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 Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 3:56 pm
Shigaiko Taka: But that's exactly how Zae and IHD do it. o.O
To note, Zae and IHD write they're updates like so: Jail update
Sniper and CK update
Inactivity update
Status (ie: Gonk has been jailed, Talk2hand has been shot, Mr. Green has been killed, and pirate has been removed due to inactivity)
I should know, I had to archive every update that has been made in the game 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:01 pm
Shigaiko @.@; Owww. -reading applications- These are hard to read. Most of these lack proper structure (paragraphs make the world go 'round), and reuse overplayed references. Surely there's something more of hilarity worth mentioning?
Another lacking thing I'm noticing is description. PEOPLE TALK. People think, people feel, embrace... emotions. They make the story far more interesting!
I haven't read all of the apps; just my $0.02 for any hopefuls here. sweatdrop
XD I talk in mine?
Yours has a little... too much spacing. @w@
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:13 pm
 {{Her dreams went out the door, when she turned twentyfour--}}Opal: I liked your update, but I really don't think it's a good idea to tell everyone that you don't think you'd make a good GM or that you tend to forget things. People aren't going to want you to forget to update, yes? And of course they want a good GM.
Obviously you think you'd be a good one if you tried out-- so why tell everyone you wouldn't be?
{{She was gonna be an actress, she was gonna be a star...}}
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:13 pm
Hirun. Go to Zae's house. There's a parteh! o:
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:15 pm
kenshin/Hirun: Paragraphs are when you split a line into a new one. Zae and IHD both did this a lot as well. o.O
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:20 pm
Shigaiko kenshin/Hirun: Paragraphs are when you split a line into a new one. Zae and IHD both did this a lot as well. o.O
I know what a paragraph is, for fictionalchristiandeity's sake, Im in 9th grade! I was just giving an example of they're standard update style, and advertising of my Application at the same time ninja
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:24 pm
kenshinsg Shigaiko kenshin/Hirun: Paragraphs are when you split a line into a new one. Zae and IHD both did this a lot as well. o.O
I know what a paragraph is, for fictionalchristiandeity's sake, Im in 9th grade! I was just giving an example of they're standard update style, and advertising of my Application at the same time ninja {{Her dreams went out the door, when she turned twentyfour--}} I'm in like... 15th grade! biggrin
{{She was gonna be an actress, she was gonna be a star...}}
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 4:53 pm
So, thats like your fourth year of collage?
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:00 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:07 pm
Shigaiko kenshin/Hirun: Paragraphs are when you split a line into a new one. Zae and IHD both did this a lot as well. o.O
o3o I did that.
But I mean you have LOTS of Paragraphs, and not a lot of content.
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:12 pm
I made mine a poem. I was so bored waiting for five o'clock that I started making morbid rhymes in my head, and then decided that if I was to be GM I would make the updates poetry.
I feel so suspicious special.
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:14 pm
kenshinsg So, thats like your fourth year of collage? {{Her dreams went out the door, when she turned twentyfour--}} XD No, I graduated college in 2005. I've been out of highschool since 2004, but I was on the five yer plan, so I would be in whatever grade I said I would have been in <3
{{She was gonna be an actress, she was gonna be a star...}}
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:23 pm
Hirun: I mean not having a paragraph after every 5-8 lines of text, that's far too difficult to read. sweatdrop
kenshin: I know, sorry. XP Wasn't sure if you understand what I meant. Plus, there's always the summary at the end ("____ was shot, ___ was jailed, etc.") at the end.
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 5:57 pm
Shigaiko Hirun: I mean not having a paragraph after every 5-8 lines of text, that's far too difficult to read. sweatdrop
kenshin: I know, sorry. XP Wasn't sure if you understand what I meant. Plus, there's always the summary at the end ("____ was shot, ___ was jailed, etc.") at the end.
I had that, i listed it as status. The exact is :Status (ie: Gonk has been jailed, Talk2hand has been shot, Mr. Green has been killed, and pirate has been removed due to inactivity)
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 6:23 pm
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