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 Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 10:17 am
I have edited Kye's talent, please re-evaluate
Username: Cobra_X
RPC Name: Oniwa,Kye
RPC Rank: Kage
Talent Description: "Chakra Prodigy" - When utilizing ninjutsu, Kye may choose between the use of one hand seals or simply a jutsu's incantation to initiate the techniques. (S-ranked techniques require both, an incantation and one-handed seals)
Talent Sacrifice: Kye only has one arm. This has drastically altered her life in a variety of ways, which for many years limited what she was capable of achieving and continues to limit her in many, despite the ways she has developed to overcome the missing limb.
How it happened: Born to a poor family in the Rice Country during a warring period, Kye was born with only one arm and has struggled to survive her entire life. The ability to control Iron Sand had always been within her, but had never manifested itself until triggered by an immense trauma in her life. After this event however, as she saw the iron Sand floating around her, seemingly without any instruction, Kye began to reach out to the sand, only to see it follow the movements of her hand. Initially, Kye had no idea what was happening, but over time, she found that she was capable of wielding the Iron Sand with great proficiency and developed the skill naturally.
After many years as a shinobi, Kye eventually realized that her innate ability to control Iron Sand had been drawing from her chakra the whole time. After further research, Kye realized that her chakra was uniquely linked to the electrical impulses of her brain, which allowed her to will techniques into being through means most ninja could not. Developing this ability further, she found that she could use her unique connection to her chakra to create shortcuts, enabling her to initiate her not only her Satetsu techniques, but also any ninjutsu, with just one-handed seals, or even by simply speaking the incantation of the technique itself.
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Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 10:59 am
Cobra_X I have edited Kye's talent, please re-evaluateUsername: Cobra_X
RPC Name: Oniwa,Kye
RPC Rank: Kage
Talent Description: "Chakra Prodigy" - When utilizing ninjutsu, Kye may choose between the use of one hand seals or simply a jutsu's incantation to initiate the techniques. (S-ranked techniques require both, an incantation and one-handed seals)
Talent Sacrifice: Kye only has one arm. This has drastically altered her life in a variety of ways, which for many years limited what she was capable of achieving and continues to limit her in many, despite the ways she has developed to overcome the missing limb.
How it happened: Born to a poor family in the Rice Country during a warring period, Kye was born with only one arm and has struggled to survive her entire life. The ability to control Iron Sand had always been within her, but had never manifested itself until triggered by an immense trauma in her life. After this event however, as she saw the iron Sand floating around her, seemingly without any instruction, Kye began to reach out to the sand, only to see it follow the movements of her hand. Initially, Kye had no idea what was happening, but over time, she found that she was capable of wielding the Iron Sand with great proficiency and developed the skill naturally.
After many years as a shinobi, Kye eventually realized that her innate ability to control Iron Sand had been drawing from her chakra the whole time. After further research, Kye realized that her chakra was uniquely linked to the electrical impulses of her brain, which allowed her to will techniques into being through means most ninja could not. Developing this ability further, she found that she could use her unique connection to her chakra to create shortcuts, enabling her to initiate her not only her Satetsu techniques, but also any ninjutsu, with just one-handed seals, or even by simply speaking the incantation of the technique itself.
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Posted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 3:45 pm
Username: Gregar828
RPC Name: Canas (Preliminary name, RPC does not exist yet)
RPC Rank: Chuunin/TBA
Bloodline/Clan/Demon:N/A
Profession: Medical
Ninja Types: Tactical/TBA
Talent Description: OCG (Obsessive Compulsive Genius) - Canas is a natural genius, with an estimated I.Q. of 183. He has an Idetic memory, gifting him with abilities like being able to recite an entire book word for word after reading it once, and remembering every detail of encounters that had happened years ago. Note: while he has the ability to remember everything he sees, its up to him to see it. Therefore, this ability does not give him the perception to see a trap about to be sprung, or something similar. This would give him the ability to memorize handseals by looking at them, unless he does not physically see the seals or the jutsu that follows.
Given enough time to analyze it, canas can reverse engineer any poison or technology, given that he has the materials required for it's creation. To do this, Canas must study the item up close for an extended time, which means he can't immediately copy something just because it was used by someone in a battle. In addition, if it is a poison or medicine, he must view it's effects on a person other than himself, who is affected normally by it.
Given the way his brain absorbs his surroundings, Canas is very adept at sensing genjutsu. He can recognize any non-fear inducing genjutsu (See Weakness) as a genjutsu. However, this does not mean he can always succeed using Kai to escape. If the genjutsu is too powerful, he will be forced to inflict harm to escape it.
Talent Sacrifice: Canas suffers from severe Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder. He cannot let even the most minute imperfections go without acting on them. This includes, but is not limited to, ensuring his workspace in the hospital is impeccably clean at all times, using the cleansing technique every time he has to pick up an object or shake a hand, reorganizing things in proper order, cleaning smudges on another shinobi's headband, and spending gold just so he has a round number on him at all times
An example of how extreme this is: Canas is chasing a thief through the city. The thief knocks over a bunch of woven baskets a vendor has on display. Canas will stop chasing, organize the baskets according to size and color, and then give chase.
As a result of all these compulsions, Canas also has mild anxiety issues. These are usually not a problem, except maybe jumping in fright when someone sneaks up on him. However, if he is trapped in a fear inducing genjutsu, his anxiety will take over, preventing him from reacting properly. As such, Canas cannot escape any fear inducing genjutsu, and requires assistance from another to break them, be it through Kai or damage.
Given his OCD and anxiety, Canas does not like to fight. When given the option, he will always choose to flee, or stay behind the front lines and issue commands. However, when push comes to shove, Canas will fight if he has to.
How it happened: No real story as to how it happened. Thats just how he is.
Gregar's Note: I understand the ambiguity that this talent implies, and I am more than willing to alter it.
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Posted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 6:44 pm
Please note that memorizing the hand seals doesn't give him any special learning advantage, such as the Hand Seal Mastery benefit. Recognizing the jutsu in use by the seals is fine, since a lot of people do that anyways (>.>), but sneaking an extra benefit through is not. (I know you're not trying to, but it does need to be noted clearly.)
The bit about studying tech and poisons needs a post count.
On the genjutsu, can he use this to, say, memorize an area and then, when affected by genjutsu such as "Sly Fellow Mind", ignore their effect because he doesn't need to see to know where he is? Actually, that one's a bad example since it screws with perception rather than sight. False Surroundings then.
Fun as it is, most of the weakness is more personality than actual sacrifice. I feel like it'd be good to expand a bit more on the genjutsu weakness. While it's established that he can recognize them, how about making it harder to escape? Say a, -1 penalty to resistance. Maybe remove the pain bit too. While it is established in the manga, we aren't Naruto, and it seems a bit OP to me to be able to, despite being weak to genjutsu, break free by biting your lip or something. It's an easy way out to avoid a weakness. And honestly I dunno why anyone would use kai with that option available, seeing as it's cheaper, as in, free.
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Posted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:35 pm
Username: Gregar828
RPC Name: Canas (Preliminary name, RPC does not exist yet)
RPC Rank: Chuunin/TBA
Bloodline/Clan/Demon:N/A
Profession: Medical
Ninja Types: Tactical/TBA
Talent Description: OCG (Obsessive Compulsive Genius) - Canas is a natural genius, with an estimated I.Q. of 183. He has an Idetic memory, gifting him with abilities like being able to recite an entire book word for word after reading it once, noticing even the smallest change in an area he's entered once before, and remembering every detail of encounters that had happened years ago. Note: while he has the ability to remember everything he sees, its up to him to see it. Therefore, this ability does not give him the perception to see a trap about to be sprung, or something similar. This would give him the ability to memorize handseals by looking at them, unless he does not physically see the seals or the jutsu that follows. This memorization ability does not grant any bonuses to learning jutsu.
Given enough time to analyze it, canas can reverse engineer any poison or technology, given that he has the materials required for it's creation. To do this, Canas must study the item up close for an extended time (At least 2 full posts), which means he can't immediately copy something just because it was used by someone in a battle. In addition, if it is a poison or medicine, he must view it's full effects on a person other than himself, from start to finish, who is affected normally by it. The poison reverse engineer may begin in battle, as long as half or more posts are observed in a controlled environment.
Given the way his brain absorbs his surroundings, Canas is very adept at sensing genjutsu. He can recognize any non-fear inducing genjutsu (See Weakness) as a genjutsu. However, this does not mean he can always succeed using Kai to escape. If the genjutsu is too powerful, he will be forced to inflict harm to escape it.
Talent Sacrifice: Canas suffers from severe Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder. He cannot let even the most minute imperfections go without acting on them. This includes, but is not limited to, ensuring his workspace in the hospital is impeccably clean at all times, using the cleansing technique every time he has to pick up an object or shake a hand, reorganizing things in proper order, cleaning smudges on another shinobi's headband, and spending gold just so he has a round number on him at all times
An example of how extreme this is: Canas is chasing a thief through the city. The thief knocks over a bunch of woven baskets a vendor has on display. Canas will stop chasing, organize the baskets according to size and color, and then give chase.
As a result of all these compulsions, Canas also has mild anxiety issues. These are usually not a problem, except maybe jumping in fright when someone sneaks up on him. However, if he is trapped in a fear inducing genjutsu, his anxiety will take over, preventing him from reacting properly. As such, Canas cannot escape any fear inducing genjutsu, and requires assistance from another to break them, be it through Kai or damage.
Given his OCD and anxiety, Canas does not like to fight. When given the option, he will always choose to flee, or stay behind the front lines and issue commands. However, when push comes to shove, Canas will fight if he has to.
How it happened: No real story as to how it happened. Thats just how he is.
Gregar's Note: Post counts added.
If he's caught in a genjutsu, he's caught in a genjutsu. Having prior knowledge of the area does not allow him to nullify it, though it would make the genjutsu even less convincing. Mentioning the memorization of an area has caused me to edit the first paragraph in benefits to accommodate his memorization of area.
Of course they're all personality. Does that make them any less of a weakness? No. Given the severity of his condition, Canas can barely function as a human, let alone a shinobi. The only reason people put up with him is his brilliant mind. And since his weakness is registered here in writing, its something I have to abide by, instead of doing some stupid cop-out when the weakness becomes inconvenient.
The whole point of talents is to get bonuses you can't get elsewhere, for costs you can't pay elsewhere. Are we limiting this to weaknesses with numbers, now? I hope not.
The genjutsu weakness? Expand on it? The rule is that, if a genjutsu invokes fear, he cannot do anything about it, even if he recognizes it as a genjutsu. His genius can recognize, but his anxiety prevents him from doing so at all.
Why would it make sense to make all genjutsu harder to escape from? His mind is able to recognize them, buthe must expend more chakra to escape? Doesn't make sense.
Biting your lip won't get you out of strong genjutsu. Its the sensation of pain overwhelming your other senses that does it, so a strong genjutsu would take a broken finger, or a kunai to the thigh. Besides, you only have so much lip to bit through.
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Posted: Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:26 pm
Username: Tarashi Takuri
RPC Name: Shinji Hozuki
RPC Rank: Genin
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Hozuki clan
Profession: Weapon Master
Ninja Types: Offensive,Ability Control
Talent Description: Sprite of the swordsman: Shin ancestors where known for their skill in swordsmanship. at a young age he took a strong liking to swords after growing up watching his elders in the hozuki islands with there mastery of swords. the only problem is that he was to young to begin his own sword training. Tho he never owned a sword himself he was quite fascinated with the art. Before leaving the hozuki islands he was blessed and granted the essence of his elders. with this blessing and there essence infused with his he would one day become a natural when it came to the learnings and teaching of swordplay ( +2 post to learning kenjutsu -Swordplay-)
Talent Sacrifice: due to his true nature Shin has a hard time learning ninjutsu and genjutsu. -2 post to each other than his bloodline ability's.
How it happened: blessing and ritual done by the island elders. predestined this young boy/man to become one of the greatest swordsman...no one of the greatest hozuki warriors who ever lived with proper training of course.
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Posted: Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:56 pm
Tarashi Takuri Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Hozuki clan Please complete your bloodline application before applying for anything else relating to the bloodline, such as talents, which even without any link to the bloodline must take it into consideration. As you're not yet approved for the bloodline, anyone judging anything else relating to it is just wasting their time if you're denied in the end, as are you by making the extra applications.
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Posted: Sun Mar 10, 2013 3:59 pm
Hinote Tosatsu Tarashi Takuri Bloodline/Clan/Demon: Hozuki clan Please complete your bloodline application before applying for anything else relating to the bloodline, such as talents, which even without any link to the bloodline must take it into consideration. As you're not yet approved for the bloodline, anyone judging anything else relating to it is just wasting their time if you're denied in the end, as are you by making the extra applications. tho i have already spoken to luo about it i dont mind applying ^_^ if its for your connivance that is
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Posted: Sun Mar 10, 2013 6:58 pm
Tarashi Takuri tho i have already spoken to luo about it i dont mind applying ^_^ if its for your connivance that is Side note: Please improve your spelling and grammar. We're a writing based group in a text based medium. Spelling and grammar is about the most important thing here. What did you talk to Luo about as applied to my previous statement? Your wording implies that you thought you didn't need to apply? Is that true, or am I mistaken? If it is the case, you certainly misunderstood something. While Luo has full rights to approve a bloodline application, even he can't give exemptions to that process. ~ Random note, while I originally thought it a typo, the meaning of "Connivance" has just been brought to my attention. "the act of conniving; especially : knowledge of and active or passive consent to wrongdoing" I'm going to continue to assume it was a typo, but just in case, no. My connivance will not be given that easily.
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Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 3:12 am
Hinote Tosatsu Tarashi Takuri tho i have already spoken to luo about it i dont mind applying ^_^ if its for your connivance that is Side note: Please improve your spelling and grammar. We're a writing based group in a text based medium. Spelling and grammar is about the most important thing here. What did you talk to Luo about as applied to my previous statement? Your wording implies that you thought you didn't need to apply? Is that true, or am I mistaken? If it is the case, you certainly misunderstood something. While Luo has full rights to approve a bloodline application, even he can't give exemptions to that process. ~ Random note, while I originally thought it a typo, the meaning of "Connivance" has just been brought to my attention. "the act of conniving; especially : knowledge of and active or passive consent to wrongdoing" I'm going to continue to assume it was a typo, but just in case, no. My connivance will not be given that easily. I sopke to lou about helping him recreate the entire Hozuki and Hatake bloodlines is all thought I was good to go with the bloodline is all ill make my corrections when I have the time and i also would like to apologies for my last little comment....i was a little out of it last night don't mean to come off as that kind of guy
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Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 3:56 am
Username: TheAppleStar
RPC Name: Amira Amane
RPC Rank: Genin [Not Yet Approved]
Clan: Bushin [Not Yet Approved]
Profession: Weapon Master
Ninja Types: Tactical Ninja, Ability Control [Kenjutsu]
Talent Description: Death Scythe: When using this certain type of Weapon, Amira gains +1 Rank in Strength/Kenjutsu (I'm not sure which one is applicable?) [stackable with any other bonuses received from clan/type/profession]. This bonus does not carry to anything that does not involve this specific type of Weapon. [Ninjutsu/Taijutsu/Kenjutsu with a sword etc]
Talent Sacrifice:
When using any type of blunt force Weapon [Tonfa/Club etc] Amira is penaltied a -1 Rank in Strength/Kenjutsu, -1 Rank in Reflex (Again, don't know which one is applicable) due to her being unused to the weaponry.
How it happened: From a young age, Amira has been drawn to the pole-arm type weaponry she had available to her. Practicing far more often with poles and scythes, she has neglected her study on blunt force weaponry and has come to suffer the consequences by being a little clumsy with them.
Adding in 2 penalties in order to gain the stack-ability for the +1 Rank to Strength/Kenjutsu
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Posted: Fri Mar 15, 2013 6:17 am
Username: Cobra_X
NPC Name: Mifune
NPC Rank: Chuunin
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: N/A
Profession: Sealing Master
Ninja Types: Combo / Summoner
Talent Description: Actor - Mifune is an accomplished actor, capable of fooling others into believing what he says. His mannerisms are believable and it is very difficult to catch him in a lie, as he is both clever in making you believe he is sincere and quick-witted in coming up with excuses. This makes Mifune a trusted individual as most everything he does and says seems sincere to others, and it makes it easier for him to mislead or lie to people without sparking any suspicion.
Talent Sacrifice: If Mifune is ever caught in a lie, it destroys his reputation for that person and they are likely never to trust him again. Seeing him in the lie, makes those who catch him aware that he is an actor, and thus, they are likely never to trust anything he says ever again.
How it happened: Mifune has 'played the part' his whole life and has taken part in many extracurricular acting jobs. Though he harbors hidden thoughts beneath, his natural abilities and his training allows him to bury it and hide it under the face he wants people to see.
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Posted: Fri Mar 15, 2013 8:07 am
Cobra_X Username: Cobra_X
NPC Name: Mifune
NPC Rank: Chuunin
Bloodline/Clan/Demon: N/A
Profession: Sealing Master
Ninja Types: Combo / Summoner
Talent Description: Actor - Mifune is an accomplished actor, capable of fooling others into believing what he says. His mannerisms are believable and it is very difficult to catch him in a lie, as he is both clever in making you believe he is sincere and quick-witted in coming up with excuses. This makes Mifune a trusted individual as most everything he does and says seems sincere to others, and it makes it easier for him to mislead or lie to people without sparking any suspicion.
Talent Sacrifice: If Mifune is ever caught in a lie, it destroys his reputation for that person and they are likely never to trust him again. Seeing him in the lie, makes those who catch him aware that he is an actor, and thus, they are likely never to trust anything he says ever again.
How it happened: Mifune has 'played the part' his whole life and has taken part in many extracurricular acting jobs. Though he harbors hidden thoughts beneath, his natural abilities and his training allows him to bury it and hide it under the face he wants people to see.
Simply put, this is a personality trait, not a talent. Like with Jade's pickpocketing talent, if this were approved it would be a free pass to claim the most wildly blatant lies or acts were perfect and undetectable. Likewise the sacrifice is impossible to govern, not only because it affects another character instead of your own (Which would be considered controlling another character, and never allowed.), but because it is again a personality aspect. This talent would be considered godmodding any time it was used if used in the context it's written.
And I think we both know you could pull it off without the talent if you tried.
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Posted: Fri Mar 15, 2013 8:11 am
TheAppleStar Username: TheAppleStar
RPC Name: Amira Amane
RPC Rank: Genin [Not Yet Approved]
Clan: Bushin [Not Yet Approved]
Profession: Weapon Master
Ninja Types: Tactical Ninja, Ability Control [Kenjutsu]
Talent Description: Death Scythe: When using this certain type of Weapon, Amira gains +1 Rank in Strength/Kenjutsu (I'm not sure which one is applicable?) [stackable with any other bonuses received from clan/type/profession]. This bonus does not carry to anything that does not involve this specific type of Weapon. [Ninjutsu/Taijutsu/Kenjutsu with a sword etc]
Talent Sacrifice:
When using any type of blunt force Weapon [Tonfa/Club etc] Amira is penaltied a -1 Rank in Strength/Kenjutsu, -1 Rank in Reflex (Again, don't know which one is applicable) due to her being unused to the weaponry.
How it happened: From a young age, Amira has been drawn to the pole-arm type weaponry she had available to her. Practicing far more often with poles and scythes, she has neglected her study on blunt force weaponry and has come to suffer the consequences by being a little clumsy with them.
Adding in 2 penalties in order to gain the stack-ability for the +1 Rank to Strength/Kenjutsu
Your bloodline already gives the same boost, while available (And possibly future) profession rank benefits give the same or similar boosts as well. I can't approve a talent that boosts a stat that is already boosted, or could be in future.
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Posted: Fri Mar 15, 2013 3:03 pm
Username: Kagetsukiko
Talent Description: Sora gains additional mastery over the lightning element, becoming able to control the lightning of her jutsu in any way she wishes. Possibilities include but are not limited to turning an originally inaccurate attack into something with amazing precision, concentrating a wide-ranged attack into one devastating blow, and turning an offensive attack into a defensive wall. Granted, the lightning must first be created--requiring a jutsu of some sort to be used in the first place--and it can only last for as long as it was originally intended. She can master her tertiary element, and can learn an additional sealing master rank benefit at S-rank.
Talent Sacrifice: Loses all profession learning bonuses. Additional +1 post penalty for learning tai/buki styles/techniques. Loses chuunin benefit. Primary element is raiton, effectively nullifying the Raijuu's element bonus.
How it happened: Unlike most shinobis and kunoichis, Sora was born to a peaceful civilian family. She had a caring mother and father that couldn't teach her the nuances of the shinobi/kunoichi life, the tactics and customs. She never had to learn the life of a ninja the hard way either. In a sense, her growth as a kunoichi in her early years was severely stunted. It was a blessing she shared the some element as the Raijuu, or else chances were that she'd never have learned an element in the first place. As it turned out, she actually gained enhanced control over her primary element, something only a prodigy would gain.
Although, her performance in other fields would show her as anything but a prodigy. She struggled to learn the martial arts. Even in her own profession, sealing, she needed to skip over her chuunin rank training just so that she wouldn't fall too far behind in everything else.
However, as she grew more experienced in the later years of her career, Sora's potential would show itself once more. By jounin she'd have a firm grasp on things, and by sannin she'd have completely caught up, perhaps even excelled her peers, by mastering both sannin profession benefits.
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