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 Posted: Mon Dec 06, 2010 2:29 pm
Rules to the Classroom
-Only one student at a time.
-Students must listen to teacher fully or they will not be able to continue taking the class.
-Students must be serious about trying to get better and must keep a complete open mind.
Student Currently Being Helped: Misa
This part of the post will be updated every time a new student is brought to the classroom. When a student's name is updated here, they will be expected to post saying that they agree to my terms and provide an RP sample of them walking through a forest. This will be used so that I can judge their RP Level. I won't have any guidelines or anything, I just want them to walk through a forest. The student may add in anything else they want so long as they walk through that damn forest.
Goodluck and thank you for choosing me as your teacher! smile
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Posted: Mon Dec 06, 2010 3:05 pm
!, Allegra Kori no Tamashi aka Misa, agree to the terms and guidelines of my teacher.
Mizuna Megami was wearing blue capris and fitting white shirt. She also had her hair in a pony tail, so it wouldn't get caught it anything. She was carrying a one strap backpack that had two notebooks, two folders, a compass which she is holding in her hand; so she get lost, a couple of art suplies, pens and pencils.She panted as she pushed her way through the thick branches, and walked carefully as to not step on an animal that could be sleeping on the ground near her. As she walked through the forest, she started to wonder if she would ever make to the classroom.This forest seemed to go on forever.
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Posted: Mon Dec 06, 2010 3:58 pm
THE ASSESSMENT: Your first review.
What time of day was it? I know it was time for school, but was it early in the morning or was it perhaps night school? What did the scenery look like? Was it beautiful, or did it look scary? How did the character feel? I seen that you mentioned a bit on what she was thinking but you didn't go into depth on it at all. You mentioned an animal, what kind of animals would she be looking out for? Basically what I'm saying is that your post left much to be desired by the reading. I get the feeling that you just did it, just because I told you too which left the post boring to read. Also there were a few grammatical errors, so you should get into the practice of reading your post a bit before you post. I know you don't want to do it, I sure as hell don't like doing it, but if you want to get better then you should.
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THE LESSON: Understanding Role-Play as an art.
Misa, now that you are in my role-playing class I will need you to forget everything that you know or think you know about role-playing. The reason being is, that you are a role-player that role plays in a guild, yes, but it's much deeper than that. In fact the deeper into it that you get, the better of a role-player you will be because you will better understand what it is that you are doing. So for the time being, you are not a role-player anymore, but if you complete this course you will be a role-player and you will be better than you are now.
Now it's time for me to explain what role-playing is so that you will understand where this class is heading. Role-playing is an art form, a craft, and an expression of yourself from deep within. It is an art form because when done correctly and to it's fullest capacity it can not only be fun but awe inspiring. It is a craft because you yourself are creating a world with the use of your mind and your fingertips. It is an expression of yourself from deep within because a part of you is put into every character that you role-play.
Role-playing is just like shooting a movie, but you have to create the cameras, the film, the tone, the actor's lives, the scenery and then shoot the movie. When I read your post, most, if not everything, that I picture in my mind should be because of the words you have written. You need to create that movie in my mind.
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THE TASK: One more walk through the woods.
If you understand what I'm saying then please say so, if you do not understand I will try to explain in a different manner.
After a confirmation of your understanding, I want you to try writing on that same topic once more, but take my tips into consideration. When you have completed that, I will go into a deeper analysis of your RP skill. This first post was just broad suggestions but my next post will be more specific and thus, more critical of your actual RP.
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Posted: Mon Dec 06, 2010 5:52 pm
Mizuna looked at the sky, and sighed. The sun was still up, meaning it was probably very early in the morning, probably around 6 am. She mentally sighed, “Why can't this class be in the afternoon”. She groaned as she looked at the forest. She shrugged “At least its not bad to look at, its like an animal paradise.” She thought, and then sighed, hating the fact that she had to wake up so early. She opened her bag, and took out her compass. She looked at it, then sighed “Might as get it over with” She said sighing as she slowly walked on the ground, as to not step on any snakes or any amphibious creatures that might be taking a nap on the ground. As she slowly made her way through the forest, she looked around and took in the scenery, knowing, she might never again be able to see something so amazing as this.
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Posted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 8:08 pm
THE ASSESSMENT: Recreation and judgementAlright, believe it or not, you've done a bit better. I can tell you were still struggling though due to the fact that your repeatedly said your character sighed. You are starting to learn a bit more about getting into the mind of your character I believe and that is what is important for now. At this moment, I want you to just work on your descriptions. I still don't see the forest in my mind too vividly. Also I'm going to need to help you develop a style. Style is of the utmost importance when you are RPing because it helps to keep your post interesting to read. Without any style, reading your post can be boring and if bad enough, even painful. I see that you spent time to proofread like I said which is good. I also like that there is dialogue in there. Just because your character is alone, doesn't mean they can't talk eh? ------------------------------------------ THE LESSON: Developing a style.Whenever you write a post you need to think, if this were created into an anime and I were to watch it, would I find it interesting? When you can honestly answer that question, you will be able to make yourself a better RPer. If you don't find your post interesting, think about what would make it interesting? Think about what makes it boring. If you remember from the last lesson, RP is an art. Think about each post as a part that contributes to your masterpiece. When you create that masterpiece, you want to be able to look back on it and be proud of each portion of the design. Now as a practice, I want you to think about something you do often that you find fun. As a RPer, you need to think deeply and critically about certain life situations from an outside of the box frame. I imagine that you have something in mind by now. Think about what makes this thing fun, why do you continue to do it, and why you would choose to do this task over something else. When you are able to do that, the next part involves applying that same outlook onto your post. ---------------------------- THE TASK: Description with StyleAlright, now this task is going to be a bit more detailed and possibly more difficult for you to complete. I am going to post a link to a picture, and what I want you to do is, post a fully descriptive post based on what you see in the picture. You will be able to create your own scenario and characters, but I want you to paint that picture in my mind when I read your post. Remember to use the style tips that I gave you to spice up your post and make it interesting to read. Assignment
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Posted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 9:03 am
Brain storm post
scenarios:
1. armeggedon
2. chemical fire that went out of control
3.war ( maybe civil)
4.tsunami
5.after war rebuild
6.aerial explosion that caused a tsunami
7.the end of the world
People
1. fire fighters
2. injured person
3. person coming back to town
emotions
1.shock
2.despair
3. confusion
4. total brokenness
Senses
1.smell
a. smoke
b. decay
feel.
a. heat
b. wetness
c. sharp broken things
d.holes
see.
a. fire
b.smoke
c. destroyed buidling
d. water
dialoge
1. with
a. fire fighters
2. about
a. what happened
b. what is going to happen
c. future of the town
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Posted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 9:09 am
Connecting Idea Post
1.Scenario
a. war- world
People
1. fire fighters
2. injured person
3. person coming back to town
emotions
1.shock
2.despair
3. confusion
4. total brokenness
5. betrayal
Senses
1.smell
a. smoke
b. decay
feel.
a. heat
b. wetness
c. sharp broken things
d.holes
see.
a. fire
b.smoke
c. destroyed buidling
d. water
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Posted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 9:36 am
Mizuna was happy to be home; but that happiness soon turned to despair, and confusion; when the smell of fire smoke, and decaying bodies, animals and food hit her nose. She ran into the village, not caring about falling into holes, getting wet getting hurt.
This did happen. When she finally got into town, she could not believe what she was seeing, It made her want to fall down and die. All she could feel at this point was brokenness, complete and total brokenness. Her home was destroyed. Buildings destroyed, some still on fire, some engulfed in water. Water was everywhere in the grass that was still left, in buildings, everywhere. Even now, she could still feel the heat from the fires. She saw and smelt the fire when she got to the village gates.
Even though it was hard to see because of the smoke, she squinted her eyes to try to find some one. When she did, she ran to the fire fighter “What happened here, i wasn't even gone for 6 days and the city is destroyed?" One of the fire fighters turned to her and responded, “It was an all out war.” He said then coughed, because of the smoke that was still in his system. "We tried our best to fend them off; we were no match for them. They took no survivors.” He commented then shook his head. She looked at him confused, then with despair when a name popped into her head, Mizugakure. "Wait you don't mean people from” She couldn't even answer her question. The Fire fighter answered it for her. "Yes people from Mizugakure." He said finishing and answering her question. She looked at him with shock; she did not think they were capable of such evil. "But why, why would they do this?" She asked crying, she felt completely betrayed, she had trusted them with everything, and they took advantage of it.
Every one is dead?” She asked scared to hear the answer. The fire fighter shook his head “No at the first sign of trouble we took most of the people to the bomb shelter and from there to an allied village." She was about to be happy at least for that, until she remembered he said most “Wait what do you mean most?" She asked horrified “Your aunt, and her family stayed, they said they weren't going to leave without you. I am sorry for your loss Princess Mizuna" He responded to her with sympathy. She only had one more thing to ask. "Will Suna ever return to the way it was?" She asked him. "I do not think so, the village is too far." He said then carried the last injured person to the bomb shelter.
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 11:07 am
((Misa is this your final draft? If so please paragraph it so that I don't feel like I'm reading a block of text sweatdrop ))
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 2:52 pm
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 12:44 pm
THE ASSESSMENT: Gauging Learning Level
Not too bad Misa. I'm starting to see a bit of improvement. I like how you organized yourself before writing which is very important. Organizing yourself, understanding the situation your in, and understanding what your character is sensibly capable in the situation is of the utmost importance when you make a post. However, still you are not a RPer yet and there is still much to learn and improve on. Do not be discourage though, because it already seems like your are making progress. Still remember to proofread once or twice since sentence errors DO take away from the quality of a post and the credibility of the RPer if too many are made consecutively. Your stories are becoming more interesting though and the quality of your post is building.
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THE LESSON: Practice makes perfect.
Most people never become great at things when they first start out doing whatever it is they are engaged in. For most people, to become of average proficiency it takes a bit of practice. Though for the few people who have developed a passion and a desire to truly become better, it takes dedication and creativity. Dedication comes from your ability to keep trying even though you see that there are others who are better then you, and once passing them, continuing with added intensity to stay on top. Creativity comes from performing your craft in unexplored ways and presenting them to your audience in an enjoyable manner. If you want to be noticed you have to stand out but fit in at the same time. You have to plan a foundation for your style and build from the ground up.
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THE TASK: Building Foundation
Okay, now I'm going to have you do a similar exercise to the one that you have just completed. The only difference is, your going to find a picture on your own and describe the scenario to me. Then when I tell you to post the picture, we are going to see if what you posted is anything remotely similar to what I seen inside my mind, based off of your description. This is essentially what RP is. You have a picture in your mind that you are trying to get others to see.
Though now that your are on the third lesson of my class, I will need to increase the difficulty of this assignment. I don't teach any regular classes you know, each class I teach is AP. Now as part of your bonus AP assignment, I will give you ten words. I want you to use these ten words in your post in a sensible manner, and use them to paint your picture.
-gallivant
-bespoke
-miscellaneous
-divagate
-consanguineous
-weal
-preposterous
-debonair
-saccade
-tristful
I would recommend trying to use these words in your everyday speech as well. Speaking properly can help you become a better writer and is just a good practice in general.
Good luck with your assignment.
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Posted: Tue Jan 04, 2011 4:57 pm
Caroline did not believe the people who told her that the person she was bespoken to was out gallivanting with other girls. She thought it was all lies. It was not until she caught him in bed with some one consanguineous to her. When he saw her, he tried to tell her that he would only fine weal with her sister, Christa. Although Caroline that he was being preposterous, and had divagated from his teachings, because Christa has no debonair, nothing attractive in her eyes. She was too tristful to speak, so she just ran away crying. Christa on the other hand was calm; no saccade was seen on her face.
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