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 Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 4:24 pm
Lance Nightingale
recruit
bus
arrival
Lance had tuned around and was ready to speak when the D.I. walked in and began shouting. Lance promptly jumped up and saluted " This solder is Lance Nightingale sir,my height is 5'9", and my weight is 150 l/b sir" he shouted .He than jogged into line knowing that even though he did it right he was going to get yelled at.
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 5:29 pm
Kain-Navy Commander Marcus (aka: ghost) Marine 141 Bus Arrival marcus simply stood there emotionless while the D.I. was shouting at him, and once the D.I. told him to get in line, Marcus simply gave a salute and went to join the others, while saying under his breath "theres nothing much you can do to me that hsn't already casued me so much pain" ((Ehh... If you can post all of your stuff in a word document, spell check it, and then post it on gaia before you post it, OR get firefox, which is an internet browsing program that allows you to spell check without having to have microsoft word up... you pass! blaugh ))
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 5:53 pm
((so i take it then that i can sign up for marksman before signing up for the marines?))
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 6:50 pm
Kain-Navy Commander ((so i take it then that i can sign up for marksman before signing up for the marines?)) ((Err yes. whee ))
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 6:53 pm
Lance Asguard Lance Nightingale recruit bus arrival Lance had tuned around and was ready to speak when the D.I. walked in and began shouting. Lance promptly jumped up and saluted " This solder is Lance Nightingale sir,my height is 5'9", and my weight is 150 l/b sir" he shouted .He than jogged into line knowing that even though he did it right he was going to get yelled at.
Military D.I's
Bus
Arrival
A small grin stretched over the face of the DI; he could reprimand. "Really? I didn't know that they stacked that high. Your a heavy piece of s**t aren't you? That's good, why don't you stand in line like the rest of pieces of s**t here and wait for some orders."The drill sergeant barked and spat as he spoke, a blue vein trembling in the upper right corner of his forehead, almost like it was about ready to explode and gush torrents of blood all over the new recruit, mercilessly. T
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 8:07 pm
Suicidesoldier#1 Commnader Crowbar Grant Luxem
Navy
Bus
ArrivalWonderful, thought Grant as he sat at the back of the bus, leaning his head back against the wall, getting banged around by the jostling movements of the poor suspension system. He had applied for the Navy late in senior year of college, and had been all too happy to get out of his house. His psychotic brother had been trying to kill him for years now, and his parents had done almost completely ignored it. He had researched military recruitment, and despite the challenges listed, he new it was better than living with a psycho brother and ignorant parents. As the bus rolled to a stop, he sighed and shouldered his bag. before he could stand up to get off, however, a barrel-chested man thundered up the steps and stopped immediately next to the driver. Instantly all chatter on the bus stopped. Not even the flies buzzed, out of sheer universal terror. Everyone knew who this man was. Everyone knew him as the Drill Sergeant. ((Um... Decent Grammar, Decent Spelling, Good sentence Structure. Over-all it was pretty good and you didn't break the Amp. It was a little short but, your entire set-up was nice, and I give you Kudo's for your back story; pretty original. I bet you were expecting me to talk to you in Character so I understand part of why you did something that I won't tell you... ninja Anyways, congratulations, you passed! blaugh )) ((My dialogue skills aren't very good for other people, especially people like D.S.s. And I wasn't supposed to try to leave, was I?))
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 8:19 pm
Lance Nightingale
recruit
bus
arrival
"sir yes'sir"Lance said and sighed to him self as he stepped in line, holding his duffel over his shoulder. as he waited he had the feeling this was going to be hell and more. although lance weight 150 pounds he was actually well built for his height but he wasn't a twig he dared not say it a loud.
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 8:55 pm
Lance Asguard Lance Nightingale
recruit
bus
arrival "sir yes'sir"Lance said and sighed to him self as he stepped in line, holding his duffel over his shoulder. as he waited he had the feeling this was going to be hell and more. although lance weight 150 pounds he was actually well built for his height but he wasn't a twig he dared not say it a loud. ((Mhhm, good job so far! Post a little bit more about a mental problem going around in your head- roughly a paragraph or two long. I want to see MORE of your writing. That's the primary goal here. blaugh ))
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 10:00 pm
WHAT NOT TO DO.
Ken Army Bus Arrival Ken sighed as he look at the window.He then was wondering what would happen if he ever shot the captain.After he was thinking he went out of the bus.He was sure late.He then look at the soldiers marching.Ken went to the drill leader.''Sir my name is ken and I am size 6'7''.While the drill leader was about to speak.Ken began to march with the other soldiers.Ken was about to be in the first lead but he didn't wanted to show off.So he went in order by size.Of course nobody knew that he was a agent in the swat force.
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Posted: Sun Jan 24, 2010 10:31 pm
WHAT NOT TO DO.
cool_guy887 Ken Army Bus Arrival Ken sighed as he look at the window.He then was wondering what would happen if he ever shot the captain.After he was thinking he went out of the bus.He was sure late.He then look at the soldiers marching.Ken went to the drill leader.''Sir my name is ken and I am size 6'7''.While the drill leader was about to speak.Ken began to march with the other soldiers.Ken was about to be in the first lead but he didn't wanted to show off.So he went in order by size.Of course nobody knew that he was a agent in the swat force.((Your size 6'7? What the hell does that mean? confused Also, being an Agent in the Swat Force, like wtf? Also, nobody gets in order by 'size'. Also, your on a bus; you haven't gotten off yet, and nobody has talked to you. Quote: He then was wondering what would happen if he ever shot the captain. Uh-huh. You did EVERYTHING wrong in that post; except your spelling was good. You've goddmodded several times. Make sure you go and read the AMP, thoroughly. Multiple times if you have to. Then, actually do what it says and apply that to your roleplays. Sound simple enough? Let's hope so! blaugh ))
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Posted: Mon Jan 25, 2010 6:48 am
@suicide soldier: ((yay thanks hahah sorry i have to go early, work night XP so i can have advance training even as a tank commander right?))
"y-yessir I will sir" And Harry snapped out a sloppy salute as He's shaken by the near grilling he almost recieved from the large sergeant.
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Posted: Mon Jan 25, 2010 1:30 pm
Suicidesoldier#1 Lance Asguard Lance Nightingale
recruit
bus
arrival "sir yes'sir"Lance said and sighed to him self as he stepped in line, holding his duffel over his shoulder. as he waited he had the feeling this was going to be hell and more. although lance weight 150 pounds he was actually well built for his height but he wasn't a twig he dared not say it a loud. ((Mhhm, good job so far! Post a little bit more about a mental problem going around in your head- roughly a paragraph or two long. I want to see MORE of your writing. That's the primary goal here. blaugh )) [um well okay... but i ran out of stuff to post so ... ]
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Posted: Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:07 pm
Nutiket Fields
Army
Bus
Arrival
The ground was covered in a thick layer of snow and ice. The side of the bus was cold but comfortable; Nutiket woke up from a short nap. "Hey, buddy get up. We are here," the recruit sitting next to him shook him awake. Nutiket sat up rubbing his eyes. the bus slowly crept up to the gates. everyone practically ran off the bus, with the sack on his back cutting into his shoulder he stood at attention. The Icey rain started back up, "Where is that instructor," he thought to himself as he was pelted with rain. The wind was howling and everyon was soaked. "What the hell have I gotten myself into..." Nutiket thought to himself as a man he thought was an instructor stood in front of them.
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Posted: Mon Jan 25, 2010 4:22 pm
assassin9280 Nutiket Fields
Army
Bus
ArrivalThe ground was covered in a thick layer of snow and ice. The side of the bus was cold but comfortable; Nutiket woke up from a short nap. "Hey, buddy get up. We are here," the recruit sitting next to him shook him awake. Nutiket sat up rubbing his eyes. the bus slowly crept up to the gates. everyone practically ran off the bus, with the sack on his back cutting into his shoulder he stood at attention. The Icey rain started back up, "Where is that instructor," he thought to himself as he was pelted with rain. The wind was howling and everyon was soaked. "What the hell have I gotten myself into..." Nutiket thought to himself as a man he thought was an instructor stood in front of them. ((Mhhm. Well, your spelling, sentence structure and grammar were all alright. You however, goddmodded a number of times. For instance, you speechacked; although your speedhacks are what I'm primarily concerned about. Essentially, you Controlled everyone on the bus (which is presumably other people) you controlled the weather, you can controlled what the weather did to people, and you controlled the gear and armor of all the people. Please go search up the AMP and read it. Thank you! blaugh ))
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Posted: Mon Jan 25, 2010 6:31 pm
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