Keep in mind that the only kenjutsu styles you can learn would be styles that involve small weapons such as kuni, so your best bet would probably be to tweak toward ninjutsu.
I don't follow. Mileena cannot fight physically, or use weapons of any sort. (I thought I mentioned this in her profile). I still don't get this whole tweaking thing. I already know that the Mayu Clan cannot use Gen or Taijutsu so I failed to mention either throughout the course of the profile. Do I still have to tweak even though she doesn't have either?
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:43 pm
Jelani564 Deil Grist
The Mayu bloodline cannot learn genjutsu or taijutsu, so you probably want to tweak away one of the two for more ninjutsu or another kenjutsu style. Keep in mind that the only kenjutsu styles you can learn would be styles that involve small weapons such as kuni, so your best bet would probably be to tweak toward ninjutsu.
I don't follow. Mileena cannot fight physically, or use weapons of any sort. (I thought I mentioned this in her profile). I still don't get this whole tweaking thing. I already know that the Mayu Clan cannot use Gen or Taijutsu so I failed to mention either throughout the course of the profile. Do I still have to tweak even though she doesn't have either? Tweaking changes the total jutsu/styles according to certain ranks that the class allows. Bloodline restrictions are applied after class restrictions. So just because your bloodline doesn't allow you to learn the stuff doesn't mean your total that your class allows is knocked to 0 automatically. Your tweak applies before your bloodline restrictions take effect. So since the assassin class gives you taijutsu and genjutsu, you could put your tweak down as getting rid of one of those for more of something else, and then erase the taijutsu/genjutsu sections of your profile. You don't have to tweak, but since you're going to end up losing one of those things when your bloodline restrictions apply, you might as well tweak one of them away for some more ninjutsu. The bloodline jutsu will probably be counted as ninjutsu at some point, so you could use the extra ninjutsu from the tweak when that comes so you aren't so restricted on techniques. I also wouldn't advise saying she carries no weapons. The Mayu bloodline pretty much relies on projectiles to deal damage with the light push/pull telekinetic techniques, so it would be wise to at least carry senbon at some point (since they're like metal chopsticks, which you could easily lift even as a Mayu.) You don't HAVE to carry projectiles, but as a word of advice from the creator of the bloodline, I highly recommend you do.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:56 pm
Advise heeded. Do I have to train for each Ninjutsu and Bloodline tech? I put up five E Rank and two D Rank Ninjutsu and the telekinetic skills and levitation for Bloodline. Is that OK?
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:57 pm
I deleted my descriptions and everything, and tried completely different ways to describe everything... But I cannot seem to get it much longer than it already is... Sorry if this causes any inconvenience. I will post a link to my application and stuff after it's approved, I'm working on it right after I post this. I fixed (or attempted to) everything that needed to. Also, sorry if quoting in this thread is frowned upon.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 11:36 pm
Jelani564 Advise heeded. Do I have to train for each Ninjutsu and Bloodline tech? I put up five E Rank and two D Rank Ninjutsu and the telekinetic skills and levitation for Bloodline. Is that OK? Yes and no; you are only allowed to start with the telepathy and levitation bloodline abilities, and then 2 E-rank ninjutsu of your primary element and 1 non-elemental ninjutsu in addition to the transformation jutsu. All bloodline techniques that can be trained have to be before they can be used, and then those 3 E-rank ninjutsu techniques are covered here.
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 7:28 am
Jel: Mileena
- You need to post your approval for your bloodline (I mean, I know you're approved, since I saw it, but documentation is key.)
- I don't mind the change to format you made for the Ninjas Class abilities, it's understandable as you put it.
- I'm okay with you slightly altering your inventory
...just fix the one part above, and you're Approved!
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 11:34 am
-Ah, right, oops, completely forgot about the links sweatdrop .
-Really? Even if it really won't matter until a lot later in my rpc's history gonk ? Fine.... erm.... I'll try and decide which I want....
-No, I didn't copy and paste. What I basically did was read what the agility benefit originally was and emphasized that while it was present it was weaker than if agility was a secondary attribute or higher. Notice how while I did put stuff about increased accuracy and such, I toned it down by also adding stuff like how while projectiles were quite accurate, dodging them was still possible (unlike in the original description), and I described the boosts as being slight. Sorry, I wanted to give it a description similar in structure to how the benefits were originally described. I'll try and fix it.
-I was going to keep the brackets there until I needed to remove them but if you'd prefer them to be removed now, I'll do it.
-Um, what if I'm still deciding on what my second element is? Does it need to be decided during character creation sweatdrop ?
-Oh, right, forgot about those as well sweatdrop . I'll fix them up along with everything else in one go.
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 7:49 am
Cory: Cory
- There is no reason to STRIKE your second element, just leave it be (unless you want to strike it, in which case, whatever) ... and you can change the colors of the elements as well if you want.
- You need to add English values as well as metric for height/weight
...after those two small edits, you are Approved!
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 8:07 am
Jel: Mileena
You Are Approved!
...just to make sure you are clear on something, your Tweak gives you more then just three extra ninjutsu. You actually get three per rank of access dropped. so, since Assassins have access to A-rank genjutsu... You actually get 3 extra D-rank, 3 extra C-rank, 3 extra B-rank, and 3 extra A-rank ninjutsu when you can access those ranks.
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 9:25 am
Edited. I hope I didn't miss anything sweatdrop ?
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