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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:24 pm
Loading Table of Contents...... Table of Contents Guardian/Protector Fel Essence Raevan Soul Full Concept Funding Shop information Previous Data
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:27 pm
Loading Guardian content....... Quote: NAME : Jack Lavasque GENDER : Male AGE : 28 OCCUPATION : Bioinformatist (Biology mixed with computer science and statistical analysis) RACE : Human (Italian and Irish ancestry) LIKES : Computers, cybernetics, wine, movies, board games, animals, cars, swords, books, pocket watches DISLIKES : Overly emotional people, dishonesty/liars, liquor, subway trains, heat, guns, drama LOOKS : Jack is always dressed nicely without being formal. He stands at 5'8", likes to wear button up shirts, generally dark in color and untucked. He is often seen in blue jeans, with a leather belt and leather boots. He has brown hair that’s in a short messy style which is almost always covered with a fedora. His fedora is a black beaver pelt with a black ribbon above the brim. His hazel eyes peer from beneath the brim always analyzing the world. He has a well-trimmed goatee which gives him a serious look. PERSONALITY :Jack doesn't smile much and doesn't get angry very often; in fact he doesn't show any emotion often. Growing up he was taught to be successful your emotions cannot interfere though in reality he would like to have fun and goof off. Once people get to know him, he will start to relax around them to some degree allowing his emotions to shine through. Jack has a very big heart and this can be seen through his actions and career. One of his interests and passions lies within his work, Cybernetics. Through it a person may regain the ability to see, run or hold objects if they are missing limbs and even slow or stop the degeneration of a nervous system. He chose this field of work in order to help people who no others could help. While in school, due to his kind nature people often took advantage of him and lying to get his help. During this time he noticed those who are willing to lie, are more apt to continue lying. They have also shown they are less likely to work towards a solution and more likely to assign blame for a problem. This has engrained the inability to completely believe a new person, he will give them the benefit of doubt but keep an eye open for any deception. Though he is mistrustful, he does save his final judgement until after he gets to know them better. HISTORY : Jack is originally from a suburb east of Duram. He grew up in the country learning how rewarding manual labor could be. Through school, he found out that he loved to learn as much as work with his hands. His father was an engineer and taught him the basic principles of machines. He had wanted to do whatever he could to help those whose life had taken from them their independence. So he pushed himself hard in school to become a scientist. After graduating from Gambino University, he began working at the research center. Romantic relationships never came easily to Jack. Over the years, he had been in a few relationships but he never seemed to spend enough time with them. His primary concern was school, so he was often studying. It wasn't due to a lack of interested, in fact he eventually wanted kids, he just had little experience or understanding in this area. Originally, he came to the Lab to talk with Dr. Kyou to get his thoughts on some of the road blocks hes encountered in his research. While at the Lab he came across the Raevans for the first time. As a scientist they fascinated him with their complexity and disregard for physics as he understood it. Upon further observation they seemed no different than humans, which was quite remarkable. .......Background Check Complete
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:31 pm
Loading Fel Essence content....... Current Ideas Essence #1 Silver Cloud - Remember the quote, "Every cloud has a silver lining"? Well this cloud seems to have taken it literally, yet not just the lining but the whole cloud is pure silver. Along the same line as the quote the outside of the cloud looks peaceful and beautiful while the inside seems to have a storm raging within. It looks like it can absorb electricity and keeps discharging the electricity within the cloud. How did the silver even enter gaseous state? How is it absorbing the electricity and not zapping nearby people or objects? Essence #2 Quick silver and sand - This sand is crystallized mercury found deep in a rainforest as quicksand. Ironic location for the element that is known as quicksilver. The sand has a shiny sheen to it that almost sparkles in the sunlight. The sand and water mix should have melted the mercury long ago yet it remains frozen in crystals even at the high temperatures of the jungle. Careful around this sand, if you get to too close there's a good chance it is quick enough to suck you in. Essence #3 Hidden Spark - In every relationship people have described their initial attraction or interest as a spark between them. Which they hope will light off fireworks in their future lives. That spark seems to have moved from just a metaphor to substance. It seems to have no form of locomotion yet it floats around moving towards groups of people where a spark might be needed. Essence #4 Frozen Atmosphere - The atmosphere is the protective layer over any planet keeping the air in and harmful radiation out. Somehow a couple pieces of the atmosphere was frozen at very high altitudes before falling to the earth. Some have formed perfect spheres yet others are jagged pieces without any overall design. It really does look like the sky was breaking apart and falling to the earth. Could this be the source of Chicken Little? Contents | Guardian | Essence | Soul | Concept | Funds | Shop | Past
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:32 pm
Loading Soul content...... Soul #1  Black Jaguar (Dominant recessive): Jaguars have been known throughout mythology for their ferocity, power and valor. No matter where the civilization or how isolated they were from each other, each one had myths about jaguars and black panthers. They were the keepers of the underworld, fighting off the underworld so the world may see the sun the next day. Jaguar even means "he who kills with one blow" in the Native American language. In each of these societies, they believed that jaguars were perfect hunters and yet they were protectors of their people. They were able to rise above their earthly desires yet they were uninhibited when it came to their desires. Soul #2  Dolphin: Dolphins in many mythology have been seen as very playful, intelligent and wise creatures. In Greek mythology they were also closely related to romance and the bringing of two people together. Specifically they were Poseidon's messengers and were the ones that brought him his beloved nymph who he later married. They were even depicted as carrying Aphrodite on occasion. They were also seen as the saviors of sailors and helpers of people in general. Contents | Guardian | Essence | Soul | Concept | Funds | Shop | Past
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:33 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:43 pm
Loading possible funds...... 100/??? Should have enough long before the concept is complete Contents | Guardian | Essence | Soul | Concept | Funds | Shop | Past
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:44 pm
Loading Shop Data....... Shop owned by Kyou <3 Ideas are mine Art by whoever made it :3 Basically, Do not steal, it isn't nice Contents | Guardian | Essence | Soul | Concept | Funds | Shop | Past
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2012 9:45 pm
Loading Past Ideas....... None yet, brand new Quest thread Contents | Guardian | Essence | Soul | Concept | Funds | Shop | Past
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 11:58 am
Hey, LK! I think you're doing well, but I'd encourage you to try to push your essences a little further. Between my Dawn and Aphi's Nocturne Rock, that's already two skyfall-style essences, for example, and atmosphere might not make for a very interesting vial presentation for Kyou. I like the Mercury Sand idea, feels like you could go somewhere with a kind of quicksand/quicksilver pun in there somewhere. But try to dig a bit deeper here, make these essences a bit more colorful and imaginative!
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 12:13 pm
Hmmm... Personally, I'd avoid anything fire-related. There's already several fire essences around and while your Sourceless Spark is definitely different... like Atma said about the skyfall types, there's already so many fire ones that Kyou may not feel overly inspired to do another.
I really like the Mercury Sand idea as well. I'm not really feeling the Gaseous Metal... perhaps narrow it down to a particular type of metal? There are so many out there with so many different properties that lumping them like that is a bit too broad. (Also, don't know if you know this, but in astronomy there actually are gaseous "metals" as they categorize everything as either hydrogen, helium, or "metal" - which include gaseous things like neon, oxygen, nitrogen, etc...)
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 12:26 pm
I like your jaguar soul very much. But I've always liked cats so emotion_awesome
I'll have to agree with the whole avoiding the fire thing, and your spark essence is also very close to Luka's forsaken afterglow. The only difference I see between the two is that yours is sparking.
I think you could give your frozen atmosphere a "look" so Kyou would be able to draw it, could be ice cubes maybe? Though yes, there are a few sky fallen objects around.
The mercury sand sounds fun, but I feel like it's not enough. Atma had it right, I think you have a good essence but just need to push it some more.
I've always liked metal essences XP My second essence was metallic bark, and what Nik says is true. You should try to pick one metal and go from there. I think it would help with giving the metal some sort of color too since not all metals are grey and if you picked something like copper for example, your gas could have high thermal and electrical conductivity to it smile
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 2:20 pm
If you decide to stick to metals, a simple one would be like... nonmagnetic steel.
It's simple, but would allow you to expand your Raevan without having to worry on stepping toes. Because, no magnet related Raevan currently exists.
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2012 12:55 am
I kind of agree with the others. Your ideas are interesting, but not quite there yet. In fact I was really interested in your Sourceless Spark until I read the description and realized it was another fire based essence. Like it is now, it's far too close to existing essences. Though...and just bare with me for a moment everyone, you could change it completely and possible make another metaphor type essence out of it. What I mean is, you know the saying about like there's no spark between two people and such? You could probably make a spark essence that deals with that instead of anything fire related persay. Maybe it ignites passion between two people or fizzes it out? Maybe it does both? The possibilities for powers is not so limiting in my head, though that might just be me lol. And I know people are probably thinking oh no this could be stepping on the line of god-modding, but if done right and limited in a certain way, I'm sure it could turn out well. And yes there is Forceful Mistletoe, but that's just kissing.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 12:46 pm
Ok so I made many of the edits you guys suggested. I hope the Silver Cloud isnt too close to Etheriel, Xuelian or Ripley. I do however feel much better about the Silver Cloud and Quick Silver and Sand. Hidden Spark and Frozen atmosphere I am kind of unsure about but I think are better than what they were.
I have also put in the basic explanations for the souls in their location. After changing the first 2 essences I really feel these two would fit best with the essences. Tell me what you guys think.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 5:25 pm
Silver Cloud sounds like Ravi's Silver Lining essence. Though she's no longer questing obviously, she was the one that came up with hers first so you may want to ask her if it's okay to use something similar to it. I dunno how I feel about you naming your spark essence as something hidden. You always gotta try and picture how Kyou may be able to interpret that visually. Of course that may just be me trying to picture it and not being able to, lol. I still think it'd be an interesting essence nonetheless. Though I should probably take my advice and not get so attached to other people's essences. ^_^
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