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Rene Miashi

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PostPosted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 2:09 pm


This is the first original story that I have writen. It's about a young woman named Renee and her neighhbor Alli Walker being dragged into the world of their past and forced to deal with troubles of a fallen empire. Here is the first chapter and I hope you all enjoy.


Silent Nights


Night is a very strange thing… Don’t you think? Stars brightly lit and the air misty… It’s almost like a dream…

“I know we weren’t meant for each other… but I just can’t help thinking about him,” A young woman said to her friend as she made her way down the sidewalk, a cell phone glued to her ear. The cold night wind played with her loose white skirt, tossing it from side to side.

“Oh come on! You big sissy! Get over that jerk! He doesn’t deserve you and you know that! C'mon Renee! ” A woman’s voice screeched from the speaker.

“I know! I know already it’s just… He’s got a 24 pack!” Renee said in protest. A dreamy look passed her eyes as she imagined the heavenly sight.

“A 24… You are such a dunce! It’s a 6 pack!” The speaker blared loudly in Renee’s ear quickly snapping her back to reality.

“I know but it’s so hot! And he wears Axe! It just smells so good and he looks so good… Almost like Garlic Bread!” Renee said with a happy smile.

“Oh my god! You truly are an idiot!”

“I know. I know. I just can’t get over his… Yumminess!” Renee squealed.

“That’s it. I’ll talk to you once you get over your happiness! Call me tomorrow 'k?”

“Alrighty!” Renee said merrily as she flipped the cell phone shut and jammed it into her pocket. As she continued down the street, she hugged her jean jacket closer to her body. Chills crept up her legs as the night wind blew harder, making it hard not to shiver. Looking around curiously for any sign of a person, she sighed merrily.(<-Oxymoron?) No one.

Quickly picking up her feet, she moved faster towards her destination; Home. Something was wrong tonight; it felt like she was being watched. She had walked this street at night who knows how many times but it never felt like this. She could sense it. Someone was near…but whom?

“I think I’m getting paranoid.” She mumbled as she noticed her boots were clacking on the sidewalk. Slowing down a bit, her steps became silent. But something else became noticeable. The whistle of wind was blowing about her. The shadows grew and the shivers running through her bare legs crept up to her spine.

“I feel like a kid again… afraid of the dark and all.” She said loudly to reassure herself that nothing was wrong. But her words did nothing to lift the tall shadow creeping up upon her.

“Yo! Renee!” A familiar squeal shot through Renee’s ears as her younger friend bounded towards her. Renee sighed happily and quickened her pace to meet the youngster. (something is wrong here...can't quite put my finger on it...)(What did Renee say?) (I fixed it ^_^U)The shadow on her back faded into the surrounding scenery.

“Hey squirt!” Renee said as she lifted the five year-old into the air. The little girl giggled as she was tossed into the air and captured by Renee’s hug. “What are you doing out so late?”

“Who me? I’m always up at this time!” The little girl said cheerfully as she squirmed in Renee’s grasp.

“Really now? Sneaking out while the parents are sleeping?” Renee said teasingly.

“Of course not! They’ve been up all night drinking that funny smelling stuff!” Renee froze and lightly put the girl down onto her feet.

“Well since your parents are busy I’m sure they wouldn’t mind if you spent the night over at my house again. Right?” Renee said with a false smile. It was easy to figure out why she was out so late. Alli usually came over to Renee’s house when her parents were drunk. Alli being so young and naïve didn’t understand what was going on but she wasn’t so stupid to hang around when her parents started drinking the “funny smelling stuff”.

“Yay! Sleep over! That’s the third one this week!” Alli said overly joyful. Renee smiled and took Alli’s hand.

C'mon squirt. Let’s go get you tucked in. You have school tomorrow! You don’t want to be falling asleep before its lunch now do you?” Renee said as she led the bouncing girl towards her house.

“Alright! Can I have some milk when we get there?” Alli said almost pleadingly as she looked up at Renee with big round eyes.

“Of course! How are you to get to sleep with out it?”

“You can have some too! I bet you can’t sleep with out it!” Alli said as her house started to come into view. Renee looked up to the large grey house. Through the closed window, Renee could see what was going on, a fight. Quickly scooping Alli up in her arms, she hurried past the house. Alli was completely oblivious to what was going on, that was a good thing.

“Want me to take you to school tomorrow? We can take my new Cooper!” Renee said drawing Alli’s attention off a flowerbed they were passing. Alli Gasped.

“Really! That would be so cool! I love that car!” Alli squealed. Renee laughed then nodded.

“Of course! I’ll take you there and you can have a break from the bus!” Renee smiled at the squirt, which was shaking with anticipation.

“Yay!” Renee laughed. She loved making the squirt happy. Slowly a large white mailbox appeared on the side of the road. Next to it, a concrete driveway lay black by a pair of large black bared gates. Walking over to the mailbox, she flipped open a box cover to reveal a number pad. Typing in the four-digit number, she flipped the box shut and the large black gate creaked open a few feet. Briskly walking through, the gate closed behind her. Hefting Alli up a bit higher, she continued down the long driveway. After a minute of walking in silence, they finally arrived at Renee’s house. Walking up to the front step Renee set Alli on her feet and pulled a house key from her pocket. Shoving it into the doorknob she turned it and shoved the door open. Holding it open for Alli who walked through immediately, she grinned and walked in herself.

“Well you know where the kitchen is. Go ahead and pull the milk out. I’ll be there in a second.” Renee said as she walked into the other room. Alli nodded and headed for the kitchen.

Walking slowly over to the mantle of the fireplace Renee placed a hand on the picture frame infront of her. “Hey mum… hey dad… I’m doing what you told me to do… so please rest in peace. I’ll make sure nothing happens to her. Just like I do every day…”

“Renee! There’s something wrong with the fridge!” Alli’s voice rang from the kitchen. Renee turned to look in the direction then rushed to Alli’s side.

“What’s wrong? It looks fine to me…” Renee said as she took a knee next to the five year-old.

“I can’t open it! It’s like a suction cup” Alli complained looking up at Renee with innocent eyes.

“Oh! Well that could be a problem.” Standing up Renee looked at the door acting like she was sizing it up. After a second of staring down the door she grabbed the handle and easily heaved it open.

“Whew! That was hard.” Renee said as she grabbed the jug of milk and closed the fridge. “Let's get you some milk for strong bones!” Alli giggled then dashed over to the microwave. Renee chuckled then followed her. Reaching up into the cupboard beside the microwave she pulled out two glasses and filled them with milk.

Opening the microwave door she put the glasses in and set the timer for 20 seconds. Smiling down at Alli she put the milk away and pulled the 2 glasses out of the beeping microwave.

“Mmm! It smells good!” Alli said as she curiously peered up at Renee. Renee grinned.

“Of course that’s what it's supposed to do! Smell and taste good!” She said as she shooed Alli along. Alli giggled and ran around the corner towards the double staircase. Renee sighed and followed her towards the rooms. Up the stairs they went and around the corner into the hallway. Alli already at the door to the bedroom, quietly pushed it open and trampled into the room. Renee shook her head. What a cutie Alli was, so naïve and innocent. She was lucky to not have experienced the world as it really was. As Renee walked through the door Alli had already changed into a nightgown and was sitting on the bed waiting patiently for Renee.

“Well that sure was fast.” Renee said with a laugh as she set the two glasses of milk onto the nightstand.

“I was in a hurry! Milk is my favorite drink!”

‘That’s good.’ Renee thought with a silent sigh. Her parents were drinkers. If it wasn’t already obvious by the fights they had late at night and the occasional peeling coming from the car tires in their driveway. Renee pulled the covers away from the pillows, letting Alli slip into the soft sheets.

“Well cheers.” Renee said as she handed Alli her glass. Alli smiled and drank her milk slowly. Renee followed Alli’s example and chugged her milk. Seconds later Renee put her glass down and walked over to the window.

“What are you doing Renee?” Alli asked taking a second from her milk drinking to look up.

“I was going to close the drapes. Or do you want them open?” Renee said as she started to fiddle with the curtain ties.

“Open please. When I can see the stars I dream of dancing!” Alli said excitedly as she finished her milk and set it down next to Renee’s. Renee smiled and nodded. Walking back over to the bed she crawled over to Alli and sat down beside her.

“So what story would you like tonight?” Renee said as she looped an arm around Alli’s shoulders. Alli voluntarily leaned into Renee’s warmth and rested her head on Renee's shoulder.

“How about… The One from Mar Heaven!”

“Alrighty. I knew you would want to hear that one. Let’s see… Once upon a time in Mar Heaven there was a princess of great beauty…”

About half way through the story, Alli had fallen asleep. Her chest moved in rhythm to her steady breaths. Renee stopped telling her story to peer down at the sleeping Alli. Smiling softly she lifted Alli from her side and laid her down lightly on the bed. Pulling the covers to Alli’s chin she quickly climbed off the bed and walked to the door. Looking back at Alli, she grinned.

“Sweet dreams squirt.”

Backing out the door Renee silently shut it. With a click she left the door and wandered towards the balcony. Pushing one of the double glass doors open she walked out onto the windy midnight air. Stopping at the railing she sighed and slouched over it tiredly.

End Chapter 1


So, what you all think? Comments, corrections, and whatever are welcome and wanted.

**this post edited by Bomber319 for spelling and grammar** blaugh
**this post was edited a second time, by Aurelia Cane, for minor spelling and some grammatical errors. Second edits are in blue.** blaugh
PostPosted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 8:48 pm


very good...i like it so far and would love to see how it turns out. i edited it for grammar and spelling so take note of what is highlighted in red. Aurelia Cane may run threw the corrections i have made and make further corrections at which point i may make the final corrections. but besides the minor grammatical errors it is very well written and a piece i am glad to say that i would like to see-through the entire process until it is complete. feel free to send stuff to me or Aurelia to leaf through and make corrections, or better yet links to posts that you want edited.

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 1:56 pm


I like the story so far. There were only a few minor errors that had gotten passed up the first time, so those were corrected. Please do feel free to ask us about the corrections we made, and why. We'd have no problems explaining them. 4laugh
PostPosted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 7:22 pm


Chapter 2


“Renee?” Alli asked as she sat up in bed. “Renee? It’s morning…” The young Alli peered around her room with a confused look. Quickly shoving the blanket off her lap she slipped off the bed and landed with a quiet thud on the floor. Walking to the bedroom door, she pushed it open. A soft gust of wind blew past her causing a small whimper to emit from her lips. Hugging her nightgown closer to her body, she slowly made her way down the hall.

“Renee? Where are you?” Alli looked at the shadows on the wall with fear. Shadows always scared her…

“Alli?” Alli looked around wildly searching for Renee. She had heard her voice… Where did it come from?

“Renee?! Where are you?” Alli shouted hoping to get a reply. Suddenly Alli was scooped up from behind.

“Yo.” Renee greeted as she gave Alli a good morning hug. “What are you doing up so early?” Alli sighed in relief.

“I thought you had left! I couldn’t find you. And it’s already light out!” Alli said in panic. Renee laughed.

“It’s only 7 AM. School starts at 10. I was gonna let you sleep for another couple hours. But I guess not.” Renee shrugged passively. Setting Alli down Renee smiled. “Common. I’ll get you something to eat.” She said with a familiar smile.

“Okay. Thanks.” Alli said happily. Renee looked down at Alli and smiled.

“No problem.” Turning to the stairs Renee made her way down quickly while Alli tagged along at her own pace. As Renee disappeared around the corner, an ear-piercing scream came from her throat as she was suddenly yanked into the hallway. Before Alli could get a chance to turn and run the ground beneath her gave way. Slowly she fell back no sound coming from her shocked body. Not a word.


“Mmm…” A weak grumble vibrated through Renee’s throat as her body started to beckon her to move. Weakly opening her eyes, she could barely make out the figure infront of her. “Huh?” Slowly her senses kicked in. Pain seeped into her mind as she realized where she was. Her surroundings… her bound wrists… the cold cuff around her neck… the things around her. But her attention was taken by the figure in the doorway. Light seemed to glow about them as they took a step forward. Slowly pushing her self up to sit, she stared up at the figure infront of her.

“You. Move it.” Suddenly the collar on her neck yanked her forward causing her to fall on her face. “Get up human!” A sharp pain in her side suddenly showed it’s self as a hard boot dug it’s way into her bruised side. Renee winced but did as they said. Quickly but painfully, she clambered to her feet. Just as soon as she found her balance, she was again dragged forward.

“Ow…” She whimpered as she was pulled out of the chamber. The heavy steel door closed behind her with a creaking bang and before she could realize what was going on, she was dragged forward through the hallway.

Stumbling over the rough stone below her feet, she whimpered. Her side hurt incredibly bad. She could only guess she had a broken rib or two. Suddenly the guard stopped and Renee accidentally bumped into him. Before she could say sorry she fell back onto the floor, her cheek seemed to burn with the impression of the guard’s hand.

“Watch where you are going human.” He said in a gruffly accented voice. Renee quickly climbed back onto her feet. Now that she had time to look around while the two men talked she first looked down to her ribs. Her eyes widened a bit as she realized she wasn’t in her pajamas any more. Instead, she was in a slightly torn bikini with a skirt like cloth attached to it that was barely long enough to cover her butt. Her top only consisted of a loosely tied string bikini that wasn’t even tied at the top. The only thing that was keeping it on was the metal collar around her neck that had some of the fabric caught between it and her skin. Before she got a real chance to observe the damages to her body, she was roughly yanked onward again.

Trudging on, Renee finally got a hold of her self and started walking smoothly so her side would quit throbbing as painfully. After a moment of walking, they stopped at the end of a dark corridor with a steel door infront of them. The guard yanked her forward smashing her good side into the wall. The heavy collar on her neck was starting to rub her skin raw. ‘Oh well,’ she thought. It just another injury to add onto the long list of bruises that spotted her skin.

The guard paid no heed to her actions as he quietly pulled the heavy steel door open a few inches. Almost instantly a blinding light erupted from the crack and the guard dropped to the floor taking the chain down with him. Renee being attached to the other end of the chain was forced to take a knee. Sighing painfully, she tried to pull the chain from the dead guard’s hand. But alas, she couldn’t even get it to budge.

“Ahem.” A mans deep voice came from a pair of shoes that has appeared infront of her. Trying to look up she was stopped by the chain. A large hand suddenly appeared and yanked the heavy chain from the dead guard’s hand. Not really wanting to get yanked around Renee stood up before the chain was taunt. She timidly looked up at him and almost gasped. Quickly averting her eyes she stared at the stone floor, a faint blush tinting her cheeks.

“She’s been damaged sir.” The man holding her chain replied.

“What?” The man’s voice boomed making her jump a little. A loud clanking noise came from the hallway behind her.

“My lord!” A man in silver armor stopped and bowed his head to the two men.

“What is it?” The man boomed again his voice dripping with aggravation.

“The human girl has escaped!” The man said with wide eyes, he was slightly startled by the man’s anger with him. Renee turned and glared at him also pissed off.

“She’s right here you fool!” The wide-eyed man turned to Renee and started at her for a second. He looked her up and down with wide eyes not believing she was the human girl who had been in the dungeon just minutes ago. “Go before I decide to punish you!” The man nodded and quickly left.

“Now tell me why she has been damaged?” The man said his voice muffled by gritted teeth.

“On her way down she was caught by one of the Dark Lord’s minions. He almost had his way with her but we managed to get to him before that happened.” Another man said as he approached from behind Renee.

“And how did that happen? I thought the tunnel was safe.”

“It was, until we went chasing after an escaped convict into the Dark Lord’s territory.” The man said as he place an armored hand on Renee’s shoulder. Curiously, Renee lifted her eyes to look at his face. She couldn’t tell much about him other then his dark chocolate eyes and Silvery armor covered him head to toe giving him the appearance that he had just been in battle.

The metal man’s eyes moved to look back at her. Renee stared up at him for as long as her burning cheeks would let her then swung her head down to look back at the ground.

“And you-“

“Now, now Van. Calm down. Kotaishi* won’t mind too much if his present has a few injuries. She only has a few bruises.” The chocolate eyed man said with a grin.

“Actually she has a few broken ribs too.” The man holding her chain added with a nodd.

“That too.”

“Kotaishi will want her healed by tonight.” Van grumbled, obviously beaten.

“He can see her now.”

“Kyo…” Van said warningly.

“What? If he knows what she went through he’ll be impressed by her tolerance.” Kyo said taking his hand from Renee’s shoulder and using it to pull his helmet off. “She’s especially gifted for a human female.”

“And just what to you mean…” Van’s voice trailed off as his eyes roamed over Renee’s slick tanned body. A tight ripped bikini was the only thing keeping his eyes from seeing what any man would want. He took special notice of the two tents in the fabric of her bikini top. She was probably just cold but it was still just enough to turn any guy on… Oh yeah. He knew what Kyo was talking about as his eyes trailed down the rest of her trim body.

“Yeah. That’s what I mean.” Kyo said with a devilish smirk. Slowly Renee realized the main strap of her bikini was becoming a lot tighter under her breasts…

SNAP!!!

“God d**n it!” Renee cried as she snapped up straight a pained look on her face.

“See?” Kyo said chuckling. Rene turned to glare at Kyo only making him laugh louder. A sudden yank on Renee’s chain sent her spinning into Van’s chest. She looked down at his hand and saw her chain.

“Time to meet your master.” He said in a dead tone that sent shivers running up and down her spine.

“Huh?” Renee mumbled slightly confused. Before she got to ask him anything else, she was pushed roughly through the doorway.

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*Kotaishi literally means Crown Prince.

I'm sorry if it's a little confusing at the moment. What's going on will be explained in the next few chapters. Anyway Comments, Questions, and sudgestions are welcome and appreciated. Especially since I have trouble reviewing my own work. sweatdrop

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