Talent Description: Sora gains additional mastery over the lightning element, becoming able to control the lightning of her jutsu in any way she wishes. Possibilities include but are not limited to turning an originally inaccurate attack into something with amazing precision, concentrating a wide-ranged attack into one devastating blow, and turning an offensive attack into a defensive wall. Granted, the lightning must first be created--requiring a jutsu of some sort to be used in the first place--and it can only last for as long as it was originally intended. She can master her tertiary element, and can learn an additional sealing master rank benefit at S-rank. Talent Sacrifice: Loses all profession learning bonuses. Additional +1 post penalty for learning tai/buki styles/techniques. Loses chuunin benefit. Primary element is raiton, effectively nullifying the Raijuu's element bonus. How it happened: Unlike most shinobis and kunoichis, Sora was born to a peaceful civilian family. She had a caring mother and father that couldn't teach her the nuances of the shinobi/kunoichi life, the tactics and customs. She never had to learn the life of a ninja the hard way either. In a sense, her growth as a kunoichi in her early years was severely stunted. It was a blessing she shared the some element as the Raijuu, or else chances were that she'd never have learned an element in the first place. As it turned out, she actually gained enhanced control over her primary element, something only a prodigy would gain. Although, her performance in other fields would show her as anything but a prodigy. She struggled to learn the martial arts. Even in her own profession, sealing, she needed to skip over her chuunin rank training just so that she wouldn't fall too far behind in everything else. However, as she grew more experienced in the later years of her career, Sora's potential would show itself once more. By jounin she'd have a firm grasp on things, and by sannin she'd have completely caught up, perhaps even excelled her peers, by mastering both sannin profession benefits.
Sorry it took so long to look at this.
As I've told Timmy several times, I can't approve talents with multiple unrelated benefits. In this instance, elemental manipulation, enhanced third element, and an extra rank benefit. (I do see the benefit weakness, but correcting a weakness in the benefit is kind of the opposite of how this works.)
As it is currently written, the main benefit, elemental manipulation, isn't going to work. It's far too vague. It might be salvageable, but I'm not sure, and it'd be a lot of work. Some of what it describes is however already possible using the demon jutsu.
I'm going to have to say denied on this one. Not sure if it can be fixed or not.
Posted: Sat Apr 13, 2013 4:10 pm
As a side note I'm not sure it makes sense, considering her clumsiness with everything else, for her to make inaccurate techniques accurate.
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Posted: Mon Apr 22, 2013 2:15 pm
Username: HadoKennie RPC Name: Kensei Uchiha
RPC Rank: Chūnin Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Sharingan
Profession: Taijutsu Specialist Ninja Types: Combo and Speed
Talent Description: Kensei is capable of using jutsu without reciting them and using handseals.
Talent Sacrifice: Whenever Kensei tries to use a jutsu, it will get a -1 rank in power.
How it happened: Kensei is always fighting at close range. So using any type of jutsu other than taijutsu is the last thing on his mind. Whenever he tries to use a regular jutsu, his hand seals either gets interrupted, or his opponent hears him say the jutsu and is prepared to counter or move. Secretly this infuriates Kensei, so he tried to think of ways to get pass this. After training he developed a way to use Jutsus without these setbacks even though it comes out weaker.
Posted: Mon Apr 22, 2013 2:40 pm
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Username: HadoKennie RPC Name: Kensei Uchiha
RPC Rank: Chūnin Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Sharingan
Profession: Taijutsu Specialist Ninja Types: Combo and Speed
Talent Description: Kensei is capable of using jutsu without reciting them and using handseals.
Talent Sacrifice: Whenever Kensei tries to use a jutsu, it will get a -1 rank in power.
How it happened: Kensei is always fighting at close range. So using any type of jutsu other than taijutsu is the last thing on his mind. Whenever he tries to use a regular jutsu, his hand seals either gets interrupted, or his opponent hears him say the jutsu and is prepared to counter or move. Secretly this infuriates Kensei, so he tried to think of ways to get pass this. After training he developed a way to use Jutsus without these setbacks even though it comes out weaker.
None of your types or profession lend themselves to this talent. Furthermore, what types you do have make the talent incredibly overpowered, while both your profession and "Backstory" for the talent oppose it. I'm unlikely to approve a talent with either of those abilities for anyone other than ninjutsu or espionage/assassin, and never both in one without a non-combination clause.
Talent Description: Sora can learn an additional sealing master rank benefit at S-rank. Talent Sacrifice: Loses tertiary element. All other elements pushed up a rank (primary learned at chuunin, secondary learned at jounin). How it happened: Unlike most shinobis and kunoichis, Sora was born to a peaceful civilian family. She had a caring mother and father that couldn't teach her the nuances of the shinobi/kunoichi life, the tactics and customs. She never had to learn the life of a ninja the hard way either. In a sense, her growth as a kunoichi in her early years was severely stunted. It was a blessing she shared the some element as the Raijuu, or else chances were that she'd never have learned an element in the first place. After the first few hard years of playing catch-up, though, Sora finally settled into a pace even with her peers. In fact, it was slightly faster simply out of habit of her early years. As she grew more experienced in the later years of her career, Sora began advancing past her years. By sannin she would have completely caught up, perhaps even excelled her peers, by mastering both sannin profession benefits.
Alright, edited it so that it was only one benefit. Although, technically, it's two thirds of my first attempt. I just reworded the tertiary element benefit to become a weakness, which was what I meant it to be in the first place.
And in my defense, Nagisa, Sora is only clumsy physically QQ . And it's not even her fault. At least, not originally gonk . Ironically enough, now it is though because the Raijuu was buffed in that area.
Posted: Sun May 12, 2013 3:05 pm
Kagetsukiko
Alright, edited it so that it was only one benefit. Although, technically, it's two thirds of my first attempt. I just reworded the tertiary element benefit to become a weakness, which was what I meant it to be in the first place.
And in my defense, Nagisa, Sora is only clumsy physically QQ . And it's not even her fault. At least, not originally gonk . Ironically enough, now it is though because the Raijuu was buffed in that area.
I'm going to deny this one, simply for your own sake. We've been planning for quite awhile to make S ranks capable of taking another benefit (Though not a jounin one.), so making you sacrifice an entire element to attain a bonus we plan to give you anyways, and several ranks before you'd have access to it, is a cruel move I'm not going to make.
And yeah, it just didn't make much sense to me that enhancing a person's agility would make them clumsy. Yeah, just making them faster without any other enhancements would do it, but that didn't seem to be how Raijuu worked. My version enhances the entire nervous system through electrical impulse, enhancing neural impulses, and thus, speed and reaction. Suppose that does make for an awkward transition for the host though.
RPC Name: Sora Hikari RPC Rank: Genin Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Raijuu Profession: Sealer Ninja Types: Tactical, Long Range
Talent Description: Sora can remotely activate seals that she created herself at the extra cost of a C-rank ninjutsu. Talent Sacrifice: Loses first element. How it happened: The presence of the Raijuu gave Sora some talent with Raiton, which created misled contentment with what she thought was good enough mastery of ninjutsu when in fact she was completely neglecting access to her natural element. Quite ignorant of this void, Sora merely began working on other, more interesting (to her) branches of the ninja arts. In particular, sealing and long-range attacks. Taking advantage of the properties of both, she developed the ability to activate her seals from long-range.
Posted: Fri Jul 12, 2013 8:11 am
Kagetsukiko
Username: Kagetsukiko
RPC Name: Sora Hikari RPC Rank: Genin Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Raijuu Profession: Sealer Ninja Types: Tactical, Long Range
Talent Description: Sora can remotely activate seals that she created herself at the extra cost of a C-rank ninjutsu. Talent Sacrifice: Loses first element. How it happened: The presence of the Raijuu gave Sora some talent with Raiton, which created misled contentment with what she thought was good enough mastery of ninjutsu when in fact she was completely neglecting access to her natural element. Quite ignorant of this void, Sora merely began working on other, more interesting (to her) branches of the ninja arts. In particular, sealing and long-range attacks. Taking advantage of the properties of both, she developed the ability to activate her seals from long-range.
Long Range Triggers will be a part of the next sealing update. It's a bit more in depth than how your talent works, but like the last one, similar enough to where approving this would hurt you more than it'd help.
Profession: Weapon Specialist Ninja Types: Jutsu Crafter/Ability Control
Talent Description: No limit on custom technologies. Talent Sacrifice: Can only have a single element and cannot use genjutsu passed C-Rank How it happened: Sena desires to take after her father and become a great shinobi and scientist. Her father once even brought himself to the point that he replaced his own eyes with mechanical scopes so that he was no longer exposed to ocular genjutsu. Sena knows that she can somehow channel her father's skills and create and unlimited amount of technologies and puppets just as he did.
Posted: Sun Nov 03, 2013 4:17 pm
Username: iAkura-kun RPC Name: Akura Bashirou
RPC Rank: Academy Student Bloodline/Clan/Demon: None, look at weakness
Profession: Ninjutsu Specialist Ninja Types: Jutsu Crafter [Ninjutsu], Support
Talent Description: Elemental Resonance:
Elemental Resonance is a talent that has two basic parts. The first part is that it gives the user access to all five elements, one per rank as it will be shown bellow. The second part is that it allows the user to resonate all five of his/her elements and reach a state of elemental 'perfection'. By resonating them, the user creates techniques dubbed Hakaiton or Destruction Release, which as the name states serves only to destroy. Hakaiton techniques work in one of two ways:
---------1) The user is able to focus all five elements into a single technique that already exists. By doing this the power of the technique is increased by one rank, but it's cost doubles. Visually, the technique turns black, it keeps the properties of its original element (if it is a fire ball it keeps the visual aspect of a fire ball) but it loses its elemental properties. In other words it is not strong nor weak to any element. [takes one post to focus all the chakras into the technique]
--------- 2) The technique is purely a Hakaiton Jutsu (Custom Ninjutsu only). The power and ability of the Hakaiton Techniques vary from one jutsu to the other.
the scale is as follows:
Academy: 1 element Genin: 2 elements Chunin: 3 elements, able to channel 2 elements at a time SP Jounin: 4 elements, able to channel 3 elements at a time Jounin: 5 elements, able to channel 4 elements at a time Elite Jounin: able to channel all 5 elements at a time, the user is able to resonate all five elements together to create Hakaiton
Talent Sacrifice: The user has no access to to bloodlines, clans, demons or genjutsu. The user cannot be a combo shinobi and the chakra buff from the Shinobi Profession is negated. The user must also take the ' Genjutsu Intollerant ' weakness.
How it happened: Occurring from the rare meeting of a father having 3 elements and a mother having the other 2, Akura inherited all five of the elements, unlocking within him a sixth element who's extent is yet unknown to the shinobi world.
(I say it like that because it adds an element of mystery to the techniques and their abilities)
Right let me get this straight. Not only do you want access to ALL elements, but you want to be able to supercharge ANY jutsu by combining them? Not even counting the question of "how little sense it makes since most jutsu rely specifically on the properties of their element" you do realize this is way OP. Though it doesnt particularly matter until you get to S rank, since you will not have all elements until then and thus cannot do your supercharge jutsu. Still though if you are allowed to take this benefit and make it to S your character is broken.
JUST getting all elements is a lot to ask, though doable.
Posted: Sun Nov 03, 2013 7:01 pm
Hikaro_rin
Right let me get this straight. Not only do you want access to ALL elements, but you want to be able to supercharge ANY jutsu by combining them? Not even counting the question of "how little sense it makes since most jutsu rely specifically on the properties of their element" you do realize this is way OP. Though it doesnt particularly matter until you get to S rank, since you will not have all elements until then and thus cannot do your supercharge jutsu. Still though if you are allowed to take this benefit and make it to S your character is broken.
JUST getting all elements is a lot to ask, though doable.
I wanted to see if the second part was doable, if not, I'll gladly take the 5 elements part. I do not mind at all.
RPC Rank: Academy Student Bloodline/Clan/Demon: None, look at weakness
Profession: Ninjutsu Specialist Ninja Types: Jutsu Crafter [Ninjutsu], Support
Talent Description: Elemental Resonance:
Elemental Resonance is a talent that has two basic parts. The first part is that it gives the user access to all five elements, one per rank as it will be shown bellow. The second part is that it allows the user to resonate all five of his/her elements and reach a state of elemental 'perfection'. By resonating them, the user creates techniques dubbed Hakaiton or Destruction Release, which as the name states serves only to destroy. Hakaiton techniques work in one of two ways:
---------1) The user is able to focus all five elements into a single technique that already exists. By doing this the power of the technique is increased by one rank, but it's cost doubles. Visually, the technique turns black, it keeps the properties of its original element (if it is a fire ball it keeps the visual aspect of a fire ball) but it loses its elemental properties. In other words it is not strong nor weak to any element. [takes one post to focus all the chakras into the technique]
--------- 2) The technique is purely a Hakaiton Jutsu (Custom Ninjutsu only). The power and ability of the Hakaiton Techniques vary from one jutsu to the other.
the scale is as follows:
Academy: 1 element Genin: 2 elements Chunin: 3 elements, able to channel 2 elements at a time SP Jounin: 4 elements, able to channel 3 elements at a time Jounin: 5 elements, able to channel 4 elements at a time Elite Jounin: able to channel all 5 elements at a time, the user is able to resonate all five elements together to create Hakaiton
Talent Sacrifice: The user has no access to to bloodlines, clans, demons or genjutsu. The user cannot be a combo shinobi and the chakra buff from the Shinobi Profession is negated. The user must also take the ' Genjutsu Intollerant ' weakness.
How it happened: Occurring from the rare meeting of a father having 3 elements and a mother having the other 2, Akura inherited all five of the elements, unlocking within him a sixth element who's extent is yet unknown to the shinobi world.
(I say it like that because it adds an element of mystery to the techniques and their abilities)
The only way I could really justify this is if you had all five elements, or the ability to attain them all, already. As it is this talent, in that aspect, would rip off a side benefit of a bloodline, and the main power of a demon, without, as far as I can tell, the weaknesses and requirements of those. (Or at least of the demon.)
Honestly the talent itself seems very weak, almost wasteful, until you actually consider the main benefit of granting all the elements.
The one thing I'm not quite sure on as I read this though. What do you mean when you say "Channel" multiple elements? I would generally assume it to mean you could use jutsu from different elements at once, similar to the Houkou's design, but then you also add that you can't be a combo user, so I have to assume it means something else that isn't well explained.
Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 2:27 pm
Hinote Tosatsu
When I say channeling I mean using a technique that has more than one element at a time. For example something along the lines of the move Tri-Attack for those that have played pokemon which has fire, thunder and ice (it has the power to freeze, burn or paralyze the target) which is what I was going for; or flying press in the new games which has damage count as both a fighting type move and a flying type one even though its counted as only a fighting type attack.
