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 Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 4:51 pm
Denvix right..... Retry 1 - "Deekin!! Listen when I'm talking to you!!" roared the sensei from across the musty class room, cause Deekin to awake from his daydream. He clutched the desk in front of him to keep from falling out if his seat. "Yes Sensei!!" he shouted shakeing his head to wake himself up. "Because of Deekin, your all going to take a pop quiz, a transformation test. Now line up, Deekin... you go first." Sensei said glareing at Deekin sending a shiver up his spine. "Yes sensei...." he muttered feeling suddenly guilty, he walked to the frount of the class with everyone else giving him death stares. Deekin stood with his hands up in the correct hand sign. ~please let me get this right~ he scilently begged every god he could think of. "Transform!" he shouted useing up a little more chakra then nessary. A cloud of smoke shot up around him and when it cleared, he was standing there completely unchanged. "Uh....." he said, face flushing a deep red. The class having a mixture of laughter and angry noises. "Deekin...you FAIL!!!" Sensei shouted..... (does that work?) Pass.
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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 2:16 am
...where do I go now...? sorry to sound like an idiot... sad
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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 2:25 am
Denvix ...where do I go now...? sorry to sound like an idiot... sad It's okay ^^ Okay, first off, have you read this? Also, go to chatterbox and we can talk there.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:07 pm
The door to the classroom slowly slid open and in walked in a young boy about eleven years of age. The boy had short black hair that was combed back, his eyes were black with a lazy look about them, and he wore a dark gray open vest with a black T-shirt and black pants. He had his hands in his pockets and walked over toward his seat. The Sensei looked up from his desk and looks at the boy. "Satoru, why are you always so early? Class doesn't start for another half an hour."
Satoru stopped in front of his seat and glanced over to the Sensei from the corner of his eye. "Because its either get here early or get here late..." He sat down and then looked over to his Sensei with the same lazy look about his expression. "I don't have parents to wake me up for school, so I have to get myself up or I sleep in and I'm late..." Satoru gave a small smirk. "Would you rather me be late Sensei?"
The Sensei just gave a soft smile as he stood up. "I guess you're right, well I was gonna get some Ramen before class started. I can't leave you here by yourself, so would you like to come with me? Ramens on me." He offered walking toward the door. Satoru just sat there, "No Tha-" His stomach began to growl before he could finish. "Well I did skip breakfast this morning, okay why not." He said with a little smile as he followed his Sensei out.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 9:57 pm
Elemental Zanpaktou The door to the classroom slowly slid open and in walked in a young boy about eleven years of age. The boy had short black hair that was combed back, his eyes were black with a lazy look about them, and he wore a dark gray open vest with a black T-shirt and black pants. He had his hands in his pockets and walked over toward his seat. The Sensei looked up from his desk and looks at the boy. "Satoru, why are you always so early? Class doesn't start for another half an hour." Satoru stopped in front of his seat and glanced over to the Sensei from the corner of his eye. "Because its either get here early or get here late..." He sat down and then looked over to his Sensei with the same lazy look about his expression. "I don't have parents to wake me up for school, so I have to get myself up or I sleep in and I'm late..." Satoru gave a small smirk. "Would you rather me be late Sensei?" The Sensei just gave a soft smile as he stood up. "I guess you're right, well I was gonna get some Ramen before class started. I can't leave you here by yourself, so would you like to come with me? Ramens on me." He offered walking toward the door. Satoru just sat there, "No Tha-" His stomach began to growl before he could finish. "Well I did skip breakfast this morning, okay why not." He said with a little smile as he followed his Sensei out. Pass
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Posted: Thu Nov 18, 2010 6:21 am
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Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:32 pm
This won't necessarily be the character I actually create. It might be, I really like her though. (: Just a warning, in case it's a rule or something. Light brown eyes flickered open, still reminiscing from the vivid dreams they had been enduring just moments before. As if she had never been sleeping, a girl was wide awake, sitting on her bed, observing her surroundings as she did every morning. You never know when the house you have been living in all your life would burn down. She calmed down a quiet yawn with her fingertips, blinking a few times. She stood up, stretching towards the sky.
After getting on her everyday clothes, she walked out of the door to her home calmly, twirling a kunai. Maybe she'd see her sensei about some training she'd like to undergo. Because if she still couldn't defend herself from her older brother and his sibling rivalry issues, she wasn't strong enough at all. She stopped fiddling with the kunai and realized she was going the wrong way. She should stop thinking so much, and at least concentrate on where she's going. The girl coughed embarrassedly, and swiftly replaced her kunai to it's original place. She pivoted on her heels and headed towards the Academy.
Right on time. She smiled to herself as she glanced at the clock on the wall. The classroom was small, and not very many kids were in here. It could possibly just be a small class, or everyone was going to be late. Sensei began taking roll, calling out names. "Kaori Shizimu." He called out, looking over the class with tired eyes. Kaori cleared her throat silently, and raised a hand. "Present." Her voice, clear, light, and quiet, stayed put in the space around her, unlike the boy before her, whose loud raspy voice rang out around the entire room. Sensei squinted his eyes. Was there really someone there? "Speak up next time, Kaori. You sound like the wind." He loudly coughed before continuing on to the next student. Kaori sulked her head, her face hidden by her soft hair. "Y-yes, Sensei." She said, only a tiny bit louder than before.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 12:12 am
Winevy This won't necessarily be the character I actually create. It might be, I really like her though. (: Just a warning, in case it's a rule or something. Light brown eyes flickered open, still reminiscing from the vivid dreams they had been enduring just moments before. As if she had never been sleeping, a girl was wide awake, sitting on her bed, observing her surroundings as she did every morning. You never know when the house you have been living in all your life would burn down. She calmed down a quiet yawn with her fingertips, blinking a few times. She stood up, stretching towards the sky.
After getting on her everyday clothes, she walked out of the door to her home calmly, twirling a kunai. Maybe she'd see her sensei about some training she'd like to undergo. Because if she still couldn't defend herself from her older brother and his sibling rivalry issues, she wasn't strong enough at all. She stopped fiddling with the kunai and realized she was going the wrong way. She should stop thinking so much, and at least concentrate on where she's going. The girl coughed embarrassedly, and swiftly replaced her kunai to it's original place. She pivoted on her heels and headed towards the Academy.
Right on time. She smiled to herself as she glanced at the clock on the wall. The classroom was small, and not very many kids were in here. It could possibly just be a small class, or everyone was going to be late. Sensei began taking roll, calling out names. "Kaori Shizimu." He called out, looking over the class with tired eyes. Kaori cleared her throat silently, and raised a hand. "Present." Her voice, clear, light, and quiet, stayed put in the space around her, unlike the boy before her, whose loud raspy voice rang out around the entire room. Sensei squinted his eyes. Was there really someone there? "Speak up next time, Kaori. You sound like the wind." He loudly coughed before continuing on to the next student. Kaori sulked her head, her face hidden by her soft hair. "Y-yes, Sensei." She said, only a tiny bit louder than before.Good job smile PASS
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 4:50 pm
RP Sample
running thouts thew my mind as i stand in frount of tho who fear me. knowing my place but yet have always been lost, as i rise my fist for the first strike i say to my self "leed not into the fear, but the fear leeds you". as i swiftly move to dodge the knifes flying at me at high speeds. running at my foe as i can here my every breath, my fist starts to slam into them as i can feel there bone's snap and ther heart suddenly stop. as i here the last foe drop i stand still lost at the choice i have just made that got me here. why did it need to end this why...why?
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 4:57 pm
harusoma123 RP Sample running thouts thew my mind as i stand in frount of tho who fear me. knowing my place but yet have always been lost, as i rise my fist for the first strike i say to my self "leed not into the fear, but the fear leeds you". as i swiftly move to dodge the knifes flying at me at high speeds. running at my foe as i can here my every breath, my fist starts to slam into them as i can feel there bone's snap and ther heart suddenly stop. as i here the last foe drop i stand still lost at the choice i have just made that got me here. why did it need to end this why...why? Hmmm, I like it. But you may need to do spell checking. But I can still read it, but some people might have a hard time figuring out what you are saying. And if English isn't your first language, then you definitely need to spell check.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 4:59 pm
well i used to be a good speller but well this sumer i had a bad accedent with 120 pound metal pannel and my head so yea, i lost alot of memory. inclouding spelling and reading....but i will try harder sorry.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:01 pm
harusoma123 RP Sample running thouts thew my mind as i stand in frount of tho who fear me. knowing my place but yet have always been lost, as i rise my fist for the first strike i say to my self "leed not into the fear, but the fear leeds you". as i swiftly move to dodge the knifes flying at me at high speeds. running at my foe as i can here my every breath, my fist starts to slam into them as i can feel there bone's snap and ther heart suddenly stop. as i here the last foe drop i stand still lost at the choice i have just made that got me here. why did it need to end this why...why? Your mixing up the spellings on a lot of words, I think your mixing words up, and also your supposed to act like you are the person. So say someone is RPing Sasuke, they need to RP as Sasuke and not say "I ran up to the car." This is what is should be like: Sasuke ran up to the car and ripped the door open, confused by the sudden scenes at hand. Also you mgiht want to capitalize things aswell. I HAVE NO POWER TO APPROVE BUT I'M HELPING AND HOPEFULLY THAT'S OKAY QYP Anyway, capitalize, you aren't the character but it's more like an author describing other people's actions. "What just happened?" Sasuke said confused. Also the spelling and your mixing up words. Qyp your not going to accept it, I don't want to be mean so let's teach him how to RP since he looks like a noob in general. But he needs to do bettter than that Qyp.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:17 pm
harusoma123 well i used to be a good speller but well this sumer i had a bad accedent with 120 pound metal pannel and my head so yea, i lost alot of memory. inclouding spelling and reading....but i will try harder sorry. Oh @_@
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Posted: Mon Nov 29, 2010 9:42 pm
sitting under an apple tree i think to my self "wut is there to do today". then my friend marko walks up to me and says "hey want to go by the lake and swim", filled with excitment i leep up "let's go". we run all the way there and befor i even have the time to take my shirt off he pushes me in. as i'm falling i grab his arm and yank him in with me...."hahaha" we both cry. "Wut a day i think to my self as i sit under the same apple tree the next day.
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Posted: Mon Nov 29, 2010 9:50 pm
harusoma123 sitting under an apple tree i think to my self "wut is there to do today". then my friend marko walks up to me and says "hey want to go by the lake and swim", filled with excitment i leep up "let's go". we run all the way there and befor i even have the time to take my shirt off he pushes me in. as i'm falling i grab his arm and yank him in with me...."hahaha" we both cry. "Wut a day i think to my self as i sit under the same apple tree the next day. Hmmm... still not quite there friend. When you RP, you are playing a character that is NOT you. So you are RPing in third person, as if it has already happened.
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