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[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:44 pm


Questor Information
Username: [-Darcy-]
Mule SN's: None
IoDM Newbie? (Y/N): Yus ^^
Serum: Serum 54, South American Coati
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IoDM (c) Chibi Hige, Kamiki, Sabin Duvert, Sirenz and all those awesome folks
Artemus Jaeger (c) ME!
All art (c) their respective artists
PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:45 pm


-Outside View-


Name: Artemus Jaeger
Gender: Male
Age: 29
Birth date: September 25th
Sexuality: Homosexual
Ethnicity: Half Irish, Quarters German and Greek
Nationality: American
Lived in: Chicago, IL
Occupation: Lawyer
Languages: English, German, Greek
Voice: Confident low tenor

User Image Height: 5'10"
Weight: 178 pounds
Build: Medium, muscled but not overly so
Skin Color: Between fair to medium
Eyes: Milky blind eyes. Normally covered with sunglasses.
Hair: Pale blond. Longish. Stark straight.

Clothes Upon Arrival When Artemus 'shipwrecks' on the island, he'll be wearing a dark blue sport coat with dark blue jeans, which are ripped up in a few places. He'll have a white collared shirt underneath that (his Braille 'tags' were probably confused with his black collared shirt). He'll have on a black belt with his ebony cane stuck through it. He'll be wearing black dress shoes with (unseen) black socks.

He also has on a Braille watch. He'll probably have his sunglasses sticking out of his pocket, if his 'picture' happens immediately after he's 'rescued'. If not, he'll be wearing them. Also, if it's not immediately after, the cane will be out too. His body will have recent scratches and bruises. He has an old scar across his nose that's level with where his pupils would be, normally covered by the sunglasses.

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:47 pm


-Dig a bit deeper-


Personality: He seems to be a cross between a workaholic and a social guy. He handles the major cases at his and his brother's small company and normally stays up all night just trying to find something to prove his client is innocent (or that the other is guilty). Or he spends the day and night with some of his close friends, trying to avoid work.

He has a strong view of good and bad, though he looks at the end result instead of the steps along the way (Yaknow 'The end justifies the means'). He's generally a bit shy of people he doesn't know but will warm up to you if he finds he likes you, but he will never make the first move for a romantic situation. Otherwise he is a rather easy going guy. Despite his strong views of good and bad, he's normally fair minded and will make his decision once he hears everything.

He enjoys any form of mind puzzles (since he can't do real ones anymore, as easily), and is rather flat out, hating to put mind tricks into social situations. He's flexible-minded (except when he's trying to do something or prove something, at which times he is as stubborn as a mule) though he is indecisive for many things that can't be labeled good or bad. He's a bit resentful and constantly doubts himself but is far from self-pitying.

He's a deep sleeper and is irritated in the morning. He has an incredibly long amount of patience except during said irritation times. He's absolutely loves his family. From grandparents to his cousin's kids, the yearly family reunions are one of his favorites.

Since he doesn't want to get fat, he often goes to the gym three times a week with his brother. He'll likely ask for more comfortable clothes on the island (shorts and shirts instead of his current clothing).

Likes: Mind puzzles, his job, challenges, strawberries, his friends, coffee, story telling
Dislikes: People treating him like a nit wit, being incapable (or being treated like he's incapable), people stating the obvious, being incredibly dirty, tripping, dishonesty, audio books (though he does listen to them often), bugs

Skills: 'Picking up' languages, finding details, determining things from voice tones
Hobbies: Languages, reading braille (or moon type) books
PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:48 pm


-Before-


History
Artemus was born blind to an Irish woman and a half-German-half-Greek man, along with his brother, Theodore. His brother, younger technically by a day, but really only 5 minutes, and him were very close. Family was important to their everyday lives and it was rare to go one week without seeing a relative.

Artemus' blindness never truly bothered him. He was a bright lad and able to figure out through his other senses what the world around him 'looked' like. His brother was helpful as a 'guide dog' whenever he needed one. THe fact that he was named after the Greek goddess of the moon was not lost on him and when he asked his father, the response was 'Well, your mother said when you were born, your eyes looked like how she imagined the moon. We couldn't name you Moon so we took the next best thing'.

When he and Theo were seven, their parents, Aoife and Matthias, had another child, named Erica. Erica wasn't that big of a change to he and Theo, except for the fact she was rather odd and squishy looking/feeling.

He, unsurprisingly, grew older and was still theoretically attached to Theo as the elbow, despite that fact it was firmly decided he was attracted to other men. Theo didn't care nor mind and they grew closer because of the differences.

When Theo expressed an interest in law school, Arti thought about it and it appealed to him. They joined law school together and planned on making a firm together. Arti was a deeper thinker so it was decided he would take on the hard cases (meaning harder to prove the point and make the jury happy) while Theo took on the cases that were relatively easy. So the twins admissioned and made it into Yale.

They graduated and passed their bar test at the age of 22 and both were quickly hired into a large firm. He had short term relationships and his brother's were even shorter, though more numerous.



When he was 26, he was chosen to defend a man named Crevan Moore. Crevan was accused of sexual harassment of one of his male co-workers. Crevan, in reality, had only been flirting with him at a party, but the co-worker was offended and made a big deal of it. Crevan said that. Artemus eventually proved Crevan innocent.

The pair of them found they liked each other enough to become friends. They were friends for about a year and discovered they really like each other. Mostly, Artemus liked how Crevan thought. So, Areimus, being cautious at relationships that had the possibility of becoming permanent, went out of a limb and flirted with Crevan. Crevan seemed shocked so Artemus was sure to act completely straight until Crevan flirted back. He responded with childlike enthusiasm.

The flirting continued for a bit before Crevan edged out on the limb. At an ice cream parlor, Artemus had a bit of whipped cream on his lips. Crevan gave him a peck on the lips to 'clean' it off. It was a long while before the relationship finally got 'serious', meaning sex.

At the age of 28, Artemus and Theo got their own firm. There was trouble in paradise, however, a year later. Artemus' relationship with Crevan was beginning to seem long term and Theo didn't think Crevan was steady enough for Artemus. The twins had an argument about it. It was determined that Artemus was long overdue for a vacation and Crevan decided to supply it. A trip to a 'resort' on a 'Pacific island'.


How he'd get to the island:
Most people on the island see an already changed person before they themselves change. By that time, they are normally convinced of what's going to happen before it actually does. So Moreau wanted to try an experiment. What if they couldn't see a Changed person before they change? What if they can't see what they're changing into? How would they react?

So, why not Change a blind human?

As luck would have it, Artemus was nearby. He was on a cruise that was around 20 miles from the island, thanks to his lover giving him a vacation from his workaholic behavior so very recently. It would be ever so simple for Moreau to have (or get) one of his contacts (or their lackeys) on the ship, dump the poor man over the side when he's asleep (onto a broken wood pole that looks like it came from the ship), then have him be 'rescued' a few hours afterward.


The Family Tree

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:50 pm


-What Came With-

The cane has two links, one for each word
(1) Ebony cane
(1) Dark blue sports coat
(1) Dark blue jeans
(1) White collared shirt
(1) Black belt
(1) Pair of Sunglasses (Random: Why is it a pair of sunglasses if it's only one?)
(1) Pair of nice black shoes
(1) Pair of black socks
(1) Braille watch
(1) Lucky Blue Moonstone
PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:51 pm


-The Animal-


User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.1234567Kingdom: Animalia
1234567Phylum: Chordata
1234567Class: Mammalia
1234567Order: Carnivora
1234567Family: Procyonidae
1234567Genus: Nasua
1234567Species: Nasua

Name: South American Coati
Meaning: Coatamundi = Lone Coati in the GuaranĂ­ language

Physical Appearance:





Pictures:
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Resources: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Coatimundi
Resourses:

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:52 pm


-The Art-


Blonde Hair

Sunglasses Example
Sunglasses Example
Something of the like <3

Hair Style Only less... spikey and more controlled
Hair Style
PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:53 pm


-The Given and the Money-

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:55 pm


-Never Seeing-
PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:56 pm


-Explanations-

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:57 pm


-Non Canon RPs-
PostPosted: Sun Jul 02, 2006 6:56 pm


-Extra-



Island of Moreau
[-Darcy-]
Official Critique Request
Gaia Username: Darcy1992
Character Name: Artemis Jaeger
Serum Animal(s): Aardwolf
Quest Thread: Here


First off, the multi-colored hair: It is not natural to grow hair in multiple color patches for humans. You might see photos (like you posted) but those are dye jobs. It's been fairly popular of late, especially with the J-rock crowd, et al to dye the "outer" or "inner" parts of the hair. That or it's the sign of a dye job growing out. ((Make his hair more normal. Not generally an important fact of the character.))

Also, Artemis is not a modern name in the least, and even in its origin, is a woman's name. (more later).

I don't reccomend integrating the "discovered homosexual" at such a late age it doesn't make much sense that he wouldn't have some sort of inclination yet. Nothing against homosexuals (duh, given the owners), but we do already have a surprising proportion of gay characters on the island, and so I wouldn't reccomend putting it as a "tack on" to a character.

The character sounds like a toss together of a lot of concepts that don't necessarily mesh well. Particularly the gypsy grandmother with a Hitler-supproting grandfather. Gypsies were one of the groups that the nazi's expunged from Germany and/or killed on sight. And why would such a free-spirited woman elope with such a strict individual. And while Gypsies have integrated some aspects and symbology of Christianity, they aren't any single recognizable branch of Christianity. So why would they have lived in a "good Christian" home? ((Problems with history and general creation.))

And as for the name, Both families had moved to America, and presumably integrated into the culture if the parents had been born there. Why go back to a Greek name? And beyond that, Artemis is not only an archaic Greek name (not in modern usage) but was the name of a Goddess (a woman's name). For the info on the character, you mention because of the "moony" eyes - being blind... but he wasn't born blind.
I have no problem if you want to go with an ethnic Greek name, but I'd reccomend going with a male name:
http://www.gaminggeeks.org/Resources/KateMonk/ is a good site for names. Particularly:
http://www.gaminggeeks.org/Resources/KateMonk/Europe-Eastern/Greece/index.htm For Greece.
(I know this is semi-important but I think I'll keep it. EDIT: I changed a letter so it was far more masculine, if a bit more archaic. I'll fiddle with the history somehow to make it work.)

And what were Sudanese slave traders doing in the middle of Chicago? IF it was that bad of a neighborhood, what would he have been doing wandering alone that young? ((Need better reason))

Honestly, you have a LOT going on in the character: from Gypsy immigrant history, unnatural colored hair, strange name, to Sudanese kidnapping, to slashes across the eyes, to almost being a professional sports player, to a big time lawyer with the time to study a lot of extra languages despite not liking listing to books on tape, to taking three simultaneous cases just out of law school. ((Excellent point *need to fix that*))

He's still very young, and law school is VERY intensive. It is unlikely he would have the time to learn many extra languages for that sort of occupation.

It's probably a coincidence, though a blind lawyer in the practice for vengence reminds me a lot of the comic character Daredevil. (Didn't mean to do that >>)

But regardless, I reccomend focusing the character, and keep in mind the modern real-world setting.

I like the idea of a blind islander - especially the point you raised about quite possibly never actually "seeing" a changed islander before his own change.



So I really just have to rework my history.

EDIT: Ummm, I think that's all fixed.

For ref ^^ Striked out means fixed. Underlined means it's a compliment. Italics means not really important but just a suggestion. Bold means a note to me.

[-Darcy-]


[-Darcy-]

PostPosted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 2:39 pm


UPDATE:

I finally reworked him, though I'm planning on changing his animal. I still need to do recent history though (only through high school is done).
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